What does that even mean
I don't know what you're saying.
Judging Notes
Iron Fic 5-3
Violinmana – Code Geass – Zero is a Dick
Writing Proficiency: 18/20
Misspelling
Theme (Keeping Secrets): 15/20
The theme is “keeping secrets.†It's different from simply having secrets. I believe Wata did in fact spell out that there must be some sort of conflict or attempt at finding it out.
Source (Code Geass): 16/20
Normally I would be more generous. Except, I'm fairly sure the flippancy with which the subject matter is here treated is not correct to the source.
Story: 1/20
This does not fulfill basic requirements of a narrative.
Basically, if it were an actual story, this level of lack of detail, action, or description would kill it entirely.
I see no reason to give more leeway to a different mode of writing.
I would be more generous, but when I asked Wata what to do, he said to give no points and may god have mercy on your soul.
Other: 15/20
Haiku presents no interesting or new information. It does not have any significance to the subject matter that I am aware of.
Total: 65/100
Meinos Kaen – Naruto? - Secrets We Keep
Writing Proficiency: 17/20
Several problems with sentence structure.
Theme (Keeping Secrets): 18/20
Not entirely at the theme, considering absolutely zero effort appears to be going into actually keeping the secrets. It's more like people are just blurting out embarrassing things.
Source (Multi): 17/20
Silly takes on characters at best.
Story: 16/20
Story feels like it ends in the middle.
Other: 18/20
Total: 86/100
Glimmervoid – The Laundry Files – They Know
Writing Proficiency: 14/20
Missing “in†in “imagine.â€
Missing commas, which, when present, would have made some sentences much easier to interpret.
Extra words which do not appear to be part of the sentence.
General difficulty in reading that cannot be attributed wholly to stylistic choices.
Theme (Keeping Secrets): 20/20
Excellent mental breakdown as he realizes all his precautions are foiled.
Source (Laundry Files): 20/20
Can't determine errors in source.
Story: 18/20
There are times when the listing gets boring.
Other: 20/20
Made me laugh.
Total: 92/100
Your use of obscure source has paid off.
Cosgrove - .hack//GU – The Truth
Writing Proficiency: 20/20
Small errors that required a thorough reading to find. Bravo.
Mainly misuse of “to/too†and a complete overuse of ...
Theme (Keeping Secrets): 16/20
Not protecting the secret, but revealing it outright.
Source (.Hack): 20/20
Story: 18/20
Short, yet manages to be a little slow-paced.
Other: 12/20
Did not like.
Story is an introspective yet I did not gain any understanding of the character by reading it. In other words, I feel it needs more feeling.
Total: 86/100
Biigoh – Harry Potter does have its own section, you know – Patience
Writing Proficiency: 19/20
Overuse of …
Seriously, a lot of them should have been . or ,
It doesn't read well.
As a nod to the fact that it is stylistic, only a single point will be taken. At all. Ever.
Theme (Keeping Secrets): 20/20
Absolutely spot on.
Source (Harry Potter and Other): 20/20
I would complain at the violation of the Harry Potter source, but for the quite interesting combination with the faerie part that I can only assume is Dresden Files or a similar work.
Story: 20/20
When I have to read to the end of the end of it, just to find out what's there, it's a 20.
Other: 20/20
I especially like the inclusion of the Haiku in the middle.
Total: 99/100
QE1 – Grimderp 40k – Secret in the Vaults
Writing Proficiency: 19/20
Incorrect punctuation at times.
Theme (Keeping Secrets): 20/20
Murder to keep a secret.
Source (WARHAMMER BOOYA): 20/20
It's as grimderpy as it gets.
Story: 16/20
“X years later†is a pretty jarring drop out of suspension of disbelief.
Other: 16/20
Decently entertaining and on-target. However, it's strange that the rest of the squad knows what to do when it was presented in the beginning as a secret that only the captain would have known about.
Total: 91/100.