Ranma ½ Snake in the Horse's Shadow

Lord Raa

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It's not dead yet!
 
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Before leaving for Nerima, Ranma and Kasumi had been called into General Hammond’s office for one last conversation.
 
“Miss Tendo, Jolinar, thank you for your help resolving the issue with Captain Carter,” the bald man said, bowing his head respectfully. “I understand that you’re making a great personal sacrifice.”
 
“You’re welcome,” Kasumi hesitantly replied in English. She was still getting used to the idea of knowledge being in her head that she hadn’t learned herself. But a few strange things was more than worth being able to move without pain.
 
“Yes, thank you, Kasumi. You too, Ranma.”
 
She looked to see Ranma nodding at Colonel O’Neill.
 
“Don’t worry about it. I like to help,” the pigtailed martial artist replied with a modest shrug. “I’m just worried how Kasumi’s father going to take it when I tell him I have to take his daughter away with me.”
 
“It could be worse, you could have gotten Kasumi pregnant,” O’Neill smirked. “That said, she is technically eating for two now...”
 
“Don’t even joke about that,” Ranma warned.
 
The Colonel blanched. “Yeah, I saw what happened when we saw the Baroness... I’m sorry Ranma.”
 
“The Baroness?” Kasumi repeated.
 
“Long story which we’re not going into right now,” Ranma insisted. He turned to face General Hammond. “Thank you for your hospitality and help getting my father home. If you need my help, you know where to reach me. Well, when I’m on Earth, I mean.”
 
“Where will you keep your ship?”
 
“Not telling,” the martial artist replied. “If you don’t know, you can’t tell anyone. I’ve learned that the hard way.”
 
“Fair enough,” O’Neill nodded in approval. He was reminded of his previous classified missions.
 
“I’ll let you know when I get back,” Ranma said moments before the transport rings on his ship descended around him and Kasumi.
 
 
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Progress on this and other fics will be slow as I recover from a slight mishap with a hot melt glue gun. 

If you want I can post pics.
 

Lord Raa

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#27
Snake in the Horse’s Shadow


By Lord Raa


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Disclaim-me-do: There is no sexy way to remove a leg.


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Part 11


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Kasumi was in deep thought about her options. It was true that she wanted more from life, but it was also true that she felt obligated to look after her father.

“Kasumi?” Ranma asked her as he approached. “Have you made your decision?”

“I… I don’t know what to do, Ranma-kun,” she admitted. “What you’re offering sounds very exciting, but I can’t abandon my father. I'm sorry.”

“You want a life of your own, but you need to make sure your father is cared for,” the long-haired man said in an understanding tone.

“But what about Jolinar?” the brunette asked. “I don’t want to let her down…”

“I’ll find Jolinar a new host; you worry about your father. I’ll let everyone know about your decision.”

“But who?”

“I don’t know yet, Kasumi,” Ranma admitted. “But if you need to look after your family, then you should look after them.”

“Then you’re not angry?” Kasumi asked, she blinked slowly as she felt the energy drain out of her.

“I can’t criticise someone for thinking of their family first; I risked life and limb to rescue my dad from some hellish places. If your family is important to you, then they come first; no doubts about it.”

“I… thank you for understanding, Ranma-kun,” Kasumi bowed politely. When she returned upright, she felt a little dizzy. “Oh…”

“Is everything alright, Kasumi?”

“I’m a little tired, that’s all.”

Before Ranma could ask “Are you sure?” the brunette collapsed like a marionette with the strings cut, with only the martial artist’s reactions stopping her from falling to the floor.

“Crap. Little help here?” he called out. “Anyone? I need a doctor here!”


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Colonel O’Neill had been growing impatient with Ranma’s attempts to convince Kasumi to help get the Goa’uld out of Carter’s head and decided to check up on him.

“I need a doctor here!”

Breaking into a jog, he rushed to where he heard the voices come from and saw Ranma cradling the brunette.

“Ranma, what’s wrong?”

“I don’t know, she just collapsed. Which way to Dr. Fraiser?”

“This way,” O’Neill said as he ran off in the direction of the Infirmary.


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Ranma, for all his faults, knew when he couldn’t help and stood back. He wore a look of apprehension on his face as he watched Janet Fraiser expertly examine the unconscious brunette.

It was a side of his personality that O’Neill hadn’t seen before.

‘Medical emergencies are always humbling experiences…’ the Colonel thought as the medical team put Kasumi on a ventilator.

A few minutes later, Dr. Fraiser approached the two men. “I’m sorry to tell you this, Ranma, but I’ve got some bad news for you: Kasumi has suffered a brain haemorrhage. We’re doing what we can, but brain injuries are hard to predict and we’ll know more in the morning.”

“Is there anything I can do?”

“Not right now, Ranma, but you should know that if the damage is too severe, Kasumi won’t wake up,” the doctor explained.

“She’ll be stuck there in that bed?” the martial artist asked.

“I’m sorry, but yes, she will be. She won’t even be able breathe on her own.”

Ranma turned away. “I… shit. This is my fault. I knew she wasn’t well, and I made her use the rings…”

“You can’t predict a brain haemorrhage, Ranma. They’re triggered by many things: aneurysms, head trauma, hypertension, brain tumours are all linked with them. She could have had this bleed last week or next month.” Fraiser explained.

“But still, finding out you’re being asked to host an alien couldn’t have helped.”

“Maybe not, but you mentioned she’d been ill. Do you know what it was?”

“Err… some sort of auto-immune disease,” the raven-haired man said, looking a little distracted. “We didn’t really go into the specifics.”


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“Mr. Tendo, I…” Ranma started to say to the empty room. “Crap, I don’t know what to say to him. I can’t tell him the truth.”

There was a knock on the door.

“Yeah?”

“Ranma, I’m sorry to bother you, but Jolinar wants to talk to you,” Jack O’Neill said solemnly.

“I’m not really in the mood to talk to anyone right now.”

“She said it’s important,” the Colonel added.

“Fine, lead the way,” the martial artist sighed. “I don’t suppose you’ve got any idea what it’s about, do you?”

“She said something about leaving Carter.”

Ranma silently followed O’Neill to where Captain Carter was being held.

“What’s up now, Jolinar?”

“I… I’m reaching the point of no-return. If I don’t change hosts now, I won’t be able without killing Captain Carter,” the blonde explained.

“Well, I’m sorry, but Kasumi’s lying in the Infirmary with some kind of bleeding in her brain right now,” the pigtailed man snapped.

“I can save her, but I have to act now, Ranma!”

“What’s the problem, Ranma?” asked O’Neill.

“Kasumi,” Ranma sighed. “Kasumi said that she couldn’t abandon her father. I can’t blame her for putting family first.”

“But she’s dying, Ranma. Doing this now saves her and helps out the SGC by giving us Carter back,” the Colonel insisted. “Not to mention the countless lives the Tok’Ra will save from the Goa’uld.”

“I know. But it has to be her choice. I can’t just give the go-ahead for a parasitic snake to take up permanent residence in her head if she’d rather die.”


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Ranma stood by Kasumi’s bed, looking concerned at the tubes going into the brunette.

“Kasumi, I don’t know if you can hear me, but the only way to save you is for Jolinar to go into your head. It means you’re going to have to leave your life behind, but this is your only chance.”

Ranma scratched his head. “I… if you can hear me and you understand and you want to go through with this, squeeze my hand,” the pigtailed man said as he place his hand inside Kasumi’s.

The adrenaline rushing through the martial artist’s veins caused his perception of time to slow.

“Come on, Kasumi, please tell me you can hear me.”

The tension continued to build, but then ever so gently, Kasumi squeezed Ranma’s hand.

“Thank you, Kasumi. I’ll get Jolinar in here now.”


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Ranma returned to the Tendo Dojo and sought out his father.

“Dad, I need to talk to you.”

“What’s up, Son?”

“It’s about Kasumi,” the pigtailed man said with a sense of urgency. He took his father into an unoccupied room for some privacy. “You know she’s sick? Well, she’s gotten worse.”

“How bad is it?” Genma asked, his expression solemn.

Ranma took a deep breath. “She collapsed. The doctors said that she didn’t have a chance.”

“Is she still with the SGC?”

“Yeah.”

“We should bring her back for Tendo-kun. He should see her before she passes away,” the portly man said.

“There’s a problem. You know how I had an idea to cure her of her sickness; it involved her hosting a Tok’Ra, Jolinar. We talked it over, but she said ‘no’ at first. Then she collapsed with a brain thing, I think the doctor called it a ‘haemorrhage’. Her hosting Jolinar was the only way to save her.”

“This is awkward,” Genma sighed. “Tendo-kun relies on Kasumi. He makes first-year university students look like skilled homemakers; he can barely make instant noodles, let alone keep a house running smoothly. Ignoring him having to look after himself, what are we going to tell him when his daughter can’t come home anymore?”

“I don’t know, you know him better than I do!” Ranma countered.

“Even before we left for our training trip, it’d been years since I saw him. Even if he was my brother, I wouldn’t know how to tell him that his first born child wasn’t dead, but he couldn’t see her ever again.”

Silence descended as the two martial artists considered what to do.

“If you were to tell him that you were taking a job in America and that you were willing to take Kasumi with you as your fiancée…”

“Pops, ignoring the fact we’ve talked about you arranging marriages before, I’m not getting married to a Snakehead.”

“You wouldn’t have to get married to her, Ranma,” Genma clarified.

“Pops, Jolinar likes me. She tried to use Carter to convince me we should, you know. Telling her that I’ve got some kind of arranged marriage with her host is going to be like trying to fight off a lion with a steak!”

“If you can think of a better idea, then I’m all ears, Son. Look, what if we tell Jolinar that she’s got to pretend to be your fiancée?” the older Saotome suggested. “Rather than it being a proper engagement?”

“Pops…” the pigtailed martial artist sighed, “Are you really telling me that you don’t see this going wrong?”

“If you’ve got a better idea, I’m all ears, Ranma.”

Ranma finally conceded with a sigh. “Fine, but you better not try anything. It’s going to be hard enough getting Jolinar to pretend as it is.”


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Samantha Carter blinked slowly. She hadn’t felt this bad in a long time. After a few minutes contemplation, she had come to the conclusion that her current condition could be described as bad hangover combined with a dose of the flu, minus all the mucus.

“…ugh…” she groaned exhaustedly.

“Captain Carter?” Dr. Fraiser asked, looking up from her clipboard. There was another groan, this one answering in the affirmative. “You’ve been out for two days. How do you feel?”

“Drained. How’s Kasumi?”

“She’s been unconscious since Jolinar was transferred,” Janet answered. “Since we’ve never really seen Goa’uld healing up close before, I asked Teal’c about this. Apparently, it’ll take some time for her to get up to speed, despite the symbiote.”

“Y-yeah,” Carter agreed, flashes of memory surfacing when she thought about the Goa’uld blending process.

There was a knock on the door, drawing the two women’s attention to Jack O’Neill.

“About time you woke up, Carter,” the Colonel joked. “We were beginning to think that we’d need to find a replacement scientist.”

“You won’t get rid of me that easily, Sir,” the blonde smiled.

“Glad to hear it, Captain. Doc, what’s the official medical advice?”

“At least another day here in the infirmary for observation,” the doctor replied. “Then a week’s leave before she can come back for desk duty. A week of that, and we can talk about more strenuous work.”

“Paperwork? Ouch,” Jack sympathised. “Still, it beats a lifetime in a cell with a snake in your head. How’s Kasumi and Jolinar doing, Doc?”

“Jolinar is still working on healing Kasumi, Colonel. Brain haemorrhages are complicated things to repair, let alone when there’s an underlying auto-immune condition. I can’t say when she’ll be fit enough to travel, but her condition is improving.”


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“Saotome-kun, when did Kasumi say she’ll be back from visiting her friend?” asked Soun Tendo.

“Are you getting tired of my cooking, Tendo-kun?” Genma teased.

“I didn’t mean to sound ungrateful, but Kasumi’s been gone for nearly a week now. It’s not like her to just leave like this.”

The stockier of the two men took a deep breath. “Tendo-kun, there’s something I need to tell you. Ranma has been offered a job based in America; it’s something that he can’t turn down.”

The moustachioed man looked downhearted. “Oh, but what about...”

“He’d like Kasumi to come with him.”

“You mean, they’re willing to get married?” Soun asked, suddenly feeling elated.

“Eventually, yes,” Genma nodded. “But she’s going to have to leave Japan. I don’t know when she’ll be able to come back to visit you.”

“The last of my girls is leaving me…” the long-haired man sighed. “I… what do I do now?”

“Ranma will return with Kasumi and they’ll tell you the details, Tendo-kun. But in all honesty, you’ll need to learn how to look after yourself. You’re my friend, I won’t let you be abandoned to a life of squalor and takeaway food.”

“Thank you, Saotome-kun.”

“And if you’re a helpless student, I’ll just have to help you find a new wife,” Genma teased.


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Back at the infirmary in the SGC, Ranma sat by Kasumi’s bed. He was beginning to wonder if Jolinar was able to heal her new host.

He had been told Captain Carter had already woken up, albeit with her feeling like she shouldn’t have.

“So why aren’t you awake yet, Kasumi?” the martial artist rhetorically. “I thought those Goa’uld were able to heal pretty much anything.”

“The here are limits to what the symbiote can heal, Ranma Saotome,” Teal’c said, drawing Ranma’s attention away from the stirring body to his left. “But as a general rule, they will guarantee long life and good health to the host.”

“So why isn’t Kasumi awake? Or even Jolinar?” Ranma asked.

“Because it took some time for me to heal this body, Ranma,” Jolinar said, surprising both men. “If Kasumi had agreed earlier, then the blending process would not have taken as long.”

“Sorry about that,” the pigtailed man apologised.

“Your apologies are not necessary; I understand why there was a delay, Ranma,” the Tok’Ra said sympathetically. “Kasumi wishes to speak with you. In private.”

“I will tell Colonel O’Neill and the others that you have awakened,” Teal’c said before bowing and leaving to allow some privacy.

When they were alone, Kasumi’s eyes returned to their normal colour.

“¬How are you feeling, Kasumi?¬”

“¬Ranma, I… everything feels so strange. I’m tired, but not in the way I felt last week.¬” There was a pause as Kasumi looked away for a moment.

“¬Is everything alright, Kasumi?¬”

“¬Soon after Jolinar started to communicate with me, I started to get these visions.¬”

“¬What kind of visions?¬” Ranma asked.

The brunette blushed. “¬I… they were, well, I… they were experiences of being with a man.¬”

The martial artist scratched the back of his head. “¬Ah. There’s something that I need to tell you. Because you’re now part of the Tok’Ra, you can’t stay in Tokyo.¬”

“¬But what about Father?¬”

“¬As far as he’s concerned, you and I are engaged.¬”

“¬Engaged?¬” Kasumi asked. At first she was somewhat shocked, but then the situation filtered through to Jolinar.

“¬It was the only way to explain why you had to move away from Tokyo. We have to keep the truth about aliens under wraps,¬” Ranma explained. “¬But this way you can come back to visit your father; you just have to pretend when you’re around him. The rest of the time, you can do whatever you like.¬”

“¬Oh, I’m sure that I’ll find a suitable solution…¬” Kasumi smiled as Dr. Fraiser walked into the room.

“I see you’re feeling better, Kasumi. Do you mind if I examine you?”

“I’ll leave you in peace,” the long-haired man said with a polite bow. “I’m going to check up on Captain Carter.”


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Ranma knocked on the door to the room where Carter was resting.

“Come in,” the blonde said in a tired voice.

“I just came to see how you’re doing,” the martial artist said as he approached the bed.

“I haven’t felt this tired for a while,” the Captain answered. “How’s Kasumi?”

“She’s awake, but I think she needs to rest up before she goes through the Stargate. Looks like she’s not the only one.”

Carter smiled. “Ranma... I... I wanted to thank you.”

“What for?”

“For refusing Jolinar’s advances. I could tell that you two had a history, and I know that there are men who wouldn’t have been so noble.”

Ranma sat down next to the bed where Carter was now sitting up. “Even if I didn’t believe in people being free, I didn’t want to have to deal with you trying to kill me. We’ve had our disagreements, but that doesn’t mean we can’t be friends.”

Carter smiled. ‘Well, I can see how Jolinar was charmed by him.’ “Agreed. Friends?”

The martial artist shook hands with the scientist. “Friends. I heard you’re going to be stuck behind a desk for a while?”

“Yeah, I’ve got another day’s observation, a week’s medical leave and then a week’s desk duty before Dr. Frasier will even consider letting me go through the Stargate.”

“Ouch. Still, I guess you’ll have an excuse to look at the naquadah reactor I gave you. You do still have it, right?”

“Yes,” Samantha nodded. “I haven’t had much chance to investigate it properly.”

“Good,” Ranma smiled. “Now, if you’ll excuse me, I’ve got to work out how to tidy up this thing with Kasumi.”


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Ranma returned to Kasumi’s room, surprised to see her standing up.

“Kasumi?”

“Jolinar, actually. So, I hear that you’re going to be my husband?”

The pigtailed martial artist winced. “Something like that. It was the only way to keep you, Carter and Kasumi alive and free.”

“Oh well, I suppose that I can pretend. Might make a few people jealous when they hear what’s happened,” the Tok’Ra smirked.

“Yeah, about that,” Ranma said his face serious. “If you go around blurting out how you’re my fiancée, people will try to hurt you. I can think of several aliens who’d happily skin you alive just to get at me.”

“That would explain why you’ve been reluctant to take a mate,” Jolinar mused. “I thought you were just being indecisive.”

Ranma’s eyes narrowed, but he remained silent. “Moving along, when do you think I can take Kasumi to say goodbye to her father?”

“We can go now, if you like.”

“Get dressed first. It’s going to be awkward enough as it is.”


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Before leaving for Nerima, Ranma and Kasumi had been called into General Hammond’s office for a one last conversation.

“Miss Tendo, Jolinar, thank you for your help resolving the issue with Captain Carter,” the bald man said, bowing his head respectfully. “I understand that you’re making a great personal sacrifice.”

“You’re welcome,” Kasumi hesitantly replied in English. She was still getting used to the idea of knowledge being in her head that she hadn’t learned herself. But a few strange things was more than worth being able to move without pain.

“Yes, thank you, Kasumi. You too, Ranma.”

She looked to see Ranma nodding at Colonel O’Neill.

“Don’t worry about it. I like to help,” the pigtailed martial artist replied with a modest shrug. “I’m just worried how Kasumi’s father going to take it when I tell him I have to take his daughter away with me.”

“It could be worse, you could have gotten Kasumi pregnant,” O’Neill smirked. “That said, she is technically eating for two now...”

“Don’t even joke about that,” Ranma warned.

The Colonel blanched. “Yeah, I saw what happened when we saw the Baroness... I’m sorry Ranma.”

“The Baroness?” Kasumi repeated.

“Long story which we’re not going into right now,” Ranma insisted. He turned to face General Hammond. “Thank you for your hospitality and help getting my father home. If you need my help, you know where to reach me. Well, when I’m on Earth, I mean.”

“Where will you keep your ship?”

“Not telling,” the martial artist replied. “If you don’t know, you can’t tell anyone. I’ve learned that the hard way.”

“Fair enough,” O’Neill nodded in approval. He was reminded of his previous classified missions.

“I’ll let you know when I get back,” Ranma said moments before the transport rings on his ship descended around him and Kasumi.


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There was a flash of bright light inside the Tendo dojo.

“I’m not sure I’ll ever get used to that,” Kasumi said as she looked around and realised that she’d been teleported several thousand miles.

“That’s nothing to the delights the galaxy has to offer,” Ranma replied with an honest smile. “Jolinar should share some of her memories with you. There are a lot of beautiful things out there and we can see some of them when we visit the Tok’Ra.”

“That would be nice,” Kasumi said absently as she started to make her way to the house.

“It’s been that long since you last walked without pain, huh?” the martial artist asked.

“I... yes,” the brunette admitted in a quiet voice.

“Don’t worry about it. I had a shard of metal in my shoulder for three months. Hurt every time I moved my arm,” Ranma smiled. “We’ll give your father the news and we’ll head off in the morning.”

“So soon?”

“If you want to stay for a few days to say goodbye, you can. I just thought that Jolinar would want to get going.”

“I should at least say goodbye to my sisters, Ranma,” Kasumi chided. “No wonder, Captain Carter thought you were uncivilised.”

Ranma paused. Kasumi had a point, he and his father did tend to depart quickly. But in defence of the Saotomes, it was often a good idea for them to keep moving. Though Ranma and his father regularly debated whether it was worse that the reason for slipping away was people trying to kill you or marry you.

“You’re right, Kasumi, I’m sorry,” the pigtailed man apologised with a bow.

The brunette allowed herself a small smile. After all, being interesting didn’t mean you had to be impolite. Bracing herself, Kasumi opened the door to the house and announced her return.

Soun swept up his eldest daughter in his arms and wept for joy at her return.

“Kasumi, my darling!”

“Father, please,” the brunette said, trying to keep her shoulders away from the tears streaming from her father’s face.

“I’m sorry, Kasumi, it’s just that you’re leaving...”

“Not for a few days, father. I do want to say goodbye to Akane and Nabiki. Plus, I need to make sure that you’ll be able to look after yourself while I’m gone. I don’t know when I’ll be able to visit.”


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To be continued....
 

Lord Raa

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Snake in the Horse’s Shadow


By Lord Raa


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Disclaim-me-do: It’s not gay if the other party is a quasi-sentient fighter jet.


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Part 12


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Akane picked up the ringing phone and answered it politely.

“¬Akane, it’s your father, I’ve got some big news for you.¬”

“Oh? How big”

“¬Life changing. Are you available on the 25th? Nabiki will be in town that day and we want to tell you both in person,¬” Soun said, barely able contain his joy.

“Is it so secret that you can’t tell me over the phone?” Akane asked. Not that she didn’t want to see her sisters, but if it was important enough for Nabiki to come to town, it was probably too important to wait four days. “Wait, is this bad news, Dad?”

“¬No, no, it’s good news.¬”

“But you won’t tell me over the phone?” Akane asked, her tone warning her father to stop messing her about.

“¬All right, you twisted my arm. It’s about Kasumi, I’ll let her tell you.¬”

“¬Akane, I’m... I’m moving to America.¬”

“What? Why? When? What’s brought all this on?”

“¬I’m moving to America with Ranma-kun. He’s been offered a job out there, one that he can’t refuse.¬”

“OK, so Ranma’s moving to America. What’s his job got to do with you?” Akane demanded.

“¬It... it’s the only way to make Father’s dream happen. I was never very good at martial arts, Akane, but it’s the last chance at uniting the schools.¬”

Akane started to pace as she processed this information. It wasn’t that she didn’t want her family to be happy, but Kasumi couldn’t speak English. She’d be a second class citizen over there.

“I... But what will you be doing? Are you really happy with this, Kasumi?”

“¬It’s a complicated situation, Akane. But don’t worry, I’ll explain it all to you and Nabiki when you come over.¬”

“I might come over for answers before the 25th,” the actress said, looking at her calendar.

“¬Of course, you’re more than welcome to do that, Akane. And yes, Ryoga-kun is invited as well,¬” Kasumi said in a reassuring tone.

“What about Nabiki’s husband?”

“¬Nabiki mentioned that he was otherwise engaged,¬” the homemaker said.

Akane felt some of the anxiety drain from her. “I guess I’ll see when I see you. Take care, Kasumi.”

“¬I will, Akane, I will.¬”


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#30
Seems another weird formatting error has popped up, noticed a lot of "¬" in the chapters
 
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wasnt the "¬" meant that the other participant of the conversation was talking from a telephone/radio/comm?
and the ¬ means the light static sound that is typical from the devices.
 

Lord Raa

Exporter of Juice Tins
#32
The "¬" is to denote that the speaker is talking through a communications device of some sort or is speaking in another language to the rest of the people in the scene.
 

gsteemso

Keeper of the Unknown Thingumawhatsit
#33
Lord Raa said:
The "¬" is to denote that the speaker is talking through a communications device of some sort or is speaking in another language to the rest of the people in the scene.
Huh. My thoughts on using funny characters as or augmenting quote marks are as follows:

1) Congratulations on finding a funny character which, apparently, survives the encoding damage involved in posting to this type of web forum. That's difficult enough that most readers will assume, as ibskib (and, in all honesty, myself) did, that any such character indicates a damaged block of text even when it is actually correct. I learned that one the hard way 13 years ago with the earliest drafts of _Permutation_.

2) If you find it necessary to do something that an established paper-and-press publisher would reject out of hand, you should probably ask yourself what they, based on best practices developed over 500 years of conveying information in print, know that you haven't considered. This is especially the case if your story needs a legend to explain your idiosyncratic textual conventions. (Anyone remember the classic Ranma fic from nearly 20 years ago that opened with a two-screenful legend and immediately ended as the cast rebelled at the ludicrousness and walked out in protest?)
 

T.L

Well-Known Member
#34
When an author explaines what they are doing that should be the end the issue. How they format their work is their business and apart from reading isues, that is the end of that.

Coming back whith smart comments does nothing apart from antagonizing the author and delaying updates. If you have nothing constructive to say, either positive or negative, then don't bother commenting at all.
 

Lawra

Well-Known Member
#35
T.L said:
When an author explaines what they are doing that should be the end the issue. How they format their work is their business and apart from reading isues, that is the end of that.

Coming back whith smart comments does nothing apart from antagonizing the author and delaying updates. If you have nothing constructive to say, either positive or negative, then don't bother commenting at all.
I remember in BDAN, using ( ) to denote speech that the in POV character didn't fully understand as a way to avoid coming up with multiple ways of saying "character x said something y didn't understand" while getting across to the reader what was going on. People complained to the point where I said screw it and time skipped ahead and suddenly everyone spoke the same language. 

It doesn't matter if the author says it, majority of fanfiction/writing in general needs to be targeted at the lowest common denominator. Raa is free to try but unless he uses his symbol a lot his effort is mostly going to be wasted.
 

Lord Raa

Exporter of Juice Tins
#36
More?


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At Stargate Command, Captain Carter was relieved to be discharged from the infirmary.

Colonel O’Neill was walking with her, having offered to drive her home. “Remember you’re under orders to take it easy for the next week.”

“Thank you for driving me, sir,” the blonde smiled. “I’m just glad to be able to go home.”

“I’ve spoken with General Hammond,” Jack said as he held the door open. “He said that when you come back, you’re to focus on that naquadah reactor of Ranma’s.”

“I am, sir?”

“Yes. I know we kinda put it on the backburner, but if you’re going to be deskbound for a week, I figure we might as well use the opportunity to figure out what we can use it for.”

“I see, sir,” Samantha nodded.

“Of course, if you’re not ready to come back to work, we’ll just have to wait until you are. So make sure you focus on resting up for the next week, OK?”

“Yes, sir.”


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Back in Nerima, Ranma was relaxing with his father as they watched the sun set.

“How you holding up, Ranma?”

“Not too bad. What about you?”

Genma took a deep breath. “I... it’s nice to be back home, but something feels off.”

“What, like you forgot something?” the pigtailed man asked. A smirk appeared on his face as he realised another possibility. “Or are you not used to people not being after us?”

“Such insolence,” the portly man chided good-naturedly. “But it might be that. It’s hard to relax like this, it’s so calm here.”

“You’re not going to go out looking for trouble are you?

“No, I don’t think so,” Genma replied with a smile. “Trouble always seemed to find me. Just like you and women.”

“At least we don’t have to worry about you beating up delinquents or organised criminal gangs,” Ranma smiled back. He let his father’s comment about how women seemed to find him slide.

After all, he had to pretend he had a fiancé now, and with his luck, the moment he mentioned another woman, Kasumi would appear, miss the context and there would be trouble for him.

It’s how it had gone for most of the last 10 years.

A silence descended between the two Saotomes as they watched the sun sink lower.

“Pops.... I... I never asked this while we were training and never while we were... you know, as we had more important things to worry about at the time,” Ranma said hesitantly.

“What is it, son?”

“What happened to Mom?” the younger Saotome asked. “I mean, I got asked about her a couple of times, but I never had a real answer.”

Genma sighed. This would be painful for his son to hear.

“I... I’m sorry to tell you this, Ranma, but your mother died when you were a child.”

“W-what? W-when? H-how?” the pigtailed man asked, shaken by this bombshell.

“You were two at the time,” Genma said, his voice tired and his eyes filled with sadness. “You’re thinking why did I never tell you about her?”

Ranma nodded.

“It was hard. I loved her, she was the most beautiful woman I met. She was kind, a brilliant cook, a loving woman. A Yamato nadeshiko if ever you saw one. Well, aside from her inability to hold a sword properly, I mean.” That last comment brought a small smile to the old man’s lips.

“I see. How did she...?”

“Part of her heart was too big. It had an irregular beat,” Genma’s smile faded. “Time hasn’t made this easier to think about, never mind talk about.”

“Dad...” Ranma embraced his father. “I’m sorry...”

“It’s alright Ranma, you couldn’t know. I never brought her up because I had to be strong for you, son. You were all I had. You were my pride, my joy, my reason to keep going.”

Genma looked up at the darkening sky. “There is one more thing that I never told you about your mother.”

Ranma looked at his father intently.

“Y...” he took a deep breath. “You were with her when she died. I came home to find you trying to wake her up.”

Tears were now falling from the portly man’s eyes. “I called for an ambulance, but when they arrived, they told me your mother... she... she’d been dead for three hours.”

The surprise Ranma felt seeing his normally stoic father so emotional just added to his conflicting feelings. He was sad to learn that his mother had died so long ago, shocked to learn that he’d been there when she died and there was a pang of guilt for making his old man cry.

“Pops... I...”

“It’s alright, Ranma,” Genma said wiping the tears from his face. “I... heh, I actually feel better telling you this. If I’d known, I’d have told you sooner.”

Ranma nodded.

“That said,” the balding man smirked, “I dread to think what would’ve happened if anyone had known about this.”

The pigtailed man covered his mouth as he processed that scenario. “Oh shit... Can you imagine the Baroness and her people?”

The two Saotomes laughed as the sun finally sank below the horizon.


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I have a little extra, I'm just pondering what to do with the bit that comes after it.
 

Lord Raa

Exporter of Juice Tins
#38
It's possible I'm filled with self-loathing.


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Three days later, at Cheyenne Mountain, several alarms blared as the Stargate started to activate.

“Incoming wormhole!” the technician announced. “No teams currently scheduled to return. No signal.”

“Close the iris,” General Hammond ordered.

The metal covering slid shut five seconds before the wormhole engaged. There was the sound of something hitting the aperture before the wormhole disengaged.

“That was short and sweet,” Jack commented. “Wonder what they wanted?”

The technician blinked before attracting the attention of his commanding officers. “Sirs... there’s a residue on the iris. It matches the signal of the Sagan box.”

“Colonel O’Neill, we need to talk in my office. Bring Teal’c and Dr. Jackson.”

“Aye, sir.”

In General Hammond’s office, the Texan asked his team what was going on.

“Sir, we gave the people of Cimmeria a Sagan box,” Jack answered. “It was for when Thor and his people showed up again. Looks like he’s back in town.”

“Just as Captain Carter is on medical leave.”

“I really wanted SG-1 to be at full strength for this, Colonel,” Hammond said before letting out a sigh.

“We can prepare a MALP and make initial contact,” Daniel suggested. “That way we can prepare for a more formal meeting while Sam recovers.”

“Agreed. Colonel make the preparations and we’ll send out a MALP ASAP.”


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The first images were coming in from the MALP’s cameras and they were not filling SG-1 with confidence.

The cameras showed a number of dead Cimmerian bodies strewn around the Stargate.

Teal’c leaned in for a better look at the corpses. “These wounds have been caused by staff weapons.”

“Can you pan the camera around a bit for me,” O’Neill asked, a cold feeling growing in the pit of his stomach.

The MALP showed a dead Jaffa warrior.

“Friend of yours, Teal’c?” the Colonel asked as the camera panned around some more to show the remains of Thor’s Hammer.

“Clearly Cimmeria is no longer safe from the Goa’uld.”

A distraught woman approached the MALP.

“¬Please, help us. The Etins have come.¬”

“Ah, crap...”

“Colonel O'Neill, I think it's time we had a briefing to discuss our next course of action.”


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nixofcyzerra

Well-Known Member
#39
Lord Raa said:
It's possible I'm filled with self-loathing.
...You say that like it's something that isn't normal.
 

Lord Raa

Exporter of Juice Tins
#40
Have some more.


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In Nerima, Kasumi was putting the finishing touches on the meal she was cooking for her family. Thanks to the combined efforts of Ranma and Ryoga, Akane had been distracted from trying to help out in the kitchen.

It wasn't that Akane was completely useless in the kitchen these days, but this was a special meal that needed to be perfect given the nature of the bombshell Kasumi was dropping that evening.

The doorbell rang and Soun himself answered it.

“Nabiki!” he beamed as he embraced his daughter.

“I see you're as stoic as ever,” the middle Tendo daughter remarked sarcastically.

“I'm happy because we've got some good news!” Soun explained as he allowed his daughter to enter the house.

“I gathered that,” Nabiki said as she removed her shoes. “So, what's so important that you've gathered us all here today?”

“Nabiki!” Akane said as she hugged her sister. “How are you doing?”

“No complaints about the standard of living.”

“But the standard of husband?”

“That's not so good. Still, where's Kasumi?”

Kasumi took that moment to appear and announce that dinner was ready. “So, how have you been, Nabiki?”

“Today's not about me, Kasumi, apparently, you've got some important news that Father couldn't tell me about over the phone,” Nabiki replied, already tired of talking about her domestic situation.

“Of course,” the eldest sister smiled. She ushered everyone to the dinner table.

“Ryoga,” Nabiki greeted tersely.

“Hello, Nabiki-san,” the directionally challenged man replied with a polite bow.

It was then that Nabiki noticed the two other men at the table. One was an older man, a bandana on his head. The other, a much younger and more attractive man. She reasoned that they were father and son.

“So, Daddy, who are you friends?”

“I'm Genma Saotome, this is my son, Ranma,” the older visitor greeted with a bow.

“Hello,” Ranma replied.

“Is this some kind of intervention? Do I have some kind of problem that I'm not willing to address?” the middle Tendo daughter asked.

“Not to my knowledge,” Ranma said. He took in the appearance of Nabiki Tendo. She was a little older than him and Akane, she had brown hair and dressed well.

“Ranma-kun is going to be Kasumi's husband,” Soun declared. “Finally, we can unite the schools of Anything Goes.”

“You kept this quiet, Kasumi.”

“It only really just happened,” Kasumi admitted, finding her fingers rather interesting.

“So, tell me about yourself, Ranma Saotome. What makes you so special that you can win over my sister like this?”

Ranma found himself taken aback by the confrontational attitude of this Nabiki person. Keeping his ego in check for the time being, he replied honestly. “It's an arranged marriage between our fathers.”

“And what have you done to think you're worthy of Kasumi?”

Kasumi blushed as memories from Jolinar entered her mind about Ranma's exploits, including the time he rescued her from Sokar's prison. The ones about how Jolinar had planned to repay Ranma had an erotic tinge to them.

“I... well, Ranma-kun helped me out recently and I thought that if he wanted to, we could still help Father and his dream...” the homemaker explained.

“I see,” Nabiki said, her eyes narrowing at Ranma.

'Well, she doesn't trust me. Still, it's not like it's a proper engagement,' the pigtailed martial artist thought.

“So, Ranma, what do you do for a living?” Soun asked.

Kasumi began serving the food as Ranma answered.

“I work as a consultant for the United States Air Force. I'm not allowed to talk about much of what I see and do with them.”

“Convenient,” Nabiki muttered as she accepted a bowl of rice.


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A short while later, SG-1 were sitting around the briefing table.

Daniel Jackson spoke first. “The Cimmerians use the word ‘Etin’ for Goa’ulds. The woman by the gate said that the Etins were there. For a thousand years, Cimmeria was safe from Goa’uld attack. Then we show up and screw up Thor’s technology.”

“How developed are the Cimmerians?”

“Late Iron Age, sir,” Daniel answered. “No match for the Goa'uld.”

“General, if we have screwed up their world, we should at least try to fix it, don’t you think?” O’Neill asked.

“I understand that. But let me play devil’s advocate for a moment here. It's not our world. Is it really any of our concern?” Hammond asked.

Teal’c leaned forward. “The destruction of the hammer device to save my life may have caused this. If so, I am responsible.”

“I gave the order to destroy the weapon, General,” the Colonel said. “I think we should be concerned. We need to at least investigate this.”

General Hammond closed his eyes for a moment. “Teal’c, what are the chances that this is a full-scale invasion?”

“The Goa’uld usually send an advance scout though the Stargate to determine a planet’s worth and vulnerability. If none of the scout reports back, it is a deterrent to invasion. Given what we saw from the probe, I believe that the invasion is happening now.”

“I was afraid you’d say something like that,” the Texan sighed. “All right, the mission is a go on one condition. Since this is an unknown situation, I want you to take Ranma Saotome with you.”

“Agreed, Sir,” O’Neill nodded.

Teal'c's eyes widened as he saw an enhanced image from the MALP footage. “General Hammond. I fear that we will need the help of Genma Saotome as well.”

“Why's that, Teal'c?”

“This is the banner of a powerful System Lord, one that is more dangerous that Apophis.”


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Halfway through the meal, the telephone rang. Kasumi rose and answered it, but wasn't terribly surprised it was for Ranma.

“Ranma-kun, it's Colonel O'Neill for you.”

“Hi Colonel, what can I do for you?”

“¬Ranma... We need your help.¬”

“What's up?”

“¬I can't tell you over the phone, but we need you to come in ASAP. Might need to bring your father with you...¬”

Ranma blinked. “I'm in the middle of dinner with Kasumi and her family. You've got to give me something, Colonel.”

“¬Alright...¬” There was a pause as someone spoke in the background where Jack was. “Heru'ur?¬”

“Ah, crap. We'll be right over.”

The pigtailed martial artist returned to the table with an apologetic look on his face. “I'm very sorry to tell you all this, but something's come up at work and I need to go now.”

“Oh...” Soun seemed sad at that piece of news.

“It gets worse,” Ranma sighed. “I need to bring my dad with me and I don't know how long I'll be gone for. I am very sorry for this.”

Nabiki was sceptical that this relationship would work out for Kasumi if Ranma was often forced to leave at a moment's notice. A marriage with a lot of secrets would not be a happy one.

“How bad is it, son?” Genma asked.

“Heru'ur.”

“Ah. Tendo-kun, please accept our apologies for departing on such a short notice, but this is the kind of problem that we have to deal with now.”

“What'll happen if you don't go now?” Ryoga asked.

“People will die. Some of them horribly,” Ranma answered. He finished his bowl of food and drained his cup. “Thank you for the food, Kasumi, it was excellent. I can only offer my apologies for abandoning you so early in the evening. But look on the bright side, at least we've left you plenty to eat.”

Genma rose to his feet. “Thank you, Kasumi-san, you will make an excellent bride for my son. I hope that he'll make a suitable husband for you.”

Kasumi blushed, but said nothing.


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Or don't, I'm not the boss of any of you.
 

Lord Raa

Exporter of Juice Tins
#42
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The Saotomes arrived in the middle of the briefing room in bright flash of light. SG-1 were already seated and preparing for the planning of the mission.

“I hope you're not going to make a habit of arriving in the middle of the SGC, Mr. Saotome,” Colonel O'Neill chided good-naturedly.

“I'll do it every time you interrupt dinner, Colonel,” Ranma shot back as he took a seat next to his father.

Daniel Jackson cleared his throat and asked his questions. “Have you heard of a race called the Asgard? Do you know how to contact them?”

“I have heard of them, but we never met them. I'm assuming that there's more that you wanted to discuss. After all, you could have asked me that over the phone,” Ranma answered. He looked around the room and saw the looks on the faces of SG-1. “So, what did you do to upset Heru'ur?”

“We didn't do anything to Heru'ur,” the scholar insisted. “It's just...”

“Just what?” Ranma asked. “You've been told that you need to bring me to him to save your skins?”

“No, it's nothing like that,” Jack O'Neill insisted, hoping to keep Ranma calm. “He's attacking a planet called Cimmeria. Cimmeria is a peaceful world that poses no threat him.”

“That is what he does,” Genma commented dryly.

“Yeah, well, this planet was protected by the Asgard.”

“Was?” the older Saotome asked. “The Asgard might be distant, but from what I heard about them, they would have left safeguards to protect planets such as Cimmeria.”

“They did but we kinda broke them,” O'Neill winced.

Ranma sighed. “This is why the Tollen jerks say you can't have nice things and you should stay on Earth. So how bad is it?”

“We think that it's a full-scale invasion,” Daniel explained.

The pigtailed man shook his head. “Never anything simple with you guys, is it? What's your plan for this mission?”

“Our best option is to investigate the planet and see if we can contact the Asgard. We were hoping that you might know of a way to do so.”

“Can't help you with that, but we can help you with Heru'ur,” Genma replied.

“I think that the Asgard would have had some way for the Cimmerians to contact them when they were ready,” Daniel offered. “So we just need to find out how they planned to do that.”

Ranma scratched his head as he thought about the situation. He knew that him and his father knew very little about technology and probably couldn't help contact the Asgard. Short of asking the Nox for their help, the best person he could think of was Captain Carter.

“I think you need Captain Carter to help out. She understands most technology,” Genma suggested.

“She's on medical leave right now,” sighed Jack.

“I have a Goa'uld healing device with me,” Ranma said, placing the alien object onto the table. “I had a feeling you were going to need my help. How's this for a plan, you go ask Carter if she wants to help. I give her a dose with the healing device and we go to Cimmeria.”

Genma nodded and took up the rest of the briefing. “When we get there, we split into two groups. Ranma and I will slow down Heru'ur and the other group can figure out how to contact the Asgard.”

“I would like to be a part of the team that fights against Heru'ur,” Teal'c said, speaking up for the first time. “Master Bra'tak would not approve of passing up the opportunity to fight alongside the Ha're Kek.”

The two Saotomes nodded.


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PCHeintz72

The Sentient Fanfic Search Engine mk II
#43
You tease...

I kind of doubt Hammond would let Ranma control te flow of the conversation tot hat extent... but that is a mere opinion.

But neat update overall anyway. lad to see it being worked on.
 

Lord Raa

Exporter of Juice Tins
#44
Snake in the Horse’s Shadow


By Lord Raa


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Disclaim-me-do: To be disappointed is to be human.


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Part 13


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Nabiki didn’t think too much of Ranma Saotome. He seemed reasonably normal on the outside, but then so did so many others that she’d met over the years.

For example, Ryoga Hibiki’s poor sense of direction wasn’t something that was immediately observable. Not being able to read a map was not a big deal, but not being able to navigate through a house was another matter entirely.

The way he’d left during dinner with his father was highly suspicious. Evidently, there was a lot going on with his life that he kept hidden.

Akane seemed to like him, but she had picked Ryoga Hibiki as her husband, and as such, her taste was questionable at best.

Kasumi had blushed at some of the questions that she’d been asked. But then, Kasumi had lived a rather sheltered life.

Was it possible that the fact that Ranma, a man who had “been out of the country for ten years” had enough charm, wit and interesting stories to impress Kasumi?

Nabiki doubted it. There was clearly more to this situation than met the eye.


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At the SGC, Captain Carter was being examined by Dr. Fraiser.

The blonde was hoping to get a clean bill of health, but she understood why the physician was being so thorough.

“Well, the good news is that I can’t find anything that is stopping you from returning to desk duty,” Fraiser said.

“And what about me heading through the Stargate?” Carter asked. “I’m an important part of this mission.”

“Fortunately, you’re not going into combat like Ranma and the others, so I can sign you off on this mission. But, and I mean this, when you come back, I’m confining you to desk duty for two weeks, OK?”

“I understand,” the Captain smiled.

“Good, now finish up your briefing.”


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Ranma looked over the footage from the MALP. It showed that there was some devastation, but nothing to hint about what forces Heru'ur had invaded the planet with.

It was one thing to launch a raid on a small garrison, but if what Teal’c was telling them was accurate for Heru’ur’s army and its operational procedures, then stronger forces would be on their way to reinforce the initial expedition.

This mission was becoming more and more complicated and dangerous.

Captain Carter walked into the briefing room.

“Colonel,” she saluted.

“Captain,” O’Neill acknowledged. “The main mission objective is to contact the Asgard and get them to help deal with Heru’ur. You’ll be working with Daniel to figure out how to do that. Failing that, look for something that we can use as a weapon. The rest of us will try to buy you as much time as we can.”

“We’ll need some serious firepower,” the pigtailed man said. He turned to his father. “Do those staff weapons in the shuttle still work?”

“They should do,” Genma answered. “None of them have been fired in anger since I stole them from the factory where they’re made.”

“How many staff weapons do you have?” O’Neill asked.

“A couple of dozen,” the older Saotome answered. “I’ll go bring them here.”

Several rings descended around the portly man and he disappeared in a flash of light.

“How long do you think it will be before Heru’ur is able to bring in more of his army and set up a base of operations?” Carter asked Teal’c.

“He will be clearing the sites now,” the Jaffa answered honestly. “We must be get ready to leave if we are to save the local people.”

“Right,” O’Neill nodded. “Carter, get suited up. Ranma, how familiar are you with modern weapons?”

“I know not to point them at things you don’t want to put holes in,” Ranma answered. “I’m not the sort of person to use guns.

“But if we’re four against four thousand, we’re not going to last long,” the Colonel countered.

“But I’m better with a staff weapon. We might be able to use those as ploy to distract Heru’ur’s troops – make them think that another Goa’uld has come through the Stargate to claim the planet.”

Teal’c nodded in approval. He’d seen several battles fought by rival expeditionary forces on worlds. Though Heru’ur was a powerful Goa’uld, it would be possible that another System Lord was looking at claiming Cimmeria. The remnants of the Asgard technology alone would make it a tempting target for anyone.

Genma Saotome returned with half a dozen staff weapons.

“Teal’c, check these are OK for us to use, we don’t need them blowing up on us. Though, setting a few booby traps might be useful…” the cunning martial artist mused.

The Colonel nodded. “I will get us some claymores.”

“The sword?”

“The anti-personnel mine,” O’Neill corrected.


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PCHeintz72

The Sentient Fanfic Search Engine mk II
#45
Ranma, how familiar are you with modern weapons?
This was actually fairly dumb of ONiel to ask, considering what he has seen Ranma do and what he has heard of his accomplishments... And there is the fact there is no way Ranma has run into 'modern' weapons in last ten years. He actually probably is far more effective without one in this story given the background he has been set up with...

“The sword?”

“The anti-personal mine,” O’Neill corrected.
Big difference.

Glad to see this updated, I was half worried it was dropped when you posted this recently to FFN....
 

fitzgerald

Well-Known Member
#46
Great to see this continuing Lord Raa!

Ah Nabiki you're being rightfully suspicious about your xmas cake of a sister pursuing Ranma
 

kingdark

Well-Known Member
#47
This is a really good story. I've enjoyed reading it. The only thing that I noticed was a small typo.

“The anti-personal mine,” O’Neill corrected. -- > personal should actually be personnel. personal is like being private. personnel refers to staff or workers or just people in general.

Please keep up the good work!

Kingdark
 
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