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WhiteKnightLeo

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Why are you asking us if you should abandon a story we like? The only way we would say "yes" is if the story sucked. But this one is gold.

We will understand (and will be massively disappointed besides) if you are out of inspiration, but don't give it up because you think we don't like it. Seriously. I'm this close to asking how thick you are if you are wondering whether we like it or not.
 
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WKL, you really should not have said that last bit, it was more then enough to say that the story is good and that Raa should continue it.
 

shiki

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In other news,

GIANT MUTANT NINJA SPACE MONKEY!

No, seriously. ;)
 

EagleCeres

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Lord Raa said:
ôIÆll go first,ö the ash-blonde offered. ôItÆll give you a chance to get an idea on how to hold a cue.ö
I know there's some joke here about women knowing how to handle a stick... but I can't seem to fit it in and still not sound like an even bigger perv.

So yeah, I do want to know moar about Tsuruko wearing a dress that may be so tight, Only a man with The Stig's caliber would be able to steer around those curves proper :drool:

Kitsune being defensive/possessive is a good take on our favorite lush, I'm curious what really made her give up her self imposed "Must always back up Naru" attitude and go for the gold for herself for once.

More whenever you can Sir!
 

Lord Raa

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Are you having a wonderful Christmas? Well, you won't be after you read this.

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By Lord Raa


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Disclaim-me-do: Between love and madness lies syphilis.


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Chapter 8


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In Kobe, Motoko and Naru had grown bored waiting for Shinobu to finish browsing a store specialising in cookware. When kendoist noticed that there was an extensive bookstore nearby, it occurred to her that she didnÆt really know what sort of books Keitaro had written.

She was about to suggest waiting for Shinobu in the bookstore when the chef emerged.

ôIÆm sorry about that, I got caught up talking with some people in the store,ö Shinobu apologised, bowing profusely.

ôItÆs alright, Shinobu-chan,ö Naru smiled, glad that they could move on to the next shop on their list.

ôUnfortunately, I donÆt think weÆre going to be able to get to the Kanagawa Neverland store before it closes, Naru-sempai,ö Motoko said, gesturing to a nearby clock. ôItÆs on the other side of Kobe.ö

ôOh bother,ö the auburn-haired girl sighed. ôI really wanted to go there.ö

ôWe can still visit it tomorrow morning, before we head back,ö Motoko replied, hoping to placate her friend. ôDo either of you mind if we look in this bookstore before we head back to the hotel? I want to get something to read for the train ride home.ö

ôI donÆt see why not,ö Naru answered.


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shiki

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Ho Ho Ho.

Mayhaps this be the event that sparks the heat in Motoko's <s> loins </s> writing?
 

ThreadWeaver

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Very Nice...

wouldn't Motoko be livid that her smutty writing was inspired by the Perverted Manager that she dislikes so much. Oh, the irony.
 

shiki

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ThreadWeaver said:
Very Nice...

wouldn't Motoko be livid that her smutty writing was inspired by the Perverted Manager that she dislikes so much.á Oh, the irony.
They can become the H writing dual threat!

Writers of erotica by day!

Smutty adventures w/ Tsuruko, their silver-hair editor suspiciously named Tessa, and an underaged Sakurazaki Setsuna exploring her budding bisexual urges when all she wanted was some advanced training in Shinmeiryuu in the moonlight!
 

marthf1

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shiki said:
~snip~

Smutty adventures w/ Tsuruko, their silver-hair editor suspiciously named Tessa, and an underaged Sakurazaki Setsuna exploring her budding bisexual urges when all she wanted was some advanced training in Shinmeiryuu in the moonlight!
Heh, given some of the stranger light novels I've passed over on mangaupdates, I could actually see that being a light novel!
 
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And it sounds less stupid than yet another War of the Three Kingdoms parody where everyone of note is transformed into slutty high school girls. Except Diao Chan, who is now a male bodybuilder voiced by Norio Wakamoto.

As for the new snippet, it's almost a given Motoko's going to find something of Keitaro's soon. The only question, then, is if Naru, Shinobu and/or Kaolla also see it... Unless of course he's going to throw us a curve ball and have the book store explode because of a gas leak or something, but that seems too far out of left field even for a major plot twist.
 

WhiteKnightLeo

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PCHeintz72 said:
Hmmm...? while I question Tsuruko just rummaging through Motoko's closet like that w/o asking, especially on a outfit still w/ tags...? I'll leave that as a 'beside the point' item in favor of my real question.
You've never lived with multiple women before, have you? My sisters and mother regularly swap and steal clothes from each other, and have ever since they reached roughly the same height. The longer girls live together the more comfortable they get with this, even borrowing underwear and lingerie. Supposedly the only thing they won't borrow is a dildo (not really sure why, considering how likely they are to steal each others boyfriends).

It doesn't happen so much anymore since my elder sister moved out with her new husband, but it used to be that I could never tell whose clothes were whose when I got conned into doing laundry.
 

PCHeintz72

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WhiteKnightLeo said:
PCHeintz72 said:
Hmmm...á while I question Tsuruko just rummaging through Motoko's closet like that w/o asking, especially on a outfit still w/ tags...á I'll leave that as a 'beside the point' item in favor of my real question.
You've never lived with multiple women before, have you? My sisters and mother regularly swap and steal clothes from each other, and have ever since they reached roughly the same height. The longer girls live together the more comfortable they get with this, even borrowing underwear and lingerie. Supposedly the only thing they won't borrow is a dildo (not really sure why, considering how likely they are to steal each others boyfriends).

It doesn't happen so much anymore since my elder sister moved out with her new husband, but it used to be that I could never tell whose clothes were whose when I got conned into doing laundry.
I can honestly state I've never lived with multiple women at the same time (not so sure that is a a good or a bad thing, but oh well)... I've never had the dubious honor...

This was not just any outfit though... as it still had tags on and everything... plus I had thought Tsuruko being a bit more tradionally minded and more formal would have at least asked.


In any case, it was a minor point at best, and not worth really arguing over...
 

Lord Raa

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Terrible news - I seem to be writing something that's best described as a "non-canon half-chapter".

Half-chapter in the same vein as Type K.

Non-canon in that I'm not sure it would fit in the normal narrative structure of the story.

Or some bollocks like that.
 

T.L

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Would it be possible to see what you have or wait until you have posted it.
If it involves bending Tsuruko and Mitsune over the pool table, then get to it. :yay:
 

T.L

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It seems to fit ok with earlier chapters.
I think that Mitsune needs to be handicapped severely in her attempts to woo Keitaro.
Especially that Keitaro knows that Tsuruko is interested and willing.

Poor Haruka who hasn't been thought of in chapters or touched in years, What to do?
Perhaps It's time for Souske Sagara to make an appearance ? :snigger:
 

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Without Remorse said:
Poor Haruka who hasn't been thought of in chapters or touched in years, What to do?
Perhaps It's time for Souske Sagara to make an appearance ? :snigger:
Sousuke?

I'm missing something. Namely what he's got to do with this one.

That said, I'm currently kinda work on the next bits. The half chapter is described as "non-canon" because I might do something that disrupts the flow/pacing/setting of the regular story for cheap laughs/thrills.

If that makes any sense.
 

T.L

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mmmm

I have been under the impression that Souske Sagara was Rokku Haado.
Perhaps I have been wrong. ( Trying to tie up some threads from other stories )
 

PCHeintz72

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Without Remorse said:
Perhaps It's time for Souske Sagara to make an appearance ? :snigger:
Whie I actually would not mind more of Souske and his Ranma cross with a believed perverted Kaname... Don't see the connection... And I never once thought Souske was Rokku...


ôThanks for the warning,ö Tsuruko said with a small smile. æRacy? If I thought it would work, IÆd be lying naked on the table with my legs akimbo.Æ
Actually... I'm reasonably sure this particular keitar would in fact get that point... it might even be a funny twist if he commented to himself some indication to us readers he was deliberately ignoring their advances...
 

EagleCeres

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I will never understand why people persist in confusing Ivor Biggun, Rokku Haado and Sula Otelita... they are three completely different guys. :snigger:

Non-Canon? awww... but Haruka-san should get to have some fun!
that reminds me: [shameless] has our favorite author ever used his cousin/aunt as inspiration? [/shameless]
 

T.L

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Keitaro as we well know is Ivor Biggun

I was assuming Souske Sagara was Rokku Haado, in the story <a href='http://z13.invisionfree.com/Be_Your_True_Mind/index.php?showtopic=51&hl=' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>Full Trouser panic</a>
 

ThreadWeaver

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PCHeintz72 said:
Actually...á I'm reasonably sure this particular Keitaro would in fact get that point...á it might even be a funny twist if he commented to himself some indication to us readers he was deliberately ignoring their advances...
You know, considering he's a porn manga author, I would bet that he would pick up on that sort of innuendo, even if subconsciously.

Even if he didn't openly acknowledge Keitaro ignoring those advances, one could convey quite a bit with a blush or a smirk here and there. Maybe turn out at the end that he was somewhat leading them on to see just how far they'd go-- and to get story research material, of course...

I see nothing wrong in this addition other than the fact that even he should be able to pick up on the <s>estrogen</s> pheromones permeating the room.
 

ThreadWeaver

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Lord Raa said:
But you won't care if it ends up with a naked Tsuruko bent over the table, will you?
Of course not. Bend away.

Somehow I don't think Tsuruko will mind either...
 

EagleCeres

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ThreadWeaver said:
Lord Raa said:
But you won't care if it ends up with a naked Tsuruko bent over the table, will you?
Of course not. Bend away.

Somehow I don't think Tsuruko will mind either...
Not so much a "don't care" more like a "don't mind".
OK, I'll be honest... I personally want Kei to slam her like a usd$5.00 pancake.

Besides, isn't that one of her goals? :evil2:

Non-Canonic huh? then again...
there's always the lost (read as: lemon forum) chapter X.5 :p
 

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I'll just troll you with this:

Tsuruko Aoyama said:
ôLet me put it this way: WeÆre all adults here; weÆve got adult drinks and weÆre playing an adult game. WhoÆs to say that maybe weÆre not playing to our full ability in order to progress things from an adult game to an adult pastime? ö
 
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