Naruto Darkly MSTs The Ultimate Ninja

#26
Really?

I always kinda assumed that it was more A and B's thing than anything else.

Also, yeah. That definitely counts as wrestling moves, and indeed they are badass.

Most of the other Kumo people I've seen use swords and knives, and generic moves. The typical ninja package.

Of course that may not be representative, since the anime isn't known for it's fight-style particulars.



It really doesn't matter to me if we give this one to Demon. This story is so far in the red, it'd take a miracle of gargantuan proportions to turn it around.
 
#27
You'd be surprised at how tough it is to get myself to read this shit again.

I know exactly what I'm going to get, and the anticipation hurts.

Here we go again.

(Authors corner)
Hey guys reaper here. It's time for the fifth chapter of The Ultimate Ninja. I just wanted to say thank you to everyone who has either followed, favorited, viewed, or reviewed this story I am really grateful. This story at the moment has 177 favorites, 222 follows, and 68 reviews. I owe it all to all of you, and I will never forget it. Now for the two polls I had. The first one was to pick the final person for the harem. The choices were ANBU captain Yugao Uzuki, a female fake hunter nin named Haku Yuki, and a mystery woman. The winner is *Cue drum roll* Haku Yuki!

*Haku appears from an ice mirror* "Thank you everyone for choosing me"
Never really understood attraction to Haku, but there are a lot of crazy things in this world.

Not to bash the fanbase; just pointing out it doesn't make sense to me. I have seen some well done FemHaku stories.

Some things on the other hand...

Have you ever heard the term, Yaoi-Twin-Uchihacest?

Pray you never do again.

*Turns around in surprise* Hey, how the hell did you get in here. This is the author's realm where we authors rule

"I don't know I just did"

Yeah, okay, whatever. Anyways, onto the second poll. The other poll dealt with Naruto revealing his heritage, and that his parents are alive at either the graduation or the preliminary rounds in the chunin exams, and by a landslide it was the graduation.
Great, so we have that to look forward too.

I am surprisingly resigned to this.

"That's great, and all, but when will I meet Naruto-kun" *Pouts at the end*
This is the same Haku right?

Canon supposedly?

That I can't, and won't reveal until it is time, but I will say that it is before the wave arc which means you won't be in it, but will still have the classic, and defining moment that your made of which is protecting your precious people. Now, since you, are here please do the disclaimer for me
Wait. Haku is made of a defining moment?

Whatever. There are bigger problems to deal with than may-not-actually-be typos.

"Demonreaper7490 doesn't own Naruto or I, and anything else added into this story"

Thank you, and now let the show begin!

(Authors note, setting)

"Talking"
'Thinking'

"Bijuu, Summon, Deity talking"
'Bijuu, Summon, Deity thinking'


Flashbacks

"Zanpakuto spirit talking"
'Zanpakuto spirit thinking'


Zanpakuto?

Am I forgetting something, er....

Chapter 5: Graduation, and Heritage revealed

(Two years later, Uzu-Nami compound)

It has been another two long years for Naruto, and his friends. Today is the day of graduation from the academy, and as Naruto got up from his bed he remembered his training with the two powerful goddesses. His training with Belldandy, and Urd in limbo has gone great. He has learned a lot from the two. From Belldandy he learned to fly, and use his ki energy to throw blasts, and even created some techniques of his own. Belldandy also taught him some techniques that she saw from a world that a minor god she created watched over using ki in that world. She taught him the kamehameha, masenko, special beam cannon, galick gun, solar flare, destructo disc, instant transmission. From Urd he learned to use reiryoku, and he unlocked his zanpakuto. He still remembers that day clearly
And now he has Kamehameha.

...

...Oh yeah. I'm supposed to be surprised about this.


Flashback no jutsu

It has been six months since Naruto met Belldandy, and Urd in limbo, and he can honestly say he is glad he did. He got to know both of them nicely, and realized that both of them are polar opposites of one another, but they love each other regardless. Belldandy is the sweet, kind, gentle, reserved one, while Urd is the more playful, flirty, and fun one. Today is the day he unlocks his zanpaktou spirit.


"Alright, Naruto it is time for you to unlock your zanpakuto. All you have to do is sit in the lotus position, and meditate. It's like if you're going to visit Natsumi-chan, but instead you go deeper into your reiryoku, and you will appear in your soulscape, and that is when you shall meet your spirit, and weapon. Also you might be able to hear his, or her name, but if not it will take time, and patience. Good luck" Urd told him with a smile.
Pretty straightforward.

Naruto did as he was told, and started to meditate. He was concentrating deeply, and then his surroundings changed.

(Soulscape)
Ok. Is it just me, or is entering odd spiritual zones way too easy in this fic?

It's like, sit here for five minutes and bam! Godly heavenscape.

I'm surprised Hiruzen isn't in on this shit by now if it's that easy.

Heck, maybe he is.

Naruto opened his eyes, and found himself in a beautiful grassy forest, and when he looked up at the sky he saw it was a beautiful night sky with a full moon, and many stars.

"Wow this place is beautiful" he said to himself while looking at the scenery

"It sure is. I am glad to meet you Naruto Uzumaki-Namikaze" said a heavenly voice that sent shivers down Naruto's spine
Let me guess. Sexy woman, five foot something, >C cup breasts, blushing already.

Naruto turns around, and comes face to face with a beautiful woman standing at 5'4 with snow white hair, dark blue eyes, while wearing a white dress that shows off her slender legs, and show a bit of her cc-cup breast, slender build, but still has some muscle, beautiful puffy lips, and wearing white heels.

"Wow. You're beautiful. You must be my zanpakuto spirit" he said while blushing a bit.
Huh. I was wrong about the blushing.

Said spirt also blushed at being called beautiful by her wielder. "I am, and thank you for calling me beautiful"
I stand corrected.

"I'm just saying the truth. I was told that you have a name, and that I might not be able to hear it at first, but if that happens then we just train together until I am able to" he said with a smile on his face.

"I see, but I have a few questions. What will you do if you're never able to hear my name?, and if you are able to, What will you do with my power" she asked with Narrowed eyes.
Next prediction. Naruto says something prophetic, then she blushes and thinks lude thoughts about this...

How old is he now? Twelve or thirteen? Anyway, she can't wait to get in bed with "Godlike" Naruto, despite being a spirit... soul... thing.

Fuck this shit.

Naruto lost his smile, and looked at her with hardened, and answered seriously "If I am never able to hear your name then that just means I am not worthy to know your beautiful name. I will try to earn your name for as long as it takes no matter what, but if I am able to learn your name then I will use it just like I will with all my other powers, and that is to protect those that I care about, and destroy those who wish to harm them in the first place even if I have to die for them. I'll do all of that with a smile on my face because the ones I care about mean more to me then what my life means to me"

The spirit looked at her wielder in awe, and amazement. He said all of that without hesitating one bit, and she could tell he meant every single word. She smiled, and said "Wow, that was deep. You said all of that without hesitating, or wavering in your conviction. I am proud to call you my master. My name is Tsukiyomi. I am an illusion type zanpakuto which I can tell is perfect for you since I can already tell that your more of a strategist, and power type of person"
Ok, what the fuck.

Wouldn't the Strategist type be the opposite of a power type?

That's like me saying, "I can already tell you're more of a plan things out and rush in with blazing fists type of person."

Yes, "you're". I at least learned something in Elementary School.

Naruto scratched the back of his sheepishly, and said "Yes, that is all true. I am more of a strategy, and power type of a guy, and besides I suck at illusions due to all of my power. Even though I have someone that can do illusions like you, it would not be able to work since her power is becoming my power as well, But your power is different since it comes from your blade, and reiryoku so we will be able to do illusions with ease, but we will have to train hard together, and unlock your bankai, and work together"
I'm willing to bet that the only reason AT ALL why Demon is giving him an Illusion-Type Zanpakuto, is because Aizen was such a fucking badass with it.

...before the butterfly jesus thing of course.

The now named Tsukiyomi nodded with a smile pleased with her master's words. "You are correct master. In time we will unlock bankai, but no need to rush. Since you are able to hear my name I will tell you my phrase release. You have to say " Blind all my enemies to reality, Tsukiyomi" and then I will be able to use any illusion you can think of. There is a weakness though. Anyone who has higher reiatsu than you can break it or see through it"
Which will be nobody.

Also, I don't remember clearly, but it wouldn't surprise me if that was word for word Aizen's little speech thingy with the Zanpakuto.

Seems a bit long winded, but hey. Villains.

Naruto nodded filing away that information into the back of his head. "I thank you Tsukiyomi-chan, and please don't call me master. You may call me Naruto, or even Naruto-kun, or even a nickname that you would make up. We are equals, and partners now Tsukiyomi- chan"
Oh. What a noble and kind person.

Kill me now.

Tsukiyomi just gave Naruto a huge smile that enhanced her beauty even more which caused him to blush. "Thank you, Naruto-kun. We can talk more sometime later, but I think it's time you head back to reality"
That's fucking it. Time for a blush counter.

Last quote puts us at two.

Naruto nodded, and gave Tsukiyomi a kiss on her soft hands, and disappeared without seeing her blush.
That's three.

"I see that you met Naruto-kun. He is a caring one isn't he" said a voice from behind Tsukiyomi. Tsukiyomi turned around, and came face to face with Natsumi no yoko.

"Yes, he is. I am Tsukiyomi, and you are?" she said while extending her hand to Natsumi.

"I am Natsumi no yoko. The other tenant that resides within Naruto. Since he connected with you, we are now able to converse with each other which I'm glad about because even though he visits me a lot it does get lonely sometimes" she said with a smile, and shook Tsukiyomi's hand.
I'm surprised they didn't both think of Naruto and blush simultaneously.

Honestly, at this point, nothing could bring this shit lower than it already is.

(limbo)

When Naruto returned to limbo he found a beautiful looking Katana that was atleast 22' long slightly curved with a round guard, and the hilt in the shape of the moon. He told Urd what happened within the soulscape, and the type of zanpakuto he unlocked which Urd told him it suited him.

Flashback kai
Oh yeah. I removed the underlining from the whole flashback thing, as well as the italics and bold.

It just got too fucking annoying. Forgive me.

Ever since that day Naruto has been trained in zanjutsu (armed combat using a shinigami's zanpakuto), hakuda (unarmed combat), hoho (High speed fighting movements when using shunpo (Flash step)), and all three forms of kido: Bakudo (Way of binding), Hado (Way of destruction), Kaido (Turn way or healing). Naruto's relationship with Tsukiyomi is so well that they are like siblings (Tsukiyomi was the mystery woman). Naruto mastered her shikai (Initial release) so well that all he has to say is her name or even the cute nickname he has for . Tsuki. They are still working on her bankai, but Tsukiyomi has told him that they will have it unlocked or even mastered by the time the chunin exams come around.
Your wikipedia skills are most impressive.

Getting out of memory lane, and now fully dressed Naruto headed down to the kitchen for breakfast.

(Kitchen)

Naruto arrived downstairs, and once he entered the kitchen he saw his mother kushina making breakfast, his father reading the konoha news letter, and Yugito feeding his two year old baby sister Mito.
...

his two year old baby sister Mito.
...

his two year old baby sister Mito.


...

Long story short while the kids were gone Minato, and Kushina took full advantage of that, and had some "fun" that they had missed, and a few days later Kushina was pregnant, and months later little Mito was born, but of course this was kept secret by everyone. Only the family, Yugito, Naruto's extended family, and the doctor that delivered Mito know about it.
The doctor was later found attempting to bleach his memory into submission.

"Morning everyone" he said still rubbing some sleep from his eyes.
"Morning sochi, how did you sleep?" asked Kushina as she gave a kiss on the cheek to her first born.

"I slept well thank you. I can't believe today is finally the day" he said with a small smirk on his face.

"I know me neither. It's about time we graduated. I thought it would never end" Yugito said while pouting in the end causing Naruto to stare at her a little longer than he was supposed, and looked away with a blush on his cheeks before Yugito could notice, but his parents certainly caught it, and winked at each other.
Blush Four.

"Ru-ru" said little Mito when she finished her milk as she looked at her aniki, and spread her arms out towards to him, so he can hold her. Everyone smiled at Mito because ever since she was born she loved it when Naruto held her. Naruto walked towards his sister, and held her while tickling her sides a little which made her giggle.
Hiruzen better have some serious plans in the works.

Now there's more of them.

Afterwards everyone sat at the table while eating breakfast, and chatting as Kushina fed her daughter.

'I can't believe it has been seven long years since my life changed, and it has changed for the better. I got my parents back, great friends, a baby sister, and power to protect those I care about. It can't get any better than this' our blond hero thought as he ate his breakfast. (Trust me when I say his life will only get better)
Now I'm really on the edge of my seat.

It will only get better? How exciting!

Fuck it. The next post will have to wait. It's been a chore just getting this much out.

Expect the other half within a couple days, assuming I haven't died by then.
 

AzaggThoth

Well-Known Member
#28
Ugh, just reading those bits makes me throw up a little in my mouth. I'll admit I have low standards as long as something can at least be amusing but this trash is irredeemable.

I commend you on your fortitude and at the same time question your sanity for making yourself read this.
 

SportsDrink

Well-Known Member
#29
What's wrong with the sister?

Naruto's parents having a daughter and naming her after someone Kushina cared about sounds pretty damn normal to me.

Unless she is added to Naruto's harem or something, I don't see to much issue with Mito.

The rest of this fic has far more things wrong with it then a simple OC sibling which is pretty tame.
 
#30
I've got nothing wrong with Naruto having a sister. It's just making me wary when it's done by this guy.

I hope I didn't give the impression that sisterness is somehow a capital fanfiction sin. That was just my, "uh, ok" face.
 

SportsDrink

Well-Known Member
#31
Ah okay, cause I would only start to look at it funny once she is included into the harem.

Which a depressingly large amount of fanfics do.

It usually means that the author never had a younger sister.

You can take my word for it that a younger sister is very annoying. I love her, but she is really annoying.
 
#32
Actually, she's not his sister. She's his half-sister half-daughter.


...I'm lying. But I can see it happening in this fic.
 
#34
At least the mother isn't Kushina.

It's Oiroke!Minato
 

Sdebeli

Well-Known Member
#35
ankokudaishogun, don't temp the fates. It WILL get worse. It's only a question of how much.
 
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