Spider-Man and Silk - Threads of Destiny

Celgress

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Spider-Man and Silk in Threads of Destiny -

What would have happened if Silk and Spider-Man had been best friends and neighbors before receiving their fateful spider bites? Find out in this AU as Peter and Cindy evolve into their roles as super heroes side by side while facing off against their archenemy, the mysterious and evil Hobgoblin! Will contain eventual Peter/Cindy pairing.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11083724/1/

enjoy
 

Jimbobob5536

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#2
Interesting. A little short at the moment to form much of an opinion on, but interesting none the less.

Had to look up who Silk was though.
 

Jimbobob5536

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#4
Nice. Cindy's reaction is nice to see; getting super powers isn't necessarily a good thing. Both their reactions are believable.

"Super powers, AWESOME!"
"I'm a freak!"
 

Celgress

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Jimbobob5536

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#6
Ouch. Ben should've aimed for the bushes.

Being Peter Parker is suffering.
 

AJ_Katon

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#7
So I went through ch.1. Pretty decent but kinda short for an opener.

Also there are some spelling corrections that could be made.

"Your loss, Harry."

"...certain arachnids..." is that what you were going for?

Plus was the arachnid already already dosed with radiation or is this spider like the Raimi films?
 

Celgress

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AJ_Katon said:
So I went through ch.1. Pretty decent but kinda short for an opener.

Also there are some spelling corrections that could be made.

"Your loss, Harry."

"...certain arachnids..." is that what you were going for?

Plus was the arachnid already already dosed with radiation or is this spider like the Raimi films?
The pains of not having a beta reader. *le sigh* I'll correct those before posting more new chapters after this one.

The spiders are the genetically engineered or Raimi film type, sorry if that wasn't clear. In my defense I'll be going into detail concerning their exact nature and why Norman Osborn wanted them destroyed (see my recently posted chapter four for the opening details of Norman's plot).

In the meantime Chapter Four is posted -

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11083724/4/Spider-Man-and-Silk-in-Threads-of-Destiny

enjoy
 

Jimbobob5536

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#9
Left a review over there, leaving one here with a different suggestion.

Try using some line breaks when changing the scene, or at least bolding the line that notifies the change. Anything to really bring attention to the fact you've changed location/time.

Anyway, pretty nice chapter.
 

Celgress

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Jimbobob5536 said:
Left a review over there, leaving one here with a different suggestion.

Try using some line breaks when changing the scene, or at least bolding the line that notifies the change. Anything to really bring attention to the fact you've changed location/time.

Anyway, pretty nice chapter.
Thanks for your reviews and advice, they mean a lot to me.
 

AJ_Katon

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I've also decided to leave a review on the fic.

Not bad of an idea for ch.2 but could need some meat on it.

Though I have to say, you've got Scrapper!Peter pretty well down. He does remind me of the Lee/Ditko Pete and seems to be just as reckless. Cindy's not coming in terms of personality at the moment though.

Hope you have time to write them interacting with family.
 

Celgress

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AJ_Katon said:
I've also decided to leave a review on the fic.

Not bad of an idea for ch.2 but could need some meat on it.

Though I have to say, you've got Scrapper!Peter pretty well down. He does remind me of the Lee/Ditko Pete and seems to be just as reckless. Cindy's not coming in terms of personality at the moment though.

Hope you have time to write them interacting with family.
I'll be establishing Cindy's personality more from chapter six onward, start to do so in chapters four & five, one important trait is her being non-confrontational at first which is why in part she has such a hard time becoming a super hero. However the events of chapter four onward force her hand. She also has a stubborn streak that starts to manifest from chapter five onward, hint if Peter won't help her with something she'll do it herself no matter the risks. She isn't going to be a Mary Sue, just right now she's kind of naturally timid however as her adventures in spandex get underway some of her now found confidence bleeds over into her regular personality, including her and Peter often being at odds over how to handle crimes. Her being less jokey than Peter and wanting at times to harm the criminals, especially if something like rape or child exploitation of any kind is involved.
 

grant

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#17
Surprised I didn't notice this till now. Had to look up Silk and wow you have to wonder what they were thinking when they created her. If you want to make a new female character with spider powers, there are other (better) ways to do it.

Anyway, on the fic itself the first chapter feels like things are more being stated than shown, but you are doing well. And I'd suggest removing the "Will contain eventual Peter/Cindy pairing.", it's kind of clear to the reader from the tags showing that they're paired.
 
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