Good Idea, Shame About The Execution

MastaofBitches

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#1
So I wanted to see if there were any fanfics you guys have had the pleasure(?) of reading that had some really interesting ideas, yet in some way failed to really execute them in a way that was satisfying for you?
 

AoMythology

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#2
There are a lot. Some of them, I wrote myself. :p

I would give links, but I can't think of anything in particular. My ffnet profile is https://m.fanfiction.net/u/2189534/AoMythology

A lot of the favorites I chose early on are like that.
 

MastaofBitches

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#3
Any fun standouts? Something that looked good on paper then fell flat on its face in the first paragraph?
 

AoMythology

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#4
Any fun standouts? Something that looked good on paper then fell flat on its face in the first paragraph?
Anything that fell flat in the first paragraph, I have likely erased from my memory. :p

If I find or remember anything, I'll let you know.

Edit: anything that starts with a mob beating up and/or torturing Naruto applies.
 
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MastaofBitches

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#5
That sounds more like a bad premise executed even worse.
 

AoMythology

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That sounds more like a bad premise executed even worse.
True, but some have novel ideas (at least according to what I had seen in the summary/-ies)... which I never got to see because I closed the tab.
 

MastaofBitches

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#7
The only time a mob beating up Naruto is acceptable is when that mob is made up of children because children are assholes.
 

AoMythology

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#8
The only time a mob beating up Naruto is acceptable is when that mob is made up of children because children are assholes.
Hence, "I closed the tab".
 

MastaofBitches

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#9
So speaking of Naruto fics, Pride Thief is an interesting take on Naruto ending up in Shield Hero, only to almost immediately trip over its own feet into a pile of cow manure. Naruto not being one of the four summoned heroes is good, him being a thief trying to get food/money for the orphanage that's been taking care of him since he appeared there is better.

Naruto choosing to become Naofumi's slave, because he knew what the Princess was going to do, and did nothing about? Not cool. He also takes the revelation that the matron in charge of the Orphanage is one of the Queen's spies much better than a Pre-Graduation Naruto reasonably should have.

That said, the Goblin versions of Malty and Melty are pretty funny at least.
 

seitora

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#10
A ponyfic, Flurry Heart Equestria's Greatest Monster. It got a little bit of rave when the first chapter came out. I saw it, and I wasn't very impressed with it. It had a great premise, but reading the actual character actions throughout the first chapter, I figured it wouldn't go anywhere. The second chapter (now the third, titled 'Confrontations') came out a little later. I looked at it to see how if it turned out a trainwreck like I was expecting, and oh my god, it was a trainwreck. The chapter was probably the single greatest info-dump I've ever seen in my life. But there is this choice line I have in a so-bad-it's-good manner.

Adamantium is silver in color, but using my magic, I turned the armor black as night
I don't think I could ever write a fic so tongue-in-cheek that I would be writing lines like that .
 

MastaofBitches

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#11
That line honestly makes me think it's supposed to be a parody.
 

LORD_ARM

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#12
Perception is basically about Deku who has a quirk unknown to him that allows him to see invisible people. When he goes to UA he meets his fellow classmate Tooru who has an invisibility quirk. Things get complicated for him when he finds out that the best way for her to use her Quirk is to be in the nude. The idea for this fanfic was interesting but I don't think the author did a good job with it. There's a lot of things that happened in the store I didn't really like for example Deku getting in a lot of trouble because he can see Tooru naked or all the convenient things in the story. For example, Deku being really good at drawing so he can draw Tooru portrait and they were able to make clothes that work with her quirk using Tooru conveniently long hair. Which destroys one of the most interesting conflicts of the story.
 

MastaofBitches

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#13
make clothes that work with her quirk using Tooru conveniently long hair. Which destroys one of the most interesting conflicts of the story.
Isn't cannon that they have clothing that works with Quirks like that? You know, like Mirio and Mt. Lady? I don't think she was ever actually naked in the series.
 

seitora

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#14
Blessings on this Strange, Broken World

Konosuba. In which some of Aqua's careless words turn Kazuma into a female upon his reincarnation into Belzerg. It could have been interesting...then it kind of just falls apart, really fast, with Kazuma becoming a nervous wreck and never getting out of it. Also, there's insanely large line breaks that I'm not sure if it's the author or AO3 breaking it and making it even more unreadable.
 

MastaofBitches

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#15
Just the premise alone sounds horrible, to be honest.
 
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