Ichigo's Dance 5

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Okay, I know I haven't even posted what I have for Dance chapter 4 yet. But I could use some comments here. Especially about the fight sequence. I have never tried to write a fight out, I normally just RP them... so this was a little new.

Let me know what you think...

OnÚgai Teacher û IchigoÆs Dance
A Fanfic by BlueDragon

Standard Fan Fic Disclaimer: See disclaimer in Chapter 1

Reminder:
ôTalking Linesö
½Thinking Lines?
~Sound Effects~
^Phone Lines^
\\ Time, or Location \\

AuthorsÆ notes:

Well on with the storyà

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Chapter 5 At the Dance

\\ Friday night û Shido home \\

Man was Matagu ever nervous








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\\ School Gym \\






Koishi dropped IchigoÆs arm as soon as they were in the bathroom. Turning to look her friend in the face, barely hiding a huge grin she said, ôSo, tell me! WhatÆs going on? I saw you on the dance floorà slow dancing?ö Leaning up against the wall, Koishi was careful not to mess her dress or hair.

Ichigo felt mixed emotions welling up inside her. Blushing she stuttered, ôN-N-Nothing. I just thought that was how I was supposed to act.ö Trying not to look at either of her friends directly, she slowly started making her way towards the mirror.

Standing near the door, and looking to see who was in the restroom with them (thankfully, no one), Kaede reached out and poked Ichigo playfully in the side. ôUh huh, but you were having fun werenÆt you? What do you think of Matagu now?ö

Feeling sorry for having made her blush, Koishi changed the subject. ôYou look awesome tonight. Red suits you well. IÆm glad you chose that dress.ö

ôYeah, lots of the guys are watching you. Better be careful.ö

Ichigo was beginning to get a little more than just flustered. Looking at herself in the mirror, she was a little self-conscious. ½Hmm. maybe I should put some more lipstick on.? Rifling through her handbag, ôWell, you guys look just as good as meà if not nicer.ö ½Ah. There it is.? Ichigo quickly pulled out her lipstick and began her touch ups.

Koishi and Kaede exchanged knowing looks. ½Maybe Ichigo was having more fun than she thought she was. Eh?? two girls thought to themselves simultaneously.

ôWell, I need to go see Yamada-sensei about how things are going at the refreshments table.ö Ichigo, dropping her lipstick back in her bag, quickly left the restrooms.

Both girls began giggling uncontrollably. After a couple minutes the laughter was easily controlled.

ôOh, Kaede are you having any fun?à I love your dress!ö

More giggling. ôOoooh, yeaaaah.ö

Blushing furiously, ôMe, too.ö

ôJust a sec.ö Kaede walked over to a stall and closed the door.

Koishi walked over to her friends stall and leaned up on its door. ôWhat are you guys doing afterwards?ö

A little muffled, Koishi could barely make out KaedeÆs reply as, ôDonÆt knowà Surprise meà I think.ö

½Hmmm. I wonder what sheÆs wanting to do? Hearing the toilet flush, Koishi moved out of the way. Following Kaede to the sinks, she began to get nervous about the rest of the dance. ½I wonder what weÆll be doing afterwardsà?

ôEarth to Koishi!ö Kaede was giggling and waving her hands in front of her friends face. ôWe should probably return before they wonder where weÆve been.ö

Startled, ôYe-ahö. Koishi followed Kaede back out to the dance.

As Ichigo walked back into the gym, she couldnÆt help but think about KoishiÆs comments about her dancing with Matagu. She could not really see anything wrong with it ½This is a dance, what did she expect that we would do. And so what if we danced to a couple of slow songs, I still had to remind him not to get any funny ideas.? She did wonder if she really needed to remind him of that, he got so nervous when they started to play a slow song. But she wanted to enjoy herself and wanted Matagu to have fun also.

So far the evening had been pretty nice, MataguÆs parents were very polite and seemed to enjoy teasing Matagu about his nervousness over the date. The dinner was equally enjoyable, it had been more fun talking with Matagu during the meal then the dinner she had over break with her sister and brother-in-law. She refused to think about that jerk who was there also. While she was positive that she didnÆt want a boyfriend, especially someone six years her junior, she was most definitely enjoying herself tonight. Kei was right, I do feel better about opening up more to other people, maybe she should tell Kaede some of the real facts about herself. ½Just have to get her to promise not to tell Hyosuke, I donÆt think that goof could keep a secret to save his soul.?

While she was confident that she was working towards what she wanted in life. She also knew she was not an easy person to get along with, but she did have five very close friends. Even if she wasnÆt quite as close to the other two guys, she wasnÆt that worried Hyosuke and Kaede were together and seemed to be very happy. And she knew Kei was married, but when everyone was together, Koishi was always close to him, they did get along together pretty well. And Matagu and her were kind of the odd pair out, she knew she didnÆt love him, but really he wasnÆt all that bad maybe they could get a little closer. But that was a little of what made her nervous, she was very aware of the fact that he had a bit of a crush on her, and she didnÆt want him getting any ideas about them being more then friends. ½Maybe it wouldnÆt be so bad for Matagu and me to have a closer relationship, just not too close? She tried not to smile too much at the idea as she opened the door to the gym and walked back in. As she walked in see saw Hyosuke and Matagu, Matagu glanced over in her direction and he started to smile. He quickly turned away as she thought he was starting to blush. She had to fight her own responses after what she had just been thinking.

It looked like things were going pretty well at the dance, and she couldnÆt help but be pleased at the work her committee did in getting things ready for tonight. She spotted Yamada-sensei putting something in a box under the refreshment table before walking away from the table a fair distance. She stopped to watch what he was doing, and she noted the to a casual observer he seemed very unobservant, but she could tell that he was really watching the refreshment table like a hawk. She remembered how he looked and dressed her first year at Kizaki High. Shaggy and long hair sometimes pulled into a short ponytail, and his bangs covering his eyes. It gave him a dazed, lost in a world of his own look. She could almost envision him as a sheepdog sitting out by the pasture guarding a large flock of sheep, looking like he was asleep but in reality was ever vigilant to any predator that might attack his charges.

She walked up to the technology teacher, and tapped him on the shoulder as she walked around his side so she could talk to him without making him stop watching the table. ôHow have things been going around the refreshment table Yamada-sensei?ö she asked.

He smiled at Ichigo, while he knew most of the students and even a lot of the faculty had problems dealing with her. He had always liked working with her, she was a hard worker, and didnÆt feel the need to talk all the time like some girls her age. Also when she did voice her opinion on something it was a good idea to listen to her, while she did not seem to try hard to be gentle in vocalizing her opinion of anything, she was always honest about telling you what she thought, maybe sometimes too honest.

ôWell so for things have been pretty calm, no girls being groped on the dance floor, everyone seems to be enjoying themselves. And I found out our school nurse and her girls made all the rice balls they have on the snack table, very tasty.ö He answered in his slow drawl.

Ichigo smiled at him, ½Just like most guys the stomach is the most important thing.? ôYamada-sensei, could I ask you what you are keeping in that box under the table?ö

Yamada actually smiled, ôWhen the principle asked me to help out at the dance he specifically asked me to keep and eye on the refreshments. The punch in particular actually, He did not want any of the students to be able to add any unauthorized liquids to it. When I told him IÆd be glad too, he offered me the option of keeping anything I confiscate, to make my next batch of what I call æSuperJuiceÆ, to share with the staff at our next after-hours get-together.ö

A big smile came over IchigoÆs face, ôReally, thatÆs very interesting sensei. You wouldnÆt by chance be willing to share that with some select members of the student government would youàö

Yamada gave the girl an appraising look. ôMiss Morino, you know that would be contributing to the delinquency of a minor and very illegal also.ö

She smiled again but spoke very quietly, ôWell itÆs not really that minor, but speaking of illegal it would be a real shame if the administration found out a certain member of the school facility was receiving special dinner and DESERT deliveries at his home after the grocery closed for the nightàö

YamadaÆs eyes got large, and he almost choked. ôYou really wouldnÆt tell the administration about that would you, I mean sheÆs your best friend and allö he answered quietly.

ôNo, I probably wouldnÆt tell, I would just like to try your SuperJuice sometime. Besides its not like it would be the first drink IÆve tried.ö She smiled at him again.

While he might have been nervous about the possibility she might really tell. He did remember Koishi mentioning to him that she was older then she looked, it wasnÆt until now that he decided to take his girlfriends statement at face value, ½Maybe she really is older then seventeen or eighteen. She sure did not look any older then what she obviously seemed to be? ôWell I suppose I might be able to pass a couple of bottles to my girlfriendsÆ best friend the next time I see her.ö He rubbed his chin like he was trying to figure out when he might see that particular young lady next.

ôThank you sensei, IÆll let her know to expect a delivery the next time I get a chance to talk to her.ö She replied.

~ Crash ~

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Matagu and Hyosuke were standing at one side of the gym. The girls had left a few minutes ago to go to the restroom en-mass. The two guys had spent the last several minutes just talking about several things. But right now both were fairly quiet. After the girls had left Hyosuke had made a comment about how good Ichigo looked in her red dress, and that it almost made her look very adult and even somewhat sexy (of course the last would never be admitted to in the company of anyone but his best and longest friend). Matagu caught the door opening out of the corner of his vision and glanced over, Ichigo walked back in. She noticed his glance and gave him a half smile, He was sure she would give him a hard time about it later, but walked over by the refreshment table and started talking to Yamada-sensei. Matagu had to admit that he was enjoying himself, he and Ichigo had been out on the dance floor several times after arriving, and even dancing to some of the slow songs being played so couples could get close. ½Of course I was surprised she wanted to stay on the dance floor for the slow songs. Even if she felt she had to remind me not to get any funny ideas.?

He knew that Ichigo had no desire for him to be her koibito ½she is plainly persistent on that fact alone? and with that in mind, the fantasies he had since starting highschool died. But over the last month she had been a little different around him. He couldnÆt help but admit that was nice. ½She does seem willing to be a closer friend, treating me almost as politely as sheÆs treated Kei. But I just wish maybe we could be more sometimes, she can be so fun to be around. Especially when she does start getting playful. I almost like it when she gets on my case about something, it helps keep me on my toes. Plus she can manage to rattle Hyosuke better then anyone else I know? Matagu started to smile again at the thought, but before he could relish the moment it was rudely disturbed.

ôHey, it looks like Ichigo may be showing some real intelligence, and decided to ditch the moron.ö Dai commented from behind him. Matagu just grimaced and hoped they would leave soon.







Matagu was starting to get pretty peeved with the things Dai and Jiro were saying, but he knew that he shouldnÆt get upset about anything they said about him, because there opinions of him were irrelevant.

Hyosuke saw his friendsÆ expression and decided to try and help out, turning to look at the two behind, ôWhy donÆt you guys just leave it, you know you shouldnÆt be talking like that.ö

Jiro glared at Hyosuke, ôJust who made you two the sphincter police. We have as much right to be here as anyone. Besides the view from here is pretty good, even Ichigo looks pretty good tonight.ö

ôYea, but in a dress like that sheÆs a real babe.ö Dai commented just loud enough to be heard. ôBut then sheÆs a babe in just about anything she wares, or even better anything she doesnÆt wearàö some laughter followed that comment.

ôNo kiddÆn, given the opportunity I wouldnÆt kick her out of my bed for eatÆn cookies.ö Jiro commented, Hyosuke just rolled his eyes and looked at Matagu, who seemed to be trying very hard not to get upset.





ôYa know, it makes me wonder if she is a Moaner or a Screamer?ö Dai commented.

His comment was answered by a small chuckle. ôProbably a screamer, you know they say the quiet one are the wildest in the sack.ö They both started chuckling again. ôMaybe we should ask Matagu, he might know.ö

Dai started to shake his head and stopped laughing. ôAre you kidding, Matagu. Nah, if he was able to get up the courage to do something like that with her, heÆs so small sheÆd probably just lay there like a dead fish not able to even get herself off with his little thing.ö Jiro couldnÆt help but laugh at his friends comment.





Dai was starting to regain his composure, ôYa know, maybe I should meet up with her some time later to let her have a real man. Let her get on her knees and take a big load off my popsicle stick, if ya know what I mean.ö Both guys thought this was pretty funny; but hadnÆt been paying any real attention to the person that they were trying to torment.

Matagu had heard enough of this garbage, his hands clenched into a tight fist, he didnÆt care too much if they said stuff about him or even how bad a decision Ichigo made by asking him to be her date for the dance. But the kinds of things they were saying about her now were well over the line, and even if she wasnÆt one of his friends he would feel justified by doing something. ½With anger goes loss of control, and the fight is lost before itÆs started.? He tried to calm down and relax a little. ½You should always defend the honor of your family and friends, and this is one of the worst slanders of a friends honor I have ever heard.? Matagu thought quickly, he could tell by the laughter exactly were his opponents were. With that in mind he focused every ounce into his right hand, putting his whole body into the punch. He spun around on Dai so fast he never saw it coming, a hard fast punch straight to the chest meant to remove all the air from the opponents lungs. MataguÆs attempt was met with a satisfying ~ Crunch ~ it was then that Matagu saw his one flaw in the strike.

Dai was lifted off the floor by the blow, but instead of hitting his chest as the punch was intended to do. Dai had been laughing still and his head was bowed slightly in his mirth. The blow instead of connecting with his sternum caught him right in the face. The crack that was heard was his nose as a large quantity of blood started to flow down his face, then he went airborne for a few meters to land in some chairs.

~ Crash ~

Hyosuke and Jiro were both surprised by this event, and Jiro pushed Hyosuke out of his way to get to his opponent. Matagu on the other hand felt a satisfied smile creep over his face. ½Missedà then again I think that makes him look better.? The next thing Matagu knew was being put into a powerful headlock and someone trying to pound his ribs in. ½Must be Jiro? Not feeling much remorse he started to throw his elbow into this new opponent.

While Jiro had not managed to flatten Hyosuke to the floor with that little push, he did manage to knock him off balance and into the end of a nearby table. It took a second for him to regain his balance and turn back to the remaining two combatants. What he saw was some of the chaperones moving towards the fighters to try and put an end to the fight. Jiro had Matagu in a headlock, and Matagu rather then opting to break out of the lock and returning his own, was going for some punishing elbow strikes to JiroÆs midsection. ½He wants to put a hurt on Jiro pretty bad? He also quickly noted that Matagu was twisting around in the lock to force many of JiroÆs punches to glance off his own arm rather then connecting solidly with MataguÆs face or ribs. It was then that he noticed Dai getting back up and approaching the other two fighters. Only problem with that was he had picked up a folding chair and was holding it in front of his chest so he could use it against Matagu.

½Oh no your not, this ainÆt no gaijin pro wrestling match, with guys using sledgehammers, chairs and such.? He quickly noted that none of the adults would interfere before Dai could use the chair. But as he was off to the side of the two fighters, and he hadnÆt been spotted by Dai, he was wide open. ½I can get one clean kick in, low for a leg sweep, and maybe break his ankle. Or high to the face above the chair, and maybe in the nose again. Hmmmà High? decision made he executed a high spin kick; He was satisfied when he watched his foot connect with the side of DaiÆs face. ½Damn missed his nose, Oh well? Dai went spinning back to the floor after the impact, to bad for Hyosuke he let go of the chair when he was kicked and it hit Hyosuke in the small of his back on his left side just below the ribs, and he went down to his knees.

Matagu saw his friend get hit in the back with a chair, and decided to end this little ruckus here and now. He shifted his hips as much as he could then put everything into his last elbow to JiroÆs ribs. Jiro came off the floor, and lost his grip on Matagu. He also landed hard on the floor face down trying desperately to get his breath back. Matagu started to ready a finishing strike to keep Jiro out for the duration when he was grabbed in a strong arm bar. ôAll right now thatÆs enough of that. Just cool down or do I have to take you down.ö The sharp commanding voice of the local martial arts master told him. ôAll right now weÆll just head to the office and let you two calm down.ö

As Hyosuke was being helped up by Yamada-sensei and led towards the office, Matagu answered. ôHai Senseiö and was led out of the gym, He noticed that the school nurse was trying to look at DaiÆs injury but he was thrashing around a lot, she poked him a couple of times and he calmed down, but suddenly but his eyes where wide like heÆd seen a ghost. As they were leaving the gym, Yamada-sensei told the girls they had to wait here. He saw the look on IchigoÆs face and it really hurt, he was not very sure why it did though. The rest of the walk was in silence though.

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After the school nurse finished with the first two young gentlemen and the worst off of the group of combatants, she went to the office where the other two boys were waiting with Mr. Yamada and her husband. As she walked in the two adult males left the room to let her work. She smiled at her husband as he left the room.

She sat down in front of the two boys and set herself to getting them cleaned up some. ôWell would either of you gentlemen care to explain to me just what happened back in the gym?ö As she waited for an answer she watched both boys fidget and gulp in fear of what might happen now.

Finally Matagu decided to speak up, he didnÆt like the idea of lying or being in any way dishonest to her. She was another one of those remarkable people that always tried to help others and was kind and polite to anyone, a lot like Miss Kazami in many ways.

ôIÆm sorry maÆam it was all my fault, they were teasing me about stuff.ö Matagu couldnÆt help but look a little sheepish. ôAndà I suppose I lost my temper. I hit Dai in the nose, then Jiro took a swing at me, we got into it. Then when Dai, I guess recovered enough, he came at me from behind. ThatÆs when Hyosuke jumped in to help me out.ö

ôMmmàhmmö but her expression didnÆt change much; she still was pretty skeptical about the whole thing. She had been familiar with both young men for almost as long as they had lived here. After a few more minutes she sent the boys out to Mr. Yamada and started cleaning up her supplies, as her husband walked back in.

ôWell what did you find out about what caused this little fight?ö he asked, as he sat down next to his wife.

ôNot too much really. Matagu insisted Suzuki and Aida had been making some kind of rude comments about him and he got mad, and then started swinging. Too bad I donÆt believe that story. Matagu is to level headed to go off the handle like that and just start swinging.ö

Her husband nodded his head in agreement. ôThatÆs the truth, and the other two would not start anything with Hyosuke either, he may not play the tough guy, but most the kids understand heÆs no pushover. So do you have any ideas about the real story?ö

ôNot a one, but IÆm sure we will have a better idea what happened before the week is out. Well we had better get out to the gym and back to our job for the evening.ö She stood up and took her husbands arm and left the office

ôSo, are you going to call ojisan and tell him what happened here?ö he asked as they started back to the gym.

ôNo, Ojisan asked me to fill him in on everything after we got back home tonight. So IÆll wait till then, besides IÆm sure someone else has already told him about events so far tonight.ö

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Hyosuke and Matagu walked back into the gym escorted by Yamada-sensei. All three girls had been waiting for them by the hallway door. And the two young men were quickly surrounded and buffeted with questions. Yamada-sensei brought thing back around, getting the girls attention. ôGirls please, calm down. First while I canÆt ask the girls to leave, you two gentlemen will have to go. Your folks were called and are expecting you home, soon. First thing Monday morning you will have to report to the principles office, IÆm sure you will probably get a suspension out of this for starting a fight. You may want to consider your actions over this weekend and also what you plan to tell the principle when you see him.ö

Kaede quickly took HyosukeÆs arm, ôIÆll go ahead and leave with Hyosuke now, you two should stay here and enjoy the rest of the night.ö She smiled at her two friends, and Koishi nodded.

Ichigo looked at everyone and noticed Matagu looked pretty mad about something, and the only way she would get any answers would be to talk to him on the walk out. She turned to Kaede and Koishi, ôI think IÆll walk Matagu home so I can explain what I saw to his parents.ö Matagu turned to Ichigo with a surprised look on his face.

ôIchigo, I really think you should stay here. I mean youÆre the class president and they may need you around later. Besides I can explain what happened to my folks, and you should try and have some fun yet this evening.ö

The look that she turned on Matagu gave him a good idea that her staying behind would not be an option. Of course with her date leaving for the evening did not really make her want to stick around either.
 

PCHeintz72

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Ah, I like Please Teacher, shame there is so little fan fiction for it.

Well, I started to comment earlier, but got pulled away. One benefit of that to you is I ended up making two passes through it.

Note in advance though I am not much of a fighter, so my comments may be wrong on the fight, but might give you an idea what others may be visualizing as they read it.

Okay, I know I haven't even posted what I have for Dance chapter 4 yet.
Heh, I had given up on 4, though I do have that small teaser you put out quite some time back on Shinji's forums.

It is a bit of a jump from that to this. Oh well.

Feeling sorry for having made her blush,
There is no comment that she was blushing.

As for the overall bathroom scene, you might want to go over it, the flow is choppy, or so it seems to me.

½she is plainly persistent on that fact alone?
Hmmm... I would say instead of 'alone' use 'in particular' or something similar.

anything she wares
Was the misspelling of 'wares' intentional to show his intellegence and slang or accidental.

my bed for eat'n cookies.
Heh, just a comment that I've never heard that expression.

Dai was starting to regain his composure
Hmmm.. if Dai was speaking in the prior paragraph and had stopped laughing, was it Jiro then and not Dai that started talking. If Dai, I'd connect it to the prior paragrah, or point out he started laughing again.

The blow instead of connecting with his sternum caught him right in the face. The crack that was heard was his nose as a large quantity of blood started to flow down his face, then he went airborne for a few meters to land in some chairs.
Well, unless the guy was nearly doubled over, I would doubt a punch meant for the stomache would get a guy in the nose. However, if aimed hard enough, he could have killed him hitting him there.

Also, I'm uncertain a guy describing Matague as small would be airborn for a few meters, especially since Matague would hardly be a fighter. Maybe a couple feet though.

½He wants to put a hurt on Jiro pretty bad? He also quickly noted that Matagu was twisting around in the lock to force many of Jiro's punches to glance off his own arm rather then connecting solidly with Matagu's face or ribs.
While I can see Hyoske noting something like that, I can't really see Matague as knowing to do that. This is after all not a inner city rough and tumble school, but something in a remote rural type community. And let us face it, Matague is not really fighter material, but anyone can be provoked, so I'm not surprised at what you have him do, just the effectiveness.

to bad for Hyosuke he let go of the chair when he was kicked and it hit Hyosuke in the small of his back on his left side just below the ribs, and he went down to his knees.
'too', not 'to'. Might want to look at spacing, it reads off to me.

Odd though, from that description, I would have thought the chair flung free of the fight or to the floor, not into Kyoske's back.

He noticed that the school nurse was trying to look at Dai's injury but he was thrashing around a lot, she poked him a couple of times and he calmed down, but suddenly but his eyes where wide like he'd seen a ghost.
This part confused me, is the 'he' referenced Matague, or Dai? And what was it precisely that caused that reaction, as I did not get it.

"No, Ojisan asked me to fill him in on everything after we got back home tonight. So I'll wait till then, besides I'm sure someone else has already told him about events so far tonight."
Hmmm... Curious, who is the the Ojisan to the school nurse? Is it of importance to the story, since it was brought up?

Yamada-sensei brought thing back
'things'
 
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Thanks, for pointing out some errors to me. Will be working soon on getting them fixed, and will be in place before the next post. A few things I need to make clearer. As for æwho is Ojisan to the school nurseÆ well the principle is the same one from the original series, but story secrecy demands I not give out his name as it may give away to many other things. And as for just what Matagu knows there are a few hints in an earlier chapter, as well as the end of this chapters post. Remember Yamada-Sensei is not the only one trying to stop the fight.
 
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