Hello! Thanks from the replies of my previous thread here, I decided to make one of these. Since my fanfiction is of the Naruto category, posting it here would merit than if I posted it in the General Fanfiction section.
Story Information:
Title: Breakthrough
Category: Naruto
Words: 20,258 (for now)
Chapters: 2 (so far)
Summary: Time-Travel challenge issued by DfangOO. Kidnapped and misused for Orochimaru's nefarious deeds, the Uzumaki siblings attempt to escape from the Sannin's clutches, only to fail. Their father rescues them at last, but one sibling was whisked away right before his eyes. Naruto will do anything to get his child back. It was time to break through time, to the era of his childhood.
Main Characters: Boruto U. (Bolt U.) and Naruto U.
Additional information: Summarized challenge details include the following:
-I took the quoted words from my own profile, so it's there.
Notes: I made this before the new manga information stuff came out/before I saw it, so if when you see Himawari and the Byakugan in one sentence, just know that. (I'm scared what I wrote as fanfic material actually became canonized). Also, Boruto having Lightning and Water releases in my added information section, technically got canonized, too. Remember that this was before I knew the updated stuff about the series.
I'm also taking this pretty slow. So, Boruto won't meet up with anyone he knows until Chapter 4, as I have outlined. Additionally, I'll be switching back and forth from the two time eras so people can know what's happening on the two sides until the characters I want are in the same time era.
Story link: Breakthrough (click here)
What I want: The honest opinion about my pilot chapter, aka my first chapter. How well did I handle it? Do I have any mistakes? Missing information? Originality of the premise (if possible)? Title originality, good/bad summary, what can I improve on. Things of that nature.
I appreciate your time and efforts. I take constructive criticism seriously and apply it when I should. Thank you in advance!
Story Information:
Title: Breakthrough
Category: Naruto
Words: 20,258 (for now)
Chapters: 2 (so far)
Summary: Time-Travel challenge issued by DfangOO. Kidnapped and misused for Orochimaru's nefarious deeds, the Uzumaki siblings attempt to escape from the Sannin's clutches, only to fail. Their father rescues them at last, but one sibling was whisked away right before his eyes. Naruto will do anything to get his child back. It was time to break through time, to the era of his childhood.
Main Characters: Boruto U. (Bolt U.) and Naruto U.
Additional information: Summarized challenge details include the following:
-I took the quoted words from my own profile, so it's there.
Notes: I made this before the new manga information stuff came out/before I saw it, so if when you see Himawari and the Byakugan in one sentence, just know that. (I'm scared what I wrote as fanfic material actually became canonized). Also, Boruto having Lightning and Water releases in my added information section, technically got canonized, too. Remember that this was before I knew the updated stuff about the series.
I'm also taking this pretty slow. So, Boruto won't meet up with anyone he knows until Chapter 4, as I have outlined. Additionally, I'll be switching back and forth from the two time eras so people can know what's happening on the two sides until the characters I want are in the same time era.
Story link: Breakthrough (click here)
What I want: The honest opinion about my pilot chapter, aka my first chapter. How well did I handle it? Do I have any mistakes? Missing information? Originality of the premise (if possible)? Title originality, good/bad summary, what can I improve on. Things of that nature.
I appreciate your time and efforts. I take constructive criticism seriously and apply it when I should. Thank you in advance!