Akamatsuverse Great Todaisei Keitaro Ch 1

Hawk

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#1
GTK - Great Todaisei Keitaro

Summary: When Keitaro gets kicked out of his home, he's got nowhere to go, but hope that granma Hina will be willing to put him up at her inn. When he discovers what she's done with the place, he's delighted! But what will the girls of Hinata Sou think of having Great Todaisei Keitaro, the second largest pervert in the world, as their live-in manager?

ffnet Summary: Great Todaisei Keitaro arrives at the Hinata Sou and is deeeeelighted that granny Hina turned it into a girls dorm. The girls are less then pleased with their new landlord however...


*** Random drivel from the seriously demented ***

I was minding my own business, reading Onegai Teacher doujins as inspiration for a OT lemon I've been pondering for a while, when foxy_kitten took it upon herself to disturb my creative process with a MSN conversation. Having just read LH: Evil Edition, she complained that the Keitaro in my fics tends to be too fucking nice and thus requested that I write something where Keitaro actually shows a bit of backbone.

Quite a lot of backbone, as a matter of fact.

I believe the exact wording of the request was, 'I want a Keitaro that makes your Le Mat look like a whipped tender-hearted pussy.'.

Quite a tall order, seeing as how Le Mat is a child-murdering sociopathic torterous psychopatic manipulative asshole who wouldn't balk at doing the nastiest deeds imaginable for either fun or profit.

I had a little brainstorming session with myself and my demented muses and reached the conclusion that such extreme acts are best left to the professionals, like Le Mat.

But the notion of giving Keitaro balls of iron and a spine of steel, did have some appeal to me and I started thinking about how to go about giving them to him. I didn't have a clear idea of how to go about that, but that hasn't stopped me before, so I started writing on the fic in media res, when he's already got the balls of steel.

Five paragraphs into the story, it came to me from out of nowhere.

'After all, there wasn't a girl by woman born who could resist Great Todaisei Keitaro.'

I had written Great Teacher Keitaro instead of Great Todaisei Keitaro, but as I looked at that one line, it didn't sit quite right with me. Then another flash of brilliance struck me and it became Great Student Keitaro, which just looked plain wrong. Two seconds later, it became Great Todaisei Keitaro and all was well with the world.

As the astute reader might have correctly assumed by now, this means that what you're about to read, is a GTO/Love Hina crossover. The GTO-parts are relatively minor, Onizuka & Co only have brief cameos. But the influence of Mr GTO serves as an excu... Hrm! Explanation, yeah, explanation ( :) ), for why Keitaro is so fucking different from the anime/manga.

*** Enjoy the mayhem about to grace your screens, I know I will ***


Chapter One:

"Gainway!" Keitaro hollered and smirked to himself as a group of girls had to leap out of the way as he drove up the stairs leading to Hinata Sou. The loud howl of his bikes engine made it doubtful wether they had actually heard him or not, but he didn't care much. They had gotten out of the way in time, so at least his bike hadn't been dented or soiled with their blood. He whooped in joy as the bike cleared the last of the stairs, flying a couple of meters before it landed.

"Huh? This it? Looks smaller then I remember." Keitaro sighed, as he violently pulled his motorcycle to a stop in front of the building, showering the building with dust and gravel from the ground. He revved the turbo-charged engine of his heavily customized Honda Shadow a couple of times, before he turned the engine off and dismounted the orgy of shining crome'n black leather.

He tilted his head and smiled to himself as he heard angry shrieks comming from down the stairs. Those girls defenetively hadn't appriciated having to dive out of the way, judging from the sound of things.

Perhaps that hadn't been the best of ways to introduce himself, he mused.

Ah, no matter. He'd win them over soon enough with his immense charm and gorgeous looks. After all, there wasn't a girl by woman born who could resist Great Todaisei Keitaro.

He wasn't a student of Tokyo University yet, of course, but that was surely only a matter of time. He was certain to pass the test this time.

Aniki had lots of good ideas regarding how to acomplish this feat and Keitaro couldn't help but to be impressed by the mans sheer genius. Since studying to pass was so freakishly hard and was only a huge waste of time that could be better spent having fun, he wondered why he hadn't thought of cheating on the test before. A simple and effective answer, certain to get him admitted and acomplishing his life-long goal of entering Tokyo University.

Once he was there, he was sure to meet up with the promised girl from his past. No doubt she'd be cuter then hell by now!

And if she wasn't and instead some ugly oversized cow of a girl, then his status as a Todai student would no doubt make it a piece of cake to get a couple of hot chicks to cater to his every need in her stead. Promises were all well and good, but if the promised girl wasn't a looker, he'd dump her quicker then hell!

"Vile miscreant! Hoodlum! Foul hell-spawn!" an angry girl shouted as she came running up the stairs, skidding to a partial halt in a shower of gravel as she yanked out a bokken in mid-slide. Before she'd come to a complete stop, she set off towards him with her wooden sword darting out in front of her.

"Woopsie." Keitaro exclaimed as he dodged out of the way and extended a leg into her path. The girl gasped as the unexpected evasion and the leg tripping her, launching her forward in an unfavorable position. He stepped towards her and was about to catch her before she ruined her fair skin by skidding on the ground, but the girl surprised him.

She twisted around and vaulted in the air, landing on her feet facing him, sliding backwards as her momentum was too great to be so easily halted. He blinked in surprise and just barely had time to evade her again as she shot off towards him as if she had been blasted out of a cannon.

He cursed in mid-evasion as her sword lashed out towards him and he was forced to enter a bridge to avoid getting his ribs crushed by her sword.

"Hm. You're good." Keitaro commented, only the top of his head and his sneaker-clad feet touching the ground. He pushed off with his head and resumed a standing position, as the girl skidded and near-well instantly darted off towards him again before comming to a complete stop. "And cute." he added as he took a moment to really take note of his assailant. The red hakama and white gi wasn't all that flattening on her and she had quite a ways to go in the chest-developing area, but her face was rather appealing.

Besides, given how fast, agile, dexterious and skilled she was, she probably had a well-toned set of legs on her, most probably complimented by a firm shapely little ass, both of which he'd really like to get his hands on.

"What? Henious pervert!" she screamed at him, her face having gained a significant blush at his unexpected flattery. He pushed the bokken out of the way, then darted forward and to the side, letting her harmlessly pass him by, slapping her rump as the two of them shot past each other.

"Great ass, too!" he approved, flexing his hand with a wide grin on his lips as he contemplated what he had felt and tried to imagine what she looked like underneath those seriously uncool pants. "But that outfit just has to go, it should be a criminal act to hide a masterpiece like that underneath such concealing clothes." he added, which caused the girl to stumble and actually stop her assault for a few seconds, before her expression turned utterly, fully and completely furious.

"AAAAAAARGH! Die, autrocious molester!" she howled and came at him with a flurry of assaults, that Keitaro was hard pressed to avoid. His hands and forearms started to sting as he couldn't avoid all her attacks, some he had to deflect or parry.

"Chill! Chill, babe. I'm a forgiving man, I'll date ya." Keitaro implored her as he was pressed backwards by her relentless attacks. "I'm easy too! If you wanna mess around on the first date, I'm all for it!"

"AS IF!!!!!" the girl shrieked and lunged at him, Keitaro's eyes widening as he spotted her misstake in overextending herself in such a reckless attack. He twisted his body around the bokken and wrapped his arms around her arms and body, pinning her down.

"You're cute when you're angry, y'know that?" he asked, before sealing his lips to hers. He hastily pulled back as she opened her mouth, correctly guessing that despite his manliness, she wasn't about to involve toungues, but rather attempt to bite him. "Woha, easy girl." he said with a satisfied grin, holding on tight as she struggled to get out of his powerful bear-hug.

"My... My... My first kiss! You stole it! You MUST die!" the girl snapped at him and her head shot forward, her teeth bared in an attempt to rip his throat out.

+Klonk+

Keitaro flung his head forward too, their foreheads crashing together.

"Ow!" the girl whimpered in pain, then Keitaro kissed her again and pulled back before she could bite him.

"Yeah!" he cheered. "Sweet!"

She tried to bite him once again, but another head-butt halted her attempt, this time causing her to fade into unconciousness in his arms.

Keitaro shook his head to clear it, silently thanking Aniki for all those fights which had served to raise his endurance and all those motorcycle crashes for toughening him up even further. It took a lot more then a couple of light blows to his head to knock him out these days!

"Now, let's see what you're hiding underneath those clothes..." Keitaro mumbled to himself as he lowered the girl to the ground and pulled her gi open. "Huh, chest bindings, eh?" he muttered and reached out to pull them off, when a voice halted him in his tracks.

"Whatcha doin'?" it asked him and Keitaro looked up, comming face to face with a tanned blonde girly face just half an inch away from his face. He pulled back a bit and observed the tanned foreign girl standing next to him, bent over forward to observe him from up close.

"Run off and play, little girl. You're too young to interest me." he told her dismissively and returned his attention to Motoko.

"Whatcha doin'?" the girl repeated.

"She's hiding away her body underneath all these unflattering clothes, I thought I'd correct that and strip her naked." Keitaro absently informed the girl.

"She does that a lot." the kid informed him. "But she'll be really mad at you when she wakes up."

"Shit happens." Keitaro retorted.

"Naru doesn't look all that happy about it either." she added and nodded at something behind him.

"What now?" Keitaro groaned and looked back over his shoulder, spotting a tall cute brunette standing in a wide-legged stance with a blazing battle aura surrounding her as she cracked her knuckles in a threatening manner. "Oh." he exclaimed and hastily stood up, making warding gestures with his hands and arms. "Uh like chill, hot stuff. I'll get to you in a minute."

"Yoooouuuuuuuuuuu PERVERT!" the girl screamed, then launched herself at him, her right hand going back in preparation for a powerful swing.

"Why doesn't anybody listen to me?" Keitaro asked the heavens, before stepping out of the way, grabbing the girls wrist and spinning her two laps around himself, before he let go and launched her towards the main entrance of the Hinata Sou, where she crashed right through the door in a shower of splinters. "Granny, I'm here!" Keitaro called towards the building, before rubbing his hands together eagerly, as he returned his attention to the unconcious girl on the ground.

"Hm, you're kinda fun." the blonde kid commented with a wide grin. "I think I'll play with you too!" she announced and crouched down.

"Sorry kid, I don't usually 'play' with little girls. Grow a larger set of boobs and wait a couple of years, then I'll 'play' with you all you'd like." Keitaro responded, then had to enter a bridge again as the kid ignored him and leapt at him, passing through the air where his head had previously been in a perfect jump kick.

"What is this? An inn for demented female Martial Artists of all ages?" Keitaro mumbled to himself as the kid landed and instantly leapt up, twisted and spun around in the air, comming at him with a flying roundhouse as he got back into a standing position. He ducked underneath her kick, then had to throw himself out of the way as she spun around in the air, trying to slam her left heel down on top of his head.

She landed daintily on her left foot, kicked off with her right and cart-wheeled towards him. He stepped aside, then ducked as she lashed out with a kick in his direction as she passed him by. She stopped herself in a hand-stand and pushed off, launching herself towards him with both feet aimed at his face.

He just barely managed to twist himself out of the way, grabbing the girl in mid-flight. He twisted the struggling kid around and threw her over his left shoulder, flipped her short skirt up and then slapped her panty-clad ass with a moderately powerful blow. She cried out at the unexpected pain and grunted as he put her down on the ground, her teeth slamming together as her downwards motion was suddenly halted.

"There's more where that came from, so be a good little girl and run along now." he ordered her, as she looked up at him with her eyes opened wide.

"Onii-san is a meanie!" she sobbed, then run off towards the inn.

"All these interuptions are giving me a head-ache..." he muttered and prepared to redirect his attention to the unconcious girl again, when he spotted movement out of the corner of his eyes. He sighed and turned around to see what he'd have to go up against now, only to spot a little girl standing next to an older hottie. "And what do you two want?" he asked, only for the little girl to run after the crying foreigner with a worried expression on her face.

"Who're you?" the remaining girl asked.

"Me? Glad you asked. I'm the Great Todaisei Keitaro!" Keitaro announced and slapped his right hand against his puffed-out chest. "The coolest and hottest man in the region!" he added in case she hadn't heard of him before or somehow failed to realize that she was in the presence of greatness.

A surprising amount of girls somehow failed to see his obvious sterling qualities, he mentally grumbled to himself.

"What are you doing with Motoko?" the girl asked him.

"She's all covered up in those ugly concealing clothes. I was going to correct that!" he proudly replied.

"You want to see a girl naked, is that it?" she inquired.

"Hell, yeah!" Keitaro agreed.

"Well, if you'll take her inside, I'll take a bath with you in the hot spring. Will that be okay?" she asked and Keitaro looked her up and down. She was a looker, that was for sure. She was a bit older then the unconcious Motoko-person she seemed to be worried about. Her breasts were impressive, her hips looked delicious and she seemed to have no problems in getting naked with him.

A girl of excellent taste!

"Hell, yeah!" Keitaro approved and bent down, plucking the unconcious girl off the ground. "Lead the way, hot stuff!"

"Come along then." she said uncaringly and headed inside the in, stopping to help the girl he'd thrown through the door onto her feet and over to the couch, where she slumped into a crumpled heap, panting and groaning in pain. Keitaro dropped off the unconcious girl in her lap and turned to the interesting one. "It's over here." she said and led him over to the hot springs, where the both of them got undressed and entered the baths, neither of the two bringing a towel.

"I'm Konno Mitsune, but everybody calls me Kitsune." the girl introduced herself as they sat down and relaxed in the hot water.

"Urashima Keitaro, but you can call me Kei-chan." Keitaro responded and the girl opened her squinting eyes a bit to really observe him.

"Urashima? You're related to Haruka and Hina?" she asked with a faintly surprised note in her voice.

"Yep, aunt and grandmother, respectively. Haruka being the aunt, obviously." Keitaro replied with a wide grin.

"Well then... Pleased to meet you, Mr Todaisei..." Kitsune drawled, raising her arms over her head and causing her breasts to rise up a bit, nearly causing her nipples to rise above the water.

"And I'm pleased to meet you too..." Keitaro added, his gaze captivated by the girls bobbing breasts.
 
#2
:blink: YOW. *throws on leather jacket, a pair of Cheap Sunglasses, and starts blasting ZZ Top* Bad to the Bone indeed. While Shinji Ikari, the Wrist-Slitting, Perpetually Crying God of Emo is a candidate in much more urgent need of a spine/testicle implant than Keitaro, this story still has a whole heaping helping of promise in it. ZE PERVERTED ZOMBIE DEMANDS MORE!
 

Israfel

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#3
While Shinji Ikari, the Wrist-Slitting, Perpetually Crying God of Emo...
This is a bit off topic that but I find it ironic that despite this the only one of the children to ever attempt suicide was Asuka, and Shinji's got plenty of balls, if you can threaten Gendo Ikari with the utter destruction of his entire organization through the utilization of a machine that he's spent the last decade and several billion dollars building AND that is powered by the soul of his 'dead' wife who he loved more than life itself than if that isn't balls of steel than I don't know what is.
God, you people shouldn't get me started on Eva, I get WAY too into it. :unsure: :p
 

SimmyC

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#4
Hehehe. Talk about 'evil' Keitaro here! Though not entirely original since a lot of writers venture into evilness, of all the evil Keitaros stories, I think this one is the best! I'm also glad that Keitaro didn't take advantage of Motoko. While you could argue she might have deserved it early on, given that this Keitaro can obviously take care of her, glad it didn't get to that point! Also, funny how Kitsune seems to immediately takes a liking to him. Another great story in the works here!
 
#5
Well, Keitaro doesn't really seem full-fledged evil here. He told Su she was "too young to interest (him)". If he was really evil he probably would've tried to jump both her and Shinobu as well. So obviously he has at least some standards.

And Israfel, yes, you get into NGE too much.
 

Israfel

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#6
While evil!Keitaro fics are not that common there are more of them than you would think you just have to know where to look, "The Other Me" by Sci-fi Raptor is one of the most notable ones that come to mind. And about the NGE thing even I think I know WAY too much about that show, god if I was asked to I could have probably done my college thesis paper on several different aspects of Eva, take your pick off anything out of that show and I could give a full paper about it. Who's the best girl for Shinji? No problem. Lay down Shinji, Asuka, Rei, Misato, Gendo, and Ritsuko's entire modus operandi? You betcha. Give out the whole meanings behind all the judeo-christian symbolism in the show? Piece of cake. As you can see I've had way too much time to think about it, way too many friends that are willing to indulge my NGE arguments, and way too little of a life to give me something better to do. :unsure: :p ;)
 
#7
SimmyC said:
I'm also glad that Keitaro didn't take advantage of Motoko. While you could argue she might have deserved it early on, given that this Keitaro can obviously take care of her, glad it didn't get to that point!
*reads post again and suddenly takes note of this*

Anyone who'd argue in favor of a fifteen year old (at the time of LH's beginning) getting sexually molested - no matter what the reason - deserves only to be lined up against a wall and shot.
 

SimmyC

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#8
Sorry. I didn't mean it in that way. NO ONE deserves to be sexually molested. What I meant was, Motoko being punished...period. After all, what she does to Keitaro (same with Naru) isn't exactly forgivable either. Though sexual molestation is beyond extreme IMO.
 

Alzrius

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#9
Dark Knight Gafgar said:
Anyone who'd argue in favor of a fifteen year old (at the time of LH's beginning) getting sexually molested - no matter what the reason - deserves only to be lined up against a wall and shot.
In real life, yes. But this isn't real life, this is art (using the word very, very broadly). Given that this is a work of fiction, moral constraints shouldn't be an imposition. Whatever helps to get the story across is good - there have been plenty of great works that featured characters doing such things, but no one begrudges the author who wrote the characters.
 

Israfel

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#10
In real life, yes. But this isn't real life, this is art (using the word very, very broadly). Given that this is a work of fiction, moral constraints shouldn't be an imposition. Whatever helps to get the story across is good - there have been plenty of great works that featured characters doing such things, but no one begrudges the author who wrote the characters.
How many 'moral constraints' you put in a character all depends on what kind of character you're trying to make and it shouldn't even apply to the author becuase these are fictional characters first of all and second of all just because someone writes about something doesn't mean they believe in it. In one of my stories the main character murders another, does that mean I'm a homicidal maniac? No (though many people would argue that point so really that whole debate is still up in the air). People write their characters to do what they do to help try and make their point, to help people understand what they're trying to say in this story. I've always been told one of the biggest rules when writing is "don't tell me, show me". If you want to prove that you're character is a heartless asassin you don't just tell your readers "he was a heartles man with no guilt or remorse whatsoever". What you do is show them by having him kill an entire family because he was paid to or brutally execute a man begging on his knees for his life in broad daylight in front of his wife and eight year-old daughter or something similiar to that. The point is show us the character through HIS actions, not your words.
 

SimmyC

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#11
Exactly. Hawk is painting this Keitaro as someone that you shouldn't exactly like (if that person does, THEN you can say that person have problems). That does not mean that Hawk, or any of us, is some sicko who gets off on this stuff in real life. Just that, he painted a character that does the these thing.

This is especially true given how many characters I have kill people. Does that make me a murderer or condone murder? Nope! Neither does this 'bad' Keitaro. And he IS bad. He might have standards (like not wanting Su or, once he sees her, Shinobu at their ages) , doesn't make him good.

That being said, I still regret what I said eariler if only because it didn't come out the way I intended it to. I do believe that Motoko brought some of it on her own with her quick to punish additude, and deserved to be punish for that, BUT, NOT as far as to be sexually molested, and was glad that this Keitaro (as evil as he is) didn't go that far.

As for showing rather than telling, I've always been told that too. And it's really is sound advice given that, even though it is a written medium and not visual, makes the story more lively. In fact, this WIP by Hawk is a perfect example. We know this Keitaro is a true bastard just by his actions towards Motoko. Sure, early on when Motoko was trying to beat him up, you might be able to understand him. But after he defeated her...then you see his true colors. Not by simply saying "He's a Bastard", but by showing it through his actions. At same time, we also see that he does have standards by basically, blowing off Su. Not exactly kind to her, but it at least we know that he won't go after her for any sexual satisfaction. Though when a Red Moon appears, all bets are off!

And this is why I'm also eager to see what Hawk has planned for this story, and where this Keitaro is heading.

Though while it is sound advice, I admittingly am still trying to work on showing rather then telling in my stories. It's so easy to just say, he's kind, then show that he's kind. But I am working on it!
 

Israfel

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#12
Though while it is sound advice, I admittingly am still trying to work on showing rather then telling in my stories. It's so easy to just say, he's kind, then show that he's kind. But I am working on it!
Yah, it's definately one of those things that you have to watch yourself for at first. That's why I try and go back through most of my stuff and check that I've given proper description of everything and that I've flushed out the characters enough to be believable. I am heartened by the fact though that I can go back and look at some of my earlier works and then look at some of the stuff I'm writing now and at least see some definate improvement, it's always good to at least be able to see that you've made some progress and that you're not just spinning your wheels. I'm still attempting to perfect this myself as you can see by the two stories I've posted up, I mean I think those two are alright but I've obviously still got quite a bit of work ahead of me before I can get to the level that some of the authors of stories that I've read are at.
 

runestar

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#13
I think some of you are confused between a basically good person with a few flaws vs a inherently bad person who just happens to have a few redeeming qualities. If a mass murderer happens to save a cat from being run over by a car, does this relieve him of his sins? No. While Hawk to trying to portray Keitaro here as more "evil" than what we are normally accustomed to, lines clearly have to be drawn somewhere, otherwise, he won't be realistic, and since he has chosen to portray him as not being a paedohphile, then so be it.

Who is really interested in reading about a raving lunatic who goes around raping everyone, anyways? (Don't answer this!)
 

Israfel

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#14
I think some of you are confused between a basically good person with a few flaws vs a inherently bad person who just happens to have a few redeeming qualities. If a mass murderer happens to save a cat from being run over by a car, does this relieve him of his sins? No.
I know that Hawk doesn't intend to portray Keitaro as a mass murderer I was just using that as an example because it was rather extreme. I know the difference between the two and I wasn't trying to say that Hawk's Keitaro was a mass murderer I was just using an extreme example.
 

Hawk

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#15
It's more a case of monkey see, monkey do, where monkey doesn't really know how to do what monkey has seen.

Think of the contrasts here. Keitaro and Onizuka. Keitaro is/was basically a helpful pushover. After comming under the tutelage of Onizuka, he's tried to change into what he perceives Onizuka to be.

From zero to hero... Or well... From zero to hooligan, in a rather short amount of time. Not exactly 'nuff time for anyone to do a full 180 and change their personality.

The readers doesn't really find this out until later on, of course. But Keitaro is basically on the verge of snapping, but trying to put up a brave front by acting Onizuka-like to cover up his own insecurities.

Problem is, while Onizuka can often be a complete jerk, there's often a reason for it. Reasons that Keitaro hasn't always seen or been made aware of.

So, while Onizuka may have tied up three young shoolgirls, made them moon, scribbled all over them and had the entire event photographed, there was a reason for it.

Perhaps not a good enough reason to justify a grown man sexually harass three minors, but there was a reason for his actions.

Keitaro on the other hand... Well, let's just say that it'll be an interesting ride.

Unless I decide to dump the deep angsty shit I was going to go for and instead go for a slapstick thingie instead. Time'll tell.
 

Israfel

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#16
OK, that explains a lot, I was wondering how you were going to justify Keitaro being how he is (will Onizuka be making any guest appearances?) so that will allow the plot to be flushed out quite a bit more. It will also allow you to be able to have Keitaro constantly referencing his "great and wonderful master" leaving the girls to wonder just who the hell this most obviously perverted master is.
 

SimmyC

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#17
I see. See what happens when you jump into conclusions too early? We got a freaken huge discussion going on here just on that issue.

Can't wait to see how you deal with this Keitaro and how he interacts with the others (and vice versa).
 
#18
SimmyC said:
Sorry. I didn't mean it in that way. NO ONE deserves to be sexually molested.
I know, just warning ya. At another forum I go to there was this one prick who was saying the same thing, except he actually meant it in that manner. Needless to say he wasn't around very long after that.

What I meant was, Motoko being punished...period. After all, what she does to Keitaro (same with Naru) isn't exactly forgivable either.
Yeah, of course when you think about it, by the end of the manga, Motoko's entire lifestyle changes dramatically due to Keitaro's influence. She bests her sister, becomes much more feminine, and finally accepts that not all males are fucktards. That's a pretty good 'punishment' right there. Completely changing one's way of life is the best revenge \o

Though sexual molestation is beyond extreme IMO.
Indeed.

In real life, yes. But this isn't real life, this is art (using the word very, very broadly). Given that this is a work of fiction, moral constraints shouldn't be an imposition.
Exactly. In real life, I'm extremely violent against rapists/molesters/anyone who's committed a sexual crime in the past. I don't take this outlook into my opinion of written work, however. If I did I'd have simply flamed Hawk in reviews on a couple of his fics and not come here out of respect for his work.

Whatever helps to get the story across is good - there have been plenty of great works that featured characters doing such things, but no one begrudges the author who wrote the characters.
Yes, I know.

Exactly. Hawk is painting this Keitaro as someone that you shouldn't exactly like (if that person does, THEN you can say that person have problems).
Oooh yeah, I have problems. 'Badguy' Keitaro has a certain amount of appeal in the same way Onizuka does - hell yes he's bad, but he does have a certain amount of morals, and will probably wind up doing good deeds later on in the fic (the same way Onizuka, who decides to become a teacher to flirt with high school girls, winds up thrashing bullies [or the whole incident ze Deviant Viking described] and such throughout the manga).

At any rate, I'm looking forward to seeing more of this and seeing how Keitaro fares as 'Great Todaisei'.
 
#19
Dark Knight Gafgar said:
At any rate, I'm looking forward to seeing more of this and seeing how Keitaro fares as 'Great Todaisei'.
*cough*

Also, bump because some people have apparantly forgot this one.
 

Moshulel

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#21
Fatuous One said:
Also, bump because some people have apparantly forgot this one.
Have not.

But like the multitudes of Hawk's other fics, I'm waiting patiently (*WHIPWHIPWHIP* HURRY SLAVE!!) for him to finish (NOW OR YOU DIE!!).
I have exactly the same feelings.

I'm patiently waiting for an update although this fic isn't in my top three wish list (Master Nin, Master Nin, Master Nin) it's still one of the fics i would like to see updated.
 

SimmyC

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#22
I'm waiting for any of his great stories to appear. :p Like "No Need for Serenity". I mean, how can you go wrong with Hawk? ^_^
 
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