Nanoha Negmia challenge

Gx Hero

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#1
This challenge is simple Nanoha negima story

1) THe only rule is no OC charecters unless they are villians.

Also if you want to have a negima story except you replace some of the charecters of 3-a with nanoha charecters that is fine.
 

ragnarok1337

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#2
I'm actually in the process of writing an outline for one right now. It mostly scraps the magic world on Mars completely, but the rest of the world is still there. It's not going to be the focus, though. The focus will be mostly on Evangeline as she gets involved in the Jewel Seed hunt, because they have the power needed to break the curse that damned Thousand Master put on her. Later I am thinking of having her be Nanoha's magic tutor, using the tried-and-true "don't die" method. School of Hard Knocks and brutal beat downs and all that.

Edit: Here's a bit I posted in the Negima Ideas section a while back. I haven't really worked on it since, though.

Flying a hundred or so meters in the air, Nanoha Takamachi slowly floated above a small, two-kilometer foresty area near an academy that was practically a city itself about. She ignore the academy, however, as she focused her senses on the ground. According to Yuuno, a jewel seed had activated in this area. Unlike all other incidences, however, this one cut off abruptly.

Nanoha's first suggestion was that perhaps her blonde rival Fate had gotten to it first. However, Yuuno countered that he sensed the Seed was still out there, and that despite Nanoha's incredible magical power, he was primarily an archaeologist, and sensing these sorts of things was one of his strengths.

The young brunette couldn't argue with that, and so off they went. Unlike the previous outings, however, this jewel seed was nowhere near Uminari. Nanoha only hoped that she could get back home before her family began worrying.

Nanoha paused as the ferret on her shoulders sent a mental call for her to stop, and that the seed was right below them. The brunette blinked. In the center of a clearing was a small log cabin. As she began to reply telepathically to ask Yuuno how she would retrieve it from someone's home, another magical presence manifested itself nearby. Looking up from the cabin, she saw a blonde-haired girl, wearing what looked like a black swimsuit with a skirt attached, holding a bardiche-styled Intelligent Device. "Fate..." she murmured.

"Leave the Jewel Seed." Fate's voice ordered, carrying across the gap between them. "Otherwise, you'll get hurt." Beside her, the doggirl accompanying Fate got into a fighting stance. Nanoha sighed. She would probably get ignored again, but she would never stop trying to convince Fate to talk.

"Please!" she begged, slowly bringing up Raising Heart in a defensive position. "Just tell me why you need them!" She looked a bit desperate. "We don't have to fight!" In response, Fate shook her head.

"Are you going to leave?" the blonde asked. At this, Nanoha's grip on her Device tightened. In response, Fate looked a bit depressed. It was almost enough to convince Nanoha to drop Raising Heart, but she tightened her hold on it as Fate raised Bardiche.

Scythe Form. In response, a blade of yellow magic extended from its shaft, and charged. Warning Yuuno to hang on, Nanoha did the same, bringing up Raising Heart.

Suddenly, there was a flash of blue light, arcane symbols, and a young boy appeared, grabbing both their weapons, as they were about to clash. "As Enforcer of the Time Space Administration Bureau, I order you to stop!"

---

Different emotions raced through everyone there. Nanoha wondered how a boy who looked her age could be an officer of the TSAB Yuuno told her about? She had imagined thousands of magical ferrets flying around in their ferrety spaceships and doing whatever magical ferrets did. Like maybe being mascots for magical girl groups.

Yuuno got a glimpse of the mental image Nanoha supplied, and barely resisted falling off Nanoha's shoulder in shock, dumbfounded as to how the girl would come to that conclusion. There was also a sense of relief at the TSAB finally arriving.

Fate began to panic. She knew the TSAB would show up, but not so soon. She silently cried. This was probably the result of her failure, when that dimensional quake during a fight for a jewel seed ended up with it reacting. Mother would punish her again, and she was right to do it. Nothing but a failure. Mother is right.

Arf intensely felt the emotions that Fate did, being connected to the blonde as she was. The doggirl sent reassurance to her master that they could still get this jewel seed, if they moved before the TSAB representative could react.

Chrono was confused. Two 9 year-old mages and a young archaeologist caused all this hassle? Well, the two girls were both very high ranking, so in hindsight it wasn't too surprising. Anyway, time to clean up this mess.

---

The blue-haired boy spoke again. I am Chrono Harlaown of the Time Space Administration Bureau, and you are to cease hostile activity immediately!" He frowned, his gaze moving between the two girls. "Failure to comply will result in---"

Before he could finish, the redheaded Familiar charged at him with a battle cry, and he was forced to break off, releasing the Devices of both blonde and brunette, and activated S2U.

"Lic Lac La Lac Lilac." All movement stopped, and the five mages' eyes widened as a flare of magic accompanied by the temperature rapidly dropping occurred around them. In unison, they all shot away from each other as a giant ice spike shot up from the ground beneath then, narrowly missing them.

"I have a better idea" a girl's voice with a Scottish accent drawled. They all looked towards the source of the new voice. A long-haired blonde girl looking around Fate's age, dressed in a scandalous black dress that looked out of place on one so young, looked at them. A Jewel Seed, likely the one they were there to retrieve, slowly orbited her. How about you explain what you're doing, while my good mood still lasts?
Takes place about two years before Negima proper, while Evangeline is still sealed at Mahora. She's able to use magic because of the Jewel Seed. As long as she has it, she can negate the curse. It is essentially the ultimate catalyst. She's just staying at Mahora because that's where her stuff is, and she can work on replicating the effects while the staff is none the wiser.
 

Gx Hero

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#3
I look forward to the rest. If I get time I might help edit sections and give suggestions. I like where you are going with this. Is it going to just be evagaline or are you going to have them meet Trintium and the other avacus's or is evagaline one of the few charecters from negima?
 

ragnarok1337

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#4
Evangeline's going to be the main character, obviously. Most of the rest of the magic world will be background elements. I'm making it up as I go along. I have the endgame of "season 1" in mind, but I'm still in the process of getting there.
 

zeebee1

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#5
Well, she has to fail. If She succeeds then none of the events in Negima will happen.
 

Gx Hero

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#7
agreed besides who says that it will simply follow the Nanoha series story line. It has some intrest considering that evagaline will be Nanoha's teacher.
 
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