I just suddenly started writing this, posted this on fanfiction, got good feedback, although I personally think it sucks, and wanted some honest opinions
It is a little bit weird to be honest, but hopefully you enjoy it.
A Different Legend
Chapter One: Stepping into the Light
An intense heat lingered in the air, one so palpable that it seemed to burn his flesh. It etched away at his skin, causing his blue eyes to open to a canvas of a burning inferno..
"…wow…" the voice muttered as he watched the form of a nine-tailed fox destroy everything in its range of vision, tongues of flame raging forth from the tips of its tail. It was truly a morbid sight to behold: shinobi lay beaten, women lay broken, buildings lay destroyed. It would have caused any fourteen-year old boy to vomit; all those dead bodies. They just laid there in the pools of their own blood.
"… unreal…" a strand of awe was interlaced in the blonde's voice as he saw the flames of destruction engulf the landscape around him.
The hulking figure of the fox seemed to stop for a moment, its white fangs gleaming wildly as it turned to the pale-looking youth, bloodlust raging within its eyes.
The boy just stared back, still in awe. This seemed to amuse the beast before him as it let out a maniacal laugh, the flames around it flaring up in its joy.
"Feel that boy…?" Its voice boomed as it edged closer to the form of the young lad, its powerful breath knocking the boy off his feet as he landed on his butt.
"The overwhelming feeling of despair…?" It smiled as the boy seemed to step away in fear… actual fear…
"... What does it make you wanna do? Knowing that one day that I'll rise up and take everything away from you?"
It stared long and hard at the young blonde, waiting for the response that it had been waiting for oh so long to hear.
"…" The young man was silent for a second, his body shivering as he tried to remain calm.
Suddenly, however, he chuckled, his body relaxing.
"Hehe…" He smiled, the awe and fear disappearing to be replaced by amusement. "You lost your touch Kurama." The blonde stood up to dust himself off.
This caused the fox to frown.
"Really, nothing?" The young blonde burst out laughing, wiping away a tear from his eyes.
"What'd you expect me to do?" He cracked his neck. "Piss myself?"
"Actually, no…" It growled as it lay its head down in defeat, the landscape disappearing as it stared at the boy from behind a cage. "But I'm still hoping…" it trailed off as it sighed in frustration
"… That I'll act like an actual little teenager with dreams, deal with puberty, make friends my own age, and apply myself?" The blonde quirked his head inquisitively.
This caused the fox rest its head on its paws, staring at the boy with a sense of annoyance…
"…"
"…What?"
"…"
"You just gonna eye rape-me all day…?" An uncomfortable silence reigned for what seemed like hours.
It edged its head close to the bar, opening its giant maw.
"You astound me…" the blonde quirked his head at the creature. "You're so tired of life already. You have no dreams, no yearning to succeed…"
"…Your point?" The boy scratched its head nonchalantly.
"My point is that I've tried every day to arouse you out of your mundane life… You could do so much with your little human-life span. Do things no man could ever dream of… Yet you sit at home all day watching freaking romantic comedies on that image conjuring box of yours!"
"You mean a television?"
"Honestly!" It growled, disregarding the boy's snide remark. "At the age of three you already could read and write. At the age of five you could already use chakra! Then at the age of nine… you mastered the art of sealing. In three months!"
Its eyes were bloodshot.
"THREE! FUCKING! MONTHS!" It snarled as it looked down at the blonde some more. "Then, because you hate dealing with people… you somehow… somehow defying all logic, snuck into the Hokage's office to steal a scroll on the shadow clone technique, thinking it would be useful to distract people since you saw other ninja in the village use it."
It clawed at the cage.
"Then you perverted it! You used the seals to implant a fake persona of yourself into a shadow clone, pumped enough chakra into duration seals so it could last multiple punches, and sent it into the village so you didn't have to deal with anybody!"
Its tails flailed wildly as the entire mindscape shook at its rage
"FOR THE LAST FIVE FREAKING YEARS!"
It roared one final time, sending a shockwave that blasted into the boy, blowing him back as it smashed him into a wall.
Strangely though, the boy just stood up and dusted himself off as he stared into Kyuubi's eyes.
"You done?"
The fox's chest was heaving after its little tirade, its eyes staring angrily at the blonde before him.
However, despite the fox's raging state the blonde boy crossed his arms as he stared back.
"I'll wait…"
The giant behemoth snarled and banged at the cage, wanting to rip apart the boy's flesh. It seemed to do this for hours on end, yet the boy stared back at him, unfazed.
"…" It plopped down on the ground, exhausted from its outburst. Deciding it was calm, the boy walked forth.
"You okay, Kurama? Anger isn't good for your blood pressure." The fox got up, looking at the blonde with annoyance.
"… Brat, demons don't have blood, or organs, or freaking anything internal. We're beings of chakra…"
"I know that."
"Then why'd you talk about blood pressure?"
"Because you love correcting me!" He smiled, causing the fox frown.
"Oh you know me soooo well Naruto!" It mocked.
"Well of course…" The blonde wagged his finger playfully. "We've been talking to eachother since I was five. I would have to be some stupid idiot from an anime not to know anything about you right now."
The fox snorted.
"What…?" It looked at the blonde, sighing once again.
"… I'm just tired of you sitting on your ass all day. Its boring…"
"… we've had this conversation way too many times Kurama."
"Well of course! You should get to know some people, act with people your own freaking age! Not talk to an age-old demon while reading old magazines!" It started lecturing."Plus you could start training more…" It looked away, muttering under its breath. "…and you could stop masturbating…"
"… I don't masturbate…"
"I've seen you drool over older woman while looking through that creepy telescope of yours."
"So?"
"You have seven copies of playboy under your couch…"
"So?"
"I've seen the stains on your bed…"
Silence.
…
…
"What stains?"
"…" It stared at the boy long and hard. If looks could kill, the boy would be a pile of mush on the floor.
"…"
"…"
"…"
"Nevermind. Just please, get out of your room…"
The boy sighed, pouting.
"… You're not gonna give up, are you…?" It had been doing this after the first year of his absence from society, and it was getting more and more persistent after each time the blonde said no.
"This is the day you're assigned to a squad. If you don't go I'll make you…"
"Oh and what could you do?" The blonde asked wryly.
"… You don't want to go down that road kid…"
"Try me!" The blonde chuckled, cracking his neck. "What could you do?"
"… I can conjure up images right?"
"Yeah… s-" Naruto's eyes widened.
"No..."
"Yes…"
"NO!"
"Yes."
"YOU WOULDN'T!"
"I would."
He stared at the fox, his eyes the size of saucers.
"… You're not thinking of…" Images of naked men suddenly appeared in his mind, causing his stomach to feel queasy.
It shivered. "I'm afraid so."
"… That's just wrong." The blonde started making gagging sounds.
"You've forced my hand Naruto."
"… BUT WHY!" Tears were streaming down his cheeks.
"Because I'm like Yoda, I'm your friend that guides you to greatness." It paused for a second. "Except I'm not short, green, and wrinkly like a prune." It grinned. "I'm even more awesome!"
The blond was on his knees in defeat.
"Fine…"
The fox's jaw hit the ground…
…
Wait, the boy had said yes. He actually agreed!
The stubborn brat had finally willingly conceded to him!
Never in the beast's entire life had it felt such heart-warming joy, the feeling of having all its work finally paying off.
It had not just completed the quest. It had not just saved the beautiful princess from the castle. It had not even just conquered the five elemental nations and revived Uchiha Madara so it could rip off his head.
No it had done something much greater…
It had gotten Uzumaki Naruto out of his room.
"Now go to your school…" It said as it feigned indifference, barely able to do it because of its brimming excitement
The boy pouted before phasing out.
(Outside the mindscape)
Naruto sighed as he awoke, stretching.
"Damn fox…" He got out of bed as he went to the closet, opening it up.
And out appeared the clone version of himself, standing still like a statue, a stupid smile on its face.
"GAH!" Naruto jumped back. "What the hell…?" the clone was always so creepy… especially with those lifelike eyes… staring into his soul.
"…this is gonna be weird." … He had kept the clone going for three years, pumping chakra into it every day and night so it would continue going… it was amazing really. He had made the perfect fake personage, it had lived his life like it were actually him… well, a different version of him. It was loud, brash, and outgoing… the complete opposite of the real Naruto.
He had made it because he was tired of going out into the village, receiving those stares of pity and anger…
It made him feel so… lonely… but he guessed he would just have to endure for now.
Anything was better than the torture of gay porn.
He sighed as he touched its forehead… an intricate seal array glowing along the boy's frame.
"Bye… me… I'm gonna miss you…" The clone poofed out of existence as a flood of memories hit Naruto in the head.
Five years of experiences had just been downloaded into his cranium…
"… OH DEAR GOD!" He clutched his head, his brain wanting to burst as five years of life flashed before his eyes.
"…" He stared down into the floor... tears flowing down into his cheeks as the pain of being mocked by his fellow students… the pain of the villagers glares… the constant whispers behind his back… all flooded into him…
"…Damn it…" The boy cursed.
"Damn it Kurama…" He growled as he got changed, noticing how the fox chose not to respond to him.
"Jerk…" The boy opened the door.
The light was blinding.
"AHHHH MY EYES!" Naruto hissed as he shielded his vision with his arm.
To be continued….
It is a little bit weird to be honest, but hopefully you enjoy it.
A Different Legend
Chapter One: Stepping into the Light
An intense heat lingered in the air, one so palpable that it seemed to burn his flesh. It etched away at his skin, causing his blue eyes to open to a canvas of a burning inferno..
"…wow…" the voice muttered as he watched the form of a nine-tailed fox destroy everything in its range of vision, tongues of flame raging forth from the tips of its tail. It was truly a morbid sight to behold: shinobi lay beaten, women lay broken, buildings lay destroyed. It would have caused any fourteen-year old boy to vomit; all those dead bodies. They just laid there in the pools of their own blood.
"… unreal…" a strand of awe was interlaced in the blonde's voice as he saw the flames of destruction engulf the landscape around him.
The hulking figure of the fox seemed to stop for a moment, its white fangs gleaming wildly as it turned to the pale-looking youth, bloodlust raging within its eyes.
The boy just stared back, still in awe. This seemed to amuse the beast before him as it let out a maniacal laugh, the flames around it flaring up in its joy.
"Feel that boy…?" Its voice boomed as it edged closer to the form of the young lad, its powerful breath knocking the boy off his feet as he landed on his butt.
"The overwhelming feeling of despair…?" It smiled as the boy seemed to step away in fear… actual fear…
"... What does it make you wanna do? Knowing that one day that I'll rise up and take everything away from you?"
It stared long and hard at the young blonde, waiting for the response that it had been waiting for oh so long to hear.
"…" The young man was silent for a second, his body shivering as he tried to remain calm.
Suddenly, however, he chuckled, his body relaxing.
"Hehe…" He smiled, the awe and fear disappearing to be replaced by amusement. "You lost your touch Kurama." The blonde stood up to dust himself off.
This caused the fox to frown.
"Really, nothing?" The young blonde burst out laughing, wiping away a tear from his eyes.
"What'd you expect me to do?" He cracked his neck. "Piss myself?"
"Actually, no…" It growled as it lay its head down in defeat, the landscape disappearing as it stared at the boy from behind a cage. "But I'm still hoping…" it trailed off as it sighed in frustration
"… That I'll act like an actual little teenager with dreams, deal with puberty, make friends my own age, and apply myself?" The blonde quirked his head inquisitively.
This caused the fox rest its head on its paws, staring at the boy with a sense of annoyance…
"…"
"…What?"
"…"
"You just gonna eye rape-me all day…?" An uncomfortable silence reigned for what seemed like hours.
It edged its head close to the bar, opening its giant maw.
"You astound me…" the blonde quirked his head at the creature. "You're so tired of life already. You have no dreams, no yearning to succeed…"
"…Your point?" The boy scratched its head nonchalantly.
"My point is that I've tried every day to arouse you out of your mundane life… You could do so much with your little human-life span. Do things no man could ever dream of… Yet you sit at home all day watching freaking romantic comedies on that image conjuring box of yours!"
"You mean a television?"
"Honestly!" It growled, disregarding the boy's snide remark. "At the age of three you already could read and write. At the age of five you could already use chakra! Then at the age of nine… you mastered the art of sealing. In three months!"
Its eyes were bloodshot.
"THREE! FUCKING! MONTHS!" It snarled as it looked down at the blonde some more. "Then, because you hate dealing with people… you somehow… somehow defying all logic, snuck into the Hokage's office to steal a scroll on the shadow clone technique, thinking it would be useful to distract people since you saw other ninja in the village use it."
It clawed at the cage.
"Then you perverted it! You used the seals to implant a fake persona of yourself into a shadow clone, pumped enough chakra into duration seals so it could last multiple punches, and sent it into the village so you didn't have to deal with anybody!"
Its tails flailed wildly as the entire mindscape shook at its rage
"FOR THE LAST FIVE FREAKING YEARS!"
It roared one final time, sending a shockwave that blasted into the boy, blowing him back as it smashed him into a wall.
Strangely though, the boy just stood up and dusted himself off as he stared into Kyuubi's eyes.
"You done?"
The fox's chest was heaving after its little tirade, its eyes staring angrily at the blonde before him.
However, despite the fox's raging state the blonde boy crossed his arms as he stared back.
"I'll wait…"
The giant behemoth snarled and banged at the cage, wanting to rip apart the boy's flesh. It seemed to do this for hours on end, yet the boy stared back at him, unfazed.
"…" It plopped down on the ground, exhausted from its outburst. Deciding it was calm, the boy walked forth.
"You okay, Kurama? Anger isn't good for your blood pressure." The fox got up, looking at the blonde with annoyance.
"… Brat, demons don't have blood, or organs, or freaking anything internal. We're beings of chakra…"
"I know that."
"Then why'd you talk about blood pressure?"
"Because you love correcting me!" He smiled, causing the fox frown.
"Oh you know me soooo well Naruto!" It mocked.
"Well of course…" The blonde wagged his finger playfully. "We've been talking to eachother since I was five. I would have to be some stupid idiot from an anime not to know anything about you right now."
The fox snorted.
"What…?" It looked at the blonde, sighing once again.
"… I'm just tired of you sitting on your ass all day. Its boring…"
"… we've had this conversation way too many times Kurama."
"Well of course! You should get to know some people, act with people your own freaking age! Not talk to an age-old demon while reading old magazines!" It started lecturing."Plus you could start training more…" It looked away, muttering under its breath. "…and you could stop masturbating…"
"… I don't masturbate…"
"I've seen you drool over older woman while looking through that creepy telescope of yours."
"So?"
"You have seven copies of playboy under your couch…"
"So?"
"I've seen the stains on your bed…"
Silence.
…
…
"What stains?"
"…" It stared at the boy long and hard. If looks could kill, the boy would be a pile of mush on the floor.
"…"
"…"
"…"
"Nevermind. Just please, get out of your room…"
The boy sighed, pouting.
"… You're not gonna give up, are you…?" It had been doing this after the first year of his absence from society, and it was getting more and more persistent after each time the blonde said no.
"This is the day you're assigned to a squad. If you don't go I'll make you…"
"Oh and what could you do?" The blonde asked wryly.
"… You don't want to go down that road kid…"
"Try me!" The blonde chuckled, cracking his neck. "What could you do?"
"… I can conjure up images right?"
"Yeah… s-" Naruto's eyes widened.
"No..."
"Yes…"
"NO!"
"Yes."
"YOU WOULDN'T!"
"I would."
He stared at the fox, his eyes the size of saucers.
"… You're not thinking of…" Images of naked men suddenly appeared in his mind, causing his stomach to feel queasy.
It shivered. "I'm afraid so."
"… That's just wrong." The blonde started making gagging sounds.
"You've forced my hand Naruto."
"… BUT WHY!" Tears were streaming down his cheeks.
"Because I'm like Yoda, I'm your friend that guides you to greatness." It paused for a second. "Except I'm not short, green, and wrinkly like a prune." It grinned. "I'm even more awesome!"
The blond was on his knees in defeat.
"Fine…"
The fox's jaw hit the ground…
…
Wait, the boy had said yes. He actually agreed!
The stubborn brat had finally willingly conceded to him!
Never in the beast's entire life had it felt such heart-warming joy, the feeling of having all its work finally paying off.
It had not just completed the quest. It had not just saved the beautiful princess from the castle. It had not even just conquered the five elemental nations and revived Uchiha Madara so it could rip off his head.
No it had done something much greater…
It had gotten Uzumaki Naruto out of his room.
"Now go to your school…" It said as it feigned indifference, barely able to do it because of its brimming excitement
The boy pouted before phasing out.
(Outside the mindscape)
Naruto sighed as he awoke, stretching.
"Damn fox…" He got out of bed as he went to the closet, opening it up.
And out appeared the clone version of himself, standing still like a statue, a stupid smile on its face.
"GAH!" Naruto jumped back. "What the hell…?" the clone was always so creepy… especially with those lifelike eyes… staring into his soul.
"…this is gonna be weird." … He had kept the clone going for three years, pumping chakra into it every day and night so it would continue going… it was amazing really. He had made the perfect fake personage, it had lived his life like it were actually him… well, a different version of him. It was loud, brash, and outgoing… the complete opposite of the real Naruto.
He had made it because he was tired of going out into the village, receiving those stares of pity and anger…
It made him feel so… lonely… but he guessed he would just have to endure for now.
Anything was better than the torture of gay porn.
He sighed as he touched its forehead… an intricate seal array glowing along the boy's frame.
"Bye… me… I'm gonna miss you…" The clone poofed out of existence as a flood of memories hit Naruto in the head.
Five years of experiences had just been downloaded into his cranium…
"… OH DEAR GOD!" He clutched his head, his brain wanting to burst as five years of life flashed before his eyes.
"…" He stared down into the floor... tears flowing down into his cheeks as the pain of being mocked by his fellow students… the pain of the villagers glares… the constant whispers behind his back… all flooded into him…
"…Damn it…" The boy cursed.
"Damn it Kurama…" He growled as he got changed, noticing how the fox chose not to respond to him.
"Jerk…" The boy opened the door.
The light was blinding.
"AHHHH MY EYES!" Naruto hissed as he shielded his vision with his arm.
To be continued….