Harry Potter apparating 101

zrike

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#1
I'm not a writer, but every so often an idea pops into my head and bounces around for a while before drifting off. here one of them.

harry tries to learn to apparate, but of course, its not that simple...
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Harry stood with the other testees, waiting for his turn to take the test. he was fairly confident he could pull it off, after all, hermione had all but-no, she had forcefed him all the theory she could dig up on apparating, and then some...though, come to think of it, there was so much theory, that he had no time to actually practice...

"note to self, talk to hermoine about her, umbridge, and too much theory" he muttered to himself. "Number 42! Number 42! Please come to the front of the room." called the instructer. harry shook himself out of his musings, and made his way twoards the instructer, who then motioned for him to stand in the designated area. "right then, stand there, apparate over there, and you pass. splinch yourself and you fail." the man said tiredly. right, nothing left to do but to do it thought harry as he prepared himself for the task.

=bah dum, chhhh=

"er...you pass?" was the second thing harry heard, the first being the sound you hear when late show comedians make a joke. harry calmly took his certificate, and walked outside to the aparating zone. he then apparated to the burrow with a =sploosh=, and his right eybrowe bagan to twitch. he then apparated to grimmuald place with a =elephant trumpet=, then to diagon alley with a =mmmbop=. by now his eybrowe was doing 80 in a 50 mph zone. finnally, he apparated to a random dentists office with a =ff7 victory theme=, and saw hermione sitting in a chair reading a book.

he looked at her suprised face and said"where was this in the theory?"
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yes, i know its infested with grammar, spelling and other errors, but like i said, im not a writer, and this is just an idea.
 

GenocideHeart

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#2
*is having seizures*

Ack... pain... death...

*asplodez*

Dude, I'd love to comment on your idea, but grammar is so jumbled, I'm not quite sure WHAT kind of idea it is...
 

Fatuous One

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#3
Ignoring the grammar, where's the idea?

Harry is now apparating and for some reason makes bizarre sounds instead of the 'pop' of displaced air? Okay, but that's it? I suppose that it could be used for some sort of minor joke in a comedy/parody, but by itself it isn't much.

While I understand that you're not experienced in... writing, you should still try to make your idea less vague. If you can't write it out with the characters, just try explaining the premise of the idea.
 

zrike

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#4
Sorry about the grammar, my normal lackluster performance plus caffeine withdraw...well you get the idea. And yeah, the ideas I get from time to time are usually little pieces that alone are not very good, though I do occasionally flesh them out.

Examples of this are:

RanXephon
Ranma Saotome reincarnates as Ayato, retaining memories of his first life
-he may or may not remember his relationship with Haruka
-he could either have the memories all along, or remember them after the Mu erased the memories of Haruka
-he probably has trained his body/ki to some extent
-his chaos factor messes up the plans set in motion, while his memories help him alter the mind games in the series

Zoids Zero Evolution
Liger has the ability to evolve like Murasame Liger
-Liger can evolve (evolt?) like Murasame Liger from Zoids: Genesis
-it could be like a puberty thing, or like a shedding thing, or just a plain temporary upgrade
-if itÆs a puberty or shedding thing, Biit and Liger could be influenced to be more aggressive during and afterwards (permanent or temporary)
-possible name: Alpha Liger

King of Evangelion
Shinji is the King of Games
-Shinji is a natural at mastering anything he perceives to be like a game
-no puzzle, but he could have a split personality if you wanted to include a Yami
-Shinji/Yami is confident and not easily shaken
-he masters Eva by rationalizing itÆs like a VR game


Bouken Naruto
Naruto has been training to use techniques that are like the armaments in Go Go Sentai Boukenger
-Naruto rips his appendages off, and then reforms them with Kyubi's chakra, altering them to said armaments
-ive only really thought of a drill arm
-hissatsu attack for drill is cyclone drive

Some are thought out a bit, but for the most part not very much. I hope the gramar is a little better, i ran it through spellcheck this time.
 

Fatuous One

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#5
These are some ideas, and the grammar is much, much better.

Although I'm not too interested in the first three, as I haven't seen RahXephon or Zoids, and I don't like Yu-Gi-Oh all that much, they're still valid fic ideas. The forth is definitely interesting to me, although I am somewhat unsure as to how things would work (I haven't seen Go Go Sentai Boukenger either <_<).

I like the premise of Naruto actually ripping off his limbs and reforming them into something different. However, if the appendage/weapon isn't organic then I really can't see how that would work out properly. Not to mention that it would be equally difficult to explain how he would get it back to normal, at least under the context of using the Kyuubi's energy.

Off topic from the ideas, you should probably post these various ideas in proper threads. You made this topic in the Harry Potter forum, so it's for your Harry Potter idea(s). If you're going for just random fandoms out there, try posting them in the "General fanfiction" forum for those ideas droppings.
 

SimmyC

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#6
Don't be too concerned about the grammar. Well, you should if you want to be respected, but like a number of posters here where their first language isn't English, a little time and education will go a long way.

I have seen RahXephon and it is certainly a valid idea. I'm personally not a fan of it though if only because, I'm not a fan of Haruka. That being said, it might be interesting to see how Ranma would do as the pilot in said series. However, given that RahXephon is closer to Eva than Ranma, it might be difficult making this work.

I haven't seen Zoid Zero Evolution so I can't say one way or the other on this one.

King of Evangelion, might work. But I'm not a huge fan of Yu-Gi-Oh.

Naruto sounds interesting indeed. But like Fatuous One said, I see it being difficult in explaining how ripping off his limbs and reforming them will work, and having them go back to normal when all is said and done.
 

zrike

Well-Known Member
#7
Zoids Zero Evolution was a possible title, the two series itÆs derived from are Zoids Zero and Zoids: Genesis. At least I think that the series Bit is in is called Zoids Zero. As for the arm thing in Bouken Naruto, well, the KyubiÆs chakra helps Naruto heal at a faster then normal rate. The idea would take it a couple steps further, utilizing a PiccoloÆesque arm regeneration, and chakra control (from Kyubi as well most likely), to alter the limb into a biotechnological armament. A way to help even more would be the ever useful fan made demon seals. A possible scene would be during the chunin exam, Naruto rips off his arm, tossing it away, and Anko snatches it out of the air and starts licking the blood off it like it was a tasty lollipop.

edit: Oh, and as to getting his arm back to normal again, just rip the armament arm off. A possible running gag could be everyone but Anko getting pissed at Naruto for leaving his old arms all over the place...

edit 2: Yeah I probobly should have posted these ideas in the correct category, I was not really thinking at the time.
 

SimmyC

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#8
Ah I see. Zoids. Should have known that while I was looking at the post. Well, whatever the name is, I haven't really seen it so I can't give you an opinion on it.

As for it being in the wrong section, well, yeah. Probably could go to the general anime section for them. But if you have been here for a while, you'd note that topics do tend to go off-topic. Even by the people that started it. ;)

And at least they are still ideas... even if they are not Harry Potter FF ideas.
 

Fatuous One

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#9
The idea would take it a couple steps further, utilizing a PiccoloÆesque arm regeneration, and chakra control (from Kyubi as well most likely), to alter the limb into a biotechnological armament. A way to help even more would be the ever useful fan made demon seals. A possible scene would be during the chunin exam, Naruto rips off his arm, tossing it away, and Anko snatches it out of the air and starts licking the blood off it like it was a tasty lollipop.

edit: Oh, and as to getting his arm back to normal again, just rip the armament arm off. A possible running gag could be everyone but Anko getting pissed at Naruto for leaving his old arms all over the place...
See, no matter how I look at it, I can't see Naruto actually 'regenerating' his arm into anything mechanical, biotech or not. To me, anything being re-grown is organic and is therefore not going to be able to have any machine properties attached. Granted, I have no knowledge of "Go Go Sentai Boukenger," so I really can't comment to much on that.

BTW, Simmy, that avatar kills me.

Orihime is... Too. #(&*%ing. Cute. :ph43r:
 

Israfel

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#10
BTW, Simmy, that avatar kills me.

Orihime is... Too. #(&*%ing. Cute.?
Hehe, yah, for the first 10 episodes or so of Bleach I thought the pairing was going to be Ichigo/Orihime, but it seems everyone is going with themes now for their avatars, member titles, and signature pics...hmm, maybe I should get a Urahara avatar?
 

SimmyC

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#11
I'm still rooting for Ichigo/Orihime since I'm also a Renji/Rukia fan. ^_^ Though I admit, the evidence for Ichigo/Rukia are piling up. Looks like another case of me going against the canon couple. <_<

Oddly enough, I was actually a short lived fan of Ichigo/Rukia for a while. Guess Orihime's cuteness got the better of me.
 

Hawk

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#12
Ichigo/Yoruichi all the way for me. :)
 

zrike

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#13
^Agrees. Theres just something about Yoruichi. though I think a Ichigo/Tatsuki would be nice too, as long as she didnt catch the Akane syndrome.
 

Israfel

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#14
Ichigo/Yoruichi all the way for me. :)
Hell yeah, man what I wouldn't give to see an Ichigo/Yoruichi story. If anyone knows any good ones PLEASE post them up, I will be eternally grateful.
 

SimmyC

Well-Known Member
#15
Ah yes. I would also love a Ichigo/Yoruichi story as well. ^_^

The closet I can come up with is a so-so lemon fic called "Deathcherry" on AFF. Pretty much a PWP story and the characters, well, at least Ichigo, sounds a little OOC. But hey, at least it's still an Ichigo/Yoruichi fic. I'll probably post it in the adult forum so that you could read this so-so attempt. <_<
 

Fatuous One

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#16
hmm, maybe I should get a Urahara avatar?
Or, you could get a Griffith sig picture.

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I'm very much a fan of Orihime/Ichigo, but I seriously doubt it's going to go in that direction. Hell, I'm not actually expecting it to go in a romantic direction at all.
 

GenocideHeart

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#17
Fatuous One said:
hmm, maybe I should get a Urahara avatar?
Or, you could get a Griffith sig picture.

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I'm very much a fan of Orihime/Ichigo, but I seriously doubt it's going to go in that direction. Hell, I'm not actually expecting it to go in a romantic direction at all.
I'm a Soi Fong/Ichigo fan. I know, TOTALLY unlikely, but hey... :lol:
 

Israfel

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#20
Another alt-pairing I'd like to see is Ichigo/Kuukaku...
OH!!! Me too! When I first saw the her while watching it I immediately went to FF.net to see if there were any I/K stories but was dissapointed to find when I got there that there was barely any that even mentioned her, that depressed me and put me off Bleach fiction for awhile.
 

GenocideHeart

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#21
Israfel said:
Another alt-pairing I'd like to see is Ichigo/Kuukaku...
OH!!! Me too! When I first saw the her while watching it I immediately went to FF.net to see if there were any I/K stories but was dissapointed to find when I got there that there was barely any that even mentioned her, that depressed me and put me off Bleach fiction for awhile.
I'm fairly sure that Kuukaku was based off Baiken from Guilty Gear... minus an arm, great fighter, tends to not get along very well with anybody unless she respects them...
 

SimmyC

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#22
Though I haven't caught up yet in the manga to have met Kuukaku, looking around the Internet, I too, now want to read a Ichigo/Kuukaku fic of any kind. ^_^ I might write my own eventually if I have to... given a few things like, if I can get off my lazy ass to not only complete my currently stalled Eva fics (stalled only because I'm having problems sitting still and writing them. Not to mention time isn't on my side with a book review due next week and presentation for a research paper), and if I can get more chapters of Bleach in (currently sitting at chapter 52 out of 224, LONG way to go). <_<

And I'm still holding out hope for Ichigo/Orihime. Sure, there are tons of hints for Ichigo/Rukia, but hey, doesn't always have to go the obvious route you know. As for it not going into a romantic route, most likely too. This isn't a shojo manga or one closer to Love Hina (though I never really saw the romance if you know what I mean). Still, doesn't mean that a quick bang coupling won't happen (like what will probably happen in Naruto, and of course, the series that started the multichapter battles and the "I'm strong! No, I'M STRONGER" action series, Dragonball Z).

As for Bleach fanfiction, I'm actually disappointed in them as well. I mean, the vast majority are either Ichigo/Rukia, Ishida/Orihime fics... or yaoi. <_< I mean, I don't totally hate Ichigo/Rukia, but I just prefer say, an Ichigo/Orhime, Ichigo/Kuukaku, Ichigo/any alternative that isn't a guy or a really old hag and possibly related as well.
 
#23
i intended to make an entire collection of Ichigo / ? pairings but well...

gonna do something that will make a LOT of Naruto fans hyperactive for a while...

...

Anyone know what the upload limit is for Adultfanfiction?...

otherwise i need to begin to edit it a lot... and its not even done yet.... :(
 

Hawk

Well-Known Member
#24
I've seen some pretty darn long fics there, so I don't think size'll be much of a problem for aff.

Splitting it up for the readers convenience might be worth considering however.
 
#25
hehehe...

I somehow doubt that anyone has tried uploading somehting to the maximum limit...

maybe if i copy and paste a sentence 100000 times, it will reach the end...

anyhow, i still have to go and get it done...

ugh school has started again, so i'm not sure if i get it done in time...

stupid writers block...
 
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