Z zerohour Well-Known Member May 14, 2014 #1 May 14, 2014 #1 Link Hoping that people will be willing to give me some feedback on how I could improve it. I left the ending somewhat open if people think I ought to continue. Should I? Praise, criticism, and random comments are all appreciated. Approve 1 Show all
Link Hoping that people will be willing to give me some feedback on how I could improve it. I left the ending somewhat open if people think I ought to continue. Should I? Praise, criticism, and random comments are all appreciated.
T the DragonBard Well-Known Member May 18, 2014 #2 May 18, 2014 #2 Liking it so far, but need to see where it goes, and how it evolves before I can say more. One thing, it seems... dry. Maybe detached is the word I want. It needs... more. Approve 1 Show all
Liking it so far, but need to see where it goes, and how it evolves before I can say more. One thing, it seems... dry. Maybe detached is the word I want. It needs... more.
Z zerohour Well-Known Member May 23, 2014 #3 May 23, 2014 #3 So.. more details? Or do I need to draw you in a bit more? Approve 1 Show all
T the DragonBard Well-Known Member May 25, 2014 #4 May 25, 2014 #4 I think a bit more of both. Just know 'when' you need the details, and when you don't. Approve 1 Show all
Z zerohour Well-Known Member Jun 2, 2014 #5 Jun 2, 2014 #5 Thanks for the feedback. I'll probably try revising and improving it sometime in the near future. How was the battle scene at the end? I wasn't completely satisfied with it, but wanted to get others' thoughts on it. Approve 1 Show all
Thanks for the feedback. I'll probably try revising and improving it sometime in the near future. How was the battle scene at the end? I wasn't completely satisfied with it, but wanted to get others' thoughts on it.