Going to talk about the fanfiction Wandering of a Sword Hero by A Dyslexic Writer
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13190156/1/
Why am I doing this?
Been too long since I've author'ed anything myself. Want to write _something_ to kick the muse.
Will you talk about spoilers?
Yes, yes I will. Please leave immediately if this bothers you.
With that out of the way, let's begin!
This is supposed to be a crossover story between Shield Hero and Fate Stay Night. I've read the translated web novel for Shield Hero. It's a story which starts off promising, but near the end, I got the impression that the author just wanted to stop. There are, if I remember correctly, 2 endings for the novel. Not to spoil things, but for me, I'll just keep the nicer ending as "canonical". It probably doesn't matter (it is VERY late in the story anyway). As for what FSN is ... I'm going to assume that you are familiar with it and all the spin-off fanfiction crossovers that come from it.
As far as I can tell from the summary, this appears to be another "Shirou transported into another universe" setup. Would he replace Naofumi as the Shield Hero? Or one of the other three? Hmm... That IS a good question. A part of me is expecting some idiocy where he DOES replace Naofumi as the Shield Hero. Which would indicate that our fanficiton author is not really aware of the Nasu-verse or is really brave. Personally, I hope neither.
A few paragraphs in and I discover that Shirou is a mercenary. With his usual harem living with/near him. A lot of exposition. This does not bode well. -_-
ROTFL !! DD
The "VR" headset provides not just audio+video, but also allowing for smell, feel and even taste!?! As someone who works with computers, this is .. well, very ficitional. But what's so funny is the rest of the exposition. "no one knew who invented them ... only a single game was supported" ?!? WHY, oh WHY would any loving parent allow their children to come near such a device? This mystery device just becomes popular and no one questions if it is medically sound?!?
Am about 70 - 80% down the page of the first chapter. As far as the FSN elements go ... this is most certainly fanfiction. Fortunately, I don't care about canon-compliance as I once did.
And I'm done with the first chapter. ... What was the point of all that exposition?!??? Shirou was just "transported" into the fantasy world without even donning the VR helmet? Here is chapter 1 in as few words as possible;
"Shirou gets teleported to an unknown fantasy world with 3 other random strangers."
Onwards to chapter 2 then. What catches my attention is a typo. "He still was in fool possession of his free will.". The author probably meant to say "full possession", but as it stands, I wonder if perhaps, his sub-conscious is telling us something? That we're fools to be reading this?
Hmm... Shirou has a very high cooking stat? Why is this higher than attack/defense/speed/magic?
This quote,
"Had those two not noticed that the weapons they were holding weren't sharp enough to cut cheese with?" actually makes sense. Shirou is referring to a bow and spear weilder. It would be surprising if either of those could be used to cut cheese.
On a different note, it IS good to see that Naofumi is around as the shield hero. Perhaps this story could be worth reading? Or at least, as a time-killer.
We're playing give-out-fake-names. Not a negative sign, but as a reader, I find it annoying to keep track.
Was the bit that the heros needing to work separately a canon thing? I don't remember.
Am done with chapter 2. Am not really enthusiastic for this story. But, I don't want to do anything else ATM, so going to keep reading.
"He might be able to resist through sheer thick headedness" -> this is a novel idea. I wonder if anyone has actually written something to the effect? That some magic spell/curse just didn't happen because the target was too thick-headed. Reminds me of Goury from the Slayers anime.
"Am I really going to use a Divine Construct to cut vegetables?" -> this seems to happen often in FSN crossover fanfics.
There is this interesting scene of Shirou talking/flirting with the librarian that an idea popped into my head. We need an isekei story of a married hero/heroine being transported somewhere. And after some period of time (not too long!) their spouse, breaks through the multiverse and joins them. Would be nice to read something of that nature.
the "lengendary" sword is a yandere against any other weapon the hero might weild. ha, ha!
Well I'm done with chapter 4 now. Gave me a meh feeling.
-chronodekar
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13190156/1/
Why am I doing this?
Been too long since I've author'ed anything myself. Want to write _something_ to kick the muse.
Will you talk about spoilers?
Yes, yes I will. Please leave immediately if this bothers you.
With that out of the way, let's begin!
This is supposed to be a crossover story between Shield Hero and Fate Stay Night. I've read the translated web novel for Shield Hero. It's a story which starts off promising, but near the end, I got the impression that the author just wanted to stop. There are, if I remember correctly, 2 endings for the novel. Not to spoil things, but for me, I'll just keep the nicer ending as "canonical". It probably doesn't matter (it is VERY late in the story anyway). As for what FSN is ... I'm going to assume that you are familiar with it and all the spin-off fanfiction crossovers that come from it.
As far as I can tell from the summary, this appears to be another "Shirou transported into another universe" setup. Would he replace Naofumi as the Shield Hero? Or one of the other three? Hmm... That IS a good question. A part of me is expecting some idiocy where he DOES replace Naofumi as the Shield Hero. Which would indicate that our fanficiton author is not really aware of the Nasu-verse or is really brave. Personally, I hope neither.
A few paragraphs in and I discover that Shirou is a mercenary. With his usual harem living with/near him. A lot of exposition. This does not bode well. -_-
ROTFL !! DD
The "VR" headset provides not just audio+video, but also allowing for smell, feel and even taste!?! As someone who works with computers, this is .. well, very ficitional. But what's so funny is the rest of the exposition. "no one knew who invented them ... only a single game was supported" ?!? WHY, oh WHY would any loving parent allow their children to come near such a device? This mystery device just becomes popular and no one questions if it is medically sound?!?
Am about 70 - 80% down the page of the first chapter. As far as the FSN elements go ... this is most certainly fanfiction. Fortunately, I don't care about canon-compliance as I once did.
And I'm done with the first chapter. ... What was the point of all that exposition?!??? Shirou was just "transported" into the fantasy world without even donning the VR helmet? Here is chapter 1 in as few words as possible;
"Shirou gets teleported to an unknown fantasy world with 3 other random strangers."
Onwards to chapter 2 then. What catches my attention is a typo. "He still was in fool possession of his free will.". The author probably meant to say "full possession", but as it stands, I wonder if perhaps, his sub-conscious is telling us something? That we're fools to be reading this?
Hmm... Shirou has a very high cooking stat? Why is this higher than attack/defense/speed/magic?
This quote,
"Had those two not noticed that the weapons they were holding weren't sharp enough to cut cheese with?" actually makes sense. Shirou is referring to a bow and spear weilder. It would be surprising if either of those could be used to cut cheese.
On a different note, it IS good to see that Naofumi is around as the shield hero. Perhaps this story could be worth reading? Or at least, as a time-killer.
We're playing give-out-fake-names. Not a negative sign, but as a reader, I find it annoying to keep track.
Was the bit that the heros needing to work separately a canon thing? I don't remember.
Am done with chapter 2. Am not really enthusiastic for this story. But, I don't want to do anything else ATM, so going to keep reading.
"He might be able to resist through sheer thick headedness" -> this is a novel idea. I wonder if anyone has actually written something to the effect? That some magic spell/curse just didn't happen because the target was too thick-headed. Reminds me of Goury from the Slayers anime.
"Am I really going to use a Divine Construct to cut vegetables?" -> this seems to happen often in FSN crossover fanfics.
There is this interesting scene of Shirou talking/flirting with the librarian that an idea popped into my head. We need an isekei story of a married hero/heroine being transported somewhere. And after some period of time (not too long!) their spouse, breaks through the multiverse and joins them. Would be nice to read something of that nature.
the "lengendary" sword is a yandere against any other weapon the hero might weild. ha, ha!
Well I'm done with chapter 4 now. Gave me a meh feeling.
-chronodekar
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