The White Devil of the Moon Chapter 3

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The White Devil of the Moon
By Bissek
Chapter 4
You May Now Befriend the Wedding Crasher

ôThis isnÆt looking good.ö Venus said. She had just finished relating the reckless and potentially catastrophic stunt her fellow Senshi had pulled to Mercury.

ôI wish I could disagree with you.ö Mercury replied. ôAt this rate, the princess is likely to reject any Senshi envoy we send to her, and if sheÆs really planning to leave the area after her brotherÆs wedding like you suspect, then weÆre running out of time.ö

ôWe need to speak with the princess soon, if weÆre going to have any chance of awakening her at all.ö Artemis concurred.

ôBut how are we supposed to get to her if the other girl keeps interfering?ö Ami questioned.

ôThatÆs because Luna probably forgot that her former rank no longer really applies.ö Artemis pointed out. The girls looked at him.

ôLuna and I used to be Queen SerenityÆs closest advisors. Because of that, if we called up someone in the court and asked for a meeting, the people we called would make time for that meeting, no matter what their schedules were like. We didnÆt need to state why we wanted a meeting, because as representatives of the throne, our business was considered more important than day-to-day business.

ôBut nowadays, most people donÆt remember that the Moon Kingdom ever existed, much less who were the key officials of it were. Luna probably demanded an audience with the princess, forgetting that in the eyes of the person she was talking to, she wasnÆt the chief advisor of a queen, she was just a total stranger who never gave an explanation for why she wanted to speak with the princess.ö

ôSo we could have avoided this entire mess if Luna had just bothered to say why she needed to talk with Nanoha?ö Venus groaned.

ôProbably.ö Both girls facepalmed.

ôDo you think we might be able to get them to listen if we try to explain whatÆs going on?ö

ôWe can only hope. If that doesnÆt work, I donÆt know how weÆll be able to get the princess to help. LetÆs seeà The communicator that Luna arranged for the princess to receive has been either destroyed or disabled, so we canÆt try that. Venus, did the princess or her companion ever give you any contact information?ö

ôNo,ö Venus admitted. ôI suppose I could turn up at the hotel theyÆre staying at, but we donÆt know what room, and even if we did know, theyÆd just be suspicious if I turned up when they didnÆt tell me where they live.ö

The three paused in thought. Then Artemis picked his head up.

ôIÆll go. The dog might smell me and seek me out. When it does, IÆll surrender and offer to explain everything. By now they must really want to know why LunaÆs been bothering them, so they should be willing to let me talk.ö

ôBut are you sure theyÆll take the bait fast enough?ö Mercury pointed out. ôLuna just used herself as bait in an ambush earlier tonight. They might decide itÆs another trap. We donÆt have much time left, so they might deliberately avoid you until itÆs too late.ö

ôMercuryÆs right.ö Venus agreed. ôWe need to know how much time we have left before the wedding.

ôI know. Most of NanohaÆs family works at a family-owned cafÚ. If we can find where that is, we might be able to learn of the date of the wedding. The ownerÆs son getting married would be important gossip for the people working there.ö

ôThatÆs a possibility.ö Mercury said, taking out her computer. ôWhatÆs the name of this cafÚ?ö

ôThe Midori-ya.ö

ôHmmà According to the computer, there isnÆt a cafÚ called Midori-ya in Tokyo. There is a cafÚ by that name owned by a man named Shiro Takamachi, but itÆs in Uminari.ö

ôWhat? She takes her first vacation in years due to a family wedding, and gets a hotel in a totally different city? ThatÆs strange.ö

ôI know. Still, it would explain why we couldnÆt always find her here in Juuban. She might have taken an occasional day trip to see her parents.ö

ôItÆs possible. Okay, we donÆt have school tomorrow, so IÆll catch a train down to Unimari and see if I can figure out what our timetable is. Artemis, you be ready to try your plan in the meantime.ö

With that, the impromptu meeting broke up.


Beryl was displeased. The weapon that her new slave had created turned out to be capable of seizing energy in significant amounts. But the never to be sufficiently accursed Senshi had destroyed it before it could transfer the energy to the Dark Kingdom.

Still, she had the plans to make more of this and other models of that weapon, and she had faithful youma servants creating more of them for her to use. In addition, she had her slave designing still more versions that she could create later. She would destroy the Senshi and their precious Moon Princessà It was only a matter of time.

A figure entered the throne room. General Nephrite strode across the long hallway, dropping to one knee as he reached the throne.

ôMy Queen.ö He said.

ôWhy have you come before me, Nephrite?ö She demanded.

ôI have accomplished the task you have set me, Your Majesty.ö He announced, holding a folded sheet of paper up.

Beryl smiled as she took the paper. ôYou have done well, my General. You may go.ö Nephrite rose, bowed, and backed out of the throne room.

When she had first learned of the princessÆs appearance, she had tasked Nephrite to use his powers of divination to learn of a time and place when her nemesis would be vulnerable. It had taken him weeks. Nephrite had claimed that his inability to find the answer faster was due to the specificity of the task and the lack of detail on the target. He could be faster when seeking a moment when a personÆs life energy would peak because he was seeking any person in a region whose life energy was likely to peak in the near future. Divining the future of a specific individual with only minimal information about that person was apparently a harder task. Beryl wasnÆt sure she believed his excuses. Had he taken much longer, she would have punished him for failing her. But now she had what she wanted.

Unfolding the paper, Beryl read the report.

According to the signs I have been able to determine, your enemy stands a great risk of coming to harm should adverse forces intervene in her life at a certain location tomorrow afternoonà


Precia closed her eyes in thought. Her imprisonment hadnÆt been particularly harsh, so long as she remembered to grovel sufficiently to her æmastersÆ when they deigned to grace her with their presence. Apart from when she provided them with the plans for her drones, and the infrequent times that they chose to come to her, she was ignored completely. This allowed her time to plan for an escape.

She had figured out where this æDark KingdomÆ was. She was apparently close enough to the non-administered world that she had sent her failed creation Fate to hunt Jewel Seeds on that she could transport herself and Alicia there without trouble. Her captors had also managed to acquire enough of the currency of that world that she had been able to create a cache of funds capable of supporting herself and her daughter quite well in that world for many years without being noticed.

The only thing keeping her from escaping was the collar. She had determined that she could be tracked through the collar, and that the man who controlled the collar would know if she tried to tamper with it. As a result, if she tried to flee or remove the collar, Jadeite would find her, and either activate the collar, murder Alicia, or both. The collar had only one flaw that she had been able to find, but it was one she couldnÆt exploit. The alerts on the collar currently flowed to Jadeite and only to Jadeite. If anything happened to him, she might be able to rid herself of the collar and escape before anyone could rekey the collar to a new controller. Unfortunately, she wasnÆt in a position to eliminate the man herself at the moment.

Still, given that she was designing weapons for these people, and that there were people on Non-Administered World #97 who kept destroying the weapons they already had, perhaps one day her captorÆs enemies would get lucky and Jadeite would come to some harm one of these days. It was something to hope for, while she waited for a chance to act against the man directly.


Minako was very glad that she had gotten very good at coming up with plausible excuses as to why she was dropping out of sight for hours on end over the course of a year and a half of superheroing. They probably wouldnÆt have approved of her taking the train to a different city on zero notice. Just as well that they didnÆt know.

The Midori-ya was easy to locate once she reached Uminari. It was only a five-minute walk from the train station. Minako reached it in time to see a group of people wheeling a cart with what was obviously a wedding cake out the door and into a car.

That wasnÆt a good sign. A cafÚ might make cakes for their customers, but normally a person looking for a wedding cake would go to a bakery, not a cafÚ. Unless, perhaps, the parents of a certain groom decided to make the cake themselves, and happened to use the oven in their workplace kitchen because it had an oven large enough to make a large cakeà

They had run out of time. The wedding was today. Minako started after the car transporting the cake. Fortunately, it didnÆt have far to go before reaching its destination, or she wouldnÆt have been able to keep track of where it was going.

Surprisingly, the carÆs destination wasnÆt to a church or shrine, but a private residence. The car stopped outside the stone wall surrounding the estate, where a group of people lingering outside the wall walked up to the car and examined it, its contents, and the people in it minutely. Minako had seen enough during her time as Sailor V to recognize a security checkpoint when she saw one. She just couldnÆt figure out why anyone would set one up for the wedding of a young man in the restaurant business.

There was no way sheÆd be able to use the disguise compact to sneak in û the guards wouldnÆt let her in unless she disguised herself as an invited guest, and seeing as she only could think of two potential guests û who for all she knew were already in there û she wouldnÆt be able to fool them. She would have to wait until the wedding ended before either catching Nanoha on the way out, or slipping in that evening to speak with her if she decided she was spending the night there.

Minako walked around the block several times, using the compact to change her appearance on occasion to ensure that the guards wouldnÆt wonder why a girl who wasnÆt from the neighborhood was so interested in the place they were guarding. Not much happened, apart from the arrival of wedding guests, all of whom were checked by security before being allowed in. One guest in particular caught MinakoÆs attention û even more than the fact that the bride had shown up in a limousine (This wasnÆt exactly a limo neighborhood, and the plates indicated that it was privately owned, not from a chauffer service) û because she knew who the guest was.

Fiasse Crystela. Owner and Headmaster of the Crystela Music Academy. The annual concert tour she went on with the cream of her students not only brought in a good sized fortune for the charities that she donated the profits to, it also was used by recording studios around the world as a talent search. Many of her students that had proven worthy of going on that tour had found recording contracts waiting for them upon graduation. How did NanohaÆs family get to know her well enough that theyÆd invite her to a family wedding? And on a more personal note, once the war against the Dark Kingdom was over, would Nanoha be willing to use her familyÆs association with the owner of the Crystela Music Academy to help the leader of her Senshi become a student there?

Time passed, and the wedding began. From her place outside the compound, Minako couldnÆt make out much of what was happening, she could only hear when music was played. Her jaw dropped when she realized that not only had the Takamachis managed to get the owner of one of the best music schools in the world to attend the wedding, they had also gotten her to act as the wedding singer. Despite her surprise, she was able to enjoy getting to hear a world-class singer perform live, even if the acoustics from being separated from the singer by multiple walls were far from ideal.

A few minutes later, she heard a crackling noise, and saw what looked like the edge of a portal poking out from above the stone wall. The Dark Kingdom had finally found the princess, and had decided to strike. Even with the apparently formidable skills of Fate, the fact that there would be a large number of civilians in the building would make it a lot harder to fight. It could easily turn into a bloodbath.

Minako ran to find a place she could transform. The Sailor Senshi were the guardians of the Moon Princess, and the princess was in danger.


Nanoha had spent most of the morning greeting the various wedding guests. Most of them were not relatives û most of her fatherÆs family, and the family of his first wife had died before he had married NanohaÆs mother. Many of them were people that her brother had met when travelling with their father in his old job, long before she had been born. As a result of that, they were people that she had only met briefly before, if at all.

In fact, the only one of the group of foreigners that had travelled to the wedding that Nanoha had really talked to at any point in her life was Fiasse, who was the daughter of the man her father had once protected before the injuries he sustained on the job forced him to retire from bodyguard work. Even then, she had only met the woman once, when her charity concert tour had taken her through Tokyo during the brief time that Kyouya and Miyuki had joined her security team. Kyouya had arranged for everyone at the Midori-ya to get tickets to the concert, and Nanoha had gotten to meet her after the concert was over. At the time, going to a big concert and getting to meet the star afterwards seemed like such a big event. Then two months later she met a talking ferret and she learned what a real life-altering event was likeà

Far more interesting was the meeting between Fate and FiasseÆs bodyguard, Elise. It wasnÆt anything either of them said or did. It was the simple fact that despite the fact that they couldnÆt possibly be related, given that they werenÆt even from the same planet, much less the same region, the two could pass for sisters. One of the other guests actually assumed they were sisters, to their mutual discomfort. Especially since it brought to FateÆs mind a real sister that she had known disturbingly well, considering that they had never met, and a mother refused to love her younger daughter, no matter how hard Fate tried to win her approval.

The remainder of the pre-wedding gathering passed without incident, and eventually the gathered populace filed into the family dojo for the wedding. The ceremony began uneventfully. Nanoha listened to Fiasse sing with honest enjoyment, having not heard her perform since before she had become a mage. She pretty much phased out the sermon. All was proceeding peacefully until the time came for Kyouya and Shinobu to exchange their vows, when the outside door of the dojo crashed open, and a group of strange humanoid creatures rushed inside, flanked by a group of drones and led by a man in a dark grey uniform.


Jadeite was sure that this would be his finest moment. Despite the fact that Nephrite was the one who had learned where the Moon Princess would be, the queen had entrusted the task of destroying her nemesis to him. Once he achieved this, his preeminence in the Shitennou would be assured. It wouldnÆt even be a difficult task. The Senshi would have had trouble taking out as many youma as he had been permitted to bring, and that didnÆt count the drones, of which the Senshi had barely been able to defeat a single one of, and Jadeite himself. And he was only going up against a girl who had yet to awaken to her powers. Nobody else here was likely to even be able to fight back.

Had this been a family wedding of any person connected to the Moon Kingdom other than the princess, he would have been right. None of the SenshiÆs families had any real experience in normal combat, and only ReiÆs grandfather had any knowledge of how to face a supernatural threat. Unfortunately, he was facing NanohaÆs family.

The Takamachi family was the last surviving branch of the Fuwa ninja clan. The reason it was the last surviving branch was because the last family reunion had been bombed. That was the main reason why the wedding was being held in the dojo instead of at a church or shrine. They wanted to make sure they could ensure that the wedding was held at a secure location, and that only the people invited showed up, without bringing any unwanted surprises with them, such as the exploding teddy bear that killed FiasseÆs father and ended ShiroÆs bodyguard career ten years previous. It also ensured that if trouble did show up, the family swords would be nearby so that they could defend themselves.

So it was a complete surprise to Jadeite to see that while most of the people in the room panicked, one of the brideÆs maids rose from her seat by the wall, grabbed two sets of paired kodachi that had been hanging on the wall right next to her seat, and tossed one of them to the groom. He did not expect two of the other guests to produce guns and start shooting, to be later joined by the security guards outside. He was expecting something on the order of the blonde girl abruptly changing outfits from a formal dress to a black and pink fuku, but not that the mystery Senshi had brought an axe. An axe which upon its owner muttering the words ôHaken Formö altered itself to become an energy scythe. Was this girl the Moon PrincessÆs personal guardian, or the princess herself? Not that it mattered. The princess was here, and if he had to kill every single person in the building that she could potentially be, he didnÆt have any problem with that. He ordered his troops to attack.

The women with the gun emptied their clips at one youma, only to find that a bullet to the center of mass only slowed it down. The groom, who had apparently had been armed even before catching the swords, one of which he had passed to an older man who was probably his father, threw a knife into the eye of the youma. The non-magical blade failed to kill its target, but the pain it caused forced the youma to back off enough for its original opponents to reload and shoot it in the kneecaps.

The two men and the woman with the swords advanced against the youma, attacking with swords, knives, and wire. They were able to bind and wound their enemies, but it didnÆt matter. Without magic reinforcing their blades, there was no way they could kill them. They would recover. Jadeite turned his attention to the girl with the scythe. She had engaged the drones, and even managed to destroy one, slicing it into pieces. He noted that the mystery Senshi moved so that she was always covering one specific member of the group that wasnÆt fighting. It looked like he had found the princessà

The other fighters were ignoring the youma they had wounded, assuming them out of the fight. That was a mistake. Soon they would recover from the injuries they had received and would drain their attackers of life energy. Once that was done, they could swarm under the Senshi and then they would eliminate the Moon Princess.


While it probably only took a minute or two for Minako to find a place to safely transform, it seemed a lot longer. She knew from hard experience just how long two minutes could be in a fight. The moment she transformed, she ran back to the site of the wedding.

She didnÆt bother worrying about the security guards. In her Senshi form, she was able to leap over the eight foot stone wall as if it was a track hurdle. Once inside the compound, she hurried to the place where all the noise was coming from, praying she wasnÆt too late.

Arriving at the scene of the battle, Venus was pleasantly surprised to see that the wedding party had made a fairly good showing for themselves, having managed to hold off their attackers until her arrival. Two men and one woman with short swords were facing off against the youma and one of the drones. Fate was confronting another drone with a rather nasty looking scythe, and a woman with dog-like ears that matched the description of FateÆs pet in humanoid form appeared to be conjuring up chains out of nowhere to slow the various attackers down.

But things were slowly turning in JadeiteÆs favor. The security guards who had tried intervening in the fight and at least two others had been drained of energy and were lying on the ground, unable to rise. Given that the swords that three of the defenders were using couldnÆt do more than slow the youma down, more people would soon follow. One of the drones was raising its blade, looking as if it was about to start killing the fallen defenders.

Venus pulled out her compact and threw it with practiced ease. The crescent boomerang scythed through three youma before striking the drone fighting the groom, scoring a noticeable scratch on its armor before returning to her hand. As it flew through the air, she ran towards the drone about to kill the fallen woman, leaping at it in a desperate jump kick. The blow, powered by magically enhanced muscles, knocked the robot away from its intended victim, its armor noticeably dented. Venus turned her attention to the remaining youma. Those she knew how to take down by herself.

With the addition of one more person capable of taking the attackers out of the fight permanently, the tide began to turn. Within three minutes, the enemy force was on its last legs. That was when Jadeite struck. With everyone mainly focusing on the remainders of the opponents that had actually been fighting, their attention had slipped from him, and he found an opening. He charged forward at the princess, drawing his sword as he did so.

The older of the men who had been fighting the youma might not have been in his prime anymore, but he could still move quickly when he had to. Jadeite found his blade blocked by another.

ôYou will not harm my daughter.ö Shiro Takamachi declared.

ôIÆd like to see you stop me, old fool.ö Jadeite retorted contemptuously. He reached out with his other hand, and broke the manÆs arm. Then he knocked the man aside with a casual blow. Turning back to his target, he saw a gloved fist strike him far harder than mere muscle could ever hope to. Staggering back, he saw Sailor Venus bend to pick up the sword that Shiro had dropped, ready to protect her princess with her own life if she had to.

ôYou have been a thorn in my side for far too long, Sailor Venus.ö Jadeite snarled. ôItÆs time I dealt with you once and for all.ö

ôFunny. I was thinking the same thing, Jadeite.ö Venus countered.

Blades clashed as the warriors from the Moon and Dark Kingdom battled for what they knew would be their final confrontation.


Nanoha was pressed against the wall, like all the other non-combatants in what had been a wedding before the battle broke out. While she had a slightly better idea as to what was going on than most of the people there, that hasnÆt saying much.

She recognized the outfit worn by the girl who had entered the fight late as being similar to those worn by the girls who had attacked Fate and Aruf the day before, but this girl, rather than attacking them, had saved Aunt MisatoÆs life, and then helped the others confront the attackers. This same girl was now facing down the man who had hurt her father.

While she had no real experience in sword fighting herself, Nanoha had seen experts in action many times, between the Mikami-ryu style practiced by her sister, the Fuwa-ryu style practiced by her father and brother, and the Belkan style practiced by Signum (the few matches that had occurred between Signum and Kyouya were quite impressive). As such, Nanoha could tell that the man who had crashed the wedding was an experienced swordsman û and that the girl facing him wasnÆt. Despite that, she didnÆt back down, doing whatever she could to ensure that her enemy was unable to reach Nanoha, even if she lost her life doing it.

Nanoha may not have known what the battle was ultimately about, but she knew which side she supported. And she had been standing on the sidelines long enough. She reached for Raising Heart and began reciting a mantra she had been taught years before.

I am the one who has been given a mission.
Under the contract, release these powers.
Winds to the skies, stars to the heavens,
And the unyielding soul to this heart.
Magic to these hands!
Raising Heart, Set Up!


ôStandby. Ready.ö Her faithful device reported. In a flash, Nanoha found herself in her barrier jacket, her staff at the ready. She knew that in her present condition, sheÆd only get one shot. SheÆd have to make it count.

ôDivine Buster.ö Raising Heart announced. Pink light started gathering at the tip of the staff.

ôNanoha, donÆt!ö Fate yelled. Nanoha ignored her.

IÆd get out of the way, if I were you. Nanoha telepathically informed the girl in the fuku.

ôDivineà BUSTER!!!ö Nanoha yelled, releasing the spell.

Sailor Venus just barely got out of the way in time. A wave of pink light smashed into Jadeite and kept going, blasting through the dojo wall and the stone fence outside. When the light faded, all that was left of the man were a few burnt scraps of his uniform, which blew outside as a draft came through the extra door that Nanoha had just created.

Gasping for breath, Nanoha deactivated her device and dispelled the barrier jacket. Silence reigned in the dojo as the gathered people tried to wrap their minds around what had just happened. Then Miyuki stepped forward.

MiyukiÆs glasses had fallen off during the fight, and had been stepped on at some point. Her hair ribbon had been sliced off, causing her long braid to come loose. Her bridesmaids dress was ripped and splattered with monster ichor. The crowd watched as NanohaÆs sister cleaned her swords on her already beyond help dress and addressed them.

ôWas there anybody else who had a reason why these two should not be wed?ö


The wedding resumed. While everyone knew that the police would show up demanding answers soon (NanohaÆs blowing up the outside wall guaranteed that, even if the gunshots earlier hadnÆt), it had been decided that it would be best to finish the ceremony.

Sailor Venus stood at the back. Thanks to this incident, the Sailor SenshiÆs status as urban legend had just come to an end. There were far too many witnesses, in broad daylight, for her to fade into rumor. Especially since the dismantled robots (And the æweddingÆ photos) provided far too much physical evidence to be ignored.

Still, this had been a major victory for the Senshi û their first real victory, from a certain point of view. One of the Shitennou had been defeated. With JadeiteÆs death, Beryl had suffered the loss of a servant she could not replace. That alone would buy the Senshi some much needed breathing room. Although she hadnÆt expected his defeat to come the way it had. She had most certainly not expected the princess to do something similar to a Senshi transformation and end up in an outfit that looked like a set of Gundam armor converted into a gown, followed by blasting Jadeite with a beam of energy that looked like something out of a mecha anime. Venus now knew exactly why Nanoha was nicknamed the ôWhite Devilö.

Venus knew that she owed Nanoha and Fate an explanation as to what was going on. Hopefully, after the wedding was over she could arrange a meeting to explain things someplace a little less public.

The wedding ended. Mrs. Kyouya Takamachi threw the bouquet. As the eyes of most of the single girls in the audience followed the bouquet, NanohaÆs eyes rolled up in her head as she collapsed onto the floor.

ôNanoha!ö Fate cried out, turning to her friend. Venus also ran to her princessÆs side, bending down to examine her. Nanoha was still breathing, but unconscious. Venus didnÆt know what had caused the collapse, but a glance at FateÆs face showed that she had a good idea as to what might have caused it, and was very worried.

As the eyes of the wedding guests all turned to the groomÆs fallen sister, the bouquet landed unnoticed, falling almost exactly where Venus had been standing before NanohaÆs collapse.


Omake: What the future holdsà

Sailor Pluto stood at the Gates of Time. She had been worried about the future of Crystal Tokyo for years now û ever since the day the princess met a talking ferret long before the time when she was supposed to meet a talking cat. Unfortunately, it quickly became apparent that if she tried to drive away the ferret, the world would be destroyed long before any of the Senshi could awaken. She had no choice but to watch as the princess came under the influence of people from a place that the Gates could not detect, even when they convinced her to travel with them to that place where she could not attempt to follow.

Now the princess had finally returned, only to get of on the totally wrong foot with her Senshi thanks to LunaÆs poorly thought out plan to free her from the influence of people that the princess had willingly placed herself under the control of years before. That mistake could potentially have destroyed Crystal Tokyo entirely. Calling on the power of the Gates, Pluto started looking into the far future.

The Gates revealed an image of a long hallway, filled with people, that was not built in the style of the Moon Kingdom. At the far end of the hallway stood a throne. Before the throne knelt a blonde-haired girl in a black bodysuit, a crown being lowered onto her head. As the girl raised her head, revealing her mismatched eyes, Pluto wondered who this was. This looked like the palace of Crystal Tokyo, but this girl was most definitely not Princess Serenity, in her previous life or her current one. What had happened? What did this mean for Crystal Tokyo? Why did the girl being crowned have a bunny plushy at her side?

Far into the future, ignorant of the gaze of a woman from a previous age, Vivio Takamachi assumed the throne as the first Kaiser of the Neo Belkan Empire.


A/N: IÆve been looking forward to this chapter since I started this story. I hope you all enjoyed it.

Fate really does resemble Elise. In a strange coincidence, Chrono resembles secondary Triangle Hearts villain Slicer. Of course, Miyuki would be far too polite to say something like ôYou know, you look a little like someone I cut the kneecap off of a few months ago.ö

AÆs had a missed CMOA when they didnÆt have Signum fight Kyouya and/or Miyuki. Instead, all they did with NanohaÆs siblings was have Kyouya endure a light jab about his love life from Miyuki. Foolish animators. Nanoha is not the only Takamachi capable of being awesome.

While Minako did have experience with a sword in her previous life, that doesnÆt translate to instant mastery in her current one (Though it would make it easier for her to relearn it). Also, in the Silver Millennium, she used a broadsword. Here, she was using a kodachi.
 

Prince Charon

Well-Known Member
#2
Interesting, that.
 
#3
bissek said:
Far into the future, ignorant of the gaze of a woman from a previous age, Vivio Takamachi assumed the throne as the first Kaiser of the Neo Belkan Empire.
Heil dir im Siegerkranz,
Herrscher des Vaterlands!
Heil, Kaiser, dir!
F³hl in des Thrones Glanz
Die hohe Wonne ganz,
Liebling des Volks zu sein!
Heil Kaiser, dir!

Heilige Flamme, gl³h',
Gl³h' und erl÷sche nie
F³rs Vaterland!
Wir alle stehen dann
Mutig f³r einen Mann,
Kõmpfen und bluten gern
F³r Thron und Reich!

Sei, Kaiser Vivio, hier
Lang' deines Volkes Zier,
Der Menschheit Stolz!
F³hl' in des Thrones Glanz,
Die hohe Wonne ganz,
Liebling des Volkes zu sein!
Heil, Kaiser, dir!

(Also OhGod you're using BetrayerS as canon?)
 

AbyssalDaemon

Well-Known Member
#4
A alright chapter though the entire situation with how all the inner Senshi happen to be together like they are needs to be explained given it does not make any sense in this verse and is one of the bigger stumbling blacks. And things still fairly rushed and somewhat forced.

And please, please tell me that omake isn't going to be canon? Or that if it is you won't use fanon!Pluto for it.
 

bissek

Well-Known Member
#5
Dark Knight Gafgar said:
bissek said:
Far into the future, ignorant of the gaze of a woman from a previous age, Vivio Takamachi assumed the throne as the first Kaiser of the Neo Belkan Empire.
Heil dir im Siegerkranz,
Herrscher des Vaterlands!
Heil, Kaiser, dir!
F³hl in des Thrones Glanz
Die hohe Wonne ganz,
Liebling des Volks zu sein!
Heil Kaiser, dir!

Heilige Flamme, gl³h',
Gl³h' und erl÷sche nie
F³rs Vaterland!
Wir alle stehen dann
Mutig f³r einen Mann,
Kõmpfen und bluten gern
F³r Thron und Reich!

Sei, Kaiser Vivio, hier
Lang' deines Volkes Zier,
Der Menschheit Stolz!
F³hl' in des Thrones Glanz,
Die hohe Wonne ganz,
Liebling des Volkes zu sein!
Heil, Kaiser, dir!

(Also OhGod you're using BetrayerS as canon?)
I've never even read it.

As for whether or not Vivio becomes ruler of the world, I'm not sure. I doubt the story will actually go that far.
 
#6
bissek said:
I've never even read it.
Odd. Let me basically sum up how BetrayerS ends:

 

S J C

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#7
I wonder what they will say when Nanoha says she doesn't want to be a Queen.

and that TSAB Regs prevent an active member form conquering Non-Administrated Worlds.
 

AbyssalDaemon

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#8
If they're anything like the canon versions they should be pretty ok with it once with it as long as they know that doesn't mean she isn't willing to protect the earth.
 

BF110C4

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#9
Right now Nanoha's family main priority is to attent to the injuries their little sister that have now become again serious enought to be life treatening, talk to both blondes magical girls in order to gte the record straight on the attack, and to discover which of the Ace of Aces many, many enemies is responsible of this (an Ace of Aces is someone who has become an ace five times or what is the same, shot down five times five enemies in combat, that means at least 25 potencial enemies).

Now that the existance of the Senshi is no longer an pervert's urban legend Fate is going to need to investigate the Youmas and the Dark Kingdom, she is now under obligation to call the TSAB, who may or may not send help in time (we do not know the response time and previous commminment of their fleet assets). It would be interesting if they sent an hostile superior officer instead of Lindy, Chrono, or some other helpful flag officer.
 

MWkillkenny84

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#10
And Nanoha STRIKE!
Jadeide goes down, as stated in The Laws (who say who, when ANGRY!Nanoha strike someone, that someone is DEAD).
So, now Precia is free to remove the collar...
Escaping or golpe against Beryl?
Or worse, calling her old friend Jail to request a little support?
I dread to see THAT option becoming true...
Oh, and NOW the TSAB will be FINALLY called. And the NanoFate duo WILL receive a COMPLETE explanation on the WHY the Senshi need Nanoha...
And I hope the 'dastinated love' garbage will be tossed into a Ragnarok or a Plasma Zanber blast radius...
Vote: 10+++
 

Datvris

Active Member
#11
I'm surprised that Suzuka didn't make an appearance at all and only merited a brief mention in the last chapter, given that this is supposed to be her sister's wedding. At the least, Nanoha should have tried catching up with her before the wedding.

I'm almost sure Jadeite survived -- it just seemed over far too quickly and easily. This was the guy who could take a sustained assault by multiple opponents and was winning until being tricked into almost running himself over with a plane. Nanoha-verse abilities are geared more towards mass destruction, but given that the Sensi have (theoretically) significantly more power behind their usual attacks, I'd not have expected a single Divine Buster to incinerate him. In fact, Nanoha's usual MO is to keep the firepower at non-lethal levels unless given no other choice (recall how Quattro managed to survive at the end of StrikerS relatively unscathed despite Nanoha's state of mind and the apparent destructiveness of the shot). I'd think that Nanoha would be pretty sure that Jadeite either ran or teleported out rather than Minako's assumption that he's dead.
 

Rabe

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#12
Datvris said:
I'm surprised that Suzuka didn't make an appearance at all and only merited a brief mention in the last chapter, given that this is supposed to be her sister's wedding. At the least, Nanoha should have tried catching up with her before the wedding.

I'm almost sure Jadeite survived -- it just seemed over far too quickly and easily. This was the guy who could take a sustained assault by multiple opponents and was winning until being tricked into almost running himself over with a plane. Nanoha-verse abilities are geared more towards mass destruction, but given that the Sensi have (theoretically) significantly more power behind their usual attacks, I'd not have expected a single Divine Buster to incinerate him. In fact, Nanoha's usual MO is to keep the firepower at non-lethal levels unless given no other choice (recall how Quattro managed to survive at the end of StrikerS relatively unscathed despite Nanoha's state of mind and the apparent destructiveness of the shot). I'd think that Nanoha would be pretty sure that Jadeite either ran or teleported out rather than Minako's assumption that he's dead.
Reasons why I'm almost completely certain Jadeite is dead

1) Nanoha knew she only had the one shot.

2) It was her family and their hapless if appartently dedicated protectors lives on the line.
 

BF110C4

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#13
I do agree on the fact that Nanoha is usually restrained with her power attacks, but there are two facts that would increase the risk for Jadeite, the first being the fact that Nanoha didn't have neither the time nor the endurance for her carefully restrained combat style (no matter what they say about her she does not believe in overkill, thats Hayate's tactic) so she needed to go with a spell that would be at least a certain K.O.

The second reason why Jadeite is death is because he is not used to focused direct energy attacks, only to the Senshi elemental spells. That means that his defence was geared towards surviving either ice, fire, elctricity, and even the Crescent Beam which are more diffused. I guess their protection is the same as the Chobham armour as they offer superior resistance against high explosives anti-tank but less protection when faced with kinetic energy penetrators. In other words, Nanoha's shot penetrated his magical armor and then blew him up.

By the way, how does Nanoha will react towards killing someone in the line of duty?, it is her first kill, or there are others?, those are questions that will need to be answered sooner or later.
 
#14
BF110C4 said:
By the way, how does Nanoha will react towards killing someone in the line of duty?, it is her first kill, or there are others?, those are questions that will need to be answered sooner or later.
No idea about kills on the line of duty, but nanoha did kill Reinforce, and she at least somewhat felt for her.
 

BF110C4

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#15
But killing Reinforce was more like an assisted suicide, this is an officer using letal force in the line of duty, and things like adrenalin can make a harder impression when she rest a little and starts thinking again.

Plus on a more impersonal matter it will also mean that the TSAB will probably do an official investigation to determinate if the shot was legal, and if the situation required full use of Magic in front of unadministered planetary people. The way that meeting is conducted will tell a lot of the mission's commander, if it is a military or a police operation, and how the TSAB sees the situation of Earth.
 

Megaolix

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#17
BF110C4 said:
But killing Reinforce was more like an assisted suicide, this is an officer using letal force in the line of duty, and things like adrenalin can make a harder impression when she rest a little and starts thinking again.

Plus on a more impersonal matter it will also mean that the TSAB will probably do an official investigation to determinate if the shot was legal, and if the situation required full use of Magic in front of unadministered planetary people. The way that meeting is conducted will tell a lot of the mission's commander, if it is a military or a police operation, and how the TSAB sees the situation of Earth.
Or maybe you're thinking too much on it? Are you seriously thinking that someone will give trouble over Nanoha's shot? And hell, what about Fate first?

Anyway, I've seen a review that ask a pretty good question. Last I checked, that group wouldn't have minded killing everyone at the wedding.

Nanoha's not fully healed and the TSAB hasn't even shown up yet and you've already offed Jadeite, almost as a nuisance at that. How do you expect to maintain any semblance of suspense when it doesn't even take a Starlight Breaker to completely vaporize a Dark General? Nanoha might not even need to cast another spell until the second season if Hayate and her minions get involved.
So... If Hayate and the Wolken shows up to help, can we even doubt who will win?
 

S J C

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#18
Megaolix said:
BF110C4 said:
But killing Reinforce was more like an assisted suicide, this is an officer using letal force in the line of duty, and things like adrenalin can make a harder impression when she rest a little and starts thinking again.

Plus on a more impersonal matter it will also mean that the TSAB will probably do an official investigation to determinate if the shot was legal, and if the situation required full use of Magic in front of unadministered planetary people. The way that meeting is conducted will tell a lot of the mission's commander, if it is a military or a police operation, and how the TSAB sees the situation of Earth.
Or maybe you're thinking too much on it? Are you seriously thinking that someone will give trouble over Nanoha's shot? And hell, what about Fate first?

Anyway, I've seen a review that ask a pretty good question. Last I checked, that group wouldn't have minded killing everyone at the wedding.

Nanoha's not fully healed and the TSAB hasn't even shown up yet and you've already offed Jadeite, almost as a nuisance at that. How do you expect to maintain any semblance of suspense when it doesn't even take a Starlight Breaker to completely vaporize a Dark General? Nanoha might not even need to cast another spell until the second season if Hayate and her minions get involved.
So... If Hayate and the Wolken shows up to help, can we even doubt who will win?
Yes due to the demon god sleeping in the pole
 

MWkillkenny84

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#19
Just a question: does any of the various parties outside of the TSAB know of the Book of The Night Sky/Book of Darkness existance?
If so, what will be the reactions at seeing the Wolkenritter?
 

Tsukino_kage

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#20
Now, just how is Luna going to screw this up?

Oh, come on... you've got to be thinking that they're still seeing Fate as the bad guy. And Luna doesn't strike me as the type to apologize for anything.
 
#21
Tsukino_kage said:
Now, just how is Luna going to screw this up?

Oh, come on... you've got to be thinking that they're still seeing Fate as the bad guy. And Luna doesn't strike me as the type to apologize for anything.
If two of the Senshi, Artemis, and the Princess herself start giving her pointed glares, I'm sure she'll change her tune.
 

MWkillkenny84

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#22
Dark Knight Gafgar said:
If two of the Senshi, Artemis, and the Princess herself start giving her pointed glares, I'm sure she'll change her tune.
Yes, and I can sell you a certain bridge in New York, if you TRULY believe in what you have just said.
It's Anime!LUNA the one who we are speacking, a hyper-paranoid cat who can see Youma-based evil plots into even her shadow, worsened with the fact she hasn't be able to found sooner the Moon Princess, and when she has found her, she has been blocked by what she perceive as an uncooperative crazy and later Dark Senshi who has treated her as a nuisance. She will SURELY speack badly of Fate, even accusing her to have brainwashed Venus.
 

bissek

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#23
And what happens when she learns that the princess had been taken away by aliens to train their army of magical girls?

That might make a good omake.

Of course, by the time Luna really does meet the princess, she's also going to find that a certain ferret has usurped the talking animal companion position.
 
#24
MWkillkenny84 said:
Dark Knight Gafgar said:
If two of the Senshi, Artemis, and the Princess herself start giving her pointed glares, I'm sure she'll change her tune.
Yes, and I can sell you a certain bridge in New York, if you TRULY believe in what you have just said.
It's Anime!LUNA the one who we are speacking, a hyper-paranoid cat who can see Youma-based evil plots into even her shadow, worsened with the fact she hasn't be able to found sooner the Moon Princess, and when she has found her, she has been blocked by what she perceive as an uncooperative crazy and later Dark Senshi who has treated her as a nuisance. She will SURELY speack badly of Fate, even accusing her to have brainwashed Venus.
If Luna actually does act like that it'll be cliche and disappointing as all hell. Frankly I'm hoping she'll man-er, Mooncat up and admit she was wrong. I see enough girls that won't admit they might be wrong in real life to have it cross into fanfic too.
 
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