Evangelion Fruity Loops (Regular)

MnemoD

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Fruity Loops

Disclaimer: I don't really think these things matter, if someone wants to sue you, they're going to be a tit and do it. Still, I don't own Evangelion, or anything -else- I reference in this fanwankery. So suck my fat d-

Synopsis: Another cliche Impact makes a loop trip. It's awful and you shouldn't read it, but you're going to anyway. And you'll like it. 'cause I said so. Harems, insanity, yaoi, yuri, snowballing, motorboating, golfcarting, just put all the labels on this bitch. You've been warned.

Prologue: Captain's Log

Shinji wasn't sure what had transpired. One moment he was looking up at a naked Rei trying to talk him out of destroying the human race, and having a subsequent epiphany. And then he was sitting on a train (for once not in the overcast shadows of evening) in the middle of the afternoon with the letter that had started it all in his hands.

Shinji was not often puzzled. Flummoxed, bamboozled, shanghai'd, and confused perhaps; but never puzzled. So it was with a sour face he read the letter once again. ... Was it all a dream? He asked himself, turning the picture of Misato that was so familiar over and reading the note on the back. It... it can't be. Am I insane? He paused, Don't answer that, me.

Oh, this loop was off to a good start.
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And so, Shinji had put off the thoughts until things had happened exactly as he remembered, with the only minor details being that he'd been more prepared for when Sachiel stomped down near him, he'd swear up and down Rei's image had -smiled- at him, and Misato inexplicably showed up at the last minute to save his ass. By the time Misato had spoken, verbatim, what he vaguely remembered he was ready to scream.

Thankfully when he did, it was easily masked as his reaction to the N2 mine dropping. And so, Shinji realized, without realizing, that he was going to have to live through Hell -again-... Unless he changed some things.

Misato wasn't sure how to take the kid's suddenly grim expression while she sped down to the elevator into the Geofront.
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"Correct." Shinji looked up from Eva 01's quiet stare, unsure of how to even react to his father now. Shinji knew what was driving his father, but he still didn't understand -why- the man had done things the way he had. So here he was at a crossroads, unable to play the simpering and shocked child because he -wasn't- yet he had the vaguest inkling that fighting now would only get him killed. And Shinji wasn't quite ready to test if this was all some freak fluke or dream with his life, he still had -some- sanity left... Maybe.

"Why should I pilot it?" Yeah, that's a good way to start. The youth mused, Small changes. When Misato finished gawking at Ritsuko and the faux-blonde scientist started gawking at him, he tried to hold his expression on his errant father. "What reason should I do this for?" He pleaded, hoping for a glimpse past that stoic mask.

"Because if you don't, everyone will die." Well, damn, there went that hope.
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So, inevitably, he'd found himself sitting at the controls of Unit 01, with that same comforting sensation at his back even though now he understood what it was. Mother... Shinji lamented, What should I do? He asked, almost praying for an answer from the soul within the machine. When he got no answer, he wasn't surprised. He was surprised, however, that his sync ratio was bafflingly higher than when he'd last tested, before the end had come.

Fresh from Kaworu's death, Shinji remembered barely being able to climb above 40%, yet here he was sitting pretty at 62%.Is... that what my first numbers were like? Shinji couldn't remember, he couldn't remember -any- of that first battle. He could already feel panic rising in his chest when the launch initiated. Can I win?

And then the faces of all those whom he'd fought for, that had died and suffered because of him and his father. I will win... He thought to himself, as determination shot through his veins like a wildfire in a dry forest.

So when he did win, struggling with all of his heartache fueling his might, a smile broke out unto his face that was mirrored by many down in the NERV base.

Even Gendo, though no one else would know it.
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So things had changed, just with a little application of will and a dose of anger. Shinji wasn't sure anymore if what he had seen was a dream or if it had been real, but he wasn't going to allow that horrible ending to occur.

Some things didn't seem able to change, though, when even though it was days earlier than before, Misato wouldn't allow him to live alone. He couldn't help it when he started crying, seeing her standing outside those elevator doors with blood all over her torso and his lips warming from just the very -ghost- of that moment. It'd been the most awkward boner of his life.

But he still hugged the black-haired woman and sobbed into her chest when she told him "This is your new home now." And he felt almost shamefully happy when she hugged him back.

Even if it was the most awkward boner of his life.

Chapter 1: Rising Sun

Since he had the week to do whatever he pleased with while his school records processed and his things came to Misato's apartment, Shinji had decided to sit down and make a somewhat quizzical timetable the first day. After all, his memory wouldn't last forever and having some notes to look over when things became muddled would probably save his hide. He'd ended up rambling a bit in his writings but had gotten what he felt were the important things down by the time he'd started on lunch for himself. With Misato busy at NERV, Pen-Pen was the only one around to judge his (admittedly crazy) mutterings.

The rest of that night was spent being teased by Misato and trying to explain why he'd spent the day cooped up in the apartment. "Misato?" He asked after dinner, settling his dark blue eyes on his guardian's lazing form in front of the television. When she sat up, he desperately tried to ignore the way her body -bounced- due to her preference in casual clothing.

"Yeah, Shinji? What's up?" The dark-haired woman asked in return, turning down the volume on her show. Shinji couldn't help the fondness in his chest for the beautiful woman who was so many things to him that it was positively freudian.

"Can I go see Rei tommorrow?"
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He'd immediately regretted using Rei's given name when Misato had lit him up with teasing and proclaimations that he'd best have honorable intentions after the bluenette. He'd gone to bed flushed and embarrassed, but also glad to have the woman in the good mood he'd known before... Kaji had died. He mentally finished, frowning deeply.

Still, now wasn't the time to think about it, sitting outside Rei's hospital room waiting for Doctor Akagi to clear her for visiting. Shinji had a plan, and everything would go according to the Plan. This was the first step, taking more time with Ayanami and trying to prevent losing her in the gambit to kill that ring of light angel.

When Ritsuko came out and nodded to Shinji, ushering him inside with a "She can see you now." He was overjoyed, half expecting to have been blocked off by either the doctor or his father's will. This was a huge step, in his opinion, letting him have time with Rei before they'd met in the embarrassing way the dream... other world... thing had. After all, Shinji didn't want to get slapped by the girl again, let alone molest her the way he had.

The hospital room was typical for NERV, sedate and (in his opinion) lifeless. Just four walls, and the medical necessities to keep a patient alive if not well. And there in the bed was Rei, sitting up just enough where he could see that her hands, one bandaged, were in her lap. Those red eyes of her's glowed even in the unnatural lighting of the hospital room, let alone when they bored into his own blue and he almost paused in the doorway.

Because she was smiling. That same, soft little smile he'd seen only a few times, the first being when they'd beaten the fifth angel together.

"Ikari-kun."
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"Why let Rei see the Third Child, Gendo?" Fuyutsuki asked, moving a pawn forward to threaten the younger man's Queen while Gendo uncrossed his arms, surveying his elder's move.

"Because, a pawn cannot take the Queen." Gendo replied, throwing in just enough of that latent smarm to feel pleased with himself when Fuyutsuki balked at Gendo taking the pawn with his Queen.

Only for the older man to threaten his King with a Knight, which the Queen could have prevented. "Dumb bastard." Fuyutsuki grinned.
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"Ayana-" He was surprised by her finger touching his lips, silencing him effectively before she gestured for him to sit upon the bed near her. When he did, and she leaned in quietly and engulfed him in a hug, Shinji felt his heart begin to race. Wh-what? He thought quietly to himself, trying to understand what was going on when the bluenette released him from her sudden affection and began to speak in that soft voice he could pick out of a panicking crowd.

"I am glad to see you," Rei's voice lilted in the stillness of the hospital room, "I had feared you would not remember." Nothing is going right. Shinji lamented, I thought I was the one who was supposed to be glad to see her and trying to convince her that bad things would happen, here she is giving me a hug and making me -speechless-. And he was, too. What could he say to the girl? This blue-haired, red-eyed girl whom was some kind of amalgam of Science and Angel, who shared genes with him, and yet made him feel like a schoolgirl with a crush.

"You're surprised." She stated the obvious, and Shinji felt suitably chastised by it even though he -knew- it was just how Rei acted when she was comfortable enough with someone. This was -Rei-, and not -Asuka-... Though just thinking of the redhead's name put him in a dour mood. Rei was here, but Asuka was still in Germany. He wouldn't see her for at least a month and a half without trying to get in contact with her. Focus on the girl in front of you, Shinji, you pervert! His conscious reminded him, making him blush with shame.

"I-yeah, I am. I kind of... came in here thinking I'd have to get to know you. And yet, you know me. So I must know you." That doesn't sound crazy at all! Augh, am I sure I'm not insane? From the way he was mentally berating -himself-, he wasn't sure the question wasn't valid. But then a soft sound caught his attention, and his gaze fell on Rei again. Was she... giggling?

"Forgive me," She was back to that soft lilt, where anyone else would have mistaken it for bald faced indifference, he saw the amusement in her eyes, the so slight a quirk of the lips that changed a thin line to a nearly unnoticeable curve. "You must have been in deep anguish over it."

Okay, it's official, I'm crazy. Rei just made fun of me. He thought to himself, absolutely flabbergasted.
 

KageX

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#2
Oh dear this is going to go off the rails in a spectacular fashion, isn't it?

........Can I roast marshmallows on the screaming remains of the canon plot?
 

Jimbobob5536

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#3
Rei making fun of you. Can't tell if that's rock bottom or awesome.
 

MnemoD

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#4
In the case of Shinji, it means both. Because rock bottom means the only way to go is up.

Relatively, not that that's a penis joke.

Or is it.
 

MnemoD

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#5
RE: Fruity Loops (CLOSED)

CLOSED FOR TEH GOOD OF ALL
 

Jimbobob5536

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#6
Now Asuka's 'awake'? Excellent.

Rei feels quite trololol at this point. :)
 

MnemoD

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Jimbobob5536 said:
Now Asuka's 'awake'? Excellent.

Rei feels quite trololol at this point. :)
The three children are going to be the only ones awake this loop. From here on out that may change.
 

MnemoD

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To say that things hadn't gone well at the party would've been a lie on the level of a capital offense. Misato had made the mistake of teasing Rei and Shinji about their perceived relationship, which had led to Rei "responding in the manner in which I would derive the most amusement."

Which meant that Rei had mildly defended Shinji and requested that Misato "not dress like a skank in front of her man." When Shinji was right next to her, while Misato had been drinking a beer. The subsequent spit take had only heightened the fires of Rei's particularly spiteful (Shinji was starting to note) sense of humor.

The rest of the night started to blur from that point. Sure, Shinji remembered something about Pen-Pen, a deck of cards, a bottle of single cask whiskey, and a katana; while Shinji wasn't sure when the katana had gotten involved, he distinctly remembered Rei waving it around after the whiskey was half gone. Plus, the cut in the table was still there.

Thankfully, everyone seemed to still have all their extremities when they showed up for breakfast that morning, and the teenager was only mildly confused when Rei came out of his bedroom wearing one of his school shirts. He didn't have the heart to tell her that he didn't miss Misato coming out of his room too, except earlier as he was waking up on the couch. Okay, maybe I'm getting a bit out of control too. He admitted privately, enjoying having watched his guardian sneak out of his room with a bright blush. I don't care whether she thinks something happened or not, seeing Misato embarrassed is funny.

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Of course, the fun had to end at some point, with Shinji returning to class mindful of the fact Touji wouldn't be there until tommorrow, when he'd discovered if he'd still managed to hurt his sister. Still, hearing the droning of the teacher and having some relative anonymity at least gave him and Rei time to talk during the lunch periods. There'd been rumors flying that the two of them were going out and with Rei giving most everyone else the cold shoulder, it fell on Shinji to try to field questions. Though it seems kind of pointless. He mused to himself, watching some of the girls gossip, No matter how much I say we're just friends no one believes me. I mean, who could be -this- focused on something as stupid as a relationship?

Shinji had the vaguest inkling that he'd just insulted himself.

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MnemoD

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Chapter 2: Oww! My Wounds!

"Hey, Shinji, you've got mail on your NERV account." Shinji looked up from preparing dinner, with a shrug from Misato he moved to grab his laptop out of his bedroom.

Just next door, Rei received a similar alert, though it was because she was already on her laptop. Opening the mail program and getting through it's security measures, she raised a brow. Is Asuka not listed as R-02AS?

Shinji's face was bright red, staring at the folder of pictures that had been sent by Asuka. The second to last one was of the nude redhead with two pieces of placard "strategically positioned." The one over her breasts had "I'm sorry" while the one in more intimate regions said "To your mom too." Now, this confused Shinji, melting his arousal away in a moment of utter confusion until he opened the last picture, when it grew to frustration.

"Misato!"

"Yeah, Shinji?"

"Can you translate this Deutsche?"

"THAT WHORE!" Shinji blinked, turning his gaze to the next door apartment. Had that been Rei?

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BloodRevan

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IWhoWouldLoveHerForever said:
"THAT WHORE!" Shinji blinked, turning his gaze to the next door apartment. Had that been Rei?
lol Not according to Scenario, Rei-chan?
 

MnemoD

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Shinji learned something new the day Shamshel came. Apparently, one could not fuck with causality without causality fucking back. Touji returned that next day, but he did so with crutches. As Shinji had been briefed (once again with a fist, something that rather upset the blue eyed teen,) Touji had managed to rescue Sakura before the shelter they retreated to had managed to cave in partially on the jock's lower half.

Touji had apparently been lucky in that he'd walk again, but he'd probably have recurrences of pain while everything knit itself back together with the help of medicine and surgeries, paid for by NERV's dime.

Shinji had time to think (after his jaw had stopped swelling) that maybe it'd also prevent the boy from getting chosen to pilot the angel-corrupted Unit, but he wasn't quite yet ready to hold out -that- particular hope. Plus, better the devil you know compared to something even worse happening.

That was as far as he got before Rei found him and informed him that they'd been called, with the bluenette giving Touji a look that only Shinji recognized as "You done goofed."

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"Unit-01 has deployed Progressive Knife!"

"Shinji! What're you doing, use the rifle like we trained you for!"

"Misato. Just trust me. That rifle ain't gonna do anything."

Even if it was way faster and less dangerous than the first time he'd fought the stupid freudian angel, he still felt emotionally drained by the end of it. The guilt of failing compounded with the guilt of having -directly- hurt Touji this time was more than he could bare to deal with at this point. Even with Rei's somewhat... odd way of supporting him and Asuka sending an email here and there, it was just too much...

It took him halfway to Kensuke's mountain tent to realize he'd just -run away at the same damn point in time as the last go through.- The subsequent swear word was loud enough that it spooked the animals nearby.

The less that was said of how irritated the blue-eyed boy was by the time he got back to Misato's the better. Needless to say, the katana made a reappearance. Shinji wasn't sure where the katana had come from, but he had a feeling he'd better keep it.
 

Prince Charon

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#12
I'm interested.
 

MnemoD

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#14
Pineapple Incident or Chekhov's Katana? You decide.

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"Hey, Kaji."

"Yeah, Asuka?"

"What's the ETA on Unit-02 being finished anyway? I thought they just had to finish mounting the armor plates on the thing." The redhead looked up from her laptop, past the pictures of Shinji threatening Misato with a katana while the Major cowered with a dart gun of some kind in hand. At first she'd thought Rei had been the one taking the pictures, but later pictures of the Third Child menacing the bluenette as well implied Pen-Pen had been the one to take the pictures.

"It should be done here within the next week, and after final checks, we'll be on our way to Japan by the end of the month." The spy remarked, waving a dismissive hand as he flipped through a channel. The germanic girl shook her head, wondering why the man would be remotely interested in sitting about on a beautiful day like this. Taking a glance and seeing the last picture in the folder, one of Shinji aiming a slash at the camera, she shrugged and shut the device.

"I'm going out for a jog."
 

Prince Charon

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#15
I like it.
 

MnemoD

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#16
Salute, folks.

I've been dealing with trying to find a job and depression, so it'll be a little bit until I get around to a new snippet for this story or Strongest Man. Figured people would like to know I haven't -dropped- this story, I just haven't had the time or desire to write more.

Peace out.
 

GhostElder

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Thanks for the update, hope you have good luck with the Job hunt. And well you aren't alone on the depression front.
 

MnemoD

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#18
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ih_gvJPSd7w&feature=share&list=PLbYoBNCDzZb_wWcsCpBFLSm9TYP017w6o&index=34

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"She was a beautiful woman, standing there leaning on the bar. It was a rainy evening, I'd come in from the cold seeking succor from a cold drink. And instead, I found myself in the pit of fiery Hell that was her life. That was the day I died."

"Things were different back then, and not just in the usual way. After all, looking someone in the eyes and telling them you love them? That's the portal to another frame of life, isn't it? The paintings we lay all over the gallery of our minds. Memories are fragile things."


"Shinji, what the hell are you doing?"

"Nothing!"

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See you, Space Cowboy.
 

MnemoD

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Things change, that's really all I can figure out about this new world. Shinji mused to himself, tapping a pencil against the desk while the teacher went off topic about the applications of standard physics. Of all the examples that filtered through his mind, Rei and Asuka's newfound... -weirdness- were at the forefront. After all, his memories of his past life were -completely- different in comparison to their new personalities. Or at least, that's what Shinji thought of it all as. After all, just because we live through a horrible situation doesn't make them go -this- crazy, does it? Ignoring his own rather prolonged lapse with reality, more out of courtesy in regards to the fact he was -still- somewhat insane from the ordeal.

The katana fiasco had kind of proven that, though thankfully Misato had been willing to believe he'd just had a lapse of reality from rapidly developing (or more truthfully, long-standing) PTSD. Glancing over to Rei, whom affected a dutiful student because she was pausing every so often in her typing to glance up at the teacher. It'd work better if I couldn't see that she's sending an email to someone, though. Shinji thought to himself.

Shinji should've just been glad he couldn't read what she was typing about.

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The next few days had passed in relative silence; Thankfully, in Shinji's opinion. Between testing at NERV and spending off time with Rei and Misato, he'd decided to try and squeeze in a meeting with his father. After all, of all the things that he could try and change, having even a minute amount of knowledge of his father could change the very world itself. So here he was, standing outside Gendo Ikari's office inside the Geofront while trying desperately to thrash down the feelings of rage and betrayal that filled him just standing near that unhallowed place.

But he had to try, if nothing else. For Rei, Asuka, Misato... for everyone, really.
 

MnemoD

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#20
Doing a little more writing, updated the post before this with what I have so far. I'm gonna try and finish out this chapter (And loop) within this little session of writing and have it done before tomorrow so we can jump ship from the relatively lackluster traditional Peggy Sue style story.

UPDATE: Ch 2, while short, is in the Story Only thread under Previews. I'll likely go back later and flesh it out a bit more to add some length and depth, but it's there.
 

MnemoD

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#21
So, having had my net turned off BUT gotten a call about a phone interview later, I've spent most of today writing and editing fruity loops. I decided to consolidate everything up to the new loop as the Prologue, with us instead on Chapter 1 for length.

That said, I've got some new content for all of you that I'll be posting tommorrow when I can borrow net on my computer. Posting mobile at the moment, hopefully this'll bring some interest to this story again.

I'd love some critiques and thoughts about how things are going so far. I hope people like this story, since this is actually the most I've ever written to actually see light.
 

MnemoD

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#22
And, the story thread has been updated, the first page now contains everything you guys have seen so far, consolidated into the Prologue. The second post now contains all new content. I hope you guys enjoy the madness as it develops.
 

MnemoD

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#23
OI FUCKAHS, I UPDATED THE STORY JUST A WEE BIT TO LET YOU KNOW I'M NOT GIVING UP YET. Gonna go get a shower then I'll try and write a little more if I don't have a block and decide to play DAHK SAHLZ 2 instead.
 

MnemoD

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#24
You muda da-s may not care, but I updated a little bit more. I'm going to be doing a little writing and try to finish out this chapter so I can post the first three to fanfiction.net in hopes that I will not be a failure as a writer of even fanwank.
 

MnemoD

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#25
For some unknown reason, I can't delete MY OWN THREAD. HOW STRANGE. YOU THINK THINGS LIKE THAT WOULDN'T HAPPEN. But oh well. The story thread remains for now, but

LISTEN UP, THE STORY HAS BEEN POSTED TO FANFICTION.NET AT https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10344595/1/Fruity-Loops IF YOU WANT TO READ THE FULL STORY WHEN I UPDATE YOU CAN GO THERE TO DO SO. THIS THREAD WILL CONTAIN SNIPPETS AND OMAKES STILL.

With that said, everyone can go read it off Fanfiction to see the first three completed chapters and two short omakes. I just started work on Side-Chapter 1 which will lead into Chapter 4, so you can expect that within the week provided my muse keeps on me.

A snippet of the Side Chapter for you folks.

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Side-Chapter 1: Shinjuku Shinji in...
The Trouble With Women

"Wait, why are we in Shinjuku?" Shinji asked, glancing around at his surroundings... and then looking at himself. "And why did I let you shove me into this get up? I mean, white and black?" Really, he felt kind of silly, but looking over at Rei and Asuka in similarly colored get ups. Asuka scoffed, waving a black-gloved hand and tossing her hair back with the other.

"Really, Shinji, you were born here. You should know what part of town this is. I mean, it's the most famous part of Tokyo around the world. They rebuilt the damn place two times!" Shinji leaned away from Asuka's slowly decreasing distance from him. Meanwhile, Rei stood nearby with a smile on her face. "We're here because you've been too stressed and we're tired of being ignored again. So, we're gonna spend the day around the fun districts! See all the crazy dressed up girls with the cool hair colors and all. So we got dressed up too. We might even hit a bar, who knows? Our NERV badges might get us a few drinks if we don't act stupid."

Shinji felt this was a bad plan, but knew he was already here and in the girl's clutches anyway. With a sigh and a shrug, he turned his gaze to Rei. The bluenette simply smiled more brightly at him before pointing down the road. "Come, let us get moving. Otherwise, we will be here listening to the two of you bitch all day." Rei walked off with a click-clack of her heels while the two other pilots stood there in stupified silence.

"I'm still not used to her having a smart mouth."

"... Me either."
 
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