Show us your reviews...

[goldenarms]

Hmmm...á ditch Jessica and the dragon, add Agnes...á? that would about do it for me...


However...á? I seriously doubt such a setup would work, but than, when has that ever stopped harem writers...á look at Ranma and NGE and Love Hina and Tenchi.

Oh, definitely about the dragon for starters. She's a dragon that takes human form, not a human that takes dragon form.

Huge difference.

Besides, I couldn't seriously see her being anything more than a Tabitha supporter. Tabitha's happy, she's happy, and that is that.

Jessica, I couldn't really think of an angle for her other than "make Siesta Ranma's number one girl!"

Agnes... if anywhere, it'd have to be during the Tiffanna arc, one of those "too much wine" situations after dark, and with Tiffanna playing her harp to invoke memories.

But like I said, it'd be a whole nother story. Just the interactions alone is worth its own tale, nevermind how do the girls cope with each other with their man. Because that's something that gets overlooked/glossed over

Sure, all these women love me... but dude, there's two Tsunderes, one Kuudere, one Yandere, one Nadeshiko Yamamoto and a Dark Action Girl that did a High-Heel Turn.

[color=F5F9FD]:lol: if you tried clicking on the "links" and got frustrated.[/color]

 

[PCHeintz72]

I did say i did not think it would work...

Having said that... I do think Agnes and Ranma would be an interesting match though... considering her personality and her background... I could see Ranma appealing to her.

In any case... that is not really your story though, and just idle thoughts.

 

[goldenarms]

Some of the latest reviews I've gotten on Zero interface:

scott pike
2011-02-25 . chapter 6
ok chapter, but they need to be longer.

:huh:

An avg of 4600/chapter isn't doing it for you anymore?

Well, next chapter is literally double that average, so...

ZAMN
2011-02-18 . chapter 5
If this keeps up with the current level of humour and plot, then I can safely say that "Hill of Swords" will have met its match in the ZnT crossovers. I have never had so fun a time reading a chapter as I had with this one. I love the interplay among Kirche, Louise and Ranma and the characters are most assuredly the most entertaining I have read in a while. I applaud this chapter, and I hope that more will be soon to come.

Yopu know, comments like make the ego swell a bit. Not that it's bad or anything.

tuatara
2011-02-11 . chapter 4
Well, well. I wasn't sure if I was going to read or review more of this, but here we are.

I have to tip my hat to you for so thoroughly reshuffling the deck in this chapter. Canon is now well and truly dismissed, and that's an excellent development.

However...I'm now even more convinced that this is not Ranma to any particularly meaningful degree. Rather, I'm simply going to operate on the assumption that he's a Ranma-inspired original character.

Regardless of characterization, I actually remained interested in what was happening throughout, so I would consider that a success. Cheers.

Have to admit, the idea that someone sees it as a Ranma-inspired OC still bugs me to now. I don't even know how to approach that, and just decided to let it be for right now. Haven't heard from him on Chapter 5, either, as he has responded to everyone of them before.

and, just to keep up with the lesbian = bacon joke...

DesuExMachina
2011-02-18 . chapter 5
YES! Lesbians! all is right with the world.

:lol:

EDIT: OH, yeah, I also received a request to write a Prototype/ZnT xover from someone named <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2746940/gearsx117' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>gearsx117</a>, regardless of my level of familiarity with ZnT or Prototype and even where to begin with crossover and how the virus works.

Does this mean I have arrived as a writer?

 

[goldenarms]

aznblackhowling
2011-03-05 . chapter 7
This is a great Ranma and FoZ crossover. I liked how you chose Ranma before he started learning more advance techniques.

Someone... likes that I'm using an underpowered Ranma for this story?

 

[LightningHunter]

I've had weird reviews, flames, positive reviews, repetitive reviews, stupid reviews...but one of the most unique has to be for Toad Hermit:

Spiderwickchronicles
2011-02-24 . chapter 5
for so many years, well not years, but a really long time - i have evaded your stories and i don't know why, but after reading this, i guess i can trust you..

...?

 

[goldenarms]

I've had weird reviews, flames, positive reviews, repetitive reviews, stupid reviews...but one of the most unique has to be for Toad Hermit:

Spiderwickchronicles
2011-02-24 . chapter 5
for so many years, well not years, but a really long time - i have evaded your stories and i don't know why, but after reading this, i guess i can trust you..

...?

Wow, your very own tsundere.... I'm somewhat jealous.

 

[WizardOne]

I've had weird reviews, flames, positive reviews, repetitive reviews, stupid reviews...but one of the most unique has to be for Toad Hermit:

Spiderwickchronicles
2011-02-24 . chapter 5
for so many years, well not years, but a really long time - i have evaded your stories and i don't know why, but after reading this, i guess i can trust you..

...?

Wow, your very own tsundere.... I'm somewhat jealous.

I reread the review, and oh my god goldenarms, you're right haha.

 

[Lord Raa]

Lord Raa,

A new review/comment has been submitted to your story.

Story: Sausages, It was a Tuesday
Chapter: 16. Chapter 16

From: Hammerchuckery ( <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2378016/' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2378016/</a> ) Reply URL: <a href='http://login.fanfiction.net/review_pm.php?reviewid=124608874' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://login.fanfiction.net/review_pm.php?reviewid=124608874</a>
-------------------

An absolutely wonderful read Lard Raa! Spent my whole night just reading, the omake's however really detract from the main story. Have you thought of separating them unto their own section?
-------------------
Do not reply to this email. If the review is signed, use reply link provided above.

FanFiction.Net Messaging Service

Hmm....

This person also added Sausages to their alert list. Sausages has been completed for a couple of years now.

 

[Legendary Legacy]

This person also added Sausages to their alert list. Sausages has been completed for a couple of years now.

Happens all the time with my one-shots. I can tell them it's a one-shot, it can have the Complete tag under the summary, I can even write 'The End' when it's over to avoid confusion, and I still have some with 10-20 Story Alerts for it.

 

[Li Qin]

supremebandit
2011-04-20 . chapter 1
the third's name is Hiruzen Sarutobi... Sasuke Sarutobi was his father, they state that in the manga when Kushina is telling Naruto about the events of the past in the manga.

Yes because when I wrote the chapter three years ago I was able to see into the future.

As for the alerts. My most alerted fic is the only one I've put as completed.

 

[PCHeintz72]

This person also added Sausages to their alert list. Sausages has been completed for a couple of years now.

Happens all the time with my one-shots. I can tell them it's a one-shot, it can have the Complete tag under the summary, I can even write 'The End' when it's over to avoid confusion, and I still have some with 10-20 Story Alerts for it.

Heh... there is a counter arguement to all that.

I use feeds, since it is more annonymous and does not flood my email like their alert system, seems slightly more stable as well.

However, I disagree with you stating 'The End' avoids confusion, or that Story alerting a one shot is pointless.

I've seen authors that place 'The End' at the end of 'every' chapter, becuase it is the end of the chapter.

I've seen authors turn a supposed 1 shot into a 2 parter after changing their mind.

I've seen authors continue stories years after they've stated it is done, or it is abandoned.


By monitoring feeds or story/author alerts, you avoid missing stories getting updated.

 

[bigbabidi]

A review for my Naruto harem fic. The same story in which I lessened the amount of women involved with Naruto because I had planned for too many beforehand.

Big-Babidi,

A new review/comment has been submitted to your story.

Story: An Unexpected Return
Chapter: 5. Chapter 4: Village Tour

From: Panther-Freedom02 ( <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2571185/' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2571185/</a> )
Reply URL: <a href='http://login.fanfiction.net/pm/post.php?rwid=137603556' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://login.fanfiction.net/pm/post.php?rwid=137603556</a>
-------------------

can you add Tsunade, Shizune, Honoka(suspected Uzumaki), Konan, Mei Terumi,
Fem-Haku, Yakumo, Suzumebachi Kamizuru, Sasame Fuuma, Hana Inuzuka, Tsume
Inuzuka, Mikoto Uchiha, Kotohime, Guren, Haruna, Hisame, Hokuto, Isaribi,
Fubuki Kakuyoku, Koyuki Kazahana, Kujaku, Natsuhi, Shion, Toki,
Tsubaki(Mizuki's fiancÚe), Tayuya, Kin Tsuchi, Tsunami, F?, Yugito Ni'i,
Fem-Nibi, Yoshino Nara, Karin, Samui, Karui, Fugai, Kamira, Ranke, Hotaru,
F?ka, Akari Tatsushiro, Kagura, Komachi, Y?gao Uzuki, Ni, Amaru, Sara,
Kurotsuchi, Pakura, Kaori, Mabui, Maki, Yui, Yurika, Rin, Nae, Kohada, Suzume,
Kaori, Taji and Otoha into naruto's harem?

:wacko: That's just... so fucking many characters I hardly even know where to begin. Hell, I don't know who all of them are. And Fem-Nibi? Really?

 

[WizardOne]

A review for my Naruto harem fic. The same story in which I lessened the amount of women involved with Naruto because I had planned for too many beforehand.

Big-Babidi,

A new review/comment has been submitted to your story.

Story: An Unexpected Return
Chapter: 5. Chapter 4: Village Tour

From: Panther-Freedom02 ( <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2571185/' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2571185/</a> )
Reply URL: <a href='http://login.fanfiction.net/pm/post.php?rwid=137603556' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://login.fanfiction.net/pm/post.php?rwid=137603556</a>
-------------------

can you add Tsunade, Shizune, Honoka(suspected Uzumaki), Konan, Mei Terumi,
Fem-Haku, Yakumo, Suzumebachi Kamizuru, Sasame Fuuma, Hana Inuzuka, Tsume
Inuzuka, Mikoto Uchiha, Kotohime, Guren, Haruna, Hisame, Hokuto, Isaribi,
Fubuki Kakuyoku, Koyuki Kazahana, Kujaku, Natsuhi, Shion, Toki,
Tsubaki(Mizuki's fiancÚe), Tayuya, Kin Tsuchi, Tsunami, F?, Yugito Ni'i,
Fem-Nibi, Yoshino Nara, Karin, Samui, Karui, Fugai, Kamira, Ranke, Hotaru,
F?ka, Akari Tatsushiro, Kagura, Komachi, Y?gao Uzuki, Ni, Amaru, Sara,
Kurotsuchi, Pakura, Kaori, Mabui, Maki, Yui, Yurika, Rin, Nae, Kohada, Suzume,
Kaori, Taji and Otoha into naruto's harem?

:wacko: That's just... so fucking many characters I hardly even know where to begin. Hell, I don't know who all of them are. And Fem-Nibi? Really?

from the fact that none of the words aside from the names are capitalised, and the punctuation visible in the non name list part of the review is horrible, I surmsie He copy pasted someone elses list from something.

 

[ragnarok1337]

This wasn't a review to any story I wrote, but...

What makes you say that everything you write is a work of art?

Sounds like someone has autism to me, I'm not entirely convinced that you can say Osaka is autistic since, she doesn't really exist. With that little fact it is just about impossible to determine whether she is or is not. But let's just say, it's not entirely unrealistic to say she has autism. There are quite a few things that suggest it. I'm not sure that Osaka's character couldn't understand emotions in the show (I did not read the manga) but why not? it's not like you're saying something terribly offensive, if you're saying that Osaka is autistic then that fits, perfectly.

It seems to move along a little slowly, at least as far as I'm concerned. I kinda prefer stories that have a faster pace, or at least go slower but have a longer length to them, or don't idolize Osaka. To be honest I'm not a fan of hers. It's not that I don't like her, it's just that I don't see what makes her special. On the plus side she is much better than /b/. She has good qualities, but her bad qualities make me just feel neutral towards her. Same with Chiyo. And Tadakichi. I just like Kagura and Minamo. I don't like Yukari, I dislike Yukari. There aren't too many things that I can find that are wonderful attributes of Miss Tanazaki. Which is why I get very angry every time I see a YukarixMinamo fic, those drive me insane. Why do people like to pair Minamo with a jerk like Yukari? It seems unfair that so many people say that every girl is a lesbian, it just seems unlikely. Oh well, what does that have to do with your story? Not a damn thing, epic fail on my part.

As for the story, I don't know how you'd follow it up. Odds are you already know how to continue this story so I'll leave that up to you, even if I've never seen anything else you've written. I have a hunch it's a mutual predicament.

Overall it's a good story. I'm almost certain that I will see another chapter added to this. Oh and thanks for posting something pushing my stuff further down the list

8/10

Now I take my random ideas and whatever back to my Aspergers based retreat I guess.

Why, you ask, did I put it here? Let me highlight a bit of the review.

On the plus side she is much better than /b/

So according to the author the only good thing about Osaka from Azumanga Daioh is that iShe's better than /b/. Glowing review there, it is.

 

[The Ero-Sennin]

Oh you guys will love this one.

Story: Beautiful Destroyer Sailor Moon
Chapter: 11. Relations Ship


As a callous double-standard proud sadist, you're not the right guy to talk about evil, and the thing about Yakuza is that they usually aren't filled with regret but genuinely enjoy what they are doing.

You don't hate genuine evil, i.e. balanced calculated premeditated ideological sadism and malevolence. You hate people who have legitimate extreme damage and emotional disorders beyond their ability to heal for having the audacity of receiving them, all reason and medical research to the contrary, and twist your narratives to paint a false image of reality that decency and helping others is associated to "the more pain you cause, the more justified you get", making you yet another destructive demagogue.

Overall Yakuza tend to think much the same way that you do, just more extremely so, which makes the entire story perspective out of whack, but yeah they are systematic slavers, torturers, murderers, extortionists, cause much more damage and regrets than they could possibly feel themselves, and they are completely ruthless assholes to boot

In addition, although they are right in that most crime are a symptom of fundamental problems within society at large, in various developing countries or Russia for example, and would be greatly diminished with improved overall education and possibilities, Japan does not qualify (on the other hand plenty of Yakuza are foreigners to Nippon...), and it definitely does not invalidate putting a stop to individuals who prey upon relative innocents. It isn't remotely like their future drug-ravaged, raped, tortured, ruined, or murdered victims don't matter just because "the big picture" isn't solved.

That said, if they were investigated and indicted enough to have warrants the police would have been perfectly capable of handling it.

If not, vigilantism would catch the wrong people 9 times out of 10 and have no alternatives/system of proportionate nuances in dealing with them.

In addition, a non-superhuman district champion teenaged martial artist would be helpless before the monsters, and do much more good by simply supplying the police with information.

Still, this is all strange coming from you, considering that you comparatively endorse the Hokage behaving like an Oyabun or Shampoo behaving and thinking like a hardcore Black Lagoon sociopath Yakuza mercenary hitman elsewhere.

From a strictly story standpoint there is some lack of clarity regarding the whole betrayal deal, although it seems inspired by a similar chapter of D.B. Sommer's Avenging story. Getting technical the Yakuza princess genuinely betrayed her father, and should have left information to the authorities, but the specifics othervise did not translate well. As you presented it Balalaika already knew and was about to assassinate the Senshi anyway, with the Oyabun's daughter managing to spare her friend (and presumably the family members).

Regarding the armed forces, as it is, it tends to be (in fact there are assorted interview books, investigations, and leaks that prove it to be so) a mixture of self-sacrificing idealists and pragmatic serial-killers no morally different from Jeffrey Dahmer, who wish to perform their adrenaline-kick slaughter in a socially endorsed fashion. It is a very muddled contradictory issue. Definitely agreed about firemen, rescue workers, police, and doctors though.

Overall though, the characters here are far less unlikeable, as they started out so nice before you got your hands on them. Ragingly perverted to the point of somehow enjoying being gang-raped, and women changing gender to have sex feels creepy, politically incorrect or not, but nevertheless, the characters themselves are mostly decent, and the opponents genuine sociopathic murderous assholes, so there is a much greater sense of moral clarity here, despite that, as usual, you mostly create your own characters, half of the time to act as a personal mouthpiece, and stick a familiar name on them. You call yoghurt ice cream, but at least you here don't call it bratwurst.

As for the deconstruction... not particularly, satire certainly, but mostly a lot of faux-alternative character interpretations and YouTube attitude.

BTW: You're welcome for the borrowed goofy shapeshifting plot although I mostly used as social commentary.

Oh Antvasima

 

[WizardOne]

What.
I don't even...

There are people like that out there?
Seriously?

Ugh.

 

[The Ero-Sennin]

And here's two from The Key to A Successful Interview.

This is what Ranma fanon has done to the fandom, look upon this and weep.

Interesting story.

I hope Ranma decides to take the time to experiment with the various mental states and how they interact with ki and the various possible uses. This could be done by simply holding the effect in a small ball and trying out various states of mind and when it forms something stable to try it out against various sample living and non-living targets studying energy used, speed, characteristics of the projectile or aura effect, effects, etc. Some examples: How do anger and depression compare when felt equally? How do they compare with anger? How do they compare with sadness (as in Hokuto no Ken/Fist of the North Star)? How about righteousness? How about lust (it might be funny if it happens to manifest with the appearance of Happosai's explosives)? How about love? How about the pure calm variant of the "death stare"? Can some be used to heal (perhaps love or some variant like maternalness or paternalness)? Maybe even some pure thoughts could have unusual effect like maybe equations can be used to alter reality or something. MAybe even the feeling of sensations can be used to create certain aura effects with unusual properties. This could get Ranma to research and experiment with a lot of the more esoteric aspects of ki like the concept of yin-yang, the various elemental systems, alchemy (western and eastern views), etc. Cologne might be interested enough to consider working with Ranma a bit on it and in return for Ranma to share his results to help update her records and to verify the information. Perhaps by projecting the right aura in the proper way into a fruit could result in something like the mythical peach of immortality, or similar mythical creations like Maui's fishing line, amrita, etc. This could also result in learning how to make things like magic weapons or mystical holy charms and ofuda. This could lead to Ranma to unkowingly being on a path of divine ascension of sorts as his understanding and use of ki goes beyond monks and holy men. Maybe he could study the various forms of Buddha's statues (body position and forms of serenity) and other religious forms (like the guardian supernatural statues of some temples) and the channeling the appropriate expressed thought form to see what the effects are and experiment with. A further experiment could be to whether it is possible to absorb ki from the general environment or to sense it in the environment.

And

Further comments to add to my earlier comments on things that Ranma might be interested in studying to further his understanding and use of ki:

It was shown that non-emotion specific ki somehow dissipates, but what happens if an externally manifested emotion-ki construct has another different emotion-ki externally mixed in. In other words instead of directly opposing ki blasts, an interference pattern is used kind of like a ki-static, for lack of better term, to neutralize them by disrupting the structure pattern so that they become little more than puffs of air.

Are there other manifestations of the effects? This might put an interesting view of how Soun's demon-head technique works or Genma's various noisy and sneaky thief techniques work. Maybe the underlying concept is how the Soul of Ice and the techniques that uses it works as well. Maybe he could study claims of the manifestations of the Sailor Senshi's power and see whether the idea of concept-based ki can be used to create similar effects. Maybe by combining method acting and concept-based ki, he could emulate the abilities of magical boys and magical girls, creating the effect of Rainbowman (the original live-action superhero) and Cutey Honey.

 

[ragnarok1337]

That first one for BDSM was well thought out and well-written. A step up from most reviews.

Its only flaw is that it doesn't really make any sense.

 

[WizardOne]

That first one for BDSM was well thought out and well-written. A step up from most reviews.

Its only flaw is that it doesn't really make any sense.

I understood every word he wrote, but when I tried to put the words together I

<a href='http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/10/67150915.jpg/' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>

</a>

 

[A_T_Sigma]

Ehh....goddamn I haven't done this in a long while...but it is comments like this that really REALLY is making me consider disabling the fucking anonymous reviews. I swear to god do people even read!?

I just...holy shit...the arrogance of some people's incompetence drives me insane!

Celine
1/27/12 . chapter 18
Why is this title even categorized as Hope & Lightning? If you're going to have hoped end up with different woman just about every story, then it should be just 'Hope' or even 'Hope & Harlem' =.=

The whole damn thing is categorized as Hope & Lightning because one I want it that way, two most of the damn one-shots are about THEM, and three there is no Harem category *face palm*.

Did you even READ at all where I stated in the freaking summary...IN EVERY CHAPTER that this story is complied of a bunch of DRABBLE SERIES? Hey did you even READ all the OTHER DRABBLES? To know that some of them don't even FEATURE Hope/Lightning?

And its Harem sweetie, HAREM, not a place in NYC. :rant:

 

[Meinos Kaen]

Two for Sexplosion. This is one of the first I got for the story.

WHY, WHY, WHY, DID YOU POST THIS PIECE OF CRAP, IT'S A SHITTY STORY AND A INSULT TO THE ENTIRE nARUTO SERIES, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, DESTROY THIS STORY, GOOD GOD DESTROY IT?

This is the LATEST I got for the story.

Happosai!? Happosai!? Happosai!

In our next heart-stoppingly intense episode we may jsut have the culmination
of as many as ten chapters worth of sub-plot and foreshadowing!?

Can Anko's friend keep it in her pants, and more importantly Naruto's?

Will Sasuke realize that the only way to save his sisters' morality is to give
them to the very person he fears the most will find them?

What will his face look like when he does?

Will our daring young protagonist succeed in escaping the dastardly clutches
of the most the most terrifying snake summoner he'll ever meet?

Will he manage to escape Orochimaru as well?

Speaking of Sannin, has Tsunade been exposed to the Kyuubi Pheromone?

Answers to these questions and more!? Tune in next time, and hope Meinos Kaen
moves the plot faster than Bakamoto!

This is Gibbousmoons, broadcasting from Happosai International Networks, now
with 50% more gratuitous panty shots per episode!

... Yeah.

 

[A_T_Sigma]

Laddonbi
1/31/12 . chapter 3
I have to say in comparison to your story 'Every Woman Loves a Man that Will Listen' which you've given up on. This story is crap.

Wow just wow! Let's just totally flame a fic without no constructive criticism that I stated in the beginning is a bunch of one-shots. A WIP fic at best until I can come up with an actual storyline.

But you probably didn't read any of that. *facepalm*

Excuse me if I like to try something new with a developing harem story, if you want your same old cliche harem fics go look for them elsewhere.

I wish there was an option to take off anonymous reviews for SPECIFIC stories or categories, because somehow all the fics i've ever done for naruto only seems to attract all the crazy. *sighs*

 

[Lord Raa]

Lord Raa,

A new review/comment has been submitted to your story.

Story: Purpose Built to Not Feel Guilt
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: mark3232 ( <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2777349/' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2777349/</a> ) Reply URL: <a href='https://login.fanfiction.net/pm2/post.php?rwid=143433529' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>https://login.fanfiction.net/pm2/post.php?rwid=143433529</a>
-------------------

So the joke is that the full extent of their power is nothing to him? Firstly, not everyone says so. Second, because they're separate fictional worlds it's only because you say so. And thirdly, that wasn't the full extent of their power anyway.
-------------------

I'm thinking that someone might have missed the point of that story.

 

[A_T_Sigma]

This is less of a review and of a PM I just got...

Now mind you he/she/it put my story on their alert list so when I read this pm I was kind of like wtf??

this is from a 'Kyubbi16'

Dude, you should take your bad story rant and post it in a review of all the horrible new crossover stories that keep popping up every day.

........WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?!

I'm failing to see how this sentence is even relevant to anything I've written! More over I don't even bother flaming stories I can't stand. So I'm trying to understand what the fuck you're trying to say because I damn sure do not ever recall leaving nasty reviews for any of your fics.

Some people I just...why does Naruto fanfiction bring all the crazy to the yard!

WHY?!

 

[Nanya]

Some people I just...why does Naruto fanfiction bring all the crazy to the yard!

WHY?!

Because Naruto is a horrible series that should have ended years ago and morons think it's the best thing ever.