Ah! My Goddess / Killer Klowns from Outer Space : Coulrophobia

HotelKatz

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#1
I have another topic for this fic on another message board, but more feedback is always nice.

The story, as you know from the title, is a crossover between Ah! My Goddess and Killer Klowns from Outer Space.



Killer Klowns from Outer Space
is an 80's horror movie where some Klowns invade a town. The main character is someone named Mike Tobacco.

Here's a link to the Killer Klowns wiki

http://killerklowns.wikia.com/wiki/Killer_Klowns_From_Outer_Space_Wiki

Here's the link to the story on FFN

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10732023/1/Coulrophobia

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Here's the links to the chapters on Google documents.

Chapter 1
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1X0TR726hORXlolyZQVI1AnNs4ri0KwW8F6myZv0UJds/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 2

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1P7-uc7ykDCyFTfCXz5JhzLJ8dXSkXm5g5IpN_29bZe0/edit?usp=sharing

chapter 3
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kUF1O7Y3GhSk7ZZwi-lcJt23FfJYPQNaw8AViyxyRVo/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 4

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OyjgiOyaD0G4_J_mUb_lFUKc43i6aKFma3gJWS3Sf24/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 5

https://docs.google.com/document/d/10fgZKwNKE8sJkAgckbJZXHRHvAnHYuip2U9KzHoA35A/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 6

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BZsuQt-YXS1eVw6U-T9VsD0QHGpI8t-xxapy7wvblaw/edit?usp=sharing
 

HotelKatz

Well-Known Member
#2
Started working at a part time job this week, so this chapter didn't get as much attention as I liked it to have. So don't hold back on the comments, suggestions and the like.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YhXfbds0Gp63rkRLm9-6cOBy25v-NB3Ok0KgzLLgcH4/edit?usp=sharing
 

HotelKatz

Well-Known Member
#3
Here's chapter 8. Feels rushed near the end.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/18i1uEwxSyKrXwxVTRpbxGiOaEVvOSBi9m9VYmxZw-Rg/edit?usp=sharing

My thoughts on it

The scene where Urd frees herself from the bubble gum feels like it needs a lot of work. Heck, the whole part near the end when Urd leaves the arcade feels rushed.
 

HotelKatz

Well-Known Member
#4
Alright. Here is Chapter Nine. Any help or suggestions will be appreciated.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qvTGf3qwmcnwiLaMF6rUo2Q8godVbVkAY3r9qjHuFxY/edit?usp=sharing
 
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