"
B for Boom" by AJT
Readability: 20
Use of the theme: 18
Use of details: 17
Story/Plot: 12
Other/personal opinion (general): 15
Total: 82
Spoiler comments: The pairing of Ron and Luna seemed sudden and forced. ... I won't beat that dead horse.
Other than that, how does this (or more specifically, the part where Ron has anything to do with non-magical explosives on a mid-to-large scale) tie into the events of "Harry Potter"? I'm not really seeing it.
Props for the fireworks. :snigger:
EDIT: (I've never actually read any of Harry Potter, so Halibel isn't the only one.)
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"
Emergency Escape" by Megaolix
Readability: 18
Use of the theme: 19
Use of details: 15
Story/Plot: 16
Other/personal opinion (general): 17
Total: 85
Spoiler comments: A couple weird capitals in there, and one or two possible typos.
I like how you had a Plan B for Naoto and a sort-of-Plan-B for Kanji, intertwined.
Unfortunately, though, mentioning the prompt outright didn't win you any favors.
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"
The neverending waltz" by Dartz_IRL
Readability: 19
Use of the theme: 18
Use of details: 20
Story/Plot: 19
Other/personal opinion (general): 20
Total: 96
Spoiler comments: I had the hardest time getting through this one, because I didn't want it to end! I went back over it at least four times, and I laughed until I almost cried (at least the first time).
The only nitpicks I really have are
"timing to perfection" rather than "timed", and
"might not be to appetising" ("too").
...And is "HB" supposed to stand for Hanna-Babera?
EDIT: Just to maintain consistency, you might not have outright mentioned Plan B, C, etc.
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"
A Night to Remember" by Kayeich
Readability: 20
Use of the theme: 15
Use of details: 19
Story/Plot: 16
Other/personal opinion (general): 14
Total: 84
Spoiler comments: Mmmmmmffff! (Translation: I still can't breathe get it off!!!!!!))
EDIT: You're lucky I don't take off points for the cookie incident. I'm #$%&ing allergic to oatmeal! :rip1: [/RP]
The story started off much like syrup, slow and very, very sugary (maybe a little too much). Towards the end, the pace picked up quite a bit.
As for the theme, your fic was essentially "Plan A, plan A, plan A, plan A, oh-shit-let's-try-that-...-no?-plan-C!"
And again, mentioning the prompt, ... eh.
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"
Murphy Was a Grunt" by Rooster455
Readability: 19
Use of the theme: 18
Use of details: 18
Story/Plot: 15
Other/personal opinion (general): 17
Total: 87
Spoiler comments: I assume "El-Tee" stands for "Lieutenant"? What does JSF stand for?
Mentioning Plan B outright, isn't that invoking Murphy's Law? And discussing Murphy's Law right before battle, the foreshadowing is so dark it was hard to see.
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"
Seduction" by twin blade
Readability: 20
Use of the theme: 18
Use of details: 17
Story/Plot: 15
Other/personal opinion (general): 16
Total: 86
Spoiler comments: The point of this seemed to be "Every plan is bad, let's just bail!" The characters were practically screaming this at each other.
While I see the humor in the situation and dialogue, the contrast between humor and the characters' desperation didn't mesh particularly well. Perhaps you could have focused more on one of the two, instead of both?
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Wow, really? After all this time, not a single other judge (besides HL) has put up any scores? Even I can only drag it out for so long.