Akamatsuverse Red Moon Rebirth Prologue

Cyberscythe195

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#1
Disclaimer: If I owned Disgaea or Love Hina, do you honestly think IÆd be spending time writing this?

Authors Note:

Well here you go. IÆve finally gotten off my lazy ass and finally decided to write this thing. I was inspired to finally start on my own story after I read bukkakenojutsuÆs awesome story, Hell on Earth. DonÆt think I copied him though, if you look through my topics list, I wrote my general idea on the concept before he released his story. Anyway, here you go. By the way, this story isnÆt meant to be something super serious. ItÆs a lighthearted adventure fic. ItÆs meant to be funny and enjoyable. DonÆt think on it too hard. I sure wonÆt. Well then, enough with my chit chat.

Red Moon Rebirth:
Return of the Overlord

By Cyberscythe195 (known of FF. Net as Master Leonheart)

Prologue: A RoninÆs Vacation
A.K.A. All I wanted was some peace and quietà

Keitaro Urashima stared silently into space as he walked down the streets of Tokyo. While normally, he wouldnÆt be distinguishable from any other Japanese male in the bustling crowds, it was hard to miss the very distinguishable sight of a turtle on top of his head, patting it with his fin in a somewhat consoling movement.

Keitaro smiled appreciatively at the gesture. ôThanks Tama-chan, but that wonÆt help me get into Tokyo U.ö He looked up into the night sky, a forlorn smile on his face. æThis is the third time IÆd failed. I wonder, how many more times do I have try to get in.Æ He sighed, thoughts flitting back to his ôpromised girlö. æI wonder if sheÆs gotten in already, waiting for me. Maybe sheÆs forgotten about me, since IÆve taken so long.Æ His smile broke apart at the depressing thought.

He slowly walked up the steps towards the train station, his mind barely registering where he was going. æI think, I need a break.Æ He thought to himself as he thought about the where he was going back to. While he truly did enjoy the company of the various female residents of Hinata Sou, he really didnÆt need to get bashed by Naru or hacked at by Mokoto right now. They were truly good people, he knew in his heart, and that heÆd do anything to take care of them. æRight now, I just need to get away.Æ He looked at his companion. ôHey Tama, you want to come with me somewhere for a little R & R?ö The turtle flew down to face, before replying with a cheerful ôMyuu!ö. ôI guess thatÆs a yes then.ö He chuckled, walking into the station and buying a ticket to Shibuya.

-Hinata Sou-

ôHey, whereÆs Keitaro?ö Suu asked, pouncing on top of Motoko as she does so. ôLike I care where that perverted male went.ö Motoko replied coldly, though in her mind, she was also wondering where the resident manager was.

ôAwwww.ö Suu pouted. ôI wanted him to test my new invention.ö Suu grinned at Motoko. ôI know, why donÆt you do it instead. ItÆll be fun!ö Suu yelled out cheerfully before dragging Motoko into her room.

Motoko could only curse Keitaro for getting into her current predicament.

-Shibuya-

ôEeeekkkkk!!!ö The screams of young, pretty, and/or well endowed women filled the air as they indignantly threw Keitaro out of the train car on to his rear.

ôOw.ö Keitaro apologized profusely to the leaving train car. æHow was I supposed to know that the trains in Shibuya have 6 women only cars?Æ He thought indignantly, his mind recalling how he suddenly lost coordination, balance, and strength at the sight of the beauties. æItÆs like whenever I see a girl with a sexy body, I lose all control of my own bodyÆs functionsÆ He shook his head as his mind replayed all of the various encounters with his tenants over the course of the time that he was their manager.

ôOh wellö He grinned cheerfully. ôWell, time to go have some fun.ö With a smile, he walked into the crowdà only to bump into another female beauty, stumble, and accidently grope her as he tried to regain his balance. æThis is going to be a long day.Æ

-Shibuya, a few hours later-

He found himself outside of the Shibuya local police station. His face littered with various palm sized marks and his clothing scuffled. The only thing that seemed to have remained unscathed was his favorite purple scarf. Tama-chan sat on his head, snoozing peacefully. Keitaro sighed. æAll I wanted was some R & R. Sometimes, I miss Kanako-chan who made sure to minimize my stumbles.Æ He stared up to the sky, a full moon coming into his bespectacled view. æSo pretty, but why isnÆt it red? Wait a minute, the moon is never red.Æ

Keitaro sighed, before wandering into a dark street, his legs moving on autopilot. As he wandered through the empty streets, he tried to take his mind off of his problems. æWhy is my life so bad? What did I do in my past life to give me a life like this?Æ He knew that it could have been worse, but he still couldnÆt help but feel a bit bitter with his current situation.

ôAAAAAHHH!!!ö A feminine high pitched scream pierced the silence, startling him back to conscious thought. æHuh? Was that, someone asking for help.Æ Despite his abysmal lack of combat skill, he still ran towards the source of the scream, determined to help. After a few minutes, he stumbled upon the strangest scene.
There was a strange girl with green hair, clad in some odd black and blue strapless gown that dragged on the floor. She glared defiantly at these two green skinned creatures that were hard to describe. æGhoulsÆ He mentally identified as he looked on. æWait a minute, how did I know that? IÆm pretty sure this is the first time IÆve seen this thing before.Æ ôHey, stop!ö he yelled out, running to in between the two ghouls and the odd woman, only to trip on his feet and fall flat into the pavement. ôAuugghö Without another word, the two charged at Keitaro. ôCrapö With speed and dexterity he didnÆt know he possessed, he jumped back standing in front of the woman in a defensive manner. ôHey you, uh, ghoul things. If you donÆt stop, IÆll uh, call the cops.ö He pulled out his cell phone and waved it threateningly.

The girl, finally coming back to her senses after watching this human make an idiot out of himself, simply pushed him forward into the two ghouls. ôMake yourself useful and by me some time human.ö

ôWha?!ö He cried out as he pushed towards the ghouls. One of them, with a huge burst of speed charged forward, its hands out. æGhoul Twister.Æ KeitaroÆs mind supplied to him as his body reacted with a left hook into the GhoulÆs abdomen, knocking it back into a wall.

ôHuh.ö He stared at his left hand in wonder. ôItÆs like that time Motoko asked me to duel her and I beat her.ö He didnÆt have time to ponder as the other ghoul threw a fist at him. æShootÆ He dodged left, and tried to retaliate with a right straight, which unfortunately only nicked the ghoulÆs body.

ôMega Star!ö The girl yelled out triumphantly as a light slammed into the ghoul, killing it. Keitaro just blinked as the girl cackled maniacally in triumph. æReally strange girl, I better get out of here.Æ He tried to sneak away, only to be grabbed by the girl who know smirked maliciously at him.

ôThink you can get away from me human?ö She gave a haughty pose. ôNo one can get away from me, Mischa, future overlord of the netherworld.ö She gave out another evil laugh. Keitaro just sweatdropped. ôUm, since youÆre okay, I think IÆll just go now.ö The girl grabbed him again. ôHold it! I let bask in my glorious presence and all you do is leave. Stupid mortal. If you didnÆt act as my meatshield, IÆd flay you alive.ö She scowled at him, Keitaro absently thinking in his mind how cute the girl is when she scowls.

ôWell, since you did help me, just a little bit, IÆll let you have the honor of being my vassal.ö She smiled cruelly. ôIÆll even you pay you two sardines and a mackerel for your services.ö Keitaro looked at her dumbly. Tama-chan continued to sleep soundly. æWhatÆs up with this girl? A vassal? WhatÆs that? Two sardines and a mackerel? Do I look like a prinny toà. Wait a minute, whatÆs a prinny?Æ His mind too busy swimming with a questions, he didnÆt bother giving the girl a reply, which she deemed a response. ôGood. Now stupid mortal, follow me.ö Raising her staff into the air, a portal appeared, right under Keitaro. ôAhhh!!!ö Mischa just smiled. ôThis should be funö With another wicked smirk, she jumped after him.

-SalamanderÆs Breath-

Keitaro stopped screaming around the same time he landed face first onto the burning hot floor. ôOw.ö He stated dumbly. Tama-Chan gently glided on top of his head, giving a cheerful ômyuu!ö to the ronin. Silently picking himself up on the floor, he stared at his surroundings. It felt warm, very warm. æIt feels warm, but shouldnÆt I feel like dying right now.Æ He wondered as he stared at the volcanic wasteland he found himself in. He wordlessly took off his jacket and sweater, stashing them in his backpack.

ôHey Tama-Chan, IÆm not dreaming am I.ö Keitaro asked, before feeling someone land on top of him. ôOof!ö he grunted, falling on his back. After scrambling for his glasses, his vision cleared to the sight of the girl from earlier straddling his lap.

ôWha!?ö giving a girly scream, he slipped out of her from underneath and began apologizing. The girl just smirked. ôGood to know that you know your place human.ö Keitaro just sweatdropped at her response. æAt least she didnÆt hit/punch me to the atmosphere.Æ ôAnyway. My vassal, come on. We have a lot of ground to cover.ö The demon girl grabbed KeitaroÆs arm and began to drag him.

After focusing on her, he realized the girl couldnÆt be any older 15, judging from her rather flat chest and prepubescent figure. ôUm, where are we going Mischa?ö He askedà still confused by the whole situation, but he didnÆt dare leave a young girl alone in a place like this. The girl cackled. ôTo go kill Queen Etna and take her throne of course.ö

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Thoughts? I know it's grammatically not that great. I tried, but I'm not good enough to catch my errors. I'm overall very disappointed at the quality of the story. Hopefully, I'll get bettter as I write it.
 
#2
æItÆs like whenever I see a girl with a sexy body, I lose all control of my own bodyÆs functionsÆ
You know, that makes soooo much sense.

That said, it's okay so far. A bit abrupt about going from point to point, but it's not too distracting.
 

PCHeintz72

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#3
I think I've seen the series this is crossed with before... Hmmm... It will likely come to me later.

In any case, one major issue. Formatting.

How you have it formatted makes it hard to follow. Simply start a new paragrpah each time either mental viewpoint changes, or speaker changes. As it is, one needs to parse each paragraph, since both speak in most of them.
 
#4
I guess someone needs to point this out... The crossover is Disgaea. Apparently, this version of Keitaro is the reincarnated human form of Overlord Laharl after he served his time as a Prinny in the 'normal' ending to Disgaea 1.
 

PCHeintz72

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#5
Scygnus Darkhawk said:
I guess someone needs to point this out... The crossover is Disgaea. Apparently, this version of Keitaro is the reincarnated human form of Overlord Laharl after he served his time as a Prinny in the 'normal' ending to Disgaea 1.
Oh... that is so not the series I thought it was crossed with.

Oh well.
 

Cyberscythe195

Well-Known Member
#6
I'll do a bit of formatting on it. I think it's pretty bad. I just hoped on a little feedback. Anyway, I'm going to try and format it to flow better. The problem for me characterization since it's been forever since I've read love hina.
 

Shaderic

Well-Known Member
#7
Oookay. You crossed disgaea and LH. :huh:
With a weird, but somewhat believable premise too. Hmmm. Too little story so far to say how this is going to go. Decent start at least, though.
 

DhampyrX2

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#8
You know I almost pity the LH girls when Keitaro ends up coming home with Etna in tow. Let's face it, the only one she would think of sharing with is Flonne. Well, maybe Mutsumi.

And Now I have a scary image of Mutsumi actually being Flonne in a human body.
 

FinalMax

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#9
DhampyrX2 said:
You know I almost pity the LH girls when Keitaro ends up coming home with Etna in tow. Let's face it, the only one she would think of sharing with is Flonne. Well, maybe Mutsumi.

And Now I have a scary image of Mutsumi actually being Flonne in a human body.
No, that's not a frightening image. It's proof that reincarnation can upgrade someone.
 
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