Path of Wands Discussion

zerohour

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#1
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Hoping that people will be willing to give me some feedback on how I could improve it.

I left the ending somewhat open if people think I ought to continue. Should I?

Praise, criticism, and random comments are all appreciated.
 

the DragonBard

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#2
Liking it so far, but need to see where it goes, and how it evolves before I can say more.

One thing, it seems... dry. Maybe detached is the word I want. It needs... more.
 

zerohour

Well-Known Member
#3
So.. more details? Or do I need to draw you in a bit more?
 

the DragonBard

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#4
I think a bit more of both.

Just know 'when' you need the details, and when you don't.
 

zerohour

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#5
Thanks for the feedback. I'll probably try revising and improving it sometime in the near future. How was the battle scene at the end? I wasn't completely satisfied with it, but wanted to get others' thoughts on it.
 
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