Naruto Naruto: The Gambler

lcpoketoon

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#1
This idea came about when I read the story " The Night the House of Card was Built." I got to thinking what would a Naruto be like who created a whole ninja style around gambleing an useing playing card based jutsu.

The Idea starts when Naruto is 7 and he trying to find a place to hide out till his birthday is over an stumbles on the old clubhouse/hang out of the Sannin when they were still just gennin. Inside he finds books on gambleing and playing card, scrolls on seals and some early note for a naughty book, and scrolls on chakra control and some basic elemental jutsus along with scrolls that talk about the diffrent bloodlines. Well young Naruto think he found a goldmine an settles in to read since he would be starting school in a few days.

Naruto's first day of classes he brings along with him one of the books on poker and a deck of cards. During a slowly moments in class he starts a game between him, Kiba, Shikamaru, Choji and Shino. Well Naruto wins more offen then he loses an when he does lose it's never much leaveing him ahead. Well annoyed Kiba says Naruto just lucky an that Luck won't help him as a ninja without a clan. This starts Naruto thinking about how to get his luck to work with being a ninja.

Well Naruto returns tot he clubhouse thinking about how to make that work an starts to read one of the scrolls on sealing an notices it's a lot like the thing on his belly that shows up when he uses chakra. Naruto then looks at some of his playing card an gets a idea for his first card jutsu. He makes some cards that have seals on them to create bushins. The first batch can't move around an they just look like he's standing there but with one deck he can make 52 of them to hide among. He calls it his Card Jutsu: 52 Bushin Pickup.

As he gets better an time passes he creates other Card Jutsus like the Card Suffle where he sends his playing card into the air around him and trades places with them to avoid being hit. He still creates his Sexy no Jutsu but it's changed due to the notes he found from a young toad summonor an he creates the Queens Rule where he throws out the four queen cards from his deck an they become four very lovely ladies who aren't wearing very much.


Later on one jutsu idea I had for him was Card Jutsu: House of Cards that traps someone in a house of large playing cards where Naruto can control what happens inside it. Also have Naruto able to use the Card Jutsu: Dead Man's Hand that sends 3 aces and a pair of 8's to grow an surrond a enemy ninja an then they release a mess of sebon neddles between them at the ninja.


What do you all think?
 

WarmasterCain55

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#2
When I first read the title, I thought that this was going to be a Luxford!Naruto.

Naruto: The Gambler of Fate.

I like that.
 

sith2886

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#3
been playing x-men legends recently?

any way its an interesting way to take the lucky!naruto clichÚ thats been shown a lot here on tff.
 

Juubi

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#4
That idea occurred to me too, but that title would not only stir up the Hyuuga bitchers but would tempt more reference to KH2. One can only hint so much before it becomes a crossover...
 

lcpoketoon

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#5
Here are a few more Jutsu I came up with for Naruto's Gambler Style.

Genjutsu dice: when rolled the genjutsu they release is based on the number of pips seen. It uses to pairs of dice an best used against group by rolling them into the groups middle.

1-1:Snake eyes causes phontom snakes to shoot out an wrap around those effected.

Not sure what other effects there could be but would love to hear your ideas.

Explosive Poker Chips: Their explosive power is ranked by how much they are worth. Naruto likes to use the Catch pharse in a fight " Hello and Thank you for Playing here are your winnings!" and then throwing a buch of chips to a enemy.

Slap Jack no Jutsu: Naruto uses this jutsu by drawing a Jack card an throwing it in the air above a target an then followed by handseals the card grows to about 12ft and gains about 1 ton in weight.

If you guys come up with some i'd love to see them.
 

kazegami

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#6
Now typically, I'm happy to lurk in the murky internets surrounding TFF, but I was also thinking along the lines of a lucky Naruto...

But I was thinking, what about something a little bit more serious? lcpoketoon has some great ideas that work for the Naruto world, but how about something a bit more gritty?

For a Lucky!Naruto I would imagine his techniques would center around probabilities and would take advantage of his one in a million kind of luck. Something along the lines of Russian roulette, where he has five out of six chances to kill himself and a one out of six to do ungodly damage to his foe.

A few ideas:

A vest full of semi-activated explosive notes. These notes are half primed whenever he goes into battle, and are of differing yield and magnitude. The luck portion would apply in the following scenario: attacker closes into close combat range, strikes with chakra attack, which detonates the note on his vest. Accordingly, luck will guide the strike to a low yield note that will slightly damage both combatants but create range, or even greater luck will guide the strike to a high yield molded charge note that will do greater damage to Naruto but extreme damage to the attacker.

Seeding exploding clones with the usual shadow clones, ala BukkakeNoJutsu's "Given Enough Time" though with Naruto 'in-the-mix' as it were.

A 'roulette gauntlet' with embedded explosive notes that would fire or misfire at random.

High-risk traps that would trigger or not trigger at random.

Of course, the tricky part would be to write it while not looking like it's a God-of-Luck!Naruto or Deus-Ex-Machina contrived situation.





A snippet, which is VERY rough, but hopefully illustrates my vision:





Funny thing about luck: Sometimes she graces you with a smile, other times it's only after she's finished kneeing you in the dice.

Naruto winced as he gingerly got to his feet. His legendary luck, that same fortune that got him enough food to eat, that revealed the alleyway that was his ticket away from his ANBU pursuers after a prank, had deserted him.

It hurt. Or maybe that was just the massive cut on his side.

"You guessed wrong, demon brat!" Mizuki crowed across from him, hands cradling the massive fuuma shuriken that had already tasted his blood. Silently, Naruto agreed with him. He'd managed to sidestep the thrown weapon, but in the wrong direction! It had more than just grazed him, the razor sharp edges digging viciously into his side.

His inventory was low, Iruka was out of the fight and his injuries were nothing to laugh at either.

Naruto staggered. He was losing too much blood. His hands were already red from applying pressure to the wound. It didn't help much.

With barely enough energy left to stand, Naruto made a pained hand seal, five shadow clones popping into existence beside him. Six Naruto's for the six remaining explosive tags he had left in his pouch. They were crumpled, the intricate seals smudged. Absolutely the lowest quality tags available, probably wouldn't even fire correctly. Naruto knew this with certainty, the store owner making sure to point it out to him when he'd bought them. "Trash for trash!" was what he was told before he'd been chased out of the store.

'Mind back into the fight!' Naruto screamed to himself through the agony. He was losing focus, dark edges creeping into his vision. Gritting his teeth, Naruto prepared for one last charge, his clones shouting a desperate battle cry as all six Naruto's charged the traitorous chuunin.

It was over far too quickly. Naruto's purposefully imperfect taijutsu was no match for his treacherous instructor's. Within a second, Mizuki's fists and feet reduced his five clones to smoke, their tags simply failing to fire. When the smoke cleared, it was pathetically easy for Mizuki to zoom in on Naruto, throwing three savage punches to the boy's face, the last almost breaking his jaw with its ferocity. It was the following kick to his injured side that sealed Naruto's fate, as his vision blacked out from pain. His fingers loosened around his last explosive tag, the sealed slip of paper floating harmlessly to the floor as the power from Mizuki's kick sent the almost-genin flying.

Mizuki laughed uproariously, his face split in a vicious smile. "Now you die, demon! Now you pay for all the lives you took! This is power! And with the scroll, no one will be able to stop me!"

His gloating went unheard by the injured jinchuuriki. For Naruto's sensitive ears were focused on another sound: the welcome sizzling, audible even from the injured heap he found himself in, of a primed and live explosive tag. He smiled through his bloodstained teeth, the effort taking the last bit of energy he had left. "Sorry Mizuki-sensei...you're busted."

The note fired. The dropped notes surrounding Mizuki that had failed when his clones attacked were easily consumed by the explosion adding their own destructive power to the blast. In a flash of light and a crack of thunder, the chuunin traitor was rendered to ash and memory. The fight was over.

"The...house...wins......dattebayo."
 

refused

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#7
Kazegami;

Great thoughts, but honestly your techniques sound a bit silly. You could manifest those "ideas" other ways though. Ways that at least I would prefer to read.

Instead of primed explosive notes that would hurt them both, I'd rather see "all or nothing" techniques.

Eh, for example, genjutsu that would envelop them both with thick vines, and after a dice throw or something similar would leave the winner in control again, I guess. Or you could work further on that, somehow. Lessay, a ninjutsu or genjuts that disables both of them, and a technique similar to the great waterfall technique (I think that's the name) rushing towards them.

That's the direction I'd take that line of thinking, anyway, but that might just be me. :p

I could also very well see him basing tactics and techniques off of a dice or a flip of a coin/chip.

And perhaps a deck of cards in a pocket stopping an otherwise fatal injury. Going a tad bit too clichÚ there, though.
 

sith2886

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#8
kinda like (and i know I'll get flack for this) the penalty games in yu-gi-oh (the manga not the show)?
 

Warprince9

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#9
I saw a story of FF.net with the same name. I couldn't even make it through the first chapter cause of the cliches(I especially can't stand mobs chasing young Naruto openly accusing him of Kyuubi's crimes. If that actually happened the mob would then be fried in a Hokage powered fire dragon), but the original concept can be awsome if done right.

I know the idea of Gambit Naruto has been touched upon a number of times on this board, adding in more casino themed attacks would be interesting. Maybe give him a fighting style like that gard guy from Hellsing(Can't remember his name.) And the whole idea if a ninja who puts everything to random chance, and pulls it off, would be a huge slap to Neji's face.

Besides, the world needs more stories with Narutos who, as Fosfor put it:

There were, however, ways to catch the attention of Fortune and make her smile on you, if you had enough skill. If you had the skill, the instinct and courage bordering on insanity, you didn't just get her to smile at you, but to actually have her lips touch yours with passion and blessing.

Naruto had the skills, the instinct, the power and courage that went past borders ordinary people called sanity a long time ago. He wasn't willing to settle for a smile or a kiss - he was going to have Lady Luck naked, eager and moaning his name tonight.
From Reload chapter 6.
 

kazegami

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#10
refused said:
Kazegami;

Great thoughts, but honestly your techniques sound a bit silly. You could manifest those "ideas" other ways though. Ways that at least I would prefer to read.

SNIP
I think the point I was trying to make, as far as the idea goes, is to not go overboard with the Gambling character. Using dice/cards etc seems a little too cliche'd for a serious/gritty type of fanfic. Sure, it might be fine for a crack fic, or something along the lines of AJT's KH/Naruto fic, but I'd never see a gambling/luck!naruto throwing around cards or using dice for techniques in say a Fosfor-fic.

Ends up seeming a little contrived, no?

I think a little bit is fine, like let's say he makes a few difficult decisions like right or left, or eat ramen instead or listening to Kakashi's advice, etc., but bringing in dice and cards to a fight? Then again, it's been done in Cutting the deck so maybe...

As for all or nothing techniques, the thing I don't like about these, is that it's easy to fall into the trap of "Deus-ex-Machina" type conclusions. Either Naruto wins or loses. Betcha he'll win. I liked the formula of "damaged-damaged-damaged then barely scrape by thanks to luck" versus "ha we're both immobilized, great-rolled-a natural-seven now die!"

Of course, I've thrown off the shackles of conventional sanity quite a while ago and who can account for the tastes of the insane...
 

sith2886

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#11
#12
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
 

refused

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#13
kazegami said:
refused said:
Kazegami;

Great thoughts, but honestly your techniques sound a bit silly. You could manifest those "ideas" other ways though. Ways that at least I would prefer to read.

SNIP
I think the point I was trying to make, as far as the idea goes, is to not go overboard with the Gambling character. Using dice/cards etc seems a little too cliche'd for a serious/gritty type of fanfic. Sure, it might be fine for a crack fic, or something along the lines of AJT's KH/Naruto fic, but I'd never see a gambling/luck!naruto throwing around cards or using dice for techniques in say a Fosfor-fic.

Ends up seeming a little contrived, no?

I think a little bit is fine, like let's say he makes a few difficult decisions like right or left, or eat ramen instead or listening to Kakashi's advice, etc., but bringing in dice and cards to a fight? Then again, it's been done in Cutting the deck so maybe...

As for all or nothing techniques, the thing I don't like about these, is that it's easy to fall into the trap of "Deus-ex-Machina" type conclusions. Either Naruto wins or loses. Betcha he'll win. I liked the formula of "damaged-damaged-damaged then barely scrape by thanks to luck" versus "ha we're both immobilized, great-rolled-a natural-seven now die!"

Of course, I've thrown off the shackles of conventional sanity quite a while ago and who can account for the tastes of the insane...
I see your point, and I agree. The "technique" I mentioned was only an example in what direction I'd take it as far as techniques go. Primed explosive notes, well... the thing is, you can't defend against them no matter luck. Sure some of them would be "less fatal" than others, as you put it, but they'd had to be put on with a blindfold if you want to derive it out of luck which ones detonates, since there are certain places on your body that would be hit more often seeing as they're critical areas.

Not to mention, only Hyuugas - as far as cannon goes to my knowledge, inject chakra in their targets through taijutsu. Tsunade strength technique, for example, shouldn't be able to detonate them, and even if she could... there's only two people able to use it, and that's after timeskip.

Perhaps rather a defense-type jutsu that could, with some logical explanation, either inflict a world of hurt on the limb that connects to your body or help that limb along and inflict the pain on your own body?
 

Luthorne

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#14
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
 

Reader458

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#15
Not all people here are against Naru/Hina Luthorne (but those who are tend to be rather vocal about it at times), and if you just mark it as such they will have little to complain about.
 

Juubi

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#16
Luthorne said:
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
I read that one too. At the time, I was a massive NaruHina fanboy....
 

S J C

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#17
Luthorne said:
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
Can I see it please I like NaruHina.
 

mandalorianjedi

The Original M2J
#18
Juubi said:
Luthorne said:
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
I read that one too. At the time, I was a massive NaruHina fanboy....
You say that like it's a bad thing.

There is nothing wrong with Naru/Hina, people say that the majority of the fics with that pairing suck, but if you think about it, there are also a helluva lot more fics with that particular pairing. It astounds me the amount of Hinata hate out there.
 

Luthorne

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#19
S J C said:
Luthorne said:
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
Can I see it please I like NaruHina.
Sure, XIII Ninja, by James the Fox. As a warning, it contains elements of (obviously) Kingdom Hearts, Soul Calibur, and possibly a few other things, has OCs, and the author occasionally randomly appears to get beaten up. If this dissuades thee not, feel free to try it...it's not that bad, in my opinion.
 

Juubi

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#20
mandalorianjedi said:
Juubi said:
Luthorne said:
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
I read that one too. At the time, I was a massive NaruHina fanboy....
You say that like it's a bad thing.

There is nothing wrong with Naru/Hina, people say that the majority of the fics with that pairing suck, but if you think about it, there are also a helluva lot more fics with that particular pairing. It astounds me the amount of Hinata out there.
I mean NaruHina was the ONLY pairing I liked....you know how I feel about limitation...
 

S J C

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#21
Juubi said:
mandalorianjedi said:
Juubi said:
Luthorne said:
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
I read that one too. At the time, I was a massive NaruHina fanboy....
You say that like it's a bad thing.

There is nothing wrong with Naru/Hina, people say that the majority of the fics with that pairing suck, but if you think about it, there are also a helluva lot more fics with that particular pairing. It astounds me the amount of Hinata out there.
I mean NaruHina was the ONLY pairing I liked....you know how I feel about limitation...
The only one's I like are Naruhina and Naruten.
 

mandalorianjedi

The Original M2J
#22
S J C said:
Juubi said:
mandalorianjedi said:
Juubi said:
Luthorne said:
Gaara of the Desert said:
A story I would like to see done is instead of Kyuubi being sealed in Naruto...Luxford gets sealed and Naruto becomes the Gambler of Fate.
Well, I did see one where Naruto had all of Organization XIII sealed inside of him along with Kyuubi...

Edit: ...though, now that I think about it, you wouldn't like it, since it's a NaruHina.
I read that one too. At the time, I was a massive NaruHina fanboy....
You say that like it's a bad thing.

There is nothing wrong with Naru/Hina, people say that the majority of the fics with that pairing suck, but if you think about it, there are also a helluva lot more fics with that particular pairing. It astounds me the amount of Hinata out there.
I mean NaruHina was the ONLY pairing I liked....you know how I feel about limitation...
The only one's I like are Naruhina and Naruten.
I'll admit to being partial to Naru/Hina, but I'm a pretty big fan of all Naruto pairings that aren't Yaoi, Sasu/Hina, Neji/Hina and Gaar/Hina. Those pairings creep me out...

:huh!:

Really the only person I can really see Hinata end up with is Naruto, but I can tolerate Shikamaru, Kiba or Shino, however. Mizukage, which has a Neji/Hina pairing (it is mainly Naru/Saku), is just about the one exception I've made.
 

mandalorianjedi

The Original M2J
#24
Gaara of the Desert said:
I bet you also hate KakaSaku.á I know I do.
Maybe it's a double standard, but I tend to edge away from the older male/younger female relationships, but whole heartedly get into the older female/younger male ones.

But then, I suppose it's just a matter of taste. Usually Kakashi is never paired up with anyone in the fics I read, though sometimes he does get paired with either Shizune, Anko or Rin, MAYBE even the occasional OFC.

However, For the Love of My Friends by Foxie-sama is another exception because there were mentions of a Kaka/Iruka pairing from before Naruto went back in time. (Primary pairings: Naru/Hina, Sasu/Saku, Shika/Ino)
 

~NGD OMEGA~

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#25
Gaara of the Desert said:
I bet you also hate KakaSaku. I know I do.
I usually shy away from such non-main character pairings, but I have to note that this one is shockingly popular among the fandom, currently at 62 pages.

From what I can tell it follows a similar path of what I suspect are the thought processes behind at least SasuSaku fics (Only pairing even close to SasuNaru in sheer numbers with NaruSasu at 519 and SasuSaku at 450 :huh!:), wishfufillment fics by fangirls. In this case they usually take a female lead, and pair her up with the hotest guy in their mind, usually ranging between either Kakashi or Sasuke depending on how bold the girl is. That's the only thing that comes to my mind to explain why it has numbers exceeding all other het Naruto parings save Sakura and Hinata.

Probably not all of them are like that, but when looking at the figures, those are some really big numbers, particularly when you consider it's 25 stories a page.

What's odd though is that there is no similar results from the male side, considering the highest numbered pairings are Sakura and Hinata, both reaching into the 100s, with Ino at third back in the 20's.
 
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