Bleach Veiled Moon Chapter 2

Wheeljack

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#51
shiki said:
Just read the whole thing. You have a continuity issue.

The prologue has Uzume meeting the new residents but in chapter 1 it has her telling Ichigo about them before he went to the inn in a phone call.
Not exactly.

They meet briefly when Musubi and Minato literally drop in on Izumo Inn.

<a href='http://www.mangafox.com/manga/sekirei/v01/c002/10.html' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.mangafox.com/manga/sekirei/v01/c002/10.html</a>

The bath battle happens in chapter 4.

If anything, we likely need to reword the dialogue in the prologue, as I think we were also getting the manga mixed with anime dialogue.

Thanks for the heads up.
 

kitsuneb

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#52
Really, I didn't see any problem with it. You see, Minato moved into the Izumo inn that night but needed a couple of days to get everything settled, nothing says that Ichigo and Minato's respective visits couldn't have overlapped.

edit: according to the Sekirei wikia, Minato gains another Sekirei, though non-canonically due to it being a video game, number 54: Kuruse.
 

Seed00

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#53
Touching, touching. Quite frankly, the addition of the other sekirei will remove any privacy and romantic moments Uzume will hope to have in the future.

More Sekirei will only help to confuse his feelings more as he looks for a way to not hurt them. It's hard enough with Uzume but the other person will just complicate matters more.

However, they should enjoy whatever time they still have now, Miya will probably not even allow such close moments of intimacy.

With Ichigo's powers coming back in the manga, how far will Ichigo proceed to protect Uzume even under current conditions?


Wheeljack, Ghostface. Whoever you add, please just don't overdo it.
 

Wheeljack

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#54
kitsuneb said:
Really, I didn't see any problem with it. You see, Minato moved into the Izumo inn that night but needed a couple of days to get everything settled, nothing says that Ichigo and Minato's respective visits couldn't have overlapped.

edit: according to the Sekirei wikia, Minato gains another Sekirei, though non-canonically due to it being a video game, number 54: Kuruse.
Actually, Kuruse in the game has an ashikabi, from what I could tell. It's that she joined forces with Minato's flock to help the baby from Yahan and her ashikabi.

Seed00 said:
Touching, touching. Quite frankly, the addition of the other sekirei will remove any privacy and romantic moments Uzume will hope to have in the future.

More Sekirei will only help to confuse his feelings more as he looks for a way to not hurt them. It's hard enough with Uzume but the other person will just complicate matters more.
Bingo.

With Ichigo's powers coming back in the manga, how far will Ichigo proceed to protect Uzume even under current conditions?
Manga arc has not happened in this timeline and will not happen (unlesss something out of left field happens that we think we can use). The only things we'll use are any bits of background information that come forth that may suit our purposes.

Wheeljack, Ghostface. Whoever you add, please just don't overdo it.
That is something we're both aware of, from our early discussions about who to include and how many, with the number going up and down and up and down before making the decision on a number and to stick to it. Not to mention that we wanted to be different in some areas.

We both know that we're going to get more than a few eyebrow raises, and some of the speculation has not come close to drawing water as of yet. But we hope you do enjoy the ride, and by all means let us know what you think, good or bad.


marthf1 said:
Considering how much time & effort it is taking Uzume to gain a very special place in Ichigo's heart, I wonder how things will go with other Sekirei, if any. I suppose brothers/sisters-in-arms will be the gist of it, especially when the 'game' kicks into high gear.
This is one of the things we're hoping to portray right, as Ichigo at this point believes one sekirei per ashikabi. And as you can see from above, Uzume's breaking through his emotional walls, and we know how difficult that can be, so when the inevitable happens, we really want to throw him for a loop.

Though we also do want to remind people that while there will be more of this and some action, we also want to keep the comedy up as well.
 

nick012000

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#55
Personally, I just hope that you don't forget Ichigo's canon harem of Orihime, Rukia, Nel Tu, and maybe Tatsuki.

Also, that the two of them will actually fuck the members of their harem at some point, rather than just going along never advancing their relationship.
 

Steel

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#56
Orihime and Rukia can go hug a stump. Tatsuki supremacy.
 

Coelacanth

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#57
nick012000 said:
Personally, I just hope that you don't forget Ichigo's canon harem of Orihime, Rukia, Nel Tu, and maybe Tatsuki.

Also, that the two of them will actually fuck the members of their harem at some point, rather than just going along never advancing their relationship.
You are sooooooooooooooooooooooooo desperate.
 

Darksnider05

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#58
dr.michael92 said:
nick012000 said:
Personally, I just hope that you don't forget Ichigo's canon harem of Orihime, Rukia, Nel Tu, and maybe Tatsuki.

Also, that the two of them will actually fuck the members of their harem at some point, rather than just going along never advancing their relationship.
You are sooooooooooooooooooooooooo desperate.
seconded for great truth
 

Seed00

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#59
nick012000 said:
Personally, I just hope that you don't forget Ichigo's canon harem of Orihime, Rukia, Nel Tu, and maybe Tatsuki.

Also, that the two of them will actually fuck the members of their harem at some point, rather than just going along never advancing their relationship.
Go read Lord of the land of fire's sekirei fics if it's the lemons you want. That guy doesn't disappoint.
 

zeebee1

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#60
Go look at his fics. The only thing that isn't disappointing about them is that they exist. But quality has never been one of his strong points.
 

Seed00

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#61
zeebee1 said:
Go look at his fics. The only thing that isn't disappointing about them is that they exist. But quality has never been one of his strong points.
I meant disappoint in the amount of sex in his fics. Of course, It's rated M, but I wasn't commenting on the quality of his fics in the first place.

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Though we also do want to remind people that while there will be more of this and some action, we also want to keep the comedy up as well.
You said you want to keep up the comedy, but will there be moments when Icihigo is trying on his part to move things ahead with Uzume only for some one to 'accidentally' (harem anime fashion) to interfere?

And are we talking serious heartache for Ichigo or just him going plain crazy from whatever woman that you and Ghostface choose?

I don't see Ichigo choosing the Tenchi solution, but hey (obvious statement following) It's your fic.
 

nick012000

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#62
dr.michael92 said:
nick012000 said:
Personally, I just hope that you don't forget Ichigo's canon harem of Orihime, Rukia, Nel Tu, and maybe Tatsuki.

Also, that the two of them will actually fuck the members of their harem at some point, rather than just going along never advancing their relationship.
You are sooooooooooooooooooooooooo desperate.
No, just annoyed at stories where The Status Quo Is God and the relationships never go anywhere.
 

Coelacanth

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#66
No reason, just bored. I decided to go back and reread the two chapters because nothing else of interest has been updated recently, except for LRaine's newest fic, but it's not the same as something more concrete.
 

core_88

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#67
:blue: Sadface the saddest face thought this was an update. :blue:
 

Tsuki_CB

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#69
Nobody loves you and we killed your kitten while you weren't looking.

Zeebee watched, he likes to do that.
 

core_88

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#70
I'm sad that you killed my kitten, on the other hand i now apparently have a zombie cat which is pretty awesome.
 

Coelacanth

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#72
Plays Monster Reborn. Attacks life points directly.
 
#73
Summons Bahamut Zero, Bahamut Zero uses Terra Flare. And now you are all dead.
 

Seed00

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#74
Xzar said:
Summons Bahamut Zero, Bahamut Zero uses Terra Flare. And now you are all dead.
Final attack-Knights of the Round. Take you with me, sucka.
 
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