Akamatsuverse Rise of Evangeline

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Alzrius

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ôThe class you knowàthat student you take for grantedàthatÆs all just a mask.ö

Ken Akamatsu
Kodansha Ltd.
Del Rey Books

ôImagine a trapped wizard with a soul of darkness, who wants to control manÆs destiny. Imagine you were the only one who could free her. But in order to do soàsomething terrible has to happen.ö

Negi puts his hand out, barely stopping a powerful ice spell. Evangeline reclines, grinning, in her adult form, surrounded by glassy-eyed schoolgirls in maid uniforms. Chachamaru slowly stands and emotionlessly looks around, one eye glowing. The entire Mahora campus blacks out, as Asuna looks around in disbelief. ôThis canÆt be happening!ö

Negi walks into EvangelineÆs cabin, his expression guarded as he looks about the doll-strewn room. ôEvangeline was here,ö he says to Chachamaru. ôWhere is she?ö

Negi looks up fearfully at Asuna, standing over him, with Chamo on her shoulder. ôAre you going to hit me?ö ôNo.ö she sighs with annoyance as she grabs him by the collar and drags him along. Chamo pipes up ôAnee-sanÆs mission is to protect you.ö

NegiÆs voice against the backdrop of Chachamaru destroying a flytrap spell, ôChachamaruàcan you think of a way to destroy her?ö Asuna lightly punching ChamoÆs head, ôUnlikely, heÆs just an ero-ermine.ö

Asuna and Chachamaru start fighting, with Chachamaru effortlessly deflecting all of AsunaÆs attacks. Makie, naked, walks forward, as Negi backs away. ôEvangeline has corrupted her system!ö

NegiÆs voice against the backdrop of Evangeline swooping down on a screaming Nodoka. ôEvangelineàsheÆs starting to take over!ö

Negi flies on his wand, desperately trying to dodge volleyballs from Yuuna and MakieÆs ribbon. Negi tries to cast spells at Evangeline, only to be slapped around by Chachamaru. ôThe power outageàthe end of the seal of her powersàitÆs today, three hours from now.ö

Four girls in NegiÆs class, in maid uniforms with glazed expressions, slowly stalk towards him as he falls back. ôGet away from me! Now!ö

Chachamaru slowly advances on a prone Negi, clearly reluctant to harm him. Behind her, Evangeline snarls at her. ôWhat is your mission?!ö ôTo ensure the freedom of Mistress Evangelineàö ôYou are about to fail that mission!ö

Asuna screams as she races down the bridge, towards where Evangeline is about to sink her fangs into NegiÆs neck, ôNo!!!ö Negi crawls away from an approaching Chachamaru, pleading, ôYou donÆt have to do this! You donÆt wanna do this!ö

Chachamaru answers emotionlessly as she advances. ôDesire is irrelevantàI serve Evangeline.ö

NEGIMA VOLUME 3: RISE OF EVANGELINE
 
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SimmyC

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Sounds good. One issue though, when you have different people speak, have it on seperate paragraphs. Otherwise, very good start.
 
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Alzrius

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SimmyC said:
Sounds good. One issue though, when you have different people speak, have it on seperate paragraphs. Otherwise, very good start.
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Thanks. I know about how different people speaking are supposed to be in different paragraphs. I didn't do that on purpose here. It was more difficult than I thought trying to textualize a movie trailer, where the images are rapid and often incongruous, and voices talk over them - often with no direct relation to what's being shown. So in order to try and keep that same rapid feel, I had the spoken text in the same paragraph.

In any event, as with everything else I've posted so far, I'm not going to write more of this. This isn't really that different from the actual third volume of Negima, so it's not like there's that much more to write anyway. I just wanted to do a Negima version of the T3 trailer.

By the way Simmy, I've been meaning to ask this for a while: what's your avatar from? I really like it.
 
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SimmyC

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You mean the Belldandy and Urd 'kiss'? It's from the Oh! My Goddess movie. Oh, and the 'kiss' is actually more innocent than I'm implying in that
Urd was adminstrating medicine to Belldandy and the way to do it, was orally.
:p So yeah, that's where my avatar came from.

If you want the website where I got it, I have that too. Just ask and I'll show it here.
 
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Alzrius

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SimmyC said:
You mean the Belldandy and Urd 'kiss'? It's from the Oh! My Goddess movie. Oh, and the 'kiss' is actually more innocent than I'm implying in that
Urd was adminstrating medicine to Belldandy and the way to do it, was orally.
:p So yeah, that's where my avatar came from.

If you want the website where I got it, I have that too. Just ask and I'll show it here.
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Hmm, sure, in case anyone else wants to get that too. I just wanted to know where it came from so I can track it down, since I haven't seen the AMG movie yet. I have it on CD-R, but my laptop won't play that, since the heat from the CPU has slightly damaged the lens that reads CDs.
 
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SimmyC

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Alright... here's the site that I got it from. I also used this site to get most of my avatars (and concerning this site, ALL my avatars). :p

http://www.anime-kun.net/

Its a French site and all but, no need to know the language. If you click on Gif Anime... there they are. ^_^
 
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Moshulel

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Is it just me or you definetly have one heck of an affinity with dark fics?

Anyway good start.
 
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SimmyC

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Well, I obviously have no problem with them. ^_^ If done right, more the merrier.
 
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