Harry Potter HP & The Prophecy Of Atlantis

kingdark

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A Prophecy fore told.
Prologue
Planet Atlantica
Atlantis control room.
Five hundred people was all that was left of the once most powerful people ever to be alive. The creators of Atlantis, the forefathers of magic, and the most advanced people ever known.
They now were on the edge of defeat. They had no choice but to return to the planet they were from: Earth. The last remaining seeÙr went into a trance only a few hours before this decision was made. In fact, it was because this prophecy they had made the decision to retreat to earth.

When Atlantis has been abandoned for countless millennia,
Because they have no change in destroying the threat that is the wraith,
Colonists of the home galaxy arrive,
Together with three heirs of the ancients,
Only to re-awaken the wraith,
Together they may or may not be able to destroy the wraith threat forever,
Only for a new, bigger threat arise,
Magic and technology will combine to battle this new threat, and prove legends to be true,
The heroes of Atlantica, the magical heroes, and the ninja heroes will need to work together or else all will be lost.

Earth present day
25 May 2004
Harry Potter and his best friend and adopted brother Naruto Uzumaki Potter are standing in the office of the president of the United States. The president was watching them silently, while both men were watching the president. It was a silent battle they were having each time they met. It was something of a personal game between them, each time with different results. Finally the president looked away and said: beaten again! Maybe next time I will be able to win this staring match. But seriously now: what is it I can do for you? Harry was the first to speak and said: we want to be included in the expedition to Atlantis. The president narrowed his eyes and said slowly: IÆm not sure you can be any- not of any help finished Harry for him? Let me tell you a few things: IÆm the most powerful wizard alive. I have the most knowledge of magic of my age, and I doubt wizards or witches older then a century would know as much as I doà. And finally: I have the best connection with the ancients there is. The president sighed and said: you do realize that if you go with them, you cannot keep the fact you are a wizard a secret? Of course I know that said Harry. Besides interrupted Naruto, itÆs not like they havenÆt seen unexplainable things. Magic isnÆt as far-fetched as a Stargate leading to other planets all over the universe with aliens that want to conquer the entire universe.

Fine!
I will introduce you to Elizabeth in a few days. BUT, I want you to go on a certain mission.
I will contact General OÆNeil at Stargate command you are on your way. I want you there as soon as possible so you can read up and prepare. Thank you sir said Harry. Naruto simply nodded his head and turned around as well. They wanted to exit the room when the president called them back. I can send you with the expedition as a Special Forces squad. You would be below Sheppard in the chain of command, but would have a say in most matters.
Two or three more members are enough. More is also acceptable, but make sure the team isnÆt too big alright?



June 01 2004
General OÆNeil office
Five days had passed since they had visited the president, and now Harry his Special Forces squad was standing in the office of General O'Neil. General had climbed high enough to be told about the magical community. Harry needed to introduce his team to General O'Neil, and receive his uniforms and an emergency training in weapons.

General O'Neil, may I introduce you to one of my oldest friends: Ron Weasley. He is a strategic genius, and is the wizard version of Daniel Jackson. He can create his own spells, and knows a lot about old magics. Then there is the wife of Ron, Hermione Weasley, she is my advisor and my researcher. She designed her own magical computer system that basically imports any book in a matter of minutes. Oh and not to forget that she is my medic as well. Finally there is my second in command: Naruto Uzumaki Potter. You may notice he has the same last name as my own? ThatÆs because I adopted him in my family. We are as close as brothers, and before you imagine anything, we are both as straight as we can get.

(A/N sorry YAOI fans, but that isnÆt my thing. Not that I have anything against gay people, in fact one of my friends is gay, but enough about my rambling END A/N)

Naruto is an expert in martial arts, and knows quit a bit about weapons old and new.

Jack sighed and said: apparently you have chosen your team well. I assume this is your complete team? No surprises whatsoever? Harry shook his head and said: no this is my complete team.
Hm, I better not mention our familiars...

Alright, the president told me that you are perfect for a large scale operation we have been preparing for six months. According to our allies, the GoaÆuld has taken a planet that is very close to our solar system. It is a five hour travel before they arrive in this system. We have managed a few large scale sabotages, and we are going to press our attack. Right now the planet has a minimum amount of soldiers on them.
Operation downfall is a large scale attack that will attempt building a few forward bases and outposts to take the planet. The tokra will be giving support on this mission, but you can read the mission details in the mission folder.
The president has arranged for you to get your uniform. You now hold the rank of Lieutenant Colonel. That places you third in the chain of command at Atlantis. However, I already told this to colonel Sheppard and general summers, if something were to happen to either of them you would climb one rank. I think thatÆs easy enough? Now I already notified the briefing room to give you the folders.

Do you understand?
Yes sir.
Good!
Dismissed!
****
thoughts? see idea thread of mine to answer a few questions I think are important for later.
Briefing Room
Harry entered the briefing room and said: IÆm here for the folder for operation downfall. General O'Neil has given me clearance.
Yes sir. Harry nodded and exited the briefing room. His team had been awfully quiet when he was talking with the General.
It wouldnÆt be long now before they would go to Atlantis...
A/N this IS the prologue, later chapters are MUCH longer.
 

zeebee1

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#2
Don't use authors notes in the middle of a story. It will turn off just about everyone here who is actually willing to comment. The other issue is that this isn't prose. You are basically using script, which only works for plays and movies. With those two problems most people will just ignore this story.
 
#3
kingdark said:
Earth present day
25 May 2004
Harry Potter and his best friend and adopted brother Naruto Uzumaki Potter
This is where I stopped because reading further would probably have given me a very bad day.
 

kingdark

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#4
come to think of it you may be right, naruto might not come in handy anyway, i'll get rid of the character
 

the DragonBard

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#5
Prophecies are more poetic, harder to understand. They don't just spell things out for you, but typically speak in metaphores.
 

kingdark

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#6
I know, but this is the best i could think of, any ideas how to improve it?
:help:
 
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