Digimon GOSPEL
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Okay, I finally got around to spell checking this again:
Chapter Listing:
Book Three:
Should be 'To Stare Hopelessness in the Face'.
I'm not sure this is incorrect, per se, but it would probably flow better as:
Gogglehead Was Chaos, Wasn't He?
or
I Thought Gogglehead Was Chaos?
or
Wasn't Gogglehead Chaos?
Your choice, though.
Through and Through.
Book Four:
Nothing wrong with this one, but don't you usually use 'One' instead of '1'?
Could be:
Cocky Little Girl
or
Cocky Little Daddy's Girl
In.
You haven't used this title before, so you don't need 'again'.
Not a mistake, I don't think Doom works here, but I'm not sure what else to use. Enemy, maybe? I don't know the context, so I'm just guessing, though. Maybe it makes better sense in context.
Again, not a mistake, but 'What Do You Want to Protect?' might work better.
No mistke, but beside the 'World in Ruins' thing, you've generally used 'Two'.
Book Five:
No need for 'It'.
Would usually be 'the', but given the cosmology of Gospel, I'm not sure.
Might work better without the 'Fighting'.
This might be correct in context, or it might be 'Are In This Flame'. I honestly don't know.
Might want to remove the 'and' and use a semi-colon.
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I'll get Six and Seven later.
Also, because it deserves repeating, you're awesome at naming Chapters, Daneel.
Chapter Listing:
Book Three:
Chapter Four: Digimon Battle Arena, Day Two, Part One û How Does It Feel, To Stare At Hopelessness on the Face?
I Thought Gogglehead Was Chaos, WasnÆt He?
Gogglehead Was Chaos, Wasn't He?
or
I Thought Gogglehead Was Chaos?
or
Wasn't Gogglehead Chaos?
Your choice, though.
A Gentleman True and Through
Book Four:
World in Ruins 1
I Refuse to Be Defeated by Some Cocky DaddyÆs Little Girl
Cocky Little Girl
or
Cocky Little Daddy's Girl
I Believe I Understand Why We Became Friends on the First Place
You CanÆt Save Them All, Takato (Again)
The Doom of Humanity is Humanity Itself
What Are the Things You Want to Protect?
World in Ruins 2
Book Five:
Everything I Do, I Do It for Them
Nothing in this Universe Can Stop Me Now
If We Fall, We Fall Fighting Together
My Feelings Are This Flame
I Came Back Just For You and Because Of You
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I'll get Six and Seven later.
Also, because it deserves repeating, you're awesome at naming Chapters, Daneel.
Chapter Six:
Isn't needed between 'World' and 'and'.
I'm not sure if you'd count this as a grammatical mistake or a part of the Title, but in case it's the former it shouldn't be plural.
Book Seven:
No mistakes.
Sorry for taking so long. I'll do 'Technique' by way of apology.
Technique:
Comma after yes.
For this use of the word 'detail' is fine; no need for a plural.
In.
Should be 'an intellect'.
Should be a comma.
Should be a comma.
Should either be 'this kind of Technique' or 'these kinds of techniques'.
Cannot.
Means doesn't make sense. Try 'Way'.
What.
Prologue: The World, and Alice, after the War
Chapter Nine: Inevitable Tragedy, Perverse Comedies & Unforgiving Paradoxes, Part One û Please Spare Me the Troubles and Die Quickly
Book Seven:
No mistakes.
Sorry for taking so long. I'll do 'Technique' by way of apology.
Technique:
Yes theyÆre flashy.
This definition lacks details,
What is the difference, then, between a Technique and any other event on Reality,
the Thread of Destiny is not an automaton. It possesses intellect:
To use a Technique that obviously breaks the natural behavior of Reality; a Supernal needs to ôconvinceö the Thread of Destiny before the algorithm is actually executed.
Humans cannot use Techniques because they lack Agendas, the ôencodersö to send Reality Code to the Supernal Structures; as well as the physical and mental capacity to sustain the connection with the Structures necessary for the input and execution of Reality Code.
They are an unexpected consequence of the construction of HEMINA_URDR, which explains why only Archangels can craft and use this kind of Techniques.
This refers to entities which have acquired Supernal properties by virtue of their historical significance, yet cannon be considered to be Supernals as they lack the capacity to act on their own.
The second means to classify Techniques is simpler and not very useful from a technical point of view.
Even after billions of years, we still know nothing about what Agendas are, what they do or even how they look like (if they have an appearance at all),
Daneel Rush said:
Damn, "Death & Beyond." Hadn't thought of that story in years. The original, type-written version, is hidden somewhere in my parents' place, half a world away. In my PC I just have the version you saw on FF.net (translated and partially modified), the character notes and the list of Prima Incantati.
The problem I had with the "Digimon" version was that it was getting too...outlandish. While magic was the core of the original, too, it was not nearly as flashy an over-the-top as what I was making for this "all audiences" version. I felt the story was losing the mystery and creepiness I liked about the original.
I didn't mind losing the gore. I really don't know what was in my mind when I wrote some of the deaths in the original.
Thinking back, maybe Divi-Dead did inspire "Death & Beyond." It was the very first eroge I played, at a very young age. It's still one of my favorites, and Haruka was probably my first 2D crush...
...my parents never really supervised what I did in front of my computer. That's good for me, but I cannot help but feel a bit disappointed now.
Anyway.
? admit, I've thought about rewriting it. Not just translating, editing and adding little things, but actually rewriting it. It's been over a decade, so I would like to think I could do a better job now. Besides, I never really finished the Last Period in the original. I got over my depression, so I stopped typing and just scribbled the outline of the end in one of my notebooks. Unlike GOSPEL, which is really a monster of a tale, D&B would actually be manageable. I'll keep it in mind.
Heck, I've even considered writing "True Magic" again (my Yu-Gi-Oh! fanfic).
Right now, I'm really happy with Genkyouien. Which is weird, because even I can admit it's not a great story. But it's a happy story, and I guess that's what I want to write right now. Besides, like all my stories, it's inevitably becoming larger than itself. It will never be as dark as D&B or as...encompassing as GOSPEL, but I am confident it will be pretty epic.
Finally, if you don't mind, I will use this topic to spoil GOSPEL. It is not the conclusion it deserves, but it at least deserves one. It would be sad if the story I came up with dies with my neurons. I have pages and pages of notes, so I can assure you it won't be a half-hearted thing (I even started a wiki, remember?). I can present here the whole timeline of events in the GOSPEL universe, from the very beginning of the Universe (I'm talking Big-Bang here) to the end of Book 7, and maybe even further. Of course, I can answer any and all questions and present all the info about the characters and the setting. We can even talk about D&B if you wish.
P.S. ranmatoushin, send me a PM with your e-mail address and I can send you the "True Stories" I wrote. I'm in a good mood today, I guess.
The problem I had with the "Digimon" version was that it was getting too...outlandish. While magic was the core of the original, too, it was not nearly as flashy an over-the-top as what I was making for this "all audiences" version. I felt the story was losing the mystery and creepiness I liked about the original.
I didn't mind losing the gore. I really don't know what was in my mind when I wrote some of the deaths in the original.
Thinking back, maybe Divi-Dead did inspire "Death & Beyond." It was the very first eroge I played, at a very young age. It's still one of my favorites, and Haruka was probably my first 2D crush...
...my parents never really supervised what I did in front of my computer. That's good for me, but I cannot help but feel a bit disappointed now.
Anyway.
? admit, I've thought about rewriting it. Not just translating, editing and adding little things, but actually rewriting it. It's been over a decade, so I would like to think I could do a better job now. Besides, I never really finished the Last Period in the original. I got over my depression, so I stopped typing and just scribbled the outline of the end in one of my notebooks. Unlike GOSPEL, which is really a monster of a tale, D&B would actually be manageable. I'll keep it in mind.
Heck, I've even considered writing "True Magic" again (my Yu-Gi-Oh! fanfic).
Right now, I'm really happy with Genkyouien. Which is weird, because even I can admit it's not a great story. But it's a happy story, and I guess that's what I want to write right now. Besides, like all my stories, it's inevitably becoming larger than itself. It will never be as dark as D&B or as...encompassing as GOSPEL, but I am confident it will be pretty epic.
Finally, if you don't mind, I will use this topic to spoil GOSPEL. It is not the conclusion it deserves, but it at least deserves one. It would be sad if the story I came up with dies with my neurons. I have pages and pages of notes, so I can assure you it won't be a half-hearted thing (I even started a wiki, remember?). I can present here the whole timeline of events in the GOSPEL universe, from the very beginning of the Universe (I'm talking Big-Bang here) to the end of Book 7, and maybe even further. Of course, I can answer any and all questions and present all the info about the characters and the setting. We can even talk about D&B if you wish.
P.S. ranmatoushin, send me a PM with your e-mail address and I can send you the "True Stories" I wrote. I'm in a good mood today, I guess.
I was rereading D&B, and I started to wonder, what is the relationship between a magic user and his Prima Incantati? Is it like a manifestation of who you are inside, or something like that? Where does it come from? Do you have to be a magic user to have one (I assume yes)? If so, how much magic do you need to get one? Anything above zero?
About the sensations that go with it, where do they come from? Do they depend on your personality? Your element(s)? Both?
Do PI's change, or are they the same for life? How much can you tell about a person from hearing their PI?
Also, about Magical Power in D&B, what determines it? Is it decided at birth? Can you get more of it? What's an average amount of Magical Power? How big is that related to Takato? Is magical power determined by nature, nurture, or something else? Or is there no one reason?
Finally, can you show us the character notes and the list of Prima Incantati?
Daneel Rush said:
You might already know this, but I finished the chapter listing.
As for your questions pertaining D&B, they'll have to wait until I have my laptop with me again.
As for your questions pertaining D&B, they'll have to wait until I have my laptop with me again.
True Stories:
This is the list of the written, as well as the planned, installments of True Stories, until the day the GOSPEL Project was dropped.
ôOf SuzieÆs Love & Futureö
ôOf TakakoÆs Knowledge & Realityö
ôOf ArisuÆs Research Concerning DCö
ôOf the Case of Hatsumura Satsukiö
ôOf TakakoÆs Final Damnationö
ôOf ArisuÆs Unusual School Tripö
ôOf a Very Jolly Loli Christmasö
ôOf TakatoÆs New Year Troubleö
ôOf TakakoÆs Disciple, Minami Kotokoö
ôOf a Bittersweet Valentineö
ôOf How Suzie Became a Goddessö
ôOf Lilith & Sophia, Chapter Oneö
ôOf Sophia, Lilith, Shekinah, & a Seal, Part Oneö
ôOf Sophia, Lilith, Shekinah, & a Seal, Part Twoö
ôOf Project GOSPELö
ôOf Takako & a Hot Springs Murder Caseö
ôOf Kitagawa Kenta & Misakiö
ôOf the Case of Natalia Andropovaö
ôOf Takako & the Sariel Case, Part Oneö
ôOf Lilith & Sophia, Chapter Twoö
ôOf Takako & the Sariel Case, Part Twoö
ôOf the Case of Inagami Tsuyuriö
ôOf Nonaka Arisu & Yumemiya Lilliaö
ôOf a Day in the Life of Shinobuö
ôOf a Day in the Life of Everyone but Shinobuö
ôOf the Other Case of Natalia Andropovaö
ôOf Sally Reaney & the Spear of Destiny, Part Oneö
ôOf Helen & Cassandra of Troyö
ôOf TakatoÆs & SuzieÆs First & Only Dateö
ôOf Sally Reaney & the Spear of Destiny, Part Twoö
ôOf the Case of His Holiness, Pope Paul VIIö
ôOf Nonaka Arisu & Dariya Mihailovaö
ôOf the Case of Miyazaki Amiö
ôOf Lilith & Micael, Part Oneö
ôOf Yet Another Case of Natalia Andropovaö
"Of Lilith & Micael, Part Two"
"Of Nonaka Arisu & the Digital Overgod"
ôOf TakakoÆs Knowledge & Realityö
ôOf ArisuÆs Research Concerning DCö
ôOf the Case of Hatsumura Satsukiö
ôOf TakakoÆs Final Damnationö
ôOf ArisuÆs Unusual School Tripö
ôOf a Very Jolly Loli Christmasö
ôOf TakatoÆs New Year Troubleö
ôOf TakakoÆs Disciple, Minami Kotokoö
ôOf a Bittersweet Valentineö
ôOf How Suzie Became a Goddessö
ôOf Lilith & Sophia, Chapter Oneö
ôOf Sophia, Lilith, Shekinah, & a Seal, Part Oneö
ôOf Sophia, Lilith, Shekinah, & a Seal, Part Twoö
ôOf Project GOSPELö
ôOf Takako & a Hot Springs Murder Caseö
ôOf Kitagawa Kenta & Misakiö
ôOf the Case of Natalia Andropovaö
ôOf Takako & the Sariel Case, Part Oneö
ôOf Lilith & Sophia, Chapter Twoö
ôOf Takako & the Sariel Case, Part Twoö
ôOf the Case of Inagami Tsuyuriö
ôOf Nonaka Arisu & Yumemiya Lilliaö
ôOf a Day in the Life of Shinobuö
ôOf a Day in the Life of Everyone but Shinobuö
ôOf the Other Case of Natalia Andropovaö
ôOf Sally Reaney & the Spear of Destiny, Part Oneö
ôOf Helen & Cassandra of Troyö
ôOf TakatoÆs & SuzieÆs First & Only Dateö
ôOf Sally Reaney & the Spear of Destiny, Part Twoö
ôOf the Case of His Holiness, Pope Paul VIIö
ôOf Nonaka Arisu & Dariya Mihailovaö
ôOf the Case of Miyazaki Amiö
ôOf Lilith & Micael, Part Oneö
ôOf Yet Another Case of Natalia Andropovaö
"Of Lilith & Micael, Part Two"
"Of Nonaka Arisu & the Digital Overgod"
Gathering of the Exalted:
Chapter Three: Fatuous Dreams of Child-like Happiness û Scarred Queen
Besides that, nothing else (unless you count the &'s).
Pandemonium Puppet Show:
No problems.
So, just today I notice that my Death & Beyond files are incomplete. That really sucks, because it means I'd have to take a 20-hour flight to retrieve them, and I'm not planning on doing that any time soon.
I can post the Prima Incantati, though. I'm pretty sure I'm missing one or two.
In any case, the only interesting ones were Takato's and Alice's.
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Alice: ôLet my breath be the whispers of our promised eternity; and my embrace the darkness that consumes your ephemeral existenceàö
Alice (True Form): ôOur limited time, so precious, so cherished! Let us turn it into our orgiastic eternity!ö
ôAsukaö: ôShall my life become a song, the last love song of this doomed planetàö
Ayla: ôMine is the flame that consumes the world, and the spirit that gives birth to the radiant utopia!ö
Joe: ôThereÆs no heartbeat. Through my dull veins flows no blood. My soul is dead.ö
Ken: ôShadows swallow reality, hiding truths better left unknownàö
Koushiro: ôThe planet sings, loves and dreams, yet our deaf ears shall never know the most glorious of truthsàö
Matt: ôThe children of eight million gods cry for their freedom. The fist of the tyrant crushes all hope.ö
Mina: ôLet my love become your sun, and my words the spring that sates your thirstàö
Misaki: ôWatch the birds fly and rejoice with their songs! They sing of hope, they sing of love!ö
Rei: ôAngels sing of a world without sorrow, and the souls of the worthy join their ecstatic revelryàö
Rika: ôTitans pound the drums of war! The world trembles on the beat of its end!ö
Ruki: ôMay the songs of the fairies soothe your eternal soul, and reveal the wonders of a world clad in colorsàö
Ryo: ôKnowing no hesitation, the supreme blade splits both earth and sky.ö
Sora: ôShall my blood be spilled for the mystery of salvationààö
Sora (original): ôMy life is a song, of love, light and hope.ö
Tai: ôMy soul burns and cries for the souls of the forgotten, I am the voice of those who shall speak no moreàö
Takato: ôShall the voice of eternity come as freezing breath, and the illusion of life fall prey to eternal darknessàö
Takato (Final Form): ôMy time is unlimited, so I shall treasure this, our limited time.ö
Talley: ôWithin the labyrinth of strife and despair, hope is but the whim of a puppeteer godàö
Yamaki: ôLike the calm breeze that never ceases to blow and the fierce storm with its relentless fury, so shall I become boundless and infinite.ö
I can post the Prima Incantati, though. I'm pretty sure I'm missing one or two.
In any case, the only interesting ones were Takato's and Alice's.
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Alice: ôLet my breath be the whispers of our promised eternity; and my embrace the darkness that consumes your ephemeral existenceàö
Alice (True Form): ôOur limited time, so precious, so cherished! Let us turn it into our orgiastic eternity!ö
ôAsukaö: ôShall my life become a song, the last love song of this doomed planetàö
Ayla: ôMine is the flame that consumes the world, and the spirit that gives birth to the radiant utopia!ö
Joe: ôThereÆs no heartbeat. Through my dull veins flows no blood. My soul is dead.ö
Ken: ôShadows swallow reality, hiding truths better left unknownàö
Koushiro: ôThe planet sings, loves and dreams, yet our deaf ears shall never know the most glorious of truthsàö
Matt: ôThe children of eight million gods cry for their freedom. The fist of the tyrant crushes all hope.ö
Mina: ôLet my love become your sun, and my words the spring that sates your thirstàö
Misaki: ôWatch the birds fly and rejoice with their songs! They sing of hope, they sing of love!ö
Rei: ôAngels sing of a world without sorrow, and the souls of the worthy join their ecstatic revelryàö
Rika: ôTitans pound the drums of war! The world trembles on the beat of its end!ö
Ruki: ôMay the songs of the fairies soothe your eternal soul, and reveal the wonders of a world clad in colorsàö
Ryo: ôKnowing no hesitation, the supreme blade splits both earth and sky.ö
Sora: ôShall my blood be spilled for the mystery of salvationààö
Sora (original): ôMy life is a song, of love, light and hope.ö
Tai: ôMy soul burns and cries for the souls of the forgotten, I am the voice of those who shall speak no moreàö
Takato: ôShall the voice of eternity come as freezing breath, and the illusion of life fall prey to eternal darknessàö
Takato (Final Form): ôMy time is unlimited, so I shall treasure this, our limited time.ö
Talley: ôWithin the labyrinth of strife and despair, hope is but the whim of a puppeteer godàö
Yamaki: ôLike the calm breeze that never ceases to blow and the fierce storm with its relentless fury, so shall I become boundless and infinite.ö
Timeline 02 and Timeline 03 are up. The discuss the First Holy War, the years leading up to the Original SIn, and the Second Holy War. Also, Life, the Universe, and Everything.
Random Stuff Issue 11 is up.
In this issue, we learn about Hikari and Pauline, the effects of the Holy War, Satan's and Moloch's former names, Takato's army, Terriermon, the X-antibody, and what it takes to become an Aeternal.
In this issue, we learn about Hikari and Pauline, the effects of the Holy War, Satan's and Moloch's former names, Takato's army, Terriermon, the X-antibody, and what it takes to become an Aeternal.
Digivice is up.
I can't help but notice that the Shekinah Ruby Omnivice isn't there, though. Is it getting it's own section, or something?
I can't help but notice that the Shekinah Ruby Omnivice isn't there, though. Is it getting it's own section, or something?
Ryuugi said:
Digivice is up.
I can't help but notice that the Shekinah Ruby Omnivice isn't there, though. Is it getting it's own section, or something?
I can't help but notice that the Shekinah Ruby Omnivice isn't there, though. Is it getting it's own section, or something?
Something I just remembered to ask, and this has little to nothing to do with gospel itself, but:
Where do the characters DC and BlackTerriermon come from?
I see him in a lot of fics, and his characterization is coherent enough throughout that I'm certain that they have an origin other then Digidestined of Courage's author notes.
Is their some prototypical DC and BlackTerriermon somewhere?
I ask this here because you're the only author to have used him I can actually get a hold of.
Where do the characters DC and BlackTerriermon come from?
I see him in a lot of fics, and his characterization is coherent enough throughout that I'm certain that they have an origin other then Digidestined of Courage's author notes.
Is their some prototypical DC and BlackTerriermon somewhere?
I ask this here because you're the only author to have used him I can actually get a hold of.
Aarik said:
Something I just remembered to ask, and this has little to nothing to do with gospel itself, but:
Where do the characters DC and BlackTerriermon come from?
I see him in a lot of fics, and his characterization is coherent enough throughout that I'm certain that they have an origin other then Digidestined of Courage's author notes.
Is their some prototypical DC and BlackTerriermon somewhere?
I ask this here because you're the only author to have used him I can actually get a hold of.
Where do the characters DC and BlackTerriermon come from?
I see him in a lot of fics, and his characterization is coherent enough throughout that I'm certain that they have an origin other then Digidestined of Courage's author notes.
Is their some prototypical DC and BlackTerriermon somewhere?
I ask this here because you're the only author to have used him I can actually get a hold of.
I should make clear, of course, that the OC 'DC' is in no way meant to resemble the fanfiction author in either appearance or behavior.
I see him around a lot.
He was in your GOSPEL stuff, he was in the original writing of Viral State, he was in To Earn Your Trust, which was kinda short, and made a bunch of appearance's in a number of fics I can't recall off the top of my head.
He probably got to pass that profile around a bit.
Another thing, something I only see now that I think back on it, do you have something against Daisuke/Davis?
His role in any of your fics that feature the 02 cast can usually be renamed to 'Side character number #3' and still be completely accurate.
Or is he just a character you have trouble writing for?
He was in your GOSPEL stuff, he was in the original writing of Viral State, he was in To Earn Your Trust, which was kinda short, and made a bunch of appearance's in a number of fics I can't recall off the top of my head.
He probably got to pass that profile around a bit.
Another thing, something I only see now that I think back on it, do you have something against Daisuke/Davis?
His role in any of your fics that feature the 02 cast can usually be renamed to 'Side character number #3' and still be completely accurate.
Or is he just a character you have trouble writing for?