The Iron Fic Awards

Watashiwa

Administrator
Staff member
#54
What are you thanking me for? You won fair and square! ^_^

Anyway, I'd like to thank everyone who's been patient with me while I got this contest on the ground. Three months since I started this, and I *finally* figured out how to run it!

Next week will be a topic near and dear to my heart, so try and be there for it. ;)
 

ellf

Well-Known Member
#56
Heh.... don't think I deserved as good as I got.
 

violinmana

(Hardcore) Gamer
#57
Onani Master Kurosawa: Twist Ending by Takerial

English: 16
Theme: 14.5
Details: 13
Story: 16
Awesomeness: 17
Total: 76.5

biigoh said:
While interesting, I would have to say that this story doesn't quite fit the theme of Last Stand. Where is the resistance? I only see submission here. Because the concept of last stands require a stand, I had to be quite harsh with the theme score.

English is fine in terms of spelling, but it doesn't quite flow properly. Outside of that, I have to say it's an interesting lemon fic based on masturbation. Like a guilty dessert that you sneak eat, it is sweet but isn't good for you in terms of sugar and guilt.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
Giving Ground by Rooster455

English: 18
Theme: 18
Details: 15
Story: 16.5
Awesomeness: 17
Total: 84.5

biigoh said:
Star Wars has alot of possibilities in terms of glorious last stands and battles. However, one should note that last stands are called that for a reason. It is the 'last' time you'll be doing it. Surviving or winning tends to mean you'll be doing it... again. Which makes that 'last' stand hardly last.

Also, you have the small issue with spelling here and there, as well as tenses. And when you've been spelling numbers, it catches the eye when you just use a number at the end instead of spelling it. In addition, it feels better if you go with past tense, instead of present. There is also the fact that you keep using the name instead of attempting to describe the character(s). There is personality, but that of a faceless/'nameless' soldier effect here.

This fic has potential, but the execution could have been better with more polishing. This fics reads like an omelet that is slightly overcooked in places, and slightly watery due to it not being fully cooked in places.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
Icarus Underwater by Jakkun

English: 16
Theme: 18
Details: 15
Story: 17
Awesomeness: 16
Total: 82

biigoh said:
I'm not quite seeing it in terms of Last Stands. How is it a stand when the Kingpin is resigned to his fate, and Spiderman is there to murder him in coldblood? The story is good, don't doubt that, but the theme doesn't quite fit in here.

Commas are also your friend, really. Outside of a minor typo in judgment, spelling is fine. But you could stand to use commas and periods to break up sentances. happy.gif

This is sort of like ordering a hefty lunch or dinner, only to get a breakfast meal of eggs and bacon. Excellent fic, but theme could have been better done.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
Street Fighting Men by MannequinMuse

English: 17
Theme: 17
Details: 16
Story: 18
Awesomeness: 18
Total: 86

biigoh said:
While this is a -post- defeat, in a way... it does fit the theme of Last Stand, because the outlook is grim and they likely will not live long. But, they will go down fighting. I do feel for the two men, as they radiate friendship that comes from knowing each other for some time.

And it is clear that there is some thought and research into the fic with the little details. Outside of minor spelling errors, the text flows smoothly.

This fic is much like having crumpets with earl grey tea that had some brandy mixed in, stout stuff. Much liking for it.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
Exaltation/Damnation by Grunt

English: 17
Theme: 19
Details: 19
Story: 18
Awesomeness: 18
Total: 91

biigoh said:
Minor typos do NOT detract from this little battle between the Imperium of Mankind and Chaos! Sadly, it looks like there shall be blood for the blood god, and skulls for the skull throne tonight as the Imperial Guard are no match for Chaos Marines and their Dark Masters.

This is akin to eating a steak, cooked perfectly, with just a hint of blood as you cut it. Just watch out for typos and such, and I would more than enjoy reading your fics in the GrimDark future that is Warhammer 40K.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
Golden Hero Style by Cornuthaum

English: 19
Theme: 18
Details: 18
Story: 19
Awesomeness: 18
Total: 92

biigoh said:
There is some minor issues with the flow of text, but that comes from being a stream of conciousness fic from the perspective of the protagionist. I also suspect that Gilgamesh would have called Archer "Faker", and Emiya Shirou "Mongrel" instead of "Thief"... but that's quibbling. happy.gif

I'm also surprised that he refers to Saber as Saber given that he knows her real name and has known it since the last war. Fate/Zero... num.

This is an interesting AU path, and yes, it is Gil's last stand. On the other hand, they'll need to face each other afterwards for the Grail. happy.gif

This is like a warm pancake with maple syrup drizzled over vanilla ice cream. Sweet and fluffy, and not quite filling. But a good snack.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
theM

English: 18
Theme: 15
Details: 17
Story: 17
Awesomeness: 17
Total: 84

biigoh said:
While the theme doesn't quite fit. It is amusing to see someone's reaction after they die from said last stand. Even if it's not quite the final last stand. But that's more Marvel/DC/comics in general than you. I do get the feel of Jubes, even if it's death pretending to be her.

Outside of some minor spelling errors, the text flows very well. In my eyes, the only thing that hurts this fic is that there is no hint of what the Last Stand was like. But it stands well on its own outside of that issue. And yes, it IS a terrible thing if you do end up as a Summers... but you pretty much get Plot-Armor the likes of which is on par with that of Sues.

This is like a banana split; sweet, delicious, and over far too fast.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
HW: Soldier by Shaderic

English: 19
Theme: 15
Details: 17
Story: 16
Awesomeness: 15
Total: 82

biigoh said:
While a zombie fic almost writes itself as a Last Stand fic, there is the matter of it seeming like a tell someone story than a show someone what happened. The dreadful show, not tell issue that pops up now and then.

This sort of fits the theme, but it is a bit weak and could have used some fleshing out to properly fit the theme of a Last Stand. Which kind of needs there to be a stand, and it's quite final. Last is last, after all, ne? And survival or even winning makes it not the 'last' one.

Spelling and such loks fine, the details are there, the story does flow... but as noted, there are some issues as above. Much like a pizza, it is hard to get a zombie fic wrong... but sometimes, the toppings don't quite work together well, y'know?

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
Rimmers Last Stand by Dartz_IRL

English: 17
Theme: 18
Details: 19
Story: 18
Awesomeness: 19
Total: 91

biigoh said:
While this was submitted pass the deadline, I feel it wouldn't be fair to you not to grade it. It's up to Watashiwa to allow the grade or not... but at least you'll know what I thought of the fic, yes?

Outside of such things as vindaloo's being better off as vindaloos and minor spelling issues. But that's more a side effect of the time constrain that you had, and I can't say much there.

The fic has a certain Red Dwarf feel to it. It truly does, you held up the spirit of the show. Whether that is a good thing or not, I'll leave that to future generations to judge. It doesn't quite meet the theme, but then... it's not quite the Last stand of many stands? Yes? Admitedly... this IS Rimmer, so that stand might have been his last attempt at such before he manned up and was made into Arnold "Ace" Rimmer. happy.gif

Much like a lamb vindaloo, this fic warms me up for nostalagia reasons. I wish they would show Red Dwarf again or that it hadn't ended.

This is my judgment and I stand by it.
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Congratulations to Cornuthaum, the winner of Iron Fic 12!
 

MannequinMuse

Well-Known Member
#58
Third Place- Get!

Edit: Also, Biigoh- please continue with the commentary and food analogies. They make me happai. :D

DuhDuhDOUBLE-EDIT: Copy paste this into the op of the iron fic 12 thread and just have the scores on this one. This is just an archive page yes?
 

Grunt

Well-Known Member
#60
Garglbarl if only my english didn't suck so much :p

Gratz to Corn for taking the well-deserved win, solar style :lol:
 
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