Very Nice. Hopefully not the end.
It is the end, it hit on all the plot points required by the generator. I had initially determined to expand it a bit, show Setsuna getting her due (Even if she was technically innocent, or at least unaware of her actions). Then showing her eventual marriage after her 'punishment' for causing all the strife they had endured. Ect. ect.
A bit to wrap it up, so to speak. It wasn't needed, leaving the ending abstract allows people to fill in the blanks in whatever particular way they want to fill it in.
Very cute. It made me laugh. I love how they poke at your cliches its funny.
I played with the damn table and it's scary. They almost write them selves.
They do kind of write themselves, don't they? As for the jumbled bit, you can work around it. I mean look at how I did it. This particular one was suppose to be Post-Canon Ranma, yet with out Ranma ever meeting his fiancees, and with Genma dying in China.
My solution? Most of the events that mattered took place in China exclusively, just with different contexts behind it. Genma's gear got stolen shortly after he died, a series of Misunderstandings saw war between the Amazons and Phoenix tribe who, after launching an assault on the Musk, managed to snag Genma's gear by sheer happenstance, which set Ranma on them to try and get it back. It all culminated with a similar styled battled between Saffron and Ranma, and then the boy finally got his fathers gear back (Which had been thrown into storage by the Phoenix and forgotten about).
The above took care of the Post-Canon requirement, even if I had to fundamentally alter Canon itself. Genma died in China, so he was never introduced to his fiancee's. Soun didn't think to press the engagement, because he had yet to receive a letter from Genma reminding him about it. Nodoka wouldn't press it either, not because she thinks her dear departed husband was an idiot, but she had long since made arrangements for Ranma to marry another woman (Setsuna) which, as far as she is concerned, superseded Genma's promise to the Tendos
Ranma then decided to journey home. In order to get him to Juuban, however, he had to become fed up with Nerima. This took a little bit of thought (I smoked 2 cigarettes while debating this problem), but I decided to expose him to the lunacy of Kuno and the stupid Horde attacking Akane. It was just enough to make him wish he hadn't bothered, and thus fulfilled the 'Fed up with' Nerima portion of the challenge.
As for taking place during Canon Ranma in your roll, and the "Forgotten about' bit, bare in mind that's a very wide range you can write about. You could interrupt the canon storyline just before Herb, or just before Saffron, ect.
Technically as long as it takes place *before* the failed wedding, it's happening during Canon Ranma. Figure it out from there. Ranma, becoming Sailor Moon, could purposefully sever all ties with his Fiancee's because he knows he had even more enemies coming out of the woodwork. And given how close Akane came to dying, it would be certainly justifiable.
If you truly love some one you'll let them go, no matter how much it might hurt you to do it. If this love is destined then they will eventually return, and if it's not then you did the best thing for them anyway. (Or some such rubbish)
and this accident could not be the same that effectively made him an orphan in canon.
I'll be frank, I lacked the exact details concerning the accident. I personally thought Mamoru was a bit older the toddler, like a young child, but I couldn't find verification with out drudging up some of the Manga and quite frankly I was too lazy to bother with that.
I only remembered it was a car accident that took his parents and made him an orphan, said accident also screwing him up mentally.
To Varth
I can understand your point of view, I just want you to know that. When it comes to longer fics, where you can spend time carefully laying things out you should be able to point out such specifics. This isn't one of those stories though, this moves far to fast through time to actually show the different emotional upheavals that take place during the course of a budding relationship (Be it friendship or something deeper). I couldn't explain every tiny detail that had shaped Ranma's personality, nor the terrible circumstances that slowly eroded Usagi's will and made her the way she is.
Anyway, I've said my peace on that. Maybe when I get around to writing an actual Ranma/SM fic you'll see what you like there.
To leeyiankun
This is true to an extent, and certainly true given the context of the conversation. I am free to do whatever the hell I want with the story, I just can't violate the various strings imposed by the challenge roll itself.
For instance, Ranma had to marry Pluto. He did, I followed the roll literally. 'Ranma Saotome' married Setsuna. It said nothing about 'only' marrying her, and given his new life as Tuxedo Kamen, he also married Usagi, only as Endymion. The whole Usagi angle wasn't dictated, so I was free to do with it as I pleased.
Now, if I rolled a secondary relationship, like Moon and Mars, then I couldn't have done it the way I did as Moon would be in a relationship with Mars and thus untenable unless I really bend the rules of the challenge.
Anyway, yarp.