Harry Potter Heh. Look at that. [Iron Fic]

[Schema]

He didn't deserve this. Tell him to take down 10 trolls, and he would be fine.

Tell him to take 20 others and take down 100? Pft, a few would rot.

A few years ago this would really piss me off. Jealousy? Yes.

It's pretty hard now to be jealous, when you look into his eyes and know he has those same doubts.

That he very well can lead a team to their deaths.

It is for this reason alone I can pitty him more.

He has never been tactical, not like me at least.

Although, Granted...

Being good at chess doesn't make someone a great field commander...

"-also being promoted to field commander is Ronald Weasley"

Oh. Heh. Look at that.

 

[Watashiwa]

Writing Proficiency: 14/20. Would have been higher but tense errors everywhere.
Theme: 17/20. Promotions for everyone!
Source: 15/20. Ron Weasley's feelings of jealousy are well documented in the source.
Story: 13/20. Context is everything, this didn't have much. Was good for what it was.
Other: 20/20 ...You know, I kinda liked this one. It desperately needs expansion to reach its full potential, but this would make for a great ending to a longer fic.
Total: 79

 

[The Ero-Sennin]

Hullo.

Writing 15/20: Noticeable errors. It being short doesn't help it.
Theme 17/20: Well, people got promoted!
Source 13/20: ... When does this happen?
Story 11/20: What is this about?
Other 12/20: I don't really know what's going on.
Total: 68

Sorry, Schema.