Baby's Got A Crazy Ghost Chapter 1

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Seven Years Ago....

"So they've been studying all this time?"

Risa Hino nodded at Atsuko Urameshi, "Yes, I'm rather surprised at
Rei's determination to make sure Yu-chan is dedicated to his
studies. At this age I would think that they would be more
dedicated to playing than studying."

Atsuko gave a small smile to the elder woman, "Well, if anyone can get my
boy off his butt and study, it's your daughter."

CRASH!

"Oh dear, what was that?" Mrs. Hino asked.

SMASH!

Atsuko walked quickly toward the sounds, "Dunno, but let's find out shall we?"

The mothers found themselves in the living room area of the shrine, agape at the
scene before them. Yusuke was running away from a pair of crows pecking at his
head. Rei was hot on his heels, a ruler in her hands.

"Dangit Rei, call off your crows or I call the ASPCA!", Yusuke cried.

"I'll call them off when you start studying your math!", Rei responded.

"Never!"

"Then suffer!"

The mothers stared at this exchange for a while before Risa ran in to break up the
chaos. Atsuko simply smiled, "Looks like my boy just himself a jailer for life."

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Ghostface211 presents....

A Sailor Moon- Yu Yu Hakusho Crossover

Baby's Got A Crazy Ghost

What has happened?

Uh... nothing, really. This is the first chapter

Chapter 1: The End of the beginning

Comments, Constructive Criticism, and MST 3000's can go to ghostface211@gmail.com
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Today....

"Wake up."

"zzzz.....mmmbergf...zzzz...."

"Come on, stupid. Wake up!"

"guglebergnf....zzzzz..."

"Hey, lazybones! Get up!"

Yusuke Urameshi yawned as his body slowly awoke to
the sight of a young girl around his age shaking him awake.
He yawned again as he rose, scratching his head, "Gah. What is it,
Rei? It's too early to get up."

Rei Hino growled and pulled the covers off the young punk's
bed, "Too early, my butt!! Get up, Yusuke!"

"Unless you're planning on joinin' me, go 'way". He turned his back to
her on the bed trying to get comfortable again, sans blanket.

Rei blushed and kicked the punk in the butt, "GET UP, YOU PERVERT!!!"

"YEEAAOOO!!!" Yusuke jumped to a kneeling position holding his rear.
"JEEZUSS, Rei! What the hell?!"

"What the hell? WHAT THE HELL?!!" Rei got into Yusuke's face,
her teeth grinding together. "Auntie Atsuko told me you haven't gone
to school for 5 days! Are you trying to flunk out?!"

"AWRIGHT ALREADY!!" Yusuke shouted back at the girl,
"I'm goinæ, I'm goinæ! Goddamn..." The punk mumbled to himself
as he scratched his head and arose from his futon, "I can tell today's
gonna be a fan-fuckin'-tastic day."

His head shot forward as she smacked his head. "And what do I keep
telling you about your swearing!?"

Rei turned her back to Yusuke and the boy raised her skirt,
"And what do I tell you 'bout wearing them fugly panties?"

SLAP!

"I honestly can't believe you sometimes, Yusuke! " She stomped out of his room.
"It's times like this when I wish you would just drop dead!"
With that she slammed the door behind her.

Yusuke huffed, rubbing his sore face. He let off a sigh of
annoyance, "Yep, great fuckin' day."
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In another part of Juban, another youth was preparing to greet the dawn in a very special way.

"Wake up, come on, wake up already!"

"Mmmm.... five more minutes, mamma..."

By sleeping until noon, if possible.

Ikkuko Tuskino, the mother of the young girl sleeping the sleep of the dead, continued to shake
her daughter to awareness," Usagi!!! Usagi-chan!!!! You'll be late for school!!!"

Her daughter, Usagi Tuskino, however, remained oblivious to her mother's cries to rouse
her from her slumber. Unconsciously reaching under her pink bunny pajamas to scratch her
stomach, the young blond continued to sleep the sleep of the dead.

Ikkuko sighed, knowing what she had to do. She leaned near her daughter's ear,
"USAGI-CHAN, GET YOUR BUTT UP AND READY FOR SCHOOL!!!"
Shouted her mother.

"WAAHH!!", cried Usagi as she was rudely awakened by her mother. She fell out of her bed with a thud.

Her mother sighed and shook her head as her daughter groggily stood on her feet.
"Honestly, Usagi. I don't understand why we have to go through this every morning. Now
hurry up and get ready for school."

Usagi nodded as she made her way to the bathroom. Ikkuko sighed again as she left her
daughter and went downstairs to finish breakfast.

Just the start of another day.
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"Ahh, why did morning have to come," Usagi whined as she ran to school.
Her face was flushed as she raced to actually be on time for once, "I dun
wanna go to schooooool!"

"Hey, you freaky cat! Come back here!"

Usagi blinked as she almost passed a vacant lot. A black blurred suddenly
zoomed passed the schoolgirl followed by a trio of grade school boys carrying
sticks into the vacant lot. Usagi frowned as she followed the group, feeling
a rare burst of courage.

The boys had surrounded the blur, revealing it's self to be a black cat with a
band-aid on it's forehead. It was hunched up against the wall and surrounded
by the boys. A boy wearing a blue baseball cap grinned darkly at the animal,
"Now you're going to get it, fur ball!"

"Take that!", cried another boy

"Cry out more!", shouted the third. A dark grin on his face.

"What do think you're doing?" Usagi yelled out loud. "Stop hurting that poor
kitty!"

"Oh yeah?" The blue capped boy challenged, unfazed by the older girl's
command, "Why don't you make us?"

Usagi growled at the kids and marched forward, "All right I will!"
She paused as she saw the children look behind her with expressions
of pure unadulterated fear. Usagi slowly turned around to see who
was putting the fear of god into the kids.

S-s-s-speaking of bullies..., she thought as she began to quiver. There the young blonde
found herself very close to the Demon of Juban Junior High. The boy who had legions
of gang members at his own personal beck and call. Yusuke Urameshi. He frowned
at the group before him.

"Oh man, it's him!", the capped boy cried as he fell on his bottom and crawled
away from the older boy, hyperventilating.

"Why's he here?!?!" another boy cried.

"Dunno! Don't care! I'm outta here!!" The third cried and ran out of the
lot. The other two following suit quickly. Usagi remained, although she was
tempted to join the boys in strategic retreat.

"Now was that so bad?"

Usagi blinked as she caught sight of a girl who looked to be her age with
long raven black hair and an unfamiliar school uniform. She was smirking
at the demon who had shoved his hands back into his pockets and glared
at her.

She's... so beautiful..., she thought. And completely unfazed by Yusuke's
glare. Could... could she be the beautiful goddess who could turn
away the demon? Could the rumors be true?


"Che, whatever Rei," Yusuke muttered, "Now that I've done my
good deed for the year, I'm goin' home."

Rei grabbed his arm and dragged him off, "No way, buddy. No one
I know is gonna be a flunk out if I can help it."

"Hey, c'mon Rei, leggo!"

"Shaddup, you! You're late enough as it is!"

Usagi blinked as the pair disappeared from her sight. She let
out a breath she was unaware that she had been holding and
turned back to the cat. It was scratching at it's forehead,
trying to remove the band-aid on it.

Usagi looked at the animal with pity, "Oh, poor black kitty-chan.
Did those bullies do that to you?" She reached out to the cat,
and it scratched her outstretched hand. Usagi jerked back in pain,
but smiled and stretched out her other hand. "It's ok, kitty. I want to help you.
I won't hurt you."

The cat looked at Usagi's outstretched hand warily, looking
back to the smiling girl again. It walked toward the girl's
hand slowly, cautiously. When it reached her hand, Usagi's
smile grew and she carefully removed the band-aid from the animal's
head. Usagi's eyes caught sight of the crescent moon mark on the
cat's forehead, "Wooow, so pretty."

The animal licked her wounded hand, as if to apologize, and Usagi
hummed as she took the black crescent marked cat in her arms.
The cat leaned into her and purred. Usagi smiled as she held it..a her it seems,
a little closer.

"There, there. Those bullies won't do anything bad to you again, I promise."

Then something else caught her attention; it was it's eyes. Eyes that
were far too deep, far too intelligent-looking for a simple house cat.
They seemed to gaze into her soul and communicate a message at the same
time...

BING-BONG!

Usagi shook her head and put the animal down.
"Oh no, I can't deal with this now! I'M
LAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATE!!!!", she cried
before running off.

The cat stared at the smoke cloud the young schoolgirl left
in her wake. It blinked before following the girl's disappearing trail.
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"So what did you get on that test Usagi-chan?"

Usagi dramatically sighed at her best friend, before showing her the score
from their latest test scores.

She blinked before looking back at Usagi quizzically, "How do you get a G on a test?"

Usagi pouted, "That's not what is says, Naru-chan!"

Naru Osaka giggled, "Sorry, sorry. But man, your mom's gonna kill you."

"Tell me about it...". Her shoulders sank as stopped in front of Naru. "I tried so hard this time too..."
She looked at her friend, giving her puppy dog eyes, "It's not my fault that the new Sailor V game came out, is it?"

Naru patted her friend on the shoulder, "No, Usagi-chan. You're just a victim of circumstance."

Usagi sighed, "I know... But mom's not gonna buy no matter how true it is."

"It's ok, Usagi-chan!" A boy with glasses suddenly appeared in front of the girls,
"I can help you study and do better next time."

Usagi grinned warily at the boy, "That's ok, Umino-kun. I'm kinda allergic to studying anyway."

Umino was about to respond when the girls gasped, grabbed Umino and hid behind a bush.
Umino was about to ask what was happening when Naru put a hand to his mouth
and shook her head in the negative. They pushed some of the leaves out of the way and
Umino gasped in terror as Yusuke Urameshi was about to walk out of the school gates.

Ohmygodohmygodohmygodohmygodohmygod that was sooooooo close!
Usagi thought to herself as her heart continued to beat fast enough to pop
out of her chest.

Naru was as panicked as her friend, hands trembling when her nose caught a whiff of a strange smell.
She looked at Umino and caught sight of a dark stain on the front of his school uniform and
was going down his legs. She pinched her nose and frowned at the boy.
Her eyes signifying her disappointment at the nerd.

"Where do you think he's going?" Usagi asked in hushed panicked tones.

Naru shrugged, "I dunno, you wanna ask?" The girl replied.

Usagi looked at her best friend in horror, "N-n-n-n-no! Do you?"

Naru returned a shocked look at the blonde, "Are you *trying* to kill me?
I though I was your friend!"

"But you asked me first!"

"Don't you know sarcasm when you hear it?!"

"Not when it's about Urameshi Yusuke!"

Umino was now crying in addition to peeing his pants, but was conveniently
being ignored by the girls debating on who was going to approach the young punk.

"You know...," Usagi paused in consideration and slowly turning toward
the young man with them, "We can send Umino."

Naru slowly turned to the boy, nodding in understanding, "Yes, we can send Umino.
No one would miss him."

Umino had now craped his pants.

"Ok maybe not. Eww...." Usagi then scrunched up her nose and grabbed
Naru's arm. "Let's go Naru-chan! It wonÆt be so scary if we go together",
she said as she pinched her nose.

"You'd pull that ninja stunt on *me*?!" a voice cried out and the girls
recognized it as Takenaka-sensei.

The trio came out of the bushes to see Yusuke leaving the campus, and Takenaka
yelling at Yusuke to be at school tomorrow. They all let off a sigh of relief as the
demon left school. "Oh Thank God," they muttered in unison.

Usagi and Naru then pinched their noses closed and slowly edged away from Umino,
"Ummm... you might want to change your pants, Umino-kun." Usagi suggested.

"And just what are you three doing out here?", a voice came from behind them.

The trio gulped and turned to find Iwamoto-sensei glaring down upon them.
"Nothing, sensei!" they cried.

"Get yourselves back to class". His own face then scrunched up as he looked at Umino.
"And what happened to you?"

"I.... I had an.... accident, sensei." Umino murmured.

Iwamoto narrowed his eyes. "Urameshi passed by here. Did he threaten you?"

Umino shook his head in the negative, "No sir...I really just had an accident."

Iwamoto stared at him for a moment longer, "Get changed and
back in class. Lunchtime's over now," He then turned and walked off.

The girls went back inside and back to their classroom. Umino did make a detour to
his gym locker for a fresh pair of underwear. However, the rest of the day was,
needless to say, unpleasant for the young mind.
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"Did you just get up mom?" Yusuke asked as he entered
his home.

His mother, Atsuko, yawned and scratched the side of her
breast, "Yeah." She frowned as she looked at her son,
"Why aren't you in school?"

Yusuke shrugged, "Got pissed, so I ditched."

Atsuko let off a disappointed sigh, "If you're so determined to flunk,
just tell me and I'll let you drop out."

"Really", he asked. Mood suddenly lifting, he went on. "Then let's go
take a trip back right now. We'll haul old man Takenaka and we'll-"

"Of course, that means you get a job, Yusuke."

Yusuke frowned and turned to his mother, "Well, now I got a rude wake up call,
a fuckin' lecture, and a threat of employment. The circle of life is now complete."

Atsuko nodded and lazily looked at him., "I'm not joking Yusuke. I could care less
if you want to drop out, but if you do you'll be working."

Yusuke frowned deeper as he headed for the door, "GoinÆ out ma."

"Bring some coffee before you get back", was the reply.

"Yes ma'mn," Yusuke replied sarcastically. He walked down the street, fuming at every step.
"What a lousy fuckin' day that sucked giant donkey balls! God, why do I
always have to be right about these kind of things? All I need now is to get run
over or something." He continued to walk and was getting even more irritated at some of the
glances he was getting. More frustrating was the fear and quick look-always from
people he turned to look at.

Goddamn, he thought, My rep's so shitty 'round here I can't go anywhere. What else can happen?

"Urameshi."

A vein popped on Yusuke's head as he identified the voice, "Kuwabara. The fucktard to dumb to quit."

"Shut up Urameshi! Today's the day you finally meet your maker, you got me?!"

Yusuke gave his rival a dark, malicious grin, that caused Kuwabara to pause.
"Y'know, I had been feeling pretty crappy today but it looks like my day is just about
to get better." The sound of knuckles cracking filled Kuwabara's ears.

Kuwabara growled and cracked his own knuckles, "Better for me you mean,
Urameshi! You'll be lickin' the bottom of my shoes today, jerk!"

"Issatafact now? I got five friends who beg to differ, assclown."

"You have friends now?", Kuwabara asked incredulously. He then turned to
look around. "I don't see anyone..."

BAM!

Kuwabara found himself flying face first into the concrete. Yusuke bent down and showed
his fist to the red-haired punk, "These five friends, you dumbass. And they
brought their friends too." That said, Yusuke proceeded to beat Kuwabara
into a mess of swollen flesh. The red headed punk tried to mount a good enough offense against
his rival, but Yusuke was to pissed off to even allow that. When he finished he huffed
and turned away from the boy, "Yep, just what the doc ordered. Thanks Kuwabara."

"No.....prob......lem......: "
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Yukimura Anzu was not one who would stand out to an average person. Her brunette hair that was cropped into a bob was not one that would stand out in a crowd. Nor did her brown eyes invoke any sort of heart stopping response to any boy that may have sought her attention. She was about average height, average weight, nothing special. A new girl at T*A Private Academy, she was not expecting to find anything special at the prestigious school. Then she saw a sight that would forever change her views forever. Anzu was blown away at the vision of elegance that walked in front of her.
Long raven hair that flowed like silk. Her uniform that somehow only accentuated her beauty.
Her long, smooth, toned legs and perfectly lined up socks completed the package of
pure radiance in the girls eyes, "Who... is she?"

A hand landed on Anzu's shoulder, and she turned to find a slender girl, with short brown
wavy hair that flowed down to her shoulder, brown eyes, a fair complexion, and glasses
named Fujishima Anko. She frowned at Anzu, "Do you not know of Hino Rei-sama?"

Anzu blinked "Rei...sama?"

A girl beside her, named Hibiki Sora nodded at the bespectacled girl before gazing at
Rei with open admiration in her blue eyes, Her long blond hair tied into a french braid,
"She is just sooooo cool! So athletic, so beautiful, and she can keep the demon in check!
Rei-sama is just the best!!!"

Anzu blinked again, "Demon? Who are you talking about?"

A third girl, an average looking girl with short cropped raven
hair named Hayase Chiharu approached the new girl, "The
horrible Demon of Juban, Urameshi Yusuke. A horrible,
vulgar, foul-mouthed punk who is the scourge
of the entire city!" Chiharu shuttered, "I don't even
know where she gets the guts to talk to him."


"Because he's not that scary."

The girls turned around to find Rei standing behind them. The girls
grew a faint blush as their idol was standing mere inches away
from them. Sora recovered first and smiled up at Rei, "You don't
have to be so modest Rei-sama."

Rei frowned, "What's there to be modest about? Yusuke's not that big of a deal anyway."

"No big deal!?!" Sora cried, "But Rei-sama, didn't you know? He commands
an entire legion of thugs! That's how he rules the city!"

Rei's eye twitched at the honorific, "Yusuke ruling the city? Now that's just ridiculous.
If he did he wouldn't know what to do with it. And Yusuke's never been one to lead others."

"I don't know about that, Rei-sama", Anko, replied. Pushing her eyeglasses up, she went on.
"There's word that the surrounding prefectures are afraid of him, and that other schools
have been talking about him. That's far too much for one boy, Rei-sama."

Rei's eyebrow twitched again, "And I'm telling you, it's bunk. If they fear him, it's because
of things like what you're saying. They believe the bunk because they're stupid enough to."

"I suppose so Rei-sama, but even so, it's good that you can control him."
Her eyes twitched at saying that, and luckily for her Rei did not notice.

"Believe me, NO ONE controls Yusuke Urameshi. Least of all me,"
She turned into her classroom before frowning at Anko, "And don't call me Rei-sama."

Anko's eyes widened at that. "But, but...".

Chiharu, spoke up. "But you're the school idol Rei-sama! It would be unacceptable to say otherwise!"

Around her the others agreed and Rei sighed, "I'm just Rei Hino. No one special."

With that Rei walked into the classroom, leaving her fan club behind.
Watching her go, Sora couldn't help but gush, "Great looks, controlling, and
sooooo modest! Rei-sama is the best!"

In the classroom, Rei let off a sigh in annoyance and shook her head. "Some people..."
She took her seat and looked out the window as she waited for the history teacher
to arrive and start the final class of the day, idly wondering if Yusuke had managed
to stay in class for once.
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"Kunio team, win!"

Yusuke grinned as his latest victory in Ultimate dodge ball, his
earlier irritations forgotten. At least in the arcade, no one could bother him.
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Usagi sighed as she walked down the street. Her test
clutched tightly in her hand, "Ahh... I really don't wanna go home right now...
especially with this test." She sighed again, knowing what would be waiting
for her at home would be a bratty brother ready to rub her failing grade in her face,
and her mama would be quick to let out her aggressions.

"Maybe a quick trip to the arcade will make dealing with mama easier," She perked up at that,
remembering how she had seen the advertisements for a new Sailor V game yesterday, and
her pace quicken a bit as she was anxious to delay her execution. She hummed a bit more
as made it to one of the main intersections and turned a corner. Scant seconds after she
turned the corner she rushed back around, her schoolbag clutched tightly to her.

Ohnoohnoohnoohnoohnoohnoohnoohnoohnoooooo!! Why do I keep running
into him today
, Usagi thought to herself as the young blonde found herself very
close to the Demon of Juban Junior High for the third time today.
She trembled a little as he approached a small child, a ball in his hand.

Oh no! That poor boy! I have to do something! She again rushed around the corner to once again
nearly dive back around.? What am I thinking?! Somebody has to do something, just not m-m-m-me!
Her arms loosened and the cat which she had forgotten about leapt from the fence it was standing on watching
the proceedings, onto the sidewalk. The cat sounded like it grumbled for a bit but
Usagi took no notice as she peeked around the corner again.

"I-I-I can't just leave him with that child. But if I go, something may happen to him."
Something may happen if you don't go, her conscience reminded her. Caught with indecision
she settled on peeking around the corner, thinking that if anything she could provide
a distraction for the child to run before she hit her own afterburners.

Now only if she could something about her knocking knees...

As she struggled to find the courage to save the young boy from the minor demon form hell,
she was greeted to a sight she never thought she would live to see.

"BLECH!"

Yusuke Urameshi...

The terror of Juban...

The demonic gang leader from hell...

Was making silly faces at the young child.

And the child was laughing.

She stared with unabashed astonishment, her mouth hanging open. The horrible,
gang leading, terrorize hoodlum son of Satan was making the child laugh.
Was it some sort of trick? She blinked as she continued her stare as these events unfolded.
Though there was a bit of concern making itself known.

Would she live if she gossiped about this with Naru?

She then watched as the demon gave the ball back to the boy and tell him not to play around the traffic.
Now he was promoting traffic safety to the child? Usagi found herself wondering if the cat she had
rescued hadn't transported her to an alternate dimension somehow. She leaned back against the wall,
staring at the floor.

Unbelievable.

With the show now over she was just about to turn the corner and try to make herself as small as
possible to get by him unnoticed when she heard him shout. Quickly peering around to her horror
she saw that the child had wandered into the street. She tried to open her mouth to shout a warning
but found that she couldn't as her gaze went down the street as she heard the wail of car engine.

And then... she was floored by a sight that she would never forget for the rest of her life.

Yusuke Urameshi... had thrown himself into traffic and pushed the young child out of the way of the vehicle.

Yusuke's body made a sickening thud as it collided with the car and landed back upon the pavement.
Usagi felt herself frozen in place as a pool of blood oozed out of Urameshi's head.
What happened next was a blur. Seemingly the people around her -'there were people?' -
had noticed or heard and began to rush past her to the fallen boy.

The car that had hit him had come to a stop, but she just continued to stare in shock,
unable to believe the scene in front of her.

"SOMEBODY CALL AN AMBULANCE!"

She gasped as the call shot through her head, bringing her back to the present.
There were so many people around where he had fallen now, but she couldn't
bring herself to follow them as she felt wetness around her eyes.
There's no way he could have survived it.

He's....he's dead.

She felt a nuzzle at her leg as she then saw the cat she had saved this very morning and gave her
the first encounter with Urameshi today. She collapsed to the ground, her throat suddenly feeling dry.
Tears were flowing freely now, and she looked down upon the black cat she saved.
"H...H... how could this be?"

Was I wrong about him? Were ... were we *all* wrong about him?

The Demon of Juban was untouchable, unapproachable, even the teachers were afraid of him.

However....

Wasn't there someone? In the back of her mind a figure did appear.

Yes, yes there was.

There had been one person to stand up to him. She didn't live nearby, but she had
seen for herself first hand, the beautiful goddess who could turn away the Demon.

But if she was wrong about Yusuke, we they wrong about that too?

Would that person soon suffer?

She picked the cat up again and held her close to her chest as the tears wouldn't stop.
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"Is something wrong Rei-sama?"

Rei frowned deeply at the honorific being used again. "No. Nothing's wrong, Anko-san. Why do you ask?"

Anko looked at Rei in worry, "Well, Rei-sama...you're crying."

Rei blinked before checking her face, surprised to find it damp. She blinked in confusion before frowning. "It's nothing, drop it", she answered as she continued forward, staring ahead.

Anko nodded as Rei continued to walk forward, "If you say so, Rei-sama."
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End Chapter One
 
#2
Some minor things of note: you switch a couple times between western and eastern name order, i.e. Yusuke Urameshi instead of Urameshi Yusuke. You should pick one method and stick to it. Preferably the one you used in the prologue; I don't remember which it was.

Second, Usagi's mother's name is spelled Ikuko, not Ikkuko.

Third, at least once you have a sentence which uses Yusuke's given (first) name, and then Kuwabara, which is another character's family name. That character's first name is Kazuma, in case you don't know. I know it's not often used, but it still exists.

I'll probably reread this a little later; those are just things I saw on a cursory first read.
 

Wheeljack

Well-Known Member
#3
nuclear death frog said:
Some minor things of note: you switch a couple times between western and eastern name order, i.e. Yusuke Urameshi instead of Urameshi Yusuke. You should pick one method and stick to it. Preferably the one you used in the prologue; I don't remember which it was.

Second, Usagi's mother's name is spelled Ikuko, not Ikkuko.

Third, at least once you have a sentence which uses Yusuke's given (first) name, and then Kuwabara, which is another character's family name. That character's first name is Kazuma, in case you don't know. I know it's not often used, but it still exists.

I'll probably reread this a little later; those are just things I saw on a cursory first read.
But then again, only two people in the entire series use Kuwabara's given name, Shizuru and Yukina.
 
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I'm aware of that; I have read the entire series...well, almost all of it, anyway; there's about six chapters left that have never been scanlated. And I do know pretty much what happens in them.

It was mostly because seeing the differences in naming conventions in the same sentence was kind of an interrupt.
 
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