Ranma ½ Civilization : Saotome and Friends: Chapter 1

#1
Yes, I have decided to go with buytbuyt's suggestion of a title.

Fair warning, this is only the first part of this chapter (I stopped when I reached a good break point) and I don't know when I'll get around to writing more.

“So, where'd we end up? And is it possible to get back? And why did everything look like cheap TV time travel visuals?” Asked Ranma.

“The where is pretty simple: Ethiopia, March 21st, 200,000 BC.” Answered Setsuna, causing Ami to gasp. “As for getting back, impossible. Whatever happened has pretty much destroyed time before now, and I'm not too sure about the past. And everything looked like cheap TV time travel visuals because that was how your mind choose to interpret what you saw.”

“WHAT?!” Exclaimed everyone, including Usagi who had a very confused look on her face.

“I'm not to up to date on my ancient history, but isn't that the time period when the first humans walked out of Africa, Ami?” Asked Rei.

“Yes, so as you can imagine we're in BIG trouble.” Stated Ami.

“How bad can it be?” Stated an oblivious Usagi. “All we have to do is find a convenience store and everything will be find.”

Everyone else just stared at her.

“Usagi, if what Setsuna and Ami are saying is correct then there aren't any convenience stores, heck I don't think there are even humans yet.” Replied Makoto. Usagi just looked at her dumbfounded, not really understanding the reply

“Cavemen, Usagi-chan, that's what their talking about, cavemen.” Interjected Michiru., which caused the blonde to break out into tears.

“So just how bad are things? Because it doesn't sound good at all.” Asked Hotaru

“It's bad, but not too bad. Even without our Senshi transformations we're all in pretty good shape so we can probably live off the land, but it looks like it'll be getting dark soon so we should probably start looking for somewhere to camp for the night. Any suggestions, Ranma?” Answered Ami.

“Well, camping out under the stars sounds good but it's a lot less fun in practice, and as we don't have any tents that means finding or making some sort of shelter, best bets going to be find a cliff or cutting or something and either find, or more likely make, a cave. We'll also need bedding for the night, even if it's just a layer of leaves. And food would be a good idea, if we empty our bags we could use them to collect food for tonight at least, the stuff already in them can go into our subspace pockets if we decide to keep it.” Supplied Ranma.

[hr]

While they had managed a gully carved to a river in short order, even with the scanning capabilities of the Mercury Computer they hadn't managed to find a cave, or at least not one they could use to shelter for the night in the time they where prepared to spend looking for one, so Ranma had used his version of the Breaking Point to expand the best prospect they found into somewhere they could spend the night, going up from where the pseudo-cave bottomed out to trap water and then making a chamber large enough for all of them to sleep in.

After that was accomplished Usagi and Minako had been detailed to collect leaves for bedding while the rest of them went looking for dinner. (None of them trusted Usagi and Minako not to eat anything they found.) Ranma and struck very lucky, he'd run across a herd of what he thought was a herd of gazelles. Chasing down one and knocking it unconcous and taken longer then he was used to, be the animal was bigger then he was used dealing with. Slinging it accross his shoulders, he made his way back to where they had set up camp.

The looks he got when he got bak to camp where interesting. Ami, Rei and Makato looked hopeful but rather green, he wasn't sure if Minako was eying him or the gazelle, Usagi was gushing over how cute it was, Hotaru, Michiru and Haruka looked somewhat confused and Setsuna was her normal inscrutable self, but Ranma was pretty sure she knew what he was hoping to do and that she had no problems with it.

“Ami,” Asked Ranma. “I wasn't sure if we have the proper tools to dress this, I don't think the Silence Glaive or Space Sword will work to well, but would a dagger made of ice work?”

“Why do you want to dress the deer? And why would that involve a knife?” Inquired Usagi.

“Usagi, dressing in this case means cutting the animal to take out things we don't want to eat in preparation for butchering it, which is cutting into pieces for coking. And a knife made of ice should well enough.” Answered Ami, before triggering her transformation so she could make that knife. Upon hearing this information Usagi turned very green and looked like she was about to throw up, and several of the others looked like they would join her, with the expected exception of Setsuna. When her transformation was complete Ami used her Sabão Spray Freezing to create the knife and handing it to Ranama.

“Setsuna, have you done this before, because I could use some help. As for everyone else, well your welcome to watch. And for those who don't want to watch, we should have thought of this before, gather some fire wood.” Stated Ranma, before starting to walk downstream from where their new cave was.

“I've watched this sort of thing before, but never taken part in it, but I think I've got the idea.” Responded Setsuna, moving to follow him.

“Well the first thing I'll need to do is wring it's neck to kill it...” Started Ranma before he was interuptted by Usagi.

“Kill it? Are you really going to kill that nice deer?” She asked, sounding rather shaken.

“Yes I am.” Stated Ranama.

“But why? That's not a very nice thing to do.” Whined Usagi

“Because we need the meat and several other things from the carcass.” Replied Setsuna.

“Like what?” Asked Makoto, as she made to follow them, figuring that as the groups best cook this would her responsibility in the future.

“Well, the big thing the bladder, we don't really have any ability to store and transport water, which is kind of important, so we're going to want to keep that to make into a waterskin.” Started Ranma before being interrupted by Minako.

“What's wrong with the water in the river? Why can't se drink that?” She asked.

“Well, first unless we want to stay by the river we won't have access to it, and secondly, it's probably not safe to drink, so we're going to have to find some way of purifying it before we drink it.” Answered Ami.

“Can't we just melt some of your ice?” Inquired Hotaru.

“This hasn't been an issue before, but I don't know if my ice lasts, it could well be temporary, which means drinking it could have big problems. Plus we'd still need something to keep it in.” Supplied Ami.

“What's next? Am I going to have to explain the importance of skinning it for clothes as well?” Asked Ranma.

This appartnetly did it for Setsuna, for she fell to the ground laughing. “Setsuna, are you all rignht?” Quirred Micheru.

“Yes, just the thought of a teenage boy, have one who turns into a girl on occassion, having to explain the importantace of clothes to a group of teenage girls ckracked me up.” The former answer as she regained control of herself.

“Might as well explain things then,” Ranma muttered under his breath, before returning to a more normal volume. “For clothing we have what we're wearing right now, which isn't going to last long. Other then that we've got our Senshi outfits, which aren't the sort of things I'd want to go hiking in, or we have to find or make something, and buckskin is the easist aviable, beause I've got a rough idea on how to turn a hide into buckskin but no idea on how to make something like cotton. We'll probably also want something to serve as blankets, an a hide does a pretty good job of that.”

“Cotton's a product of the industrial revoltuion, I think they used linen mainly before then.” Added Ami. The others all stared at her. “What? So of the books I read cover that sort of ground.”

“You read books that cover surrival in the stone age?” Asked Haruka.

“No, fiction books that have cover medevil nations industrializing.” Answered Ami.

“Enough talking, those of you who want to learn how to butcher meat, come with me, otherwise gather some firewood.” Stated Ranma, before once again moving off.

[hr]

Rei's abilities to start fires where a blessing, as getting a fire going otherwise would have taken an hour at least.

Dinner had been elekeltic to those used to a standard Japanese diet. Meat was uncommon to them, let alone something like venision, or whatever it was they had that night, even if Usagi did have trouble with eating it because it was such a cute animal. Fruit, in the form of berries was an odd accpanement to the meal for anyone.

And Ranma's prediction about them needing blankets was proved accurate because by the end of the night all the other Senshi were curled up either next to him or someone next to him. Having Makoto and Minako sleeping next to him was nice, but did nothing to actually help him sleep, espically when they both rolled over together and turned him into a sandwhich.

As I said before, this is based off of the Setsuna's Fault/Time Lost thread over on Anime Addventure. The prolouge replaced episode Episode 25000, while this replaces episodes 40259, 133955, 134034 and 134047
 

ThreadWeaver

Beware of Dog. Cat not trustworthy either.
#2
Ahhh... So we have Adam/Eve and Eve and Eve and Eve and Eve and...

Who woulda thunk Genma did something right by training him to live off the land?

Interesting story so far and I look forward to more.

I see two problems though:
-My Sailor Moon is admittedly VERY rusty, but since they appeared in time before the connections to the planets were created, would they still have their magic? You may want to address that, or hand wave it. Whatever.
-The girls, AND Ranma, are unlikely to be familiar with the dangerous creepy-crawlies that inhabit that part of the world/time. Japan: No Problem. Ethiopia, not so much. They've got more venomous snakes than I'd care to shake a 5 meter stick at. And they'd likely come looking for warmth at night... Not to mention the spiders... *shudders* And Lions... and Hyenas looking to scavenge the carcass/gut pile... Something to think about for future segments.

You have a number of typos you may want to correct. And finally, I believe the word you're looking for in the dinner scene is "eclectic" (ay-KLEK-tick).

As a stand-alone story, you're going to need more background, like how Ranma became a Senshi. He did mention "our senshi outfits" in the story...
 
#3
I like the concept - the world needs more fuku fics, anyway. But yeah, you might want to put in a bit more background info. I like the whole survival vibe, as well. I offer a bit of advice, though - you might want to make Usagi seem a bit less dumb. She's an airhead, sure, but you might want to be careful that you don't end up overdoing it. Otherwise, though, I love the idea and look forward to more.
Also, there was a bit of a grammar issue during the line with the gazelles. You might want to check that out.
 
#4
ThreadWeaver said:
Ahhh... So we have Adam/Eve and Eve and Eve and Eve and Eve and...

Who woulda thunk Genma did something right by training him to live off the land?

Interesting story so far and I look forward to more.

I see two problems though:
-My Sailor Moon is admittedly VERY rusty, but since they appeared in time before the connections to the planets were created, would they still have their magic? You may want to address that, or hand wave it. Whatever.
-The girls, AND Ranma, are unlikely to be familiar with the dangerous creepy-crawlies that inhabit that part of the world/time. Japan: No Problem. Ethiopia, not so much. They've got more venomous snakes than I'd care to shake a 5 meter stick at. And they'd likely come looking for warmth at night... Not to mention the spiders... *shudders* And Lions... and Hyenas looking to scavenge the carcass/gut pile... Something to think about for future segments.

You have a number of typos you may want to correct. And finally, I believe the word you're looking for in the dinner scene is "eclectic" (ay-KLEK-tick).

As a stand-alone story, you're going to need more background, like how Ranma became a Senshi. He did mention "our senshi outfits" in the story...
My SM Canon's equally rusty, but the last volumes of the manga reveal that the Senshi get their powers from their Star Seeds/Sailor Crystals somehow, or are at least connected to their powers. Despite traveling back in time the Senshi still posses these, so their fine. There might be a problem if the planets aren't ready to support their Senshi, but the whole thing appear to be a natural process, so I don't think there will be any problems.

Well the plan is for them to de-camp for Greece soon so that shouldn't be too much of a problem.

@moon so bright

I have Lawra's permission to use his/her Night Shift as a background, so if/when I need to address that I'll be pulling from that, if in broad strokes
 
#5
Cool. I take it what they are doing is completely shifting the timeline, and their actions, whatever they may be, will completely shift the entirety of the future/past/what-have-you.
Also, I like the idea of the Night-Shift background for this tale.
 
#6
No, whatever it is that sent them back completely destroyed any point in time prior to their arrival. Pretty much a entirely new timeline comes into being when there thrown back
 

PCHeintz72

The Sentient Fanfic Search Engine mk II
#7
gemmaethanwhitaker said:
No, whatever it is that sent them back completely destroyed any point in time prior to their arrival. Pretty much a entirely new timeline comes into being when there thrown back
You actually would mean future time to their arrival point... if they ad no past time... they would not be on a habitable world at all...
 
#8
I think the past, in this instance, is referring to the past from their perspective. Meaning 'the future which could have been, but no longer is.' I could be wrong, though.
 
#9
PCHeintz72 said:
gemmaethanwhitaker said:
No, whatever it is that sent them back completely destroyed any point in time prior to their arrival. Pretty much a entirely new timeline comes into being when there thrown back
You actually would mean future time to their arrival point... if they ad no past time... they would not be on a habitable world at all...
Are you talking about this bit? "Whatever happened has pretty much destroyed time before now, and I'm not too sure about the past. "

Now that you point it out I notice that I've got a double negative (Or something, I'm not too sure what, but it's like a double negative) going on. The first part of the sentence is supposed to be talking about time after after their current place in the timestream, the second part before. So the first part is saying that the future the Senshi come from is gone, without a doubt. The second is saying that the past from where they are now may be gone, what with all the things pulled out of it, it's going to be iffy, especially with the impact zone being at least ten years long.

And I think I've caught all the spelling errors after double checking things with my spell checker, there's a couple it doesn't like but, that I'm pretty sure are real words
 
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