Bleach Veiled Moon Chapter 4 WIP

Wheeljack

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DhampyrX2 said:
Wheeljack said:
Ghostface said:
<a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7488090/1/Veiled_Moon_Omakes' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>I'ma just gonna plop this here...</a>

Also got a poll on my profile for possible sekirei for Ichigo to wing.á I already know his final party, and heck some are in the poll.á But for those who aren't I might be influence to do a What-If scenario for them in the future depending on how they place in the poll.
I can no haz Benitsubasa?

Or Mitsuha?
You're welcome to Sakura MkII.
By Sakura, are you perchance referring to the one from Naruto?

I... kinda never got into Naruto (to put it extremely mildly), so I am I to guess that she is as quick tempered as Benitsubasa?

Or are you referring to my little jab there?

I kid Ghost, I kid...


Ghostface said:
You can do that yourself, I told you so.
Bu-but... Should not the readers also have a say? :sisi: :p

Edit: BTW Ghost, I thought'd you be posting the other bios over here as well when they come up, as Uzume's should be here. Or are you looking for a good pic to use for the thread?
 

Ghostface

Lazy Bastard...
That's fer me, you do what I say slaveboi.

Edit: Er... I forgot. :3c
 

Muramasa

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Of the choices:


Oriha: Doesn't really do anything for me.
Namiji: She's cute. Maybe later on.
Yashima: Her ashikabi pissed me the hell off. Yes definitely.
Karasuba: Definitely not unless Ichigo smacks her down, HARD.
Nanaha: Almost seems to be a given considering she vowed with Ikki to be winged to the same ashikabi.
Katsuragi: She's so plain... Unless Ghostface/Wheeljack flesh out her character more... no.
Kazehana: HELL YES! But later on...
Akitsu: Seems to be fixated on Mikogami. And she's nothing if not extremely loyal.

Edit:

Benitsubasa: Fun character, but ties to discipline would probably complicate Ichigo's life a bit too much at this early stage of the game... Her and Musubi would go at it constantly...
Haihane: Ichigo would have to spend a fortune in bandages... Fun charachter but has the same issues as Benitsubasa.
Mitsuha: Interesting. Would not be my next Sekirei to wing but I can definitely see her in Ichigo's Harem.

Edit #2: What the heck? It seems I switched Katsuragi and Namiji. Changing it.
 

Wheeljack

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Ok, getting back to a sense of seriousness back for a moment.

For one thing, I kinda got semi blindsided by the seperate section for the omakes on ff.net and the poll, but it seems Ghost did make mention of it to me but I guess I got it confused for something else.

As mentioned, we've already nailed down exactly who will be Ichigo's Sekirei so who he mentions can be a possible what if scenario.

One scenario of which we've been toying back and forth with but would probably like the input of TFFers first before we decide to keep it seperate or make it canon to the main story. We're not going to forget some of our other Bleach cast members (and there are some dropped hints in previous chapters) but one in particular we've been mulling over, and aren't sure if including them would swerve the main story too much.

And now, our Chapter 5 prologue.

A word of warning is that this may be some time before it comes out. Discussions between the two of us when we started to flesh out the outline and new ideas point that this is looking to be another monster of a chapter. Ghost also has some extra obligations in real life that are going to be taking his time as the Holidays begin to roll around, so outside of our chats he may not have much writing time (and tbh, I do think some of our best stuff happens when we can play off each other's lines and character dialogue). Compounding this is also we are looking into some of our other stuff and maybe something new. But who knows...

Also, the below is subject to review and revisionment as we get further along with the chapter proper. However it is nice to see something I wrote last November seeing the light of day.

And now, the prologue:

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It was cold, her mind told her.

Shivering, she curled herself tighter, gathering what heat she could in an attempted to fall back asleep. She turned her head, doing her best to ignore the cold breeze and the occasional light 'something' hitting her skin every so often.

Whatever it was, it was wet.

'Wet'?

She stirred a bit a that, her mind now coming into focus as her body relayed to her brain sensations that she should not be feeling. The last thing she remembered before falling to sleep was being in a motel room curled in a bed.

Was there a hole in the roof? She didn't remember hearing anything about rain on the news, and while it was very cold there hadn't been much cloud cover.

Even the bed beneath her was no longer soft, but hard like the ground-

Her eyes shot open as her heartrate skyrocketed. She was no longer on a bed in a motel.

Frightened, the timid girl shot to her feat and looked for the security of her weapon. Not finding it she took took in her surroundings, her heart still feeling like it would explode and her mind dreaming up all sorts of scenarios such as kidnapping or pranks or lab experiments or worse.

The breeze grew stronger, and she realized that it was lightly sprinkling. Looking upward, the cloudy sky was grey, but she could not fathom what time of the day it was. Holding her arms together to conserve heat she turned toward the ground.

And yelped in the scene before her.

She was on a building. Literally on a building.

Sideways. With windows around her, but to her shock she did not fall.

The building was an odd shade of blue with others around her-

She turned quickly, trying to not look at the scenery around her lest she begin to grow dizzy and maybe fall for real.

'I'm....I'm here again?

Wrapping her arms around her shivered from the cold and noticed something amiss and looked down and found herself nude. With that she fell to her knees to cover herself more and rubbed her arms. 'I... I could really use some clothes...huh? With that thought, she found herself clothed again in her normal attire. Wei...weird...

Taking in some breaths to calm herself as well as to convince herself she would not fall she raised her head and her eyes widened.

'I... I can see more', she realized as she hesistantly stood up and brought her arms up to cover her face from the light sprinkle. And its sprinkling now... Indeed, this was the third time she found herself here. The first around three months ago and the last time almost two months now. However, unlike last time, the scenery was much more solid, and from what she could remember the 'sky' was only cloudy last time.

She hesitantly began to move forward to see what she could. Turning her head around she tried to see if there were was any way to get to- "Oof!", she cried out, bumping into something.

Wait.

There wasn't anything that she would run into when she started walking.

She shook her head and looked forward.

She wasn't alone.

She gasped and quickly hopped back a few steps, began bowing a few times and began muttering an apology as best she could.

No reply came to her.

She looked up, wondering why and who she ran into.

Several yards away stood a figure, a man, she could see. His back was toward her and his arms were held loosely at his hips, fists clenched. She could see his unkept and somewhat spikey hair came to just about his shoulders, and noted that it was bright orange, a shade or two darker than her own strawberry blond hair.

Wait.

Could...could this be her Ashikabi?

She was told from some of the adjusters that some Sekirei would be able to see the face of their true ashikabi in their dreams. If their connection was strong enough, or if the Ashikabi was strong enough through having winged some Sekirei some would bear witness to this vision.

But..but why would she see her Ashikabi in such a place?

Standing and no longer aware of the odd scenery around her she took a hesistant step forward, curious to see his face. Reaching him she noted just how tall he was compaired to her, easily a head and half or so. Blushing she looked at his face and took a step back, surprised at the look he was giving.

A scowl graced his face as he gazed downward, almost in frustration as she noted again that his fists were clenched. Was he angry? Was he in trouble? Her mind raced with coming up with what kind of situations he may be in.

Turning as she contemplated she yelped again as their was another figure with her.

'Where... where did this person come from', she thought frightened.

Clad in black, he stood a few feet away, facing what she now believed to be her ashikabi. What surprised her most, other than the giant cleaver that was resting before him bladefirst in the ground, the figures hands resting on the hilt was that this man was wearing her ashikabi's face.

Twins? Why the different clothing? He stood almost relaxed, as if he were waiting. Turning back to the figure she first saw, she noted his expression changed, eyes face more somber and his eyes closed.

Confused, she turned back to find the figure was gone.

'Wha-what's going on', she thought, a bit afraid now.

Turning back to her ashikabi, his face and posture again changed, his hands in his pants pocket and his posture a bit more relaxed. His face was now neutral as he gazed ahead, and she noted his brown eyes. Warm, brown eyes that looked ahead, as if he were waiting...

She then took a step forward to touch him, closing her eyes.

To open them to find herself back in her bed, her blankets wrapped around her as the morning light broke through the motel room's curtains. She moaned as she cursed herself for waking up.

But, her mind told her, the good news was she saw who she was meant to be with and she smiled, happier now than she had been in a long while.

It was a cheerful thought in the face of what seemed to be an unending nightmare ever since she was released and got seperated from her friends.

Not to mention a persistant would-be suitor who managed to keep tracking her, no matter how much she had run and barely make an escape.

'Like last night, she thought and pulled herself into a tight ball, shivering at how close it was and trying to hold back a few tears as the haunting memory came back to her.

She looked around the motel room, trying to focus on anything to keep the memory at bay, a few tears that she had been holding back now beginning to fall. Her eyes paused at the small table at the side of the bed that had the lamp and telephone at. Next to the lamp's base and behind the phone was a bible, a bit unusual in Japan but, she reminded herself, the motel chain she was in had a western owner. After a moment of contemplation she then clasped her hands in prayer, hoping that God or anyone would hear her plea.

'Please... please let me find my Ashikabi...' An image of 'that face showed up in her mind and she shivered again. 'Please let this nightmare end'...

Finally she pulled back and opened her eyes, contemplating the day and if she should risk going out. Her stomach grumbled, reminding her that she would need to go out sometime, as most of the motel food she had experienced wasn't all that great to begin with.

She took a deep breath and made her decision. Looking to the side she saw her giant black hammer, ready for her.

Moving off her bed she stood and stretched.

Sekirei #84, Yashima, found herself trying to raise her spirits to start a new day.

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And there you have it.

Yashima, for those of you who do not know who she looks like:




And a link to that episode to better understand her plight, and a fucking big reason why I persisted on this:

<a href='http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x3dtlO-0QHg&t=3m43s' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x3dtlO-0QHg&t=3m43s</a>

<a href='http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x3dtlO-0QHg&t=7m47s' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x3dtlO-0QHg&t=7m47s</a>
 

Ghostface

Lazy Bastard...
I thought you were gonna make it not so obvious man. So much for muh poll
 

Wheeljack

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Ghostface said:
I thought you were gonna make it not so obvious man.? So much for muh poll
::points finger at Ghostface::Shouldn't you be at work?
 

Muramasa

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Well, there was some foreshadowing earlier so I'm not surprised. Anyway, I wholly approve. Poor Yashima.
 

Ghostface

Lazy Bastard...
Guess I might as well put this Bio here I suppose.

Veiled Moon Bios:




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Sekirei #10
Uzume
"The Girl Next Door"
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Japanese Name :á ??
Gender:á? Female
Voiced by :á Nabatame Hitomi(Japanese), Jamie Marchi(English)
Ashikabi:á? Ichigo Kurosaki
Norito:á? Through this shawl contracted to me, I shall dance and purify the nigtmares of my Ashikabi!
B:á? 95
W:á? 57
H:á? 90
Height:á? 5'4.5"
Weight:á? 45kg
Hobbies:á? Cosplay
Favorite food:á Okonmiyaki
Most valuable:á Ichigo Kurosaki
Fears the most:á Loneliness, The Death of Ichigo Kurosaki

"When I fight, I do it in style, and I never lose!"

Sekirei Number Ten Uzume is the first member of Ichigo's Sekirei harem.

Cheerful, A tease, gorgeous, very upbeat, and optimistic. That is what describes this buxom young woman to a 'T', and has so utterly blindsided Ichigo that he can't help but notice.

Amongst the first Sekirei to be released, she had helped Matsu in her escape with one of the Jinki. Due to this, she would come to live at Izumo and be placed under Miya's protection in case MBI would come after her for the theft. Fortunately for her, they never did and she is able to move about the Capitol like any other normal Sekirei seeking their Ashikabi (unlike Matsu, who is scared spitless that MBI would immediately close in on her). Going out into the open would have other issues, namely Seo's girls Hikari and Hibiki, who attack unwinged Sekirei in hopes of keeping them out of participating in Minaka's cruel game.

It was on such chase that fate would smile on her and give her a change in direction and altering her course which saw many of her counterparts come to a cruel end. She encounter Ichigo during a random encounter and his actions during their meeting eventually led to him being winged by her. Like a whirlwind, she has made an impact on Ichigo's world that he never expected. Over the past few months, she has come to know her beloved Ashikabi well, but still has a long way to come in fully understanding the reasons her Ichigo acts the way he does.

Still, she has come to make the scowling former substitute shinigami smile a bit more than he used to, so she has made some miraculous strides in that respect. With the new addition of Ikki however, one wonders how she will handle the new wrinkle in her life.

Uzume is a kind, trustworthy, and loving woman outside of battle but can be violent and ruthless in battle. She is unquestionably loyal to her family and friends, but relentless towards her enemies.á She loves and honors her ashikabi Ichigo and hopes to live up to the expectations her 'papa' Isshin has for her.á However, she is miffed and curious as to the secrets that Ichigo and his friends are keeping from her at this point in time.á As such, her battle to earn Ichigo's complete love and trust continue.

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Author's Notes:

Tits that awesome deserve better than that.

I'm gonna learn to watch what I say one of these daysà

This fic was born out of a desire to advert Uzume's tragic fate in the series, even if I'm more or less over it now. I do wonder if the fact that I'm over it is due to this fic at times. In any case, I hope you all enjoy the journey that this young woman will undergo in her quest to get Ichigo to smile as he used to before Masaki's death at Grand Fissure's hands.

Words From Wheeljack:

Blame Uzume for this fic. Seriously.

Both Ghostface and I were watching Sekirei to see her cut down in Pure Engagement and to our dismay found it was to be a prelude to what happened to her in the manga a scant few weeks later. Both of us cried bullshit to what had happened as both of us like Uzume very much and felt she had been shortchanged big-time. Despite the sentiment being shared oddly enough the Sekirei fan fiction community, while small, didn't really have Uzume finding a way to a better life, either with Chiho or another Ashikabi (and no, we have not forgotten that girl either).

About the same time, Ichigo was finishing his battle with Aizen, and the manga had just gone on a three week break with Ichigo's victory and loss of powers. So Ghost comes to me one day and says, "What do you think could be crossed over with Sekirei?" and soon enough mentioned Bleach. Musubi had been mentioned breifly, but we both know it was just a name that had to be thrown out to get out of the way, as we both never thought twice about Minato's first, but Uzume was always the one who meant to have second billing in this story.

And with imagination sparked, Veiled Moon came about, for better or worse as it had both of us put our own stories on hiatus ('Stranger Than Fiction, Summoned Sergeant Chronicles, and Nights over Roshtaria for Ghost', 'Blessings In Disguise for me'), but from the looks of it so far people seem to be pleased.
 

Muramasa

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Yeah, Uzume got pretty badly screwed in canon. Which is why I'm glad this fic appeared.



Other then that, all I have to say is Higa must burn.
 

DhampyrX2

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Kazehana really fits best with Minato given her obsession with Minaka. I'm glad you're giving mallet girl a good home. I remember hoping Tsukiumi would off her canon ashikabi.

As for Higa, I'm waiting for him to cross Ichigo or someone else in the house. For one thing, Ichigo will push back. For another, he grew up around a medical clinic and would have some idea if Higa was talking out of his ass in offering medical assistance. He could also turn him in for ethics violations, something Minato would never have thought of. I imagine something like a huge malpractice lawsuit would ruin you and your hospital in Japan where honor and saving face is everything.
 

Muramasa

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Kazehana really fits best with Minato given her obsession with Minaka. I'm glad you're giving mallet girl a good home. I remember hoping Tsukiumi would off her canon ashikabi.
Well yeah, she'd be predisposed to Minato because of his similar appearance to Minaka but she also values 'Manliness'. And between the two ashikabi, there's no question Ichigo is 'Manlier' so to me it evens out.
 

zeebee1

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I think the real fun comes from seeing these minor characters become something more while Minato does his thing.
 
zeebee1 said:
I think the real fun comes from seeing these minor characters become something more while Minato does his thing.
Yeah I like seeing these minor Sekirei get some spotlight. If only because of that I rather Minato keep his canon harem and let Ichigo have all those poor girls who were little more then One Scene Wonders before they got eliminated.

Also I'm with the "Higa must burn" option. Though I can't help but think castration would be a more fitting punishment given Sekirei is a harem series.

Also yeah for Yashima!
 

DhampyrX2

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Personally, I'm waiting for Minaka to be stupid enough to declare a Stage 3 battle between Minato and Ichigo.

"Wait, you want us to fight our housemates and friends and try to eliminate one of them from this game that I already think is a piece of crap?"

Yeah. Good luck with that.
 

zeebee1

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So far the theme is that Ichigo is saving Sekirei that would otherwise be eliminated from bad situations.
 

Muramasa

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Also I'm with the "Higa must burn" option. Though I can't help but think castration would be a more fitting punishment given Sekirei is a harem series.
Surprisingly I don't find castration a fitting punishment. Well, I don't recall Higa having any particular interest for Sekirei in 'that way'. As far as I know, he only see's them as soldiers and disposable tools he can throw away at the drop of a hat.
 
Muramasa said:
Also I'm with the "Higa must burn" option. Though I can't help but think castration would be a more fitting punishment given Sekirei is a harem series.
Surprisingly I don't find castration a fitting punishment. Well, I don't recall Higa having any particular interest for Sekirei in 'that way'. As far as I know, he only see's them as soldiers and disposable tools he can throw away at the drop of a hat.
Hmmm true. Just horribly maimed then.

However would Yashima's jerk ass Ashikabi from canon qualify then?
 

DhampyrX2

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Chaotic Symbolism said:
Muramasa said:
Also I'm with the "Higa must burn" option. Though I can't help but think castration would be a more fitting punishment given Sekirei is a harem series.
Surprisingly I don't find castration a fitting punishment. Well, I don't recall Higa having any particular interest for Sekirei in 'that way'. As far as I know, he only see's them as soldiers and disposable tools he can throw away at the drop of a hat.
Hmmm true. Just horribly maimed then.

However would Yashima's jerk ass Ashikabi from canon qualify then?
I've said it before, I'll say it again. Convince Kenpachi that he tried to hurt, or worse yet molest, Yachiru. Either that or have him somehow manage to hurt Rangiku and send Gin and Toshiro after him.

The second is probably worse. Zaraki would just turn him into a grease spot in seconds. Toshiro and Gin are thinkers. They would make him suffer.
 

Muramasa

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<s>Second error... Somehow we all got Nanami's name switched to Nanaha. </s> :wacko:



Edit: Whoops.
 

Seed00

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DhampyrX2 said:
Chaotic Symbolism said:
Muramasa said:
Also I'm with the "Higa must burn" option. Though I can't help but think castration would be a more fitting punishment given Sekirei is a harem series.
Surprisingly I don't find castration a fitting punishment. Well, I don't recall Higa having any particular interest for Sekirei in 'that way'. As far as I know, he only see's them as soldiers and disposable tools he can throw away at the drop of a hat.
Hmmm true. Just horribly maimed then.

However would Yashima's jerk ass Ashikabi from canon qualify then?
I've said it before, I'll say it again. Convince Kenpachi that he tried to hurt, or worse yet molest, Yachiru. Either that or have him somehow manage to hurt Rangiku and send Gin and Toshiro after him.

The second is probably worse. Zaraki would just turn him into a grease spot in seconds. Toshiro and Gin are thinkers. They would make him suffer.
Toshiro blew his top right then and there when Momo got injured. Gin, on the other hand, planned his revenge for centuries.

Gin would leave the longer lasting impression.
 

Cyn

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Seed00 said:
DhampyrX2 said:
Chaotic Symbolism said:
Muramasa said:
Also I'm with the "Higa must burn" option. Though I can't help but think castration would be a more fitting punishment given Sekirei is a harem series.
Surprisingly I don't find castration a fitting punishment. Well, I don't recall Higa having any particular interest for Sekirei in 'that way'. As far as I know, he only see's them as soldiers and disposable tools he can throw away at the drop of a hat.
Hmmm true. Just horribly maimed then.

However would Yashima's jerk ass Ashikabi from canon qualify then?
I've said it before, I'll say it again. Convince Kenpachi that he tried to hurt, or worse yet molest, Yachiru. Either that or have him somehow manage to hurt Rangiku and send Gin and Toshiro after him.

The second is probably worse. Zaraki would just turn him into a grease spot in seconds. Toshiro and Gin are thinkers. They would make him suffer.
Toshiro blew his top right then and there when Momo got injured. Gin, on the other hand, planned his revenge for centuries.

Gin would leave the longer lasting impression.
That would work out nicely then. Just as Toshirou's finished up and the moron thinks he's safe bam Gin starts his revenge.
 

zeebee1

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Hitsugaya has a veryy short temper when it concerns people he cares about, but he also acts decisively. If he targets a normal human only outside intervention would leave them alive.
 

bmsattler

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This whole conversation is pretty silly. Is this guy worse than the mad-scientist captain, blatantly offering to only amputate limbs every now and then? Sure, he's scum, but its nothing that Ichigo hasn't seen before. Not to mention, the only way anyone from Soul Society will get involved with this situation is through Ichigo, and when has he ever farmed out something that needs to be done to someone else?
 
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