Akamatsuverse Another blade in a second

PCHeintz72

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HotelKatz said:
I now realize that I should both re-read my own story and the manga before I continue on. I'm forgetting important details and I feel like I'm losing track of each character's personality. So I thank you for pointing out that I had Tsuruko know of Haruka in the story previously, PCHeintz72.
At a minimum, it means though that Haruka/Tsuruko scene needs at least some tweaking, as I cannot see people with pasts greeting and treating each other in quite that way.

And one thing I would like to see in it, since they knew each other... Haruka tell Tsuruko what Keitaro suggest she do with imagining genders reversed, and see *Tsuruko* and how she reacts to closing her eyes and imagining her sister doing such...



As for why Haruka focusing on Naru, I figure Haruka sees Naru something like a younger version of herself, so Haruka would both give Naru a bit more leeway and hold her up to a higher standard. So learning that Naru would result in Keitaro's death would result in Haruka focusing more on how Naru screwed up, instead of she herself screwed up. Kind of like how the hinata girls focus on Keitaro's faults in any given situation, instead of their own, even if it was the girls' own fault for something bad happening.
Haruka has not really had a large presence in this story, and I never really got that impression from her in anime or manga canon... though I guess that is possible.
 

HotelKatz

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Thanks again for the help. I'll do the tweaking over the next few days.

After I put the chapter up, I still will re-read the manga. Mainly because I'm having a hard time seeing what I liked about the characters. Then again, it may simply be something like what EagleCeres said,

EagleCeres said:
While not bashing, it feels more like extreme eye opening... and people won't like it because it exposes more flaws in the characters than we're accustomed/ready for.
And it just finally hit me or something.

Ah well. Chibi-Hina will hopefully undo the effect or something.

Edit - Now that I had some eggnog, I think I'm overreacting because I'm sensing writer's block coming on.
 

PCHeintz72

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HotelKatz said:
After I put the chapter up, I still will re-read the manga. Mainly because I'm having a hard time seeing what I liked about the characters.
My condolences on having to reread the manga, I actually preferred the anime to the manga, except where it concerns Tsuruko, and Keitaros sister.

I still have my copy, but after having pushed my way through once, I only really use it for reference material.
 

HotelKatz

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Here's what is the improved version of the Tsuruko and Haruka scene. I made the change to the beginning and added a part where Tsuruko imagines what might have happened if the genders were reversed. The latter happens near the end.

While closing up for the night, Haruka was looking over the kitchen inventory when she heard a knock. Hoping it was Keitaro, Haruka stepped out of the kitchen and was disappointed that it was Tsuruko.

“May I come in?” Tsuruko asked.

“Sure, just a minute. Care to tell me why? I'm a bit curious,” Haruka answered as she put her hand on the lock and started to fiddle with it. 'Dammit, I really need to replace this..''

“I need to vent a bit at how I made a mess with my younger sister,” Tsuruko answered, making Haruka pause.

Haruka sighed before unlocking the door and saying, “I'm not doing so hot with Keitaro either... Might as well vent to each other...”

Tsuruko stepped in and Haruka lead her to the counter.

“Don't expect anything special, I'm just going to brew up a small pot of tea,” Haruka said as she began to do as she said.

“Very well,” Tsuruko replied. “who shall 'vent' first?”

“I'll let you go first,” Haruka said, seemingly concentrating more on the teapot.

“I think that I either haven't done enough to help curb my sister's temper or have gone about it the wrong way,” Tsuruko muttered.

“How so?” Haruka asked.

“She threatened her landlord when he tripped and fell on her because the floor broke under him,” Tsuruko answered. She took note of Haruka's unchanging expression. 'So it had happened more than once, going by her reaction...'

“What happened next?” Haruka asked, just as the teapot whistled.

“I.... forced a duel on my sister. She had a choice of either fighting me or our cousin,” Tsuruko answered. She wasn't sure if Haruka knew of Tomoko's secret, but she wasn't going to reveal it if she didn't.

“First time you've met with your sister in a long time and you force a duel on her within seconds... Yeesh...” Haruka muttered as she poured some tea out for herself and Tsuruko.

“It happened after we spent some time out shopping, Haruka,” Tsuruko said with a glare. “Now what about your problem with Keitaro?”

“He came to me, asking if it was right to let the girls hit him. Then he asked me to imagine something..... I don't feel like talking about the rest,” Haruka explained, before drinking some of her tea.

“While I wish that you would, I won't pry,” Tsuruko commented, before taking a sip of tea. “It seems like we both neglected our relatives and are now paying the price...”

“Eh, I say just give it time and things will get back to normal,” Haruka replied.

“Maybe, maybe not. While I don't doubt that time heals all, simply ignoring the problem will only make things worse. Do you have any plans for when Keitaro calms down?” Tsuruko asked.

“I'll think of something when the time comes. What about you?” Haruka asked back. Tsuruko shook her head a little bit.

“Try to reconnect with Motoko, let her know that I'm not abandoning her,” Tsuruko answered.

“Doesn't sound like much of a plan, if you ask me...” Haruka muttered under her breath. Tsuruko narrowed her eyes a bit in anger.

“Perhaps, but at least it is one,” Tsuruko said, after finishing her tea.

“Who asked you? Besides, what would you do in my place?” Haruka angrily asked as she hit the counter.

“Let the tenants know that I'm supporting his decisions?” Tsuruko asked back.

“Big talk from someone that let her sister run away...” Haruka muttered, thinking she had the upper hand.

“Granny Hina had a hand in that. She claimed that she knew a way to help Motoko. Had I known that it involved letting Motoko attack Keitaro, I never would have gone along with the plan,” Tsuruko replied.

“So what? Are you going to take your sister away from here?” Haruka asked, resisting the urge to try and throw Tsuruko out. Haruka didn't want to risk ruining her teashop from any possible fights.

“If Motoko loses the duel in a few days, perhaps.” Tsuruko commented.

“And you're acting like I'm the irresponsible one...” Haruka said, as she took the empty tea cups away. “Anyways, I'm getting tired. So unless you have something really important to talk about, I'm closing up for the night.”

“In that case, I'm going to bed. Good night,” Tsuruko said before she stood up.

“By the way,” Haruka said, once Tsuruko was at the door. “Your cousin had asked Keitaro to imagine something and he asked me to imagine it as well.”

“Oh? What is it?” Tsuruko asked, wondering if it was something that Tomoko forgot to tell her about.

“I'll use a variant of it. Remember when Motoko threatened Keitaro and then try to imagine Motoko's and Keitaro's genders reversed,” Haruka said.

Haruka watched as Tsukuro looked down as she thought about it.

Makoto was standing over Keiko, with his Bokken pointed at her throat.

'Time after time, you keep throwing yourself on us like a wanton slut. I'm getting tired of it. I don't care what your grandfather said. Be a good little girl and leave. That is an order,” Makoto said, before putting his bokken at his side and started to walk away.

“But-But-but where will I go?” Keiko asked herself, as she started to crawl away.

“That is no concern of mine, so shut up,” Makoto said before he walked out of sight.

Haruka was a bit surprised at Tsuruko's hands curling in anger.

“Woah, calm down there. It was only something you though up. No reason to attack anyone,” Haruka said. It seemed to have a bit of a calming effect on Tsuruko.

“It seems like I may have went too far with what you asked,” Tsuruko muttered. She then quietly whispered to herself, “I can't believe that was my first thought at what Motoko might do to Urashima if the genders were reversed. Motoko has more respect for others than that...”

“Eh, happens to the best of us. Feel like sharing what you thought?” Haruka asked.

Tsuruko smiled and said, “Only if you tell me what you thought when you were asked something similar.”

Silence passed for a few seconds.

“On second thought, some things are best left private. Anything else you wanna talk about?” Haruka answered a bit too quickly for her own tastes.

“No. Good night,” Tsuruko replied before leaving.

As Haruka tried to sleep that night, she wondered if she screwed up big time with Keitaro.
 

HotelKatz

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Alright, I made my decision. I'm leaving up most of the planning of the next ten-or-so chapters up to you guys. I trust you all that much.

I'm going to admit a few things about my fic that you might not know.

I don't know if Tomoko or Motoko will end up with Keitaro. I thought I'd be able to pick one, but I'm having trouble.
I want to avoid a bash fic. So the worse ending any character will receive will be a bittersweet one.

I will admit that I'm tempted to do a slight time skip to speed things up a bit for the Tomoko/Motoko/Keitaro relationship, and have the events that happened during that time skip be told to the reader via Tomoko's diary.
 

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HotelKatz said:
Alright, I made my decision. I'm leaving up most of the planning of the next ten-or-so chapters up to you guys. I trust you all that much.
:evil2:

-chronodekar

(background noise of Responsibility and Maturity being killed by Insane, Lust and Common Sense can be heard... <No, do NOT ask how the latter are getting along>)
 

PCHeintz72

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HotelKatz said:
Alright, I made my decision. I'm leaving up most of the planning of the next ten-or-so chapters up to you guys. I trust you all that much.
To quote Star Trek, Deep Space 9 computer....

"Procedure is not recommended."
 

HotelKatz

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Look, I know that in most cases, what I'm doing is stupid. Very Stupid, almost to 'Ima gonna stick this shiny fork in the lightsocket' stupid. But I trust you guys. You've all been a big help so far.

Besides, All I require for planning for a chapter is a few sentences. At the moment, the current planning for future chapters is this.

Chapter 20 - Keitaro does his best to tell Motoko that he won't abuse his position. In face he tries to tell her that if anything, Things will go on as they did before. ( I have no idea how Motoko would react. Should it be anger, relief, or a bit of both.)

Chapter 21 - While in the hot springs, a discussion between the Hinata girls about the current situation. They probably discuss what they would do in Keitaro's place and also if they were in Motoko's place. Tomoko decides to try her best at getting Keitaro like her again, since he kind of dislikes both her and Tsuruko for their actions towards Motoko.

Chapter 22 - Naru returns. She gets pissed off at Keitaro when she learns of what happened. When she learns that it was Tomoko's and Tsuruko's actions that were mostly responsible, Naru tries to make them feel guilty about what they done.
 

PCHeintz72

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HotelKatz said:
Look, I know that in most cases, what I'm doing is stupid. Very Stupid, almost to 'Ima gonna stick this shiny fork in the lightsocket' stupid. But I trust you guys. You've all been a big help so far.
I had brought this up to you before. The problem with this approach is it would not really be your story anymore... even if you are correct in that you find us trustworthy (thanks, it is rare I hear that), the issue is we do not even all agree on the direction your story should go in.

I'll tell you up front I prefer a Tomoko match, reasoning simple, she learned how wrong she was, and gave up everything just to save him and right what she herself had helped cause. But not everyone else here thinks the same, and I can agree with some of the reasons for other matches.

And please, whatever you do, do not issue polls on direction or matches...

I've seen stories by committee over the years, and they almost invariably end up failing or becoming inactive.

Chapter 20 - Keitaro does his best to tell Motoko that he won't abuse his position. In face he tries to tell her that if anything, Things will go on as they did before. ( I have no idea how Motoko would react. Should it be anger, relief, or a bit of both.)
Ok, I could picture this... but... I could also see a Motoko conflicted so much right now she actually without thinking and instinctually finding issue with everything he does/says botching this whole thing so that she actually gets herself so fired up and turned around and is arguing with him about not doing the honorable thing and treating her as was agreed to (never mind *HE* never made any such agreement). Only after realizing what she was arguing in favor of him doing her running off to her room in moral embarassement and/or fear.

Chapter 21 - While in the hot springs, a discussion between the Hinata girls about the current situation. They probably discuss what they would do in Keitaro's place and also if they were in Motoko's place. Tomoko decides to try her best at getting Keitaro like her again, since he kind of dislikes both her and Tsuruko for their actions towards Motoko.
I'd almost reverse this, have it occur before the talk with Keitaro. Psyche Motoko out and give all sorts of images.

Are you including Tsuruko and Haruka as Hinata girls? I would imagine those two more reflecting on their past actions and current standing with Keitaro.

Chapter 22 - Naru returns. She gets pissed off at Keitaro when she learns of what happened. When she learns that it was Tomoko's and Tsuruko's actions that were mostly responsible, Naru tries to make them feel guilty about what they done.
While I can see her laying some blame on the girls... I cannot picture her not laying blame at all on Keitaro for the whole thing, likely for being along the lines of him putting them up to it in some way.
 

HotelKatz

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I was going to bring up my AMG what if story to point out that going by your logic, I lost the right to call it my story the third chapter in. but I realized two things.

One - That point only serves to prove you right.

Two - Am I trying to turn the plotting of the story over to someone else because I'm lazy with that part? Or am I seeking an easy way to get out of working on writing on my fics?

At the meantime, I think I will follow your suggestions.

And I kind of consider Haruka one of the Hinata girls. So maybe in this story.

Tsuruko... No, not in this story. With the whole 'making Motoko fight' thing, she's kinda burned a part of a bridge with some of the tenants.
 

PCHeintz72

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HotelKatz said:
Tsuruko... No, not in this story. With the whole 'making Motoko fight' thing, she's kinda burned a part of a bridge with some of the tenants.
By that logic, so has Tomoko.

Tsuruko now knows she did wrong, not by anything specifically stating so, but simply because she definitely feels rage at the image she gave herself.

Haruka knew almost immediately she did wrong, but now has to deal with what she done.

Both strike me as the type to want to right their wrongs... otherwise they are merely hippocrits to so condem Motoko.

Considering a large part of this story is about motoko's redemption, despite her actions, I fail to see why Haruka and Tsukuko could nto get similar consideration.

Remember, the wronged party is Keitaro, the same guy whom could forgive near daily and unwarranted attacks... I think he could forgive them, though they may still, even if for their own sake, need to eat crow, as the expression goes.
 

HotelKatz

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True, so 'burning bridges' won't be as bad as I thought. All the effect would be would be some frosty attitudes towards Tomoko and Tsuruko for a bit.

so at most, Kitsune would be annoyed at both Tomoko and Tsuruko for a little bit. At least until she decides to have some fun with Motoko's situation because Kitsune knows that Keitaro is not as bad as he is made out to be and wouldn't take advantage of Motoko.

Should I have Shinobu be a bit jealous of Motoko's situation?

As for Tsuruko and Haruka, yes, they both know they did wrong. However, Haruka either needs a bit more prodding to admit it so she can right her wrongs, or needs a bit more time. I'm tempted to write a dream sequence where her dead mother visits her and tells her some good advice. Dunno what advice I should use. maybe 'It's okay to be wrong once in awhile as long as you make up for it', 'everyone makes mistakes', or 'pride goes before a fall'? I don't think it might be the last one. Haruka's thoughts in my fic do tell that she knows what she did was wrong, but she's running from it.

And yeah, Keitaro is a bit of a saint.

Oh, and If I do wind up with a Tomoko pairing and have her tell the others who she really is, should I have Motoko start planning on going back in time to start something like a time loop?
 

PCHeintz72

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Oh, and If I do wind up with a Tomoko pairing and have her tell the others who she really is, should I have Motoko start planning on going back in time to start something like a time loop?
No point... You already speculated and laid a good foundation through the Tomoko and Tsuruko conversation that history has already altered and Tomoko is still there despite that. Lessons she learned Motoko has not due to the changed history.

The current theory being Tomoko is more from a parallel or alternate branch-off previous future universe instead of a true incarnation of this definitive future...

Thus even if Motoko went back, she also would either end up in a branch-off universe, or if this exact one may survive to see Tomoko show up as well...
 

HotelKatz

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...wow, I need to drink more coffee if I'm starting to mis-remember my fic's own rules on how time travel goes in it.

Because I both need the practice at writing at something love Hina-related after accidentally taking an extended break and the fact my muse is wanting me to write a certain something, I'm going to try my hand at an Omake. Specifically, the one where Tomoko and Motoko agree to go after Keitaro together.

To the folks worrying about if it's canon or not. No, it won't be canon to my fic. As much as I like Harem fics, I will not have Keitaro winding up with more than one person in my 'another blade' fic.

So, I'll post the Omake up by Friday. Saturday at the latest.
 

chronodekar

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Now you know why I haven't updated in awhile.

Don't let it get you down though. Show the world that you're better than me! :p

-chronodekar
 

PCHeintz72

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HotelKatz said:
...wow, I need to drink more coffee if I'm starting to mis-remember my fic's own rules on how time travel goes in it.
Well... I'm using star trek terminology more than anything else as that is what I know... but you did cover it... in chapter 10

"Future self from a no longer viable timeline. In my timeline, no one named Tomoko Aoyama ever appeared," Tomoko said. Tsuruko grew a bit angry when she heard that.
and later:

"But if you are my sister and are from the future, you are extremely selfish."

"Selfish? You don't even know why I came in the first place!" Tomoko loudly said back.

"Then enlighten me, since you didn't tell me why when I asked," Tsuruko said.

"I came back in time to prevent Urashima's death!" Tomoko yelled.

"Does your timeline still exist or has it been over written?" Tsuruko asked, crossing her arms. Tomoko thought about it for a second or two.

"Since I still exist, I assume it exists, but I cannot return to it," Tomoko answered.
and

"But as you said, The Timeline you came from is not this timeline's future. If they send anyone else back, they will go to a different timeline, one that you are not in," Tsuruko explained. "As far as they know, you are possibly alive, but they have no way of making sure."
While they were partially talking about Tomoko either going back or communicating with her specific future, all the statements also support the fact that if any of them go back, they would not nessecarily go to the timeline she is in. Likewise, since Tomoko exists in a timeline despite her not having appeared originally, it has already diverged from her memories and if it was the same timeline, she would have remembered a Tomoko appearing.

Thus my statement that Tomoko is really from a parallel or alternate branch-off previous future universe instead of a true incarnation of this definitive future... were that not so and she was from the definitive future, she would have changed as this timeline changed.



I happen to like time travel stories, but boy is it easy to box an author in and give readers headaches thinking of possibilities.

EDIT: one additional thing occurs to me... For anyone to travel in time here, they would need not only a Suu smart enough and with the knowledge to build a working time tunnel, but have the components exist for her to use. Since this Suu knows about the possibility, she may be able to build one faster than the original timeline, but that does not mean she has the knowledge to just whip one up unless Tomoko has blueprints... which I doubt.
 

HotelKatz

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I like time travel stories as well. And i do believe I was using Star Trek timetravel rules as well.

The Spinoff that I kinda want to write would deal with the idea of the current Su trying to make a timemachine to at least somehow contact herself from Tomoko's timeline. But Current Su lacks the knowledge and wisdom of the future Su, So there'd be things that the current Su would miss about making her timemachine.

Something occurs and a few members of the hinata get thrown into alternate timelines. A Su from a highly technologically-advanced timeline then comes in to help get back the lost members.

The reason why it would be a spinoff, instead of being a story arc in my 'another blade' fic, is because it really deviates from Tomoko's redemption and the Motoko/Keitaro pairing. Yeah I was talked out of adding it here in this topic

One chapter idea for the spinoff is Naru winding up in a gender-reversed universe. Naru sees her male self hitting Keitaro's female self and Naru loses her temper big time. Naru beats up male Naru and then takes Female Keitaro with her back to Naru's timeline to protect Female Keitaro. There is a possibility where I could make this where Naru could have her redemption.
 

PCHeintz72

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The Spinoff that I kinda want to write would deal with the idea of the current Su trying to make a timemachine to at least somehow contact herself from Tomoko's timeline. But Current Su lacks the knowledge and wisdom of the future Su, So there'd be things that the current Su would miss about making her timemachine.
I am reminded of the Tenchi Universe Time and Space Adventure Arc where Washu's universe creator does the same for the Tenchi cast. They have to hold out with knowledge of both real and fake universes until Washu rescues each.

The reason why it would be a spinoff, instead of being a story arc in my 'another blade' fic, is because it really deviates from Tomoko's redemption and the Motoko/Keitaro pairing. Yeah I was talked out of adding it here in this topic
It would also invalidate Tomokos statement that the time tunnel was 1 way only and they would have no way to find her.

Note, one way to have this Kaolla find Tomokos universe though might be to compare Tomoko's quantum and temporal signatures to a native of the universe, such as herself... If she can make a time machine, then she could probably do that. But that leads to my previous post comment that she may not be able to yet.
 

HotelKatz

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PCHeintz72 said:
It would also invalidate Tomokos statement that the time tunnel was 1 way only and they would have no way to find her.

Note, one way to have this Kaolla find Tomokos universe though might be to compare Tomoko's quantum and temporal signatures to a native of the universe, such as herself... If she can make a time machine, then she could probably do that. But that leads to my previous post comment that she may not be able to yet.
Yeah, the portal was one way. But if Su can somehow re-create the portal somehow, she might be able to make a tunnel between Tomoko's timeline and the current one. But I don't think I'm going to do that, unless there'd be a heavy downside to it that makes the tunnel far more trouble than it's worth.


So at the current moment the plot for future chapters is

Chapter 20 - the girls go to the hot springs to help Motoko somehow. Kitsune and Shinobu are reluctant to let Tomoko and Tsuruko come in as well because they were responsible for making Motoko be Keitaro's servant. Tomoko and Tsuruko give some reason that kind of helps them get in. While in the hot springs, a discussion between the girls about the current situation. They probably discuss what they would do in Keitaro's place and also if they were in Motoko's place. Tomoko decides to try her best at getting Keitaro like her again, since he kind of dislikes both her and Tsuruko for their actions towards Motoko.

chapter 21 - Keitaro does his best to tell Motoko that he won't abuse his position. In face he tries to tell her that if anything, Things will go on as they did before. Motoko overreacts in various ways before running and hiding in her room

chapter 22 - Naru returns. She gets pissed off at Keitaro when she learns of what happened. When she learns that it was Tomoko's and Tsuruko's actions that were mostly responsible, Naru tries to make them and Keitaro feel guilty about what they done. Keitaro, possibly because he's a bit worn out at recent events, asks Naru to calm down. When Naru starts to swing at Keitaro, Motoko looks over at Tsuruko and does not like the look in Tsuruko's eyes. Motoko quickly stops Naru's punch.

(I thank you, PCHeintz72 for your help with the planning of 20, 21, 22)

Chapter 23 - Naru is mystified at what Motoko did. Motoko explains that she is bound to serve Keitaro for a year, and she needs him to live for that. Naru stops away to her room and Kitsune follows after her.Kitsune then tells Naru what she learned from spying on Su. Dunno how Naru should act. Perhaps then some bit where Keitaro trips and lands on Tsuruko. Keitaro fully expects Tsuruko to act like how Motoko usually does, but she doesn't. Tsuruko doesn't even blame Keitaro, she instead blames the Inn's spirit or power and claims that it is doing a poor job at pairing up people if it continues to make one person look like a clumsy pervert.
 

PCHeintz72

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Chapter 23 - Naru is mystified at what Motoko did. Motoko explains that she is bound to serve Keitaro for a year, and she needs him to live for that.
Sniggers... I notice that she says nothing about justly protecting him as a reason, nor that she will care if he drops dead or not afterward...

Tsuruko doesn't even blame Keitaro, she instead blames the Inn's spirit or power and claims that it is doing a poor job at pairing up people if it continues to make one person look like a clumsy pervert.
Probably senility... The Inn/Dorm is older than even Granny Hina. Also, I assume it came about while it was a inn and it was intended for an inn... it being a dorm now has probably mucked it all up...
 

HotelKatz

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I'm trying to decide if Motoko should either

A.) have calmed down to realize that Keitaro meant what he said about thing would continue on like nothing happened, so she is only acting to calm down Naru a little bit. If Motoko was accepting of her situation in front of Naru, Naru would only react even worse.

B.) be in an angry mood because anger feels safe for her at the moment, since she's been thrown in a bit of an unwanted situation.
 

PCHeintz72

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Well... I was commenting from the standpoint that were Tsuruko/Tomoko watching, and she actually stated it, and in that manner... it might start something.

I'm thinking though that Keitaro immediately stating that nothing will change may not set well with any of the three Aoyama girls... While it may in fact be truth for him to state it, Motoko is still honor bound to accept the terms, and even though he has every right to be quite put out about not even havin been consulted. He is in effect intruding on their honor by insisting this be the status.
 

HotelKatz

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I am reminded a bit of a scene from Omamori Himari for some reason. (Hurray for busty Samurai cat girls!)

Himari (the samurai catgirl) got stuck in a situation where she had to sacrifice a cherished sword to escape certain death at the hands of a demon slayer.

Yuto, the person who Himari was supposed to protect, tried to say that running away is fine as long as she is alright.

Himari responded with, "Do not try to comfort me!! Young master's words of comfort... are more damaging than any blade to me..."

So I think I'll probably have in chapter 24, Seta tries to explain to Keitaro that he is intruding on the Aoyama's honor by saying nothing will change. I'll need to think up a few more things for that chapter, as that seems like I'll be able to write up 300 or so words.
 

HotelKatz

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I'm still writing the Omake. I do have a question to whoever wants to answer.

What part of the timeline should Tomoko appear for the omake?

At the moment, I'm currently using about two days before the kangaroo trial, But I keep thinking that there might be a better time for Tomoko to appear for the Tomoko/Motoko teamup for Keitaro's heart.

Any suggestions?
 
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