Dude Looks Rather Mo
@Raa:
Glad to see you post more on this idea and see how you make it take shape, hoping to see how far you make this particular rabbit hole go.
Interesting hypocrisy that both Naru and Motoko are playing there.
Kitsune seems to be playing her usual self, or at least the flirt we know her to be.
Shinobu being aggressive? You go girl!
Couldn't help but LOL at Tsu-chan... aggro women be aggro, RAWR!
Very curious that Suu-chan hasn't jumped in for LULZ (or possible lolionyalapp shenanigans)
More when you can sir.
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some rant that reads like
*whaaaaambulance* "THESE ARE NOT THE LULZ I didn't PAID FOR!!!" *whaaaaambulance* *rend/maim/e-thug*
You have to remember that finding/getting (and maintaining) the inspiration to write and then share the stories online is, more often than not, a thankless and non-lucrative activity.
Raa, among many other writers (including hack wannabes like myself), posts his stuff on here to get some kind of reply, usually hoping for "MOAR" or at least a good reason why certain things feel/read well (or not), and then do the necesary changes to the writing that (usually) maintain the spirit, if not the letter, of the original story idea.
Who is to say that a writer has to stick to a tried and true formula or that they "aren't cutting the mustard as they usually do"; just because the newest thing doesn't tickle the right funny bone or is playing a different game in a sandlot miles from the usual stomping grounds... one should consider that maybe (just maybe) the writer wants to try something new out or is still fleshing out ideas.
Just because a story doesn't click with a reader's sensibilities, it doesn't necessarily mean the shared story/idea is bad... it's just means that said story is not for THAT particular reader's tastes.
TL;DR version:
How about
Moar constructive criticism and sharing of ideas to help this (and or any other story posted by any other writer),
and Less "DIS SUX, IS NOT FUNNEH LIEK *OTHER STORY FROM SAME/OTHER RITER*!!!!1111oneoneoneeleventeen"
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