Ninsaneja said:
Also, to HH: I didn't really like your story and I can't really explain why.
That bugs me.
But I cut a few points for that reason.
Sometimes you have to go with your gut.
Psh. You're fine. It's been so long since I wrote fanfiction that I forgot to actually, you know,
come up with my own story. I needed something like this to get back into the swing of things.
The issue with spending half the fic explaining where we are is that I realized like halfway through, "Wait a minute, there are some Philistines who don't read the Dresden Files. Shit." And then I went back and added in a lot of clarifying details so the reflection makes more sense...
It didn't turn out well. Didn't help that I tried to write in first person, like Butcher does. I've very little experience with that format.