Muse on Spring [IRON FIC 5.2]

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It is hard these days not to see rebellion, riots, and rage in the eyes around me.
At times I wonder if I am seeing what I want to see, a reflection of my own soul.

People around the world are protesting, standing up, and fighting for change.
And yet in the future these very same people may stand against the foundations of my own nation.

The government I was born under, like many, has a long and bloody history.
In the past it has held opinion of condemnation or praise on countries and their regimes, irregardless of moral wrongness and cruelty.

As a citizen who had never supported the politics or economics of the enabling of tyranny, what choice is there?
They rebel and I support and celebrate their courage.
As a citizen of this world I rejoice the expression of freedom.

As a citizen of America I can hope.
I can hope that tender relations are soothed.
I can hope for future understanding.

For us Americans are getting tired as well.
Corporations have become religions unto themselves.
The hideous capitalistic engines of intellectual property, fracking energy, genetic food, big bank shelter, and wage slavery.

Disgust is building as the earth is raped, as the chains tighten around our necks, and as the entertainment establishment that had once hypnotized the masses slowly grows out of what can be afforded.
This nation is waking up, rationality is taking root.

A new day is dawning.

-Tyler Durden.
 

Watashiwa

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Writing Proficiency: 18/20, though I saw things that could stand improvement I didn't see anything actually wrong.
Theme: 16/20 Hmm... Well, the character is personally responsible for bringing down major financial institutions, but the uprising he heads wasn't really the focus of the story. Here though, he's talking about possible riots as a result of his actions. I'll let this one go.
Source: 15/20 I don't think Tyler's really the kind of person to put words to his thoughts like this. But if he was, it could very well come out like this.
Story: 14/20 Was a fun read, didn't at all expect the signature at the end.
Other: 18/20 Tyler fucking Durden. Enough said.
Total: 81/100 -6 for tardiness so 75
 
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