Ranma ½ Spring of drowned ???

Liam-don · Jul 2, 2011

The amazons?

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"Husband I kill!" Shampoo declared as she descended upon the suprised martial artist with two very sharp swords in her hands.

"Whoa!" Ranma dove out of the way and rolled to his feet. "Shampoo, I thought we finished with this husband business back in China!"

"It's the husband part that worry him the most?" Hiroshi asked.

Daisuke shrugged. "Death threats don't have the same impact on martial art gods, I guess."

"I ain't a god of martial art." Ranma muttered. Twisting to the side to dodge a sword strike and ducking under another. Then he was dancing in circles around the Amazon, always keeping a step ahead of her wild swings. "But yeah, what's with that too? Your grandma told me we were even when I left. What changed?"

Shampoo jumped away from Ranma and glared. "What changed is that too too stupid husband didn't think! You god of screw ups, You cursed us!"

Ranma distractedly let through Shampoo's new charge, suddenly deep in thought. "No I don't think I'm that sort of god either. Besides I saw your fields back then. The crops were twice as high as any I've ever seen. The harvest had to be great."

"Yes, harvest was very good. Food was plentiful and tasty. Amazons and animals grew strong and healthy. There was so much of it we shared with neighbouring tribes and gained much goodwill and respect."

Ranma nodded."Yeah, no need to thank me or anything. But stop calling me husband? I really don't need that right now."

"Stupid husband still not thinking. Problem isn't this year, it's next year and the years after that. Growing such strong crop left the land depleted. Amazon land won't be able to feed the village for years to come!"

Ranma scratched the back of his head and laughed weakly. "Heh. Sorry about that?"

Shampoo raised her swords, not looking the least bit pacified. "Too late for sorries. You die!"

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nuclear death frog · Jul 4, 2011

You know, I can tell this attempts to be funny, but ... for some reason, it just doesn't really succeed. It feels too forced, I think.

PCHeintz72 · Jul 4, 2011

nuclear death frog said:

For some reason though... I kept having flashbacks to reading 'Meanings Of Life' by Kuraiko Kurohoshi and a AA thread called 'New Gods'.

Liam-don · Jul 4, 2011

Haven't mastered funny yet then.*goes back to work*

Lord Raa · Jul 4, 2011

Liam-don said:

Comedy is serious business.

Three pointers I can give for anyone trying their hand at being funny:

1) Timing. This is less important in written comedy, but it's still important.
2) Context. What do people need to know in order to get the joke? For example, your scene has Character X in a stylish black cocktail dress.

It becomes funny (or at least funnier) if people know that Character X shouldn't ever wear a stylish black cocktail dress. For example, Character X is Guts.

It's funny, but it's also disturbing.

3) Apparent effort. The best comedy should appear effortless and unforced. Trying to shoehorn in crossdressing, as in my example above, means it's not funny.

As is the case with many things, it takes a lot of hard work to make it look easy.

But then again, what do I know about comedy?

varth · Jul 5, 2011

Perhaps Black Dragon could give some pointers. Of course, his style may not be duplicable...

Lord Raa · Jul 5, 2011

varth said:

You'd have be careful that you weren't just recycling the same jokes, only retelling them badly.

Poorly told recycled comedy is worse than forced original comedy.

Dumbledork · Jul 5, 2011

Probably a very stupid idea, but how about spring of drowned Sekirei?

nuclear death frog · Jul 5, 2011

Dumbledork said:

Ugh.

Crusader · Jul 5, 2011

Spring of Drowned Crypt Keeper.

nuclear death frog · Jul 5, 2011

I remember that guy. Now, that's actually an interesting idea for once.

seitora · Jul 6, 2011

Spring of Drowned Newtype

Flamewolf · Jul 6, 2011

spring of drowned talking cat with bad grammar

Ezit Meti · Jul 6, 2011

So, I wound up staying up until really ridiculous hours in the morning, and started thinking about stuff like "what if Jusenkyo curses worked differently?"

What I wound up with, is this. Rather than a physical transformation, whenever the curse activates the cursed person switches minds with e.g the nearest girl, the nearest panda. whatever the curse is. The two remain switched until one of them comes into contact with hot water.

Lord Raine · Jul 6, 2011

nuclear death frog said:

I had no idea that my little blurb had sparked a snippet series, but since it has, I would recommend making Ranma a god of something that is completely worthless and random. Making him a fire god or something would just be boring wankery that's not too different from what's been done before. He needs to be the god equivalent of Luffy's Devil Fruit. It seems completely retarded, but with some creativity, you can actually make it pretty useful.

This allows for both humor, as Ranma deals with the indignity being the god of, I don't know, plastic, and it allows for dramatic tension, because Ranma can't just bitchslap people with his mighty godpowers. He has to use his head.

Basically, what I'm saying is that I think most of the humor here comes from what Ranma is a deity of. But that's just my two cents.

That one's only interesting if a bunch of people, and I mean a bunch of people, fall into it. Just having 'one' person be a Sekirei in a world that doesn't have Sekirei would make that person some kind of irritating relationship sue that also has magical powers no one else does. You know, the sort of thing that makes you want to punch the writer in the face.

seitora · Jul 6, 2011

Ezit Meti said:

Not quite but somewhat related, I remember an SM crossover where Haruka died, but some meddling on Setsuna's part caused Haruka to take over Ranma's girl form, so instead of Ranma turning into Haruka, he would turn into Haruka (with her own memories, not Ranma), and then vice versa again with hot water.

Liam-don · Jul 6, 2011

Lord Raine said:

*Shrug.* Ranma can already bitchslap practically anyone so it would be kinda redundant. Mostly the direction I wanted to take was to have Ranma trying to play the part of the benevolent spirit as he need to deal with the local fauna of Nerima. Dealing with Kuno would be a lot more difficult if belting him across the face isn't an option anymore.

Or maybe just not the first one.

Lord Raine · Jul 8, 2011

Unless becoming a deity somehow does something that fucks up his martial arts.

Garahs · Jul 8, 2011

Lord Raine said:

Or you cross the series with Nurarihyon no Mago.

PCHeintz72 · Jul 9, 2011

Lord Raine said:

I've seen stories that do that... get a powerup, or magical girl persona or some other thing... and he is weaker for it.

fallacies · Jul 9, 2011

Spring of the Drowned Grail Vessel, a Ranma/FSN cross concept based vaguely on Rai-kun's fic at <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3780694/1/:' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3780694/1/:</a>

a) The modern Spring of the Drowned Girl is actually not the original. Rather, it's the result of an experiment conducted by Makiri -- or rather, Zouken -- to mass-produce Grail Vessels; that is, the Spring of the Drowned Grail Vessel. It was eventually abandoned for certain inherent problems of functionality, possibly related to its effectiveness being influenced by the native prana manipulation talents of the curse victim.

b) Kotomine Kirei runs across Ranma by chance and sees his cursed form for what it is. Thinking to use Ranma as a Grail Vessel, he entices the boy to come to Fuyuki with the promise that participation in the Grail War may cure his curse.

c) There is some representative of the Magus Association interfering in the current war. Specifically, the magus in question desires to use the Grail as the foundation of an entirely new True Magic -- the 6th Magic.

d) The Avenger summoned in the 3rd War was not really Angra Mainyu. Rather, it was a potential version of Ranma that functioned as the Grail under Kotomine's manipulation and was eventually altered into the vessel of the 6th Magic -- an evil, world-changing force that was the root cause of the warlike setting that turned Shirou into EMIYA. The heroic legend of this Ranma cast him as the embodiment of all the world's evils.

e) This is set after Ranma defeats Kumon Ryuu. Adapting the Yamasenken's presence projection features, Ranma develops a ki-manipulation skill that gives him the apparent presence of a Servant, as well as the ability to "astralize."

f) Endgame = Ranma vs. SAOTOME.

seitora · Jul 11, 2011

Spring of drowned loli girl.

Needless to say, if in this alternate reality Ranma still dresses up as Yoiko, it will be VERY awkward for Ryoga... :rofl:

Deathwings · Jul 11, 2011

seitora said:

Those poor street vendors. Ranma is going to ruin them. :rofl:

Crusader · Jul 11, 2011

Deathwings said:

For some reason I'm starting to imagine Ranma having fallen into the spring of drowned Ilya.

seitora · Jul 11, 2011

Crusader said:

Ilya from FSN, right?

Also, just think about how many opponents would be stopped cold by loli!Ranma

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