I'm afraid Rahhel is correct concerning the first two chapters of that old story. Except saying that they sucked badly is quite an understatement. More like they were a bane on humanity. However, for the record I will say that they've been revamped along with a few other chapters through out the years. But ever since the 16th chapter back in 2011, my spark for ideas and motivation for writing were drowned out by a tidal wave of work, school, and relationships. And life has only become more of a tsunami since then. Ah, but forgive my pitiful excuses. I'm getting off topic and I'm sure you ladies and gentlemen have better things to do. Anyways, looking back, I'm not really satisfied with the quality of most of the chapters from that story. 'Especially' 1 and 2 despite the revamp later on. And as some other reviewers pointed out, the dialog I wrote in chapter 4 seems way too forced to me. Yes, I'd say chapters 1,2, and 4 are most disappointing to me when I look back on those days. But that's back when I first seriously started writing fanfiction, or any kind of fanfiction for that matter. Battousai's Apprentice (Formally known as Tears of Darkness) will always my first work of fiction despite the amateurish tracings of literature I've put into it. And for that very same reason, I don't think I'm going to revamp anything else of the story. Alas, it's too sentimental for me to do so. Both due to it being my first piece and due to the times in my life that surrounded it.
However, for anyone still following it or just merely curious, the 17th chapter has been collecting a lot of dust bunnies and mold since 2012. Given that I've finally stumbled upon a match for my rusty ole muse, maybe this week and maybe through next weekend, I'll touch it up a little bit. And of course, add a tweak and there. Upon completion, I can launch my weapon of mass destruction upon fanfiction's masses, hopefully before the U.N crashes through my door.
Given that Rahhel was so kind to provide the link, feel free to to follow it. No need for me to repost it then after all. And if y'all got a little while, feel free to leave a review here and there. Let me know if it sucked, if it made you orgasm, lowered your IQ, made you see the light, made you want to stab your eyeballs out and curse the existence of retards with a keyboard, etc. Ya know, the usual mumbo jumbo. ^_^ Welp, time for some din din. Take care and nighty night old friends.