Naruto Shinocracy

Meinos Kaen

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#1
Prey and predator. Flight and fight. Life and death.

She tried to get her breath under control. The exertion and tension were robbing her of her stamina quickly. In the off chance that the-the monster after their lives hadn’t seen them take refuge in their current location, they needed to be as silent as possible. For once she was actually glad that her team-mate froze up during these kind of situations. No crying, no harsh breath, nothing. The only indication the platinum blonde was still alive was the deathgrip she kept on her right hand.

Yes. In a situation like this, paralyzed silence suited her just fine.

“KARIN!” The way she suddenly shouted her name and almost crushed her hand didn’t.

The redhead snapped her head to the front, renouncing her peeking intentions. She almost wished she didn’t.

“Kukuku… Yesss, good.” She felt her skin crawl as the man slowly descended from a branch above, his body lengthened and curved to an impossible rate for a human being. His tongue slithered out, wet and elongated. Karin thanked all the gods one could pray to that it wasn’t also forked or she may have just wet herself. “That’s what a prey should do. Run. Hide.”

Get… Get away…” Karin uttered, sounding utterly unconvincing as she felt hot tears start to flow out. Her team-mate was shaking like a leaf in the north wind.

“And ultimately… Submit.” The thing wearing the skin of a human hissed out, a hand in the shape of a claw moving towards her. The sonuvabitch was enjoying every moment.

Karin started hyperventilating again. Dead. They were so dead. Life was flashing through her eyes, a mix of images and sensations.

The start of the Chuunin Exams. The tension as she laid eyes on the crowd.

The mission that brought them finally together as a team. The smell of brimstone.

Their teacher’s satisfaction at passing the graduation test. The taste of the meal they shared.

Meeting her team-mates for the first time, on a day of rain.

Her fourteenth birthday. The melting wax. The family picture.

Mom. Dad. Her aunt. Her uncle. Her cousin…

Her cousin. She gritted her teeth. Where had he gone? The monster said that he had taken him out first. But not him. Not so easily.

He was annoying stubborn in everything he did. Be it fighting, discussing or even that dumb rule of his to not use his family’s heritage. ‘Maybe that killed you?’ No. No, that couldn’t be. ‘Please. Please come back. We’re a team, just the two of us can’t-’ “Naruto…” The claw hand was in her face. “NARUTO!”

“HEARD YOU THE FIRST TIME!” She froze. Her female team-mate also froze around her hand as the impossible happened.

A blur of black, blue and yellow managed to get the drop on the snake monster, slamming into his right side and sending the fake human slamming into another tree and then through it. As her cousin pivoted and landed on their branch, the ancient tree creaked and crashed to the ground with a deafening roar. The young blonde then turned around, blue eyes wide in concern. “Karin! Shion! Are you alright?!”

“... What the hell took you so long?!” She tried to appear strong but her voice betrayed her relief, and slumping against the tree betrayed the tension that left her.

“Well, excuuuuse me! You have no idea what-!” He gasped as he found himself in a bearhug. Unlike Karin, the priestess slash ninja didn’t have any qualms about showing her real emotions. Sometimes it was good. Sometimes it wasn’t.

“I saw… I saw…!” Naruto actually winced as she strengthened her grip.

“Shion, that hurts…” The blonde priestess gasped and pushed back, suddenly self conscious. Her face was a mess of dirty, tears and embarrassment. Naruto sighed but then smiled. “You saw another of your visions.”

“... Yes.” The platinum blonde admitted but then smiled, wiping her eyes with the sleeve of her jacket. “And never I have ever been so happy about being proven wrong.”

“I can’t say I share that sentiment.” The three team-mates froze and turned around together, on their guard again.

Naruto clicked his tongue. Of course he was still alive, he thought as the man slithered up back another tree, keeping them in his sights. But he grinned as he saw the tears and gashes in his clothes and… Face? Naruto’s eyes widened. There was a face under his face?! GROSS!

“I actually felt that… An impressive feat, for a Genin.” Naruto snorted and tilted his forehead protector up with his right hand, and that’s when Karin noticed what looked like a tattoo snaking down his palm. Her eyes widened. He hadn’t…!

“Well, haven’t you heard? It’s the first time a genin team from Uzushiogakure enters a Chunin Selection Exam!” Naruto bellowed, the stylized whirlpool on the metal shining in the dim light now able to descend after the tree’s felling. “There’s plenty more surprises where that came from, snake bastard! You hurt me and my friends! Prepare to die!”


Meinos Kaen Present
Shinocracy
Chapter 1 - Fuiinjutsu ain't that cool


Yeah... Now there's like, a looooooooong flashback. Except it isn't a flashback.
 

Time Shifter

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#2
That's an interesting start. I've never read a story where Shion is actually a ninja, and it looks like we have a Naruto who until now refused to use chakra chains. You've got my attention. And it's great to see something posted here again!
 

Meinos Kaen

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#4
Four Months Earlier


Small feet carried their owner through a corridor and down a set of stairs. The latter slower than the straight line, because her height didn’t allow her to descend then quickly without also making some loud noises. But she needed to be silent. She needed to be shealthy… No, stealthy. Right.

She stopped at mid-stairs, squatting so that she had the advantage of surprise even if for just a second. She had seen her quarry approaching from her room’s window, and now saw his shadow through the door’s opaque glass window. She grinned and wiggled as she prepared herself.

One.

“Tadaima.” He said as he opened the door and removed his shoes.

Two.

“Mom? Are you home? Listen, I need-”

Three! She pounced!

“ONII-CHAN!” He froze and turned in her direction and gaped.

“AKANE, YOU DUMBASS!” She laughed as she went flying through the air from the stairs.

“Catch me, onii-chan!” Naruto was, once again, horrified, since his dumbass of a little sister had horrendous aim. Even and PARTICULARLY when she decided to jump at him from high places.

With reflexes born from eight years of ninja training and being an oniichan with the most hyperactive little sister ever, he jumped to the wall, pushed against it, bounced at his sister, caught her with a swiveling passage and landed on one foot and knee with her secured to his chest like a heart failure inducing package.

“Ahahah! You got me, onii-chan! You got me!”

“STOP JUMPING AT ME FROM HIGH PLACES WHEN I GET HOME, MORON!” Akane just laughed more as he reprimanded her. Naruto felt an incoming-Oh god, now she was holding her hands joined in front of her chest and her brown eyes were sparkling. She wanted something.

“Oni~ichan… You know how it was Akane’s sixth birthday last week?” He rolled his eyes. How could he forget. Since it was a special occasion she decided to jump at him from the roof of the house. “So, so, Akane got her present from jii-san today and… TA-DA!”

“Pwease ged id oud of my face.” Naruto grumbled as something was trust in his face so close that he could only see white and a little bit of black. Akane giggled and did as asked, holding the two objects to the side of her head, red bob bouncing. “... That’s calligraphy paper, ink and a brush.”

“Yeeees! Akane-chan can finally start practicing!” Naruto groaned. He knew where that was going. “Sooo, onii-chan… Please?”

“No.”

“Please?”

“NO.”

“Pwetty pwease with an Akane cherry on top?”

“It’s December. And again, N. O. NO.” Akane pouted. “Ask mom, jiji, uncle, Takeo-God, you have a whole clan of people to ask!”

“But jiji says you’re the best…” Akane pouted more, her lower lip becoming even more pronounced.

“Correction. He says I will be the best, but not if I have anything to say about it!” Naruto retorted, frowning and clicking his tongue. “So, Uzumaki ojou-sama kindly leave your older brother alone andohgodpleasetellmeyou’renotcrying.”

“Huuu…” Akane’s lower lip started quivering and her eyes to fill up with unshed tears. “Oh, woe is me! Betrayed by my only brother!”

“I didn’t betray anyone!”

“Alas, the only choice left to this poor princess after such a humiliation-”

“YOU HUMILIATE YOURSELF DAILY!”

“Is but death! Uzumaki Akane chooses death! Ack!” Akane said, bringing the brush up high and then bringing it down to her chest. With the soft part first. Not even hard enough to hurt, let alone pierce her skin. Over. And over. Again. All this while Naruto still held her in her arms.

‘She takes this whole ojou-sama business way too far, at times.’ “... Fine.”

“Ah! Miracle! This ojou-sama suddenly feels all better!”

“But not a word to mom or anyone! They may think I…” Naruto shivered. “May be interested in Fuuinjutsu again.”
 

Stormfury

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#5
Less of a flashback and more in media res perhaps?

Interesting take, though.
 

Emerald Oracle

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#7
This is fantastic and I am glad to see it exists. You always write such entertaining Naruto stuff Meinos Kaen, it's nice to see more of it!
 

Meinos Kaen

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#8
“Onii-chan, I told you. Mom will only be back in the evening.”

“The walls have ears, Akane… Literally.” Living in a village with a clan of Fuuinjutsu masters, you could never really be so sure you were alone and in private. After a thorough search, Naruto sighed and went back to his sister, who was kneeling in the middle of his room, ink at the ready. “Okay… You do realize that there isn’t much I can teach you if your calligraphy isn’t good?”

“Uhm! Akane will practice!” He rolled his eyes and sighed.

“I guess as a first lesson… Did anyone ever tell you what Fuuinjutsu is?” Akane beamed and nodded frantically. ‘Oh, this is going to be good.’ “What is it?”

“Fuuinjutsu is the noble art of the Uzumaki clan!” Naruto palmed his face. He recognized this version of the story. “It’s a way to tap into the powers of nature and, uh, enter in communion with its wo… Walkings?”

“Workings. And, Akane, all that stuff jiji told you? Forget it.” His little sister blinked in confusion as Naruto sat crosslegged in front of her. “I’m not kidding. Scrap it from your brain. Erase it. Or I’m not going to teach you anything.”

“Huu, okay…” Akane murmured, scratching the back of her head. It was a habit they shared because of their mother. “But oniichan… Does that mean grandpa is wrong about Fuuinjutsu?”

“So wrong. Deadly wrong. You have no idea how wrong he is.” Akane thought about it for a while. She loved her big brother to bits but the thought of their grandpa being wrong about something was… He was the clan head, after all. Then again, he had also said that Naruto was going to become one of the greatest Fuuinjutsu masters in the history of the clan. So…

“Then, oniichan, what’s Fuuinjutsu really?” Naruto sighed, shaking his head from side to side before dropping his eyes on Akane again.

“Fuuinjutsu is the shinobi version of bureaucracy.” Aaaaand he’d lost her again. He groaned, rubbing the top of his head. “Uhm, let’s see… You know how mom always comes back with her arms tired every second friday because of-”

“Evil paperwork!” He snapped his fingers.

“Bingo. That’s because of bureaucracy, which is the art of making paperwork.” Akane ‘oooh’-ed but then blinked.

“Seals are paperwork?”

“Yes! Exactly! That’s my sister!” The redhead giggled at the praise as Naruto crossed his arms and nodded. “Let’s say that mom is nature. You do paperwork to ask her to do something for you. And you pay for that with chakra.”

“But momma is cool!”

“But mum is also very strict. So is nature.” Naruto explained, sighing. “Akane, do you know what happens if you make a seal wrong?” Akane shook her head. “Nothing.”

“Nothing?”

“Nothing. There’s no catastrophe. No explosion. No backlash. No destruction of your chakra coils. It’s the equivalent of mum burning your carefully prepared paperwork to ashes.” Akane gasped. “In short, Fuuinjutsu is nothing so noble or special or magical. It’s just… Bureaucracy. You play by mom’s rules and do the paperwork correctly or you get nothing, even after spending hours making a single seal.”

“B-But why, mum? Why are you so mean?”

“Because she’s anal, that’s why.” The metaphore was getting out of hand, but Naruto didn’t seem to care. Akane suddenly blinked and raised her eyes to the ceiling. “Seriously, always going off on me about not wanting to follow in the family’s footsteps, wasting my talents… Bah!” Akane beamed and waved her left arm. Naruto didn’t notice, just like he didn’t notice the livid woman hovering behind his shoulders. “If you ask me, I think she’s cranky because-”

Crock. “Hi, mom!”

“Hi, sweetie! NARUTO, WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU TEACHING AKANE?!” Kushina roared, hair swivelling as if alive behind her while Naruto’s face got a pretty close and personal survey of the floor.

“Grumblened gorilla womanGACK!” Naruto found himself lacking air as Kushina caught him by the front of his clothes, forcing him to stare into the avatar of maternal fury herself.

“What did you CALL ME?!”

“Uhm, mommy, I don’t think onii-chan can answer like that…” Bless her soul, Akane prevented permanent damage to Naruto’s windpipe as Kushina realized that yes, indeed, you needed air to pass through your vocal chords to articulate answers. The only blonde in the room gasped for much needed air, making a mental note of buying more icecream for his sister.

“Wwwwhat should I call someone who punches her son’s face through the floor?!”

“The mother of an ungrateful little thug, that’s what! And now you’re even slipping your poison to your sister! Family-breaker!”

“Well, here’s a pot if I’ve ever seen one…” Kushina’s literal growl made Naruto swallow, wishing he’d develop a better survival sense when he was inside his own home…

“Ah, mummy! Can I ask you something?” Kushina stopped the second blow and turned to Akane with the warmest smile she could offer.

“Onii-chan said anal, and I remember you used it too when aunt Kiki came by and you drank all that adult grape juice… What does it mean?” She froze and Naruto sighed in relief as her grip slackened and he fell to the floor on his butt. And even more satisfying was the sight of his mother reduced to a flushed stuttering mess.

“Ehm, Akane, that is… Ehm…”

“Tadaima! Is everyone home?” Kushina gasped as her husband’s voice echoed from the lower floor.

“Daddy’s home! Sorry Akane, I’ll explain later!” And with that she was gone from the room as quick as she could without actually using chakra. Naruto sighed and turned to his little sister with a big smile.

“What flavour?” She held up two fingers in a victory sign.

“Melon!”
 

sikle

Well-Known Member
#9
Interesting. I saw the title and I thought 'Is this a story where Shino is democratically controlled by his hive?'. It's not. Still good though.
 
#10
I truly couldn't love this story any more if I tried, its so great
 
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