Evangelion Evangelion Time Loop

MnemoD

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"Shinji."

"Yes, Mana?"

"What are you doing with the gun?" The younger (metaphorically) Ikari looked up from his work cleaning the SIG P220 he'd been issued, even though it went by a different name when it'd been handed to him.

"This is one of those cynical loops. You know, the one where everything is guns, explosions, and womanizing. Kind of like a Bond flick but with less cheesy one liners."

"Oh, right. Is anyone else Awake?" Her question made Shinji pause, turning to the camera feed on his computer.

"If Rei and Asuka aren't, I think I'd like to stay here."

"Why?" Mana moved over to the computer screen, blushing at what she saw. Shinji just grinned.

"Guns, explosions, and womanizing."
 

PCHeintz72

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Hmmm... that implies his relationship to a awakened Mana would not be an impediment even if the others would be...

Wonder if a Misato awakened would be an impediment.
 

MnemoD

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PCHeintz72 said:
Hmmm... that implies his relationship to a awakened Mana would not be an impediment even if the others would be...

Wonder if a Misato awakened would be an impediment.
Considering that was an homage to Mr Cynical's works (Whom I'd been reading again at the time) no one would've been an impediment besides Mana.

Misato glanced from side to side, making sure the coast was clear before looking up to the ceiling of her room and letting out an angry scream-

"DICKS!"

Meanwhile, in the kitchen, Shinji sat with Rei. The dark-haired boy absentmindedly cleaning a Howa Type 89 rifle. Rei looked up from her book, turning her crimson gaze to Shinji, who shrugged.

"I think she just Woke up."
 

WarGiver

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Sorry for quality but its 5am here so this is the best I can do:
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Shinji sighed as 'she' looked down. "At least this time I don't look like Rei again..."

This was another reverse gender loop as far as Shinji could tell, or rather Sakura as her ID postcard stated. After looking at the male on the card and seeing Gai doing his usual pose she shuddered. "This really does not bode well."
She glanced at a window and saw the slight reflection of the actual Sakura.

After getting off the train as usual 'Sakura' looked towards where the first angel usually showed up. And on queue it appeared. Shukaku in all his one tailed glory. "Bad day, Bad loop, ohh Hell Naruto is going to pay, his fault or not."

Growling 'Sakura' raised her hand to use her AT field and it failed to appear. Slight fear shuddered through her body as she knew this loop was going to be painful. This being a weird enough loop, she really did not want to attract fate's attention again by ending it early.

Shortly after a car came to a screeching halt and Gai grabbed her and brought her into the car as it drove off just in time to prevent the car being involved in a sudden crash of sand and wind.

When 'she' saw 'her' 'father' Madara, 'she' knew this was going to end badly, especially with a bedridden 'Sasuke' next to 'her'

Her only thoughts when being loaded into an actual Eva were a Thanks to having an Eva, and re-promising Naruto a beating.
 

WarGiver

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Shinji watched from the car as Misato drove at high speed towards NERV headquarters. He knew his father was just going to screw him over but he was raised to do as he was told. He winced as a 40 foot giant the TVs called a Demon, or something like that, slowly walked through the city obliterating everything in its path. He found it odd as usually the army would have dealt with this thing by now. He knew they had some super weapon, well, everyone knew they had some super weapon; they just refused to admit it.


He listened to Misato's end of her phone call and puzzled by its meaning, "What's taking them so long?" A short pause later she continued, "Inspection? What do you mean inspection? We don't have time!" Shinji could almost hear her teeth grind, "I know it's a part of the agreement, but there is a 40 foot monster destroying Tokyo-3. And that doesn't happen every day!"

Shinji was curious as to what made the woman wince like that but didn't ask. She continued, "Point. Listen ask them to send one or two out for now, just to minimize damages, at least. Units seven and eight will suffice."

There was a long pause before she continued, "What the hell??? Why would he refuse to send them?" Another short pause later, "Fine, I don't care; just get something out to slow it down. And open gate L5 now, I'm taking that way in. And the first one to argue gets to explain the delay to them." She then hung up her cell before speeding up towards an apparent reinforced wall.

Shinji almost screamed as they continued speeding, he knew this crazy woman needed him alive for some reason, and somewhere deep inside he found his danger sense praying they would crash. Perhaps that was what scared him the most. He calmed down when he realized they stopped on some weird elevator as it began a rapid decent. Trying to calm his frayed nerves he started muttering his mantra, "I won't run away, I won't run away, I won't run away, I won't run away."

It could be forgiven for him missing the grin on Misato's face. When the lift stopped he was walked down an isle then when the lights in the room came on he became terrified. He looked to his right, and there was a row of giant multicolored 40 foot tall monsters, he looked to his left, and there was a row of admittedly cute girls with predatory grins, and tight revealing suits. Then he spun around and saw Misato standing well back but reaching for something.

Misato smiled timidly at the scary girls, ordering them when one is out of reach over the phone is one thing, telling them in person is another, "So what do you girls think."

Gulping Shinji slowly looked at the girls realizing why his father called for him; he was sold out by his old man, literally this time. The first girl, a blond practically slid over and looked him over like she might, well, nothing in his mind got that level of visual inspection. After a moment she nodded, "Looks good so far, let's see later if you kept your promise."

One by one the group of girls came over, except for three and all gave similar responses. One of the remaining shook her head and just walked towards one of the giants and rode an elevator up. He then heard his father's voice and spun around, "I trust everything is satisfactory."

Sharply, one of the two remaining ones shot back, "I don't know, doesn't meet my requirements."

Misato replied from behind him, but before he could turn he was splashed with water, "That's why we got this remember."

Looking at his wet clothes he noticed something. Two somethings actually, then he noticed something missing when he checked. He looked at the remaining pair and saw one with a perverted blush, and the one who yelled before wolf whistled, then calling back, "So far so good, but we still need to… run tests…"

Gendo looked down and frowned, he had not planned things to go this way, but somehow the Eva's were produced quicker than planned. Even Seele was quick as lightning in finding the pilots. It astounded him. Worse yet was that he still didn't know what they were up to or who they were. He yelled back down, "Fine, but they can be run later, now do your jobs. First child…"he was cut off as a blond with twin pigtails looked at him sharply. After a brief look of terror he regained his composure, "Usagi take point, Units 00, through 05 will launch."

Shinji-chan never noticed the clips slipped into his hair, nor did he really notice what was happening until he realized she was being loaded into one of the giants, looking up in shock he cried out, "What are you doing."

Misato and another blond woman the same apparent age smiled back, "Getting you ready to pilot unit 03." That was the last thing he saw for a while as they locked him in.

---

Somewhere in the Minato ruins of Tokyo-1 Seele was meeting, however with Gendo absent they had their disguises off, "So,"started Luna, "it finally happened."

Artemis snickered, "Yep the girls finally made the demand and followed through."

Luna sighed, "About time, I was sure if it took longer Setsuna would have had to do something herself."

"Who said she didn't?"

Artemis looked at his future daughter, "I'd rather not know." Artemis sounded definite in that.

Ranma laughed, he was now into middle age, but still looked in his late twenties, "Cheer up Artemis. I am sure it wasn't that bad."

The white cat growled back, "Want your neko-ken back?"

Ranma shook his head, "Shame for Shinji, it's just too bad my little brother takes after pops so much."

Luna smirked a very uncat like smirk, "Most guys dream of that situation."

The pigtailed fighter shook his head, "He was raised listening to my horror stories of the times back in Nerima, and swore he would never do something to get himself in that situation. Shame he trained his stamina so much; that would have been his only out."

Artemis looked confused, "I thought he trained his running away skills."

The reply made him feel stupid, "How do you train to run far, fast, and long without stamina."

Luna nodded, "Not that that will help him now, how do you out run nearly a dozen horny girls piloting 40 foot robots?"

Ranma shook his head, "I tried to tell him hiding is better, but he wouldn't listen."

Luna paused a moment, "I remember you mentioned once that his mantra was "I won't run away?"

Ranma nodded, "Gendo may have taken his wife's name, but he is still a Saotome, and so is his son. So the Saotome final attack is still something he has claim to."

Artemis grinned, "Pity that."

After that they could only share a laugh and go home, after all everyone was happy, well except Tokyo-3 residents, Nerv staff, Shinji, and the Youma but they don't really matter.

---

Seele and Pluto are the only ones awake and have been awake for quite some time, some pranks need the proper amount of prep time after all.
 

PCHeintz72

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Ranma nodded, "Gendo may have taken his wife's name, but he is still a Saotome, and so is his son. So the Saotome final attack is still something he has claim to."
Hmmm... problem...

The anchors cannot under normal circumstances have kids. Thus for that statement to be ture, Shinji and Gendo would either need to be of a different Saotome family, or a different offspring of Nodoka, say a sibling of Ranma's in this timeline.
 

WarGiver

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PCHeintz72 said:
Ranma nodded, "Gendo may have taken his wife's name, but he is still a Saotome, and so is his son. So the Saotome final attack is still something he has claim to."
Hmmm... problem...

The anchors cannot under normal circumstances have kids. Thus for that statement to be ture, Shinji and Gendo would either need to be of a different Saotome family, or a different offspring of Nodoka, say a sibling of Ranma's in this timeline.
True but only Seele were awake as noted. and I implied that Gendo was Genma's brother in this loop. Perhaps I should have made that point clearer. What Seele are really up to here is they had planned to get record of these events and use them against Shinji... Used against the other senshi would effect Shinji too...
 

Lufio

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WarGiver said:
True but only Seele were awake as noted. and I implied that Gendo was Genma's brother in this loop. Perhaps I should have made that point clearer. What Seele are really up to here is they had planned to get record of these events and use them against Shinji... Used against the other senshi would effect Shinji too...
--'{@

Oh. I thought Ranma
Was Shinji's uncle this time
And Gendo's brother.

When you mentioned Ranma training Shinji, Ranma being in this timeline for a while, and Gendo being similar to Genma, I got an entirely different impression of the familial relationship.

I imagined that Ranma and Gendo had been raised by Genma in this timeline. And that Shinji had been dropped off into Ranma's care after Yui "died".
 

WarGiver

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okay the family tree I meant for this was that Genma and Gendo were brothers, as per canon with Ranma he was trained at least until he was ~20 Gendo then started founding Ghern (sp) Shinji was sent to live with Genma as Gendo was unable/unwilling to raise him after the event. Shinji was raised by Genma mostly with a lot of mothering by Nodoka, thus he got little in the way of actual training. (Nodoka was still missing out on Mothering Ranma, and Genma was always of the mind that she would get in the way. Maybe she would have.) Thus reallistically he mostly got some stamina training and the Saotome Final Attack (Run Away)...

And why need I spend two posts on explaining this? Am I that bad a writer that:

Ranma nodded, "Gendo may have taken his wife's name, but he is still a Saotome, and so is his son. So the Saotome final attack is still something he has claim to."

and

Ranma laughed, he was now into middle age, but still looked in his late twenties, “Cheer up Artemis. I am sure it wasn’t that bad.”

Is hard to notice?

Feh I am ranting now... Quick someone post another snipit!
 

PCHeintz72

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WarGiver said:
okay the family tree I meant for this was that Genma and Gendo were brothers, as per canon with Ranma he was trained at least until he was ~20 Gendo then started founding Ghern (sp) Shinji was sent to live with Genma as Gendo was unable/unwilling to raise him after the event. Shinji was raised by Genma mostly with a lot of mothering by Nodoka, thus he got little in the way of actual training. (Nodoka was still missing out on Mothering Ranma, and Genma was always of the mind that she would get in the way. Maybe she would have.) Thus reallistically he mostly got some stamina training and the Saotome Final Attack (Run Away)...

And why need I spend two posts on explaining this? Am I that bad a writer that:

Ranma nodded, "Gendo may have taken his wife's name, but he is still a Saotome, and so is his son. So the Saotome final attack is still something he has claim to."

and

Ranma laughed, he was now into middle age, but still looked in his late twenties, “Cheer up Artemis. I am sure it wasn’t that bad.”

Is hard to notice?

Feh I am ranting now... Quick someone post another snipit!
You are not a bad writer, well, at least not in my opinion, if that means anything.

The issue is while that highlighted statement may have been clear to you and thus you believe that the only correct interpretation, that is *not* really the only correct interpretation that would fit the facts.

Everything in that snippet could still be true, if Gendo was say *Ranma's* brother, not Gendo's. Especially since Ranma supposedly was into middle age within the loop. And under that interpretation, plus the 'his son' bit, and I interpreted that to mean you intended Shinji was *Ranma's* son.
I'm not telling you to change it, merely explaining why I thought it was wrong.
 
The last few loops have been vary entertaining also why are some of the post by some members invisible
 

nixofcyzerra

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WarGiver

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Sorry If I posted this else where else. I thought I posted it somewhere but I cannot find it so I am rewriting it.

>-<

'This was Ranma's fault.' Like all loopers Shinji took solstice in the fact he could blame someone for this. Ryoga was definitely on to something there.

"Your problem isn't so bad." Came from Keel Lorenz. Shinji sighed internally. This was the least of his worries. The comment itself was about the curse he had. It was Ranma's curse. Well literally actually. He turned into a red haired blue eyed girl with cold water.

'Definitely Ranma's doing.' Shinji was mostly certain.

"My daughters, Rei 1, age 19, Rei 2, age 17, and Rei 3, age 16." Keel saw the flat questioning look. One he recieved many times before. "Your mother is their godmother and she loves the name Rei."

Shinji glanced at his father, but Gendo refused to meet his eyes. Clearly his mother was the one who was the pants wearer of the pair.

"Pick one and she shall be your fiancee." Keel offered.

Before either broke eye contact they heard, "I am willing." Neither was sure why it seemed to come from all three.

>-<

Shinji was walking home from school two weeks later. He decided to take a path through Minato ward hoping for a random youma to strike him only to learn that, as expected, the Sailor Senshi were indeed absent from this loop. As he travelled he reflected that Asaka was replacing Shampoo, and was quite miffed, although she was not clear as to why. Then again he never understood her to begin with.

What disturbed him the most was Kaworu was replacing Ukyo. He knew full well that Kaworu was gay, quite openly actually, although he never actually said it. But in this loop the come-ons were worse then ever.

Shaking his head he was wondering if Rei 3 would make a play at being his fiancee again today, seeing the tell tale signs of an AT powered cat-fight in the distance he nodded. Indeed 2 and 3 were at it again. Suddenly a bigger one occured.

"Odd, 1 doesn't usually get involved."

>---<

I wanted to work in:
Rei 1 was the opposite of Kasumi and be an absolute B****
Rei 2 was basically canon Rei 2 only loyal to Shinji more then Gendo for obvious reasons.
Rei 3 was the jealous one and always fought 2 for the right to be the fiancee, though almost always loosing.

I also wrote the Ranma's side of this but given this is a rewrite I can not bring myself to bother. It wasn't good enough anyway.
 

WarGiver

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Asuka smiled. She confirmed that Shinji was not awake. A few loops ago she Shinji and Rei got devices to contact each other within the loop without others knowing it. Best of all she was being shipped to Tokyo 3 early. This just might have been the best loop yet.

The odd thing was that people kept refering to her as the 'Third.' This could have been worse. There was just one thing that worried her. She had a gap in her memory for the past year for the download. If she were and less experienced at looping she would have missed it as it could have been nothing.

>-<

Misato stood looking impassively at Asuka as the brash red-head arrived at the Eva cage. The girl looked at her and Asuka asked. “Why are there two more Evas that look like mine? And WHY ARE THEY TRASHED?”

Her answer came as a siren came over the speakers. “Angel sighted approaching Tokyo 3.”

Misato looked at the Technicians. “Get Asuka 3 into her Eva.” Asaka barely heard the next comment under Misato's breath. “Maybe this one will last longer.”
 

Prince Charon

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The only issue I have with it is that you keep spelling 'Asuka' as 'Asaka'. Otherwise, quite interesting, and one I'd like to see more of.
 

WarGiver

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Shinji, Ranma, Asuka, and Rei were hiding in a rocket. Well more like commandeering the rocket, okay stealing it to be blunt.

Asuka looked around frantically at every point of entry and exit. “Why are we doing this again?”

Rei's hands flew along a keyboard as she typed frantically.

Shinji who was looking over her shoulder replied back, “You are asking this now?”

Asuka asked in a huff, “Can't we use one of your space ships?” She refused to admit she lacked any right now. Not to mention her plans to ruin a certain blond looper's, well, give him a very very bad loop.

Ranma entered the room and tied a fainted Misato to a chair before taking the pilot's seat. “Because for some reason none of us can pull our's out. The ship is secure.”

Rei nodded, “Systems are operational.”

Shinji was the last to strap in, “Problem is still in the Geofront.”

Ranma gripped the controls as the space plane started its unauthorized takeoff. “Next stop the Moon.”

Once they entered space and it was safe to do so Rei looked to Asuka, “Make sure we are still secure.”

“Why me?” Came her 'not' panicked voice.

Shinji replied in exasperation. “I am maintaining external visual and navigation, Rei is handling all systems given that this thing was not flight ready when we took it, Ranma is piloting and Misato is not awake yet.”

Asuka sighed and reluctantly got up to look.

Ranma glanced at Shinji, “You realize that if she finds, that, she will be the first victim.”

Rei answered for him without looking up from her screen, “We would all be victims were that the case. self-destruct would be acceptable in that scenario.”

Asuka stormed into the cockpit “How did you get 01 in here and why isn't my 02?”

Ranma had that answer, “01 sneaked itself in and since there was only enough room for one it broke 02's knees to get it stuck in the cage. The real question is how it got itself to the other side of Tokyo-2 unnoticed AND without a pilot or dummy-plug.”

Misato who took that moment to wake up groaned, “I had the weirdest nightmare.”

The other four looked at each other before Rei replayed the security footage on an overhead display.

-<>-

Genma and Gendo stood next to each other looking at the children and Misato and nodded as Gendo spoke, “As you know we have begun looping some time ago but given the advantage you kids have had we might not have caught up. But now we have learned a technique to close the gap.”

The two “Adults” then performed the fusion dance, and who ever taught them that was going to feel several loops of pain. The result was a horror beyond any reason. Something that even made Tokyo-3 a place where Angel's fear to tread.

They somehow turned into squirrel girl.

Ranma sighed, “I contacted Skuld, and she said we are on our own for this. We cannot even visit the bar.”

Misato cried, really this scored a new number one on her meter for bad loops. The others were not sure where this compared to Hogwarts and Eikan. But it was a bad one still.
 

WarGiver

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Squirrel Girl is from Marvel Comics and can beat anyone, ANYONE, as long as it is off panel. Her special powers are to talk to squrrels. The only person to be beaten by her on panel was Dr. Doom. The horror was Genma Saotome and Gendo Ikari somehow, by using the fusion dance from DBZ, turned into her.

The Angels were smart enough to not attack with her there, and none of the named characters wanted to be near her. Which included Ranma, Shinji, Asuka, Rei, Misato (or so they assume), Skuld, and probably other gods/goddess. Nobody wants to be beaten by a pack of squirrels, and with loopers who tend to be chaotic aligned and Squirrel girl being Lawful Good leaning there is definately going to be a conflict.

btw her hit list includes:
Thanos
Dr. Doom (as meantioned)
Deadpool
Wolverine

I was aiming for disturbing with having the fusion dance between Gendo and Genma. When I thought of using Squirrel Girl the humor of the Angels fearing to tread there was just too much of a joke to not use.
 
Cynical loops wouldn't be James Bond. They'd be Michael Bay! Sorry, is this a necro? I've been drinking a little.

-Jack
 

PCHeintz72

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Sigh... stupid forum upgraded edit box toasted my post content THREE TIMES. 4th attempt using quick edit instead.

IWhoWouldLoveHerForever said:
But Michael Bay's Evangelion already exists.
Actually, I had hopes for that live action CGI Evangelion project from a number of years back bear fruit.

Instead, it quietly was forgotten about.

EDIT: That worked... This bug makes this forum all but unusable to me.
 

Innortal

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Sighing, Shinji looked towards the constantly unanswering Heavens, as he appeared once again at the train stop.

“Oh come on,” he muttered. “Why always here? Can’t I appear at Misato’s? Maybe with Mom?

“How about in my comfortable bed?” he asked again.

He paused a bit, blinking as an idea formed … an idea that made him smile a smile that might have even drawn a reaction from his father.

“We have a plan,” he muttered to himself, as he secured his bag.

(This is where I must put a divider in the story, right here.)

“GET IN!” yelled Misato, as she slid her car beside the Third Child.

“Zzzzzzzzz,” droned Shinji, snoring lightly.

Eyes wide in shock, Misato reached out, yanking him into the car as she sped away.

(This is where I must put a divider in the story, right here.)

“YOU FELL ASLEEP DURING THAT!?” Misato yelled as Shinji yawned.

“I was tired,” he muttered, voice distorted by the yawn. “What did you want me to do?”

“Flee for your life!”

Shinji just shrugged.

“You could have been killed!” she offered.

Shinji shrugged again. “Most people would prefer to go in their sleep.”

“… But why were you—OH WAKE BACK UP!”

(This is where I must put a divider in the story, right here.)

“So,” Ritsuko said as she looked at her frazzled friend, “this is him…

“Is he asleep standing up?” she asked, as Shinji snored.

Misato nodded. “He’s been awake maybe all of ten minutes since I picked him up.”

“… Why?” Ritsuko asked.

“How should I know!?” Misato yelled. “You’re the doctor! Wasn’t this in his file!?”

Ritsuko opened her mouth to respond and then clicked it shut. “Honestly, I haven’t had time to go over it, what with everything that’s been happing then and now.”

Shaking her head and deciding she needed to both check the records and have the Third tested for narcolepsy, she motioned for Misato to drag the sleeping boy forward.

(This is where I must put a divider in the story, right here.)

“Deep breathes!” Ritsuko commanded, wiping LCL off her face, as she slapped Shinji’s back.

They had entered the storage house for Evangelion Unit 01.

Of course, the lights were out, and as always, there were no guard rails around the platform to keep people from falling off either into the LCL storage liquid that surrounded the machine or fall to their death if it had been drained.

So of course, the lights come up … and instead of the awe of seeing the giant face of the Evangelion, they discovered Misato had ‘accidentally—that was her claim and she was sticking to it—walked Shinji off the platform.

“I’m so sorry!” Misato stated, holding him steady so he didn’t fall back into the fluids from Ritsuko’s slaps … or his own ability to sleep anywhere.

After one last coughing fit, Shinji yawned. “It is okay, nothing bad happened,” he waved off.

“Are you awake now?” Ritsuko asked.

Shinji blinked. “Who are you and what is that?” he asked, pointing behind her.

“… I am Doctor Ritsuko Akagi, and that is Evangelio—OH WAKE UP!” she yelled, as Shinji’s eyes closed and he started to snore once more.
 

PCHeintz72

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Putting him in an eva would be pointless unless they could constantly stimulate his nervous system to keep him awake.

Of course, that is from their perspective, assuming he is not faking
 
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