Naruto Making Uzumaki (rewrite) Chapter 6 (Was Chapter 7)

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If Hatake Kakashi had to describe his mood, he’d probably say it was somewhere between a benign sense of exasperation and outright annoyance. Haku. He needed have to have words with that girl. Polite words, yes. But words would be exchanged for she’d done two things that had raised some mentionable issue.

First, there was Pakkun. While he trusted her enough to grant her a degree of parole she was still technically an enemy combatant being held under observation. He understood she valued her, for lack of a better term, intimate personal moments and he regretted, to a degree that Pakkun had been required to intrude, the simple fact was that it had indeed been required. He needed to know what she was doing and where she was at all times, not only for the sake of his team, but for her own.

In the case that Kirigakure Oinin were detected his Ninken were under strict orders to inform him immediately. Her bloodline would do the village absolutely no good if she was raped to death and her body left desecrated beyond all study in a shallow, unmarked pit grave. Besides, all things considered, she was a good kid and nobody deserved to end up like that.

That accounted for his exasperation. The girl was being difficult, but he was sure she’d be more reasonable once he spoke to her. His annoyance though, that was entirely due to the three slouched forms that were dutifully following her and his subordinate back into town like a trio of lost puppies.

She hasn’t mentioned them. That annoyed him very much. Now, he could understand why. After all, those who did not protect their comrades were the lowest form of filth, but at the same time this was one more unexpected factor thrown onto a mission that was already a grand pile of unwelcome surprises that had been dumped on his head from on high. It also had put their lives at danger.

After all, if he’d found three unknown Kirikagure shinobi creeping around the countryside there could have been a misunderstanding. Misunderstanding between ninja all too often ended with one or more parties on the slab. And if appearances were at all anything to go by, it would not have been him. That would have made for a very awkward moment indeed and one he would not have not appreciated one bit.

Yes. He definitely needed to have words with her. Strong words, but polite none the less. He suspected she intended to do the same, both to complain about Pakkun and explain the identities of the three following her. That would be unacceptable. By initiating the contact she would be in a slight position of strength. He couldn’t allow that. The girl needed to reminded of the realities of her situation. She needed to be reminded that she was not in control and that meant he’d need to be the one to establish contact.

Of course this also brought into play his very own personal wildcard, Uzumaki Naruto. From what he’d been able to gather about the girl she was a born follower. Not only that but she prided herself on being a good follower, and having already bonded with the boy over their superficially similar backgrounds she’d dutifully attached herself to his loud mouthed Genin. Almost at the hip he thought to himself with a suppressed giggle. As long as Naruto was around she was controllable, if not directly, then through him.

That was the positive, the negative was that Naruto was passionate and unpredictable which meant he had to handle this situation in a careful manner. Naruto helped ensure her loyalty, but in turn he was viciously protective of the people he cared about. He could not afford to undermine his authority by letting his genin go off on a tangent. He needed to be gentle but stern, and possibly introduce a superficial ‘compromise option’ to placate Naruto and subtlety reinforce his control over the situation.

Yes. Sounded good, but now he just had to wait. He could show himself now, but he wouldn’t. Since Haku was obviously taken with his beloved student, he’d treat her like he would any other student, and that meant teaching her an important life lesson in the most entertaining way possible!

He’d toy with them a bit. He’d follow and let just a hit of his presence be known, and then at the moment of maximum paranoia he’d step with with a smile on his face and a bounce in his step, both for the sake of making his point and for the sheer bloody self-amusement of seeing them jump clear out of their skins.

Ah. He smiled. He loved being a Ninja.

- 6 -

For the fifth time in as many minutes Haku glanced over her shoulder. There was that feeling again. Something wasn’t right. It was like someone was watching her. She didn’t like it. As someone who was used to being hunted her instincts about such things were very good and that feeling was one that put her on edge in a way that little else could.

It left her tense and afraid, especially now with her chakra in such a sorry state. She wanted to flee, to run for cover and find a place to hide, a place to recover her chakra and plan what to do next but she couldn’t. That would let her pursuers know that she knew she was being followed. That would spring the trap and in doing so would both doom the morons and possibly put Naruto in danger. She couldn’t allow that, it was unacceptable.

She’d soldier on, act like nothing was wrong, and then slowly maneuver to safety. Right now the safest place was in Kakashi’s company. The second safest place would be in a public place surrounded by civilians and in plain sight.

While the Mizukage was a paranoid maniac and his hunter nin sadistic monsters, Kiri still required outside contracts to pay the bills. Attacking her in public would reflect poorly on the village and could negatively affect the bottom line.

Ideally she should find Kakashi as soon as possible but she didn’t know where he was at the moment and the time needed to find him would leave her open to an attack that she had no hope of withstanding.

“Well, there’s the Sushi stand,” Naruto said with a sigh, “Lets get this over with.”

Normally she’d take mild offense to someone taking her favorite food so lightly, but right now she was honestly too terrified to care. Instead she simply kept up her act and smiled. “Oh, don’t be like that, Naruto-kun. Come on, try and enjoy it for me...”

Please, if it’s to be my last meal, at least enjoy it together with me. Please.

He sighed and let h. “Alright Haku-chan, after all, you’ve helped me out so I can give it a go!”

She smiled and fought the tears that were threatening to well up. Thank you.

Slowly she moved her hands down to Naruto’s and grasped it, squeezing tightly for strength as she struggled to maintain her composure. This earned her an inquisitive look from Naruto. She just smiled.

“Hey,” Mou cut in, “You want us to go somewhere else? I mean you seem to have a moment going here...”

“No!” she snapped maybe a bit more intensely than she intended. “You three are coming with. In fact I do not want you to leave my sight. Not for a moment!”

“But what if I have to use the bathroom?” Kari complained.

“Not for a moment!”

Mou blinked. “You tense or something?”

She fought down both a shudder and a grimace of disappointment. Those idiots didn’t suspect a thing. “I’m fine,” she glanced over to a bewildered Naruto. “Come on, Naruto-kun. Lets eat.”

He blinked. “Um, right Haku-chan!”

The stand was relatively large as far as open air sushi bars went, with easily enough room for the five of them, and it was nice and open and in public view. She’d had to just hope that if they mingled long enough that Kakashi would come looking for his student.

Behind the counter of the bar was an older couple, probably in their late fifties. A jolly looking man with a wide face and a wide smile and a matronly looking woman with kind eyes. She felt guilty for literally bringing danger to their doorstep.

“Uzumaki-sama!” the man exclaimed with a smile “And Haku-sama!”

Both of them bowed. “We are honored that you would grace our humble establishment!”

Naruto grinned and scratched the back of his head. “Well, sushi isn’t really my thing but it’s Haku-chan’s favorite so we’re here for her.”

“Not your thing?” the man looked agast, before winking to his wife. “Honey, I think I know just the thing we need to make to help Uzumaki-sama feel at home!”

The woman giggled. “I know what you’re thinking, dear. Making it will make me feel young again!”

They laughed, leaving Haku looking a bit confused. Naruto as well from the look of him.

He chuckled again and looked back to the group. “You look over the menu and tell me anything you want! For the Heroes of Wave, all you can eat, no charge!”

Haku’s eyes went wide and she could feel her mouth starting to water as her stomach made a loud growling sound. For a moment she completely forgot about the sword dangling over her head as she processed what he just said.

Sushi? All you could eat?

She grabbed the menu so quickly the air almost cracked.

“I’ll order for myself and Naruto-kun!”

“What about us?” Kuri asked.

He glanced at them for a long moment. “I didn’t see you three fighting on the bridge.”

“Ah, we were helping out somewhere else, ain’t that right Ok-... um... Haku-san?”

Haku frowned for a moment. “Yes, they were...,” she tensed, gritting her teeth slightly, “Useful.”

“Is that right?”

Haku felt a hand on her shoulder and literally jumped with a high pitched female screech, her tension being released all at once like a wound coil, spinning around in place she swung her kunai, narrowly missing the smug face of Hatake Kakashi who leaned away from her strike like he was dodging a blow from a playful kitten.

“Ma Ma, Haku-chan,” he said “Watch where you swing that thing. You could put someone’s eye out.”

Haku stood in place wild eyed, red faced, and panting, her nerves frayed from the shock but at the same time so relieved by the Jonin’s presence that she almost wanted to hug him. Kakashi was here! She was safe!

As for Kakashi he was standing in place, one hand still on Naruto’s shoulder, looking oh so very amused.

“Imagine seeing you crazy kids here and with three new friends! My how are you boys doing today?” he smiled and glanced at the three genin who’d gone ghost white in the presence of the foreign jonin.

“W-we’re fine!” Rari squeaked.

“Y-yeah, just great!” Mou added.

“How you doing, Kakashi-san!” Kari added with a smile earning an incredulous look from his brothers.

“Kari,” Mou whispered a bit too loudly to keep it from being heard by all, “The hell are you doing?”

“He asked how we’re doing, it’s only polite to ask him back!”

“Ugh, you moron,” Mou grumbled.

“I like him,” Kakashi stated with a smile, before glancing at Mou, “You, not so much.”

He looked back to Haku with a peeked eyebrow. “You alright, Haku-chan? You seem a bit tense.”

She blinked. A bit tense? Wait. If she could feel that she was being watched then a Jonin of his caliber would definitely be able to, then why would he need to ask... unless... that son of a bitch.

“How long were you following us?”

Kakashi smiled and reached for one of the stools. “I have no idea what you’re talking about,” he glanced at the confused looking bar owner. “Mind if I join in?”

“Of course not, Jonin-sama!”

Kakashi grinned and slipped into the stool between Haku and Mou, causing the fidgety genin to slowly rise to his feet.

“Don’t move on my account.”

And then sat right back down.

She frowned deeply. “So, no idea what I’m talking about then?”

He smiled. “Not a clue.”

“So I guess there really is a hunter nin stalking us then.”

The brothers all froze in place and Naruto looked confused. Kakashi just chuckled.

“Spoil my fun,” he commented before adding, “So, Pakkun said the two of you discussed cuisine. Something about making soup?”

Her face darkened. Was this revenge for frightening his pug?

“What’s she talking about, Kakashi-sensei?” Naruto asked.

“Kakashi-san ordered one of his ninken to stalk me,” she replied coolly, “He followed me when we went to see Zabuza-sama...”

“Ma ma, stalk is such a strong word,” Kakashi replied, “Remember, in the eyes of Konoha you are not yet a friend.”

“Hey!” Naruto cut in, “She’s my friend!”

“But not the villages,” Kakashi countered, “Not yet. Besides, you’re watching out for her is why I have no problem letting her walk about.”

Naruto blinked. “Really?”

He nodded. “You’re a good judge of character, Naruto-kun.”

Haku frowned. She wasn’t buying it. “Then why have your dog follow me?”

“For your own protection,” he replied, “Yes, Pakkun was under orders to observe you but he was also under orders to report in the moment he saw even the slightest hint of a Hunter team. After all, you’re valuable to the village...” he smiled, “But most importantly, Naruto sees you as a friend, and that means that I’m obliged to protect you with my life.”

She blinked in confusion. She failed to see the logic. “What?”

He nodded. “I know Naruto. He holds his friends to be very precious to him and would give everything to protect them. Isn’t that right, Naruto-kun?”

Naruto nodded. “That’s right! I’m not going to let anyone hurt you, Haku-chan!”

Kakashi nodded. “And as his comrade, I’ll die before I let anything happen to him. After all, those who abandon their comrades are the lowest form of scum, urgo... He’ll die to protect you, and I’ll die to protect him. So, as long as one of my cute little subordinates is keeping an eye on you, I promise that I’ll be there keep you safe.”

“What about us?” Rari asked.

Kakashi glanced over. “Who are you again?”

Haku shook her head in amusement. While before she didn’t like Kakashi now she... She paused. Actually, she still didn’t like Kakashi, but at least now she understood Kakashi. Well, at least a little bit, and what she found was at least something she could respect. It was no wonder that Kakashi was so strong. Only someone who fought to protect his precious people would have been strong enough to defeat Zabuza. And while she was not precious to him, Naruto was, and since she was precious to Naruto, Kakashi would protect her for Naruto’s sake.

She smiled and looked up to him, only to find him nose deep in an orange novel that she knew very well to be pronographic. A book which he was shamelessly reading in public.

Her smile quickly faded only to be replaced by a twitch.

No, she decided right then and there, she didn't respect Kakashi, even if she could understand him somewhat.

- 6 - 6 -

One-hundred twenty-seven.

Sasuke grunted.

One twenty-eight.

This time he groaned.

One twenty-nine.

Sweet kami, his abs were on fire.

One thirty.

“Sasuke-kun, would you like to go with me into town to get some anmitsu with me?”

No, you insufferable shrew, I want to get up to one hundred and fifty before taking a rest. And if you were any kind of real ninja you’d have spent at least part of the day training rather than spending the entire time bothering me and reading harlequin romance novels like some kind of low-rent version of Kakashi.

Of course, Sasuke didn’t say this. His mother had raised him to be polite and in her memory he’d at least make an attempt to remain as such. While he knew well, and cared little that he came off as aloof and cold, it was mostly because frankly everyone else sucked and it was all he could do to keep from telling them how much and why.

“No.”

One thirty-one.

One of the advantages of tree climbing, Sasuke reflected was coming up with new and interested ways to push his body to surpass his old limits. Inverted squats were something new he’d just come up with and so far they were not disappointing. Basically, they were just like normal squats, only instead of doing them standing on the ground, you do them while using your chakra to stick to the underside of a tree branch.

The effects of gravity combined with the chakra drain and focus needed to keep attached made them much more difficult, and hopefully, much more productive than a normal squat.

One thirty-two.

As Sasuke fought a winning battle with his own limitations he watched as Tazuna arrived home, only to be instantly met outside the door by a concerned looking Tsunami. Whatever she said had a great effect on the man as he recoiled almost physically when told whatever it was that she’d told him.

Frowning somewhat, Sasuke activated his sharingan and focused. While under-developed and still untrained, it did grant him almost unparalleled perceptive ability.

One thirty-three.

While lip reading wasn’t exactly the greatest of his talents, he was able to pick up on some of the conversation. They were discussing Naruto and Tazuna was saying something about speaking to someone about him.

Sasuke frowned. This was something that put him maybe a little bit on edge. Civilians skulking off to speak to mysterious people about teammates was something that made him feel maybe just a bit uncomfortable.

He also noted that doing this with his Sharingan active made it even more difficult and thus, from now on, he’d do his sets with his eyes on.

One thirty-four.

And speaking of his eyes, he’d keep them locked on the architect. The moment he left to visit whomever he was going to see, Sasuke would be right behind him. After all, while he wasn’t too fond of the loud mouthed idiot, Naruto was his teammate and when he’d thought that Sasuke had been killed he apparently had almost killed Haku to avenge him.

One thirty-five.

And that meant that despite his idiocy, Naruto was strong enough to respect.

- 6 - 6 - 6 -

Naruto really had to admit, sushi’s actually wasn’t so bad once you get over the whole raw fish deal. It was actually pretty good. It was no substitute for ramen that was for sure, but hey, he could do this again.

He glanced over to Haku who was on her third platter.

Though he’d have to figure out how to get someone else to cover it. Seriously, he’d seen the prices on the menu and there was absolutely no way he was ever going to be able to cover Haku’s appetite on a Genin’s pay grade. It almost made him sympathize with Iruka-sensei for all that ramen he’d been forced to pay for over the years.

Almost.

“Hey, Jiji!” Naruto exclaimed with a smile, “How about some more of that unagi stuff. It was pretty good!”

The old chef smiled and winked. “Coming up in a moment, Uzumaki-sama! We’re making something special for you, Uzumaki-sama!”

Naruto blinked and then grinned. Nobody except Tenchu-jiji had ever cooked something special just for him! It was almost enough to make him jump in his seat “Something special? For me? Cool! What is it!”

“It is a special dessert sushi!” he exclaimed.

Haku looked up and swallowed before speaking. “Special dessert sushi?”

The wife nodded, “Once upon a time it was very popular...”

Naruto blinked, “What happened.”

The couple shared a long look and glanced back to Naruto, a sad and wistful look in thier eyes, “Times change my boy, but things are looking up again so we’ve made it in your honor.”

Naruto’s smile grew. “Come on, show it to me! What is it?”

The old man leaned forward, a twinkle in his eye. “Are you sure you want it now? I wouldn’t want to ruin your meal with some untimely sweets.”

Haku smiled. “Yes, please. What is it?”

“Ah,” the wife spoke, “It’s a local specialty that uses sweetened rice and a filling of bean jam.”

Haku cocked her head showing some interest, while Naruto was just anxious to see what this awesome sushi was.

“Alright,” the husband relented, though it was obvious even to naruto that he was just trying to build up anticipation. “My I present, an old speciality that I’m sure is going to become popular again...”

He slid forward a tray of sushi that had everyone's attention. On it were a number of standard rolls like any other sushi, but what caught Naruto’s eye was the design...

“Uzumaki!”

Uzumaki. Whirlpool Roll. It was a fitting name. The white and black rice and bean jam, when rolled up formed a very familiar spiral. The symbol that the Hokage has told him was the mark of his long lost family.

They’d said it was an old favorite, so they couldn’t have invented it for him. He didn’t know how, he didn’t know why, but this touched him in a way that he couldn’t understand.

Not even realizing it, Naruto’s hand trembling as he slowly reached forward, almost out of his conscious control. A tear rolled down his cheek and his chest was heavy and he almost let loose a sob as he his hand slowly moved towards this double pun in the form into symbol of a family he never knew, all rolled up in edible form.

And slowly, and almost blind to the world around him, he looked at it before popping it into his mouth.

He didn’t know if it was the sushi, or if it was the emotion, but the sweetness hit him like a sledgehammer. It was wonderful. It was delicious. It was enough to move him to tears.

It was simply put, the best thing he ever tasted...

Wait.

No.

That was still Ichiraku Ramen.

But this was still pretty fucking good.

- 6 - 6 - 6 - 6 -

“Sakura.”

Aforementioned girl absolutely beamed when the object of her affections said her name. All too often he was aloof and cool, being so dark and mysterious but every once in a while he turned his attention to her and gave her that oh so sexy come hither look that made her shudder.

“Yes, Sasuke-kun,” she all but gushed, absolutely sure that he was about to ask her out. After all, she’d suggested anmitsu earlier and could understand if he wanted to finish his training and rest. After all, one didn’t go out on a date exhausted.

And besides, he might need some energy for what comes after! Shannaro!

He gave her a sexy little turn of the lip and an oh so mysterious look that made her all but shudder.

“I need you to do something for me,” he said in a voice so smooth it that it made her want to purr like a kitten while gazing into her soul with two eyes that glittered like two pools of molten black chocolate. Sweet Kami, he was so intense!

“W-what do you need, Sasuke-kun?” she asked, feeling a bit weak in the knees...

...And moist in the panties!

He glanced out at the path that lead away from the house and remained silent for a moment. It wasn’t anything special. It was getting a little late in the day but except for old man Tazuna the path was clear.

Slowly she glanced at Sasuke who again looked at her.

“You didn’t happen to catch the topic of the conversation that he had with Tsunami-san earlier, did you?”

She blinked. “I wasn’t paying attention.”

He grunted and walked past her. “I didn’t think so.”

Sakura was confused. Did she say something wrong? “Sasuke-kun?”

“I’m going out,” he stated. “If I don’t return before Tazuna-san does, inform Kakashi-sensei that the old man needs to be interrogated. If neither of us returns, he needs to speak with Tsunami-san.”

She blinked. “Sasuke-kun? What’s going on?”

He glanced back. “They were talking about Naruto. I want to know why.”

She frowned. Why would he be interested in Naruto like this? He got lucky once in a while but there really wasn’t much to him that you couldn’t pick up within the first thirty seconds of him opening his mouth.

Still, she knew better than to get in Sasuke’s way when he got all sexy and intense like this. Maybe if she did well he’d take her out when he was done! Yeah! That was probably it.

“Alright Sasuke-kun.”

Sasuke grunted in affirmation and moved to jump into the trees.

Before he could jump though, she realized something and called for him to, “Wait.”

He looked back once more.

“What if Kakashi-sensei gets back before you do?” she asked.

“Tell him I’m training.”

And with that, Sasuke was gone leaving Sakura confused and more than a little disheartened.

A small voice in her mind wondered if he hasn’t want to go out with her to begin with.

She quickly stabbed that little voice in the kidneys.

- 6 - 6 - 6 - 6 - 6 -

“Hey, Sakura-chan!” Naruto exclaimed as he and the others entered eyeshot of the house.

Kakashi-sensei had decided to return to Tazuna’s place with Haku and her three. Well... he didn’t exactly want to think of them as morons, idiots, or anything like that. After all, he’d been called stupid enough times himself over the years he doubted they liked it any more than he did. He’d have to think of something else. He smiled. He had it. Dumbasses.

Kakashi-sensei had decided to return to Tazuna’s place with Haku and her three dumbasses to basically ask them about themselves as those were not really the kinds of questions you asked at a sushi bar in front of a couple of smiling civilians. They were nice and all, but ninja stuff was for ninja.

As for Sakura, when Naruto greeted her, instead of a smile and a hello like he’d been hoping for, she simply groaned and looked up at him, “Naruto, can’t you see I’m reading?”

She paused and glanced at the group, now three ninja larger. “Kakashi-sensei, who are they?”

“Not quite sure yet,” Kakashi said with a smile, before glancing back. “Who are you guys again?”

Rari frowned. “We’re Zabuza’s Genin Team. Did we already tell you that?”

Kakashi nodded to Sakura, ignoring Mou completely. “There you go.”

Sakura for her part seemingly had almost the same reaction he had. She turned an interesting shade of green and grimaced.

Haku frowned. Mou grimaced and said, “However bad you think it is, it was actually about ten times worse.”

Sakura actually winced “Ugh. My sympathies.”

“Well,” Kakashi said, “Now that we’re all friends, why don’t we get everyone together and have a nice chat...” he slowly looked at Haku, “This is everyone, correct?”

She simply scowled in response, “Sadly, yes.”

Kakashi simply smiled. “Wonderful. Sakura, where is Sasuke?”

She flushed slightly, “Sasuke’s in the woods, sensei. He’s training.”

Kakashi simply cocked his head. “Is that so?”

She nodded. “Right, sensei!”

“I see,” he made a hmmm sound for a moment and then smiled, “Why that sounds like a wonderful idea, Sakura-chan!”

She blinked. “What?”

“Training,” he replied, “Haku and Naruto have been training all day!” he looked over her for a moment, “I want you to do six laps to the bridge and back.”

Sakura grimaced before nodding. “Okay, Sensei,” she replied reluctantly before starting to stretch her legs.

“I want you to report back in when you’re done,” Kakashi added, “In about...”

He pulled back his glove to expose a small wrist watch. “A half hour. Starting... now.”

Sakura turned bone white. “T-thirty minutes!?”

Kakashi looked back down. “Twenty nine minutes fifty-five seconds actually... hurry up Sakura-chan, you’re burning daylight!”

“Y-yes sir!” she squeaked as she broke off in a full run.

Naruto watched the pretty pink haired girl retreat with a confused look on his face. He didn’t get the problem. Thirty miles in as many minutes? Sure, that was enough to build up a good head of sweat, but it wasn’t anything to freak out over. Right?

Kakashi sighed, shaking his head as the girl ran off before running through a series of hand seals and biting his thumb.

“Kuchiyose no Jutsu!”

Two dogs appeared in an explosion of smoke. One was a massive black bull dog with a spiked collar. The other, a small and cute little pug.

“Wow, that was cool!” Naruto exclaimed.

Haku on the other hand just glared at the pug.

“Uh, Kakashi...” the pug looked up.

“Don’t worry, Pakkun, I had a chat with her. She understands she was out of bounds.”

“Just learn to respect boundaries,” Haku stated with a huff.

“Wonderful,” Kakashi said with a smile, “We’re all friends now!”

Haku crossed her arms and scowled looking very much like an indignant child. It was a stance that Naruto was well used to.

“Bull, follow Sakura and stay out of sight. If she passes out, bring her home,” he paused for a second and ran through another series of hand seals.

“Doton: Doryuu Taiga!”

A large spot of mud gushed out from the ground next to the path,

“And dump her in that conveniently placed muddy ditch. Make sure she doesn’t notice you.”

The large bulldog nodded and bound off.

“Pakkun, I want you to find Sasuke and...”

“Oh come on, Kakashi,” the dog whined. Literally whined. There was a canine whimper in there. “I already got in enough of a mess today following around one of your kids.”

“Don’t worry,” he replied, “This is an easy one. Just find him, stay at range, and make sure he’s alright.”

The dog sighed and bound off into the woods, “Don’t forget, you owe me those bones!”

Kakashi smiled and then looked to Naruto. “Make me a shadow clone.”

“Huh?” Naruto blinked. “Right. Kage Bunshin no Jutsu!”

A second Naruto appeared in a burst of smoke.

“So,” the clone asked, “What do you need me for?”

Kakashi reached into his pocket and handed the clone a small wad of bills and sealing scroll. “I want you to go out and get me a jumbo Tonkatsu to go...” he paused, “Make it a double if there is enough. Put it in this scroll and bring it back. The real you can keep the change.”

Naruto grinned. Yeah! He was going to get some pocket money! Ramen here we go!

His clone on the other hand, he looked dejected at the task he was given.

“Oh man, delegated to fetching takeout for my lazy ass sensei...” the clone grumbled.

“It’s actually for Sakura,” Kakashi replied.

The clone blinked. “Oh. Alright then.”

He obediently took the scroll and cash and bound off leaving Kakashi alone with his student and the four Kiri ninja once more. There was an awkward pause. Then Kakashi smiled at Haku.

"Haku-san, if you have the chakra for it, would you be kind enough to chill that to just this side of freezing?"

She blinked. “You’re serious.”

“Oh, quite.”

Haku sighed and closed her eyes, making a single one-handed seal. A faint mist settled over the mudhole.

Kuri shuddered. “Nyah! He’s as nearly bad as Zabuza-sensei!”

Rari looked over. “Is he running behind her swinging a huge sword screaming about how he’ll murder her if she slacks off?”

Kuri paused for a moment. “He’s not nearly as bad as Zabuza-sensei!”

Kakashi shrugged. “Nah. That comes later.”

There was a long awkward pause.

Naruto gulped and glanced at his teacher. He wasn’t serious. He couldn’t be serious. Right? “Kakashi-sensei?”

The Jonin cracked a grin. “Just kidding.”

Naruto frowned. Somehow he didn’t quite believe him.

“As for you four, you’re going to tell me what’s going on here. All of it. And in great detail...”

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Uchiha Sasuke slowly crept behind the old man, sticking to cover and shadow. So far he had not been detected. That was nothing to be proud of, rather it was simply to be expected of a Konoha shinobi. Had he been detected. No, had the old man even shown the slightest hint that he might on some level believe he was being followed it would have been a personal failure that would have reflected poorly on his abilities and would have meant that he required revisionary training.

His eyes narrowed. Uchiha Sasuke did not ‘do’ revision. His pride as an Uchiha only permitted progression, and possibly supplement when the topic was of particular interest.

No, the only emotions he felt right now were a dull sense of contentment from a job done efficiently and some lingering annoyance. How much longer was it going to take this foul smelling drunk to get to... well... wherever the hell he was going to? They’d been walking for almost an hour, skirting the mangrove swamps heading deeper and deeper into the interior of the island nation.

What this had to do with Naruto, he didn’t know, but he’d find out. He was an avenger and Naruto had at least attempted to become the same in his name. He understood the conviction that took. He owed the moron this much.

A few minutes of keeping to the brush and biting down his desire to grumble about his desire to hurry the fuck up, he finally got his wish. Around the last stand of trees was at least probably what had to Tazuna’s destination. He honestly had to say to himself that while he hadn’t know where he was going, this was probably the least likely place he’d have considered.

It was a shrine, an old one from the looks of it. It wasn’t falling apart or anything but it was pretty long in the tooth. It looked like someone was trying to care for it and putting in a valiant effort, though from the looks of things they were slowly losing the battle with time.

Unaware of his tail, Tazuna walked past the tori and up to the entrance of the building proper, only for it to be opened for it. In the doorway stood an old man, easily as old as the Hokage though at least from the looks of him they couldn’t be any more different in character.

His hair was grey and long, not thin but certainly somewhat unkept. His fractures were craggy and severe, his eyes squinting and his mouth seemingly twisted into a permanent scowl. He was dressed in the robes of a priest which seemed as tired and well worn as the rest of him. Slowly he gazed over the courtyard and locked onto Tazuna, the presence of whom seemed to only further disrupted the thoroughly unpleasant looking old shinkan.

“What do you want, boy,” he grumbled. His voice was rough, low, and bitter. He’d heard the term gravely before but this man could be the face of the definition. He had the sound of a sack of rocks being ground against itself.

Tazuna began to bow deeply, “Greetings, Shingi-sam...”

“Pick yourself up boy and don’t call me that!” he hissed.

Tazuna flushed somewhat. “I apologize.”

“Don’t apologize,” he grumbled, “Just don’t do it again. Not that you’ll listen.”

The old man turned away and walked inside. “Hurry up,” he snapped. “You obviously have something to say and if it wasn’t worthwhile then you wouldn’t have walked all this way.”

He paused for a moment and then grunted. “Bah, come in. I’ll put on some tea.”

Sasuke scowled as Tazuna removed his shoes and walked into the building. He wasn’t going to be able to hear him like this. Swiftly and silently he moved in closer, not wanting to miss whatever they were talking about. Without a sound he placed himself against one of the support pillars, listening in on whatever conversation they were having.

“... you really should let me and my men spend some time working on the shrine,” Tazuna said, “I understand why you’re refusing but at this rate it’s going to fall down around your head.”

“I’ll be dead soon enough,” he snapped, “Then you can work on the shrine to your hearts content. Until then, leave me to my duties. Now, I doubt you came all of this way to bitch at me about the condition of the shrine. What it is?”

“An Uzumaki has entered the country. He is a ninja from Konoha”

“What?” the man snapped. “Tell me about this ninja.”

“He’s a boy. Maybe thirteen? Didn’t believe it at first, he has blond hair after all.”

“Hm. A blond Uzumaki. Interesting. You sure the kid’s for real?”

“My daughter talked to his sensei. She didn’t get a confirmation out of him, but he didn’t deny anything either.”

“That’s not much of a basis.”

“And it seems that every other word out of the brat’s mouth is ‘Dattebayo’.”

“Dattebayo,” he chuckled, “Alright. I’ll bite. He have a name?”

“Uzumaki Naruto,” Tazuna replied.

“Naruto!” the priest laughed, “Alright. Send me this Uzumaki Naruto from Konohagakure. I’m going to see what he’s made of... but first...” he coughed and released a spike of killing intent that was almost enough to send Sasuke to his knees. “Boy! You know it’s rude to eavesdrop!”

Sasuke’s eyes went wide. Shinobi!

Sasuke turned about to flee, only to find himself running right into the chest of the old man.

Not expecting the obstacle, Sasuke was spent sprawling, landing on his bottom looking up at the displeased features of the old coot. He felt a lump rise in his throat as he met Shingi’s harsh gaze with his own, sending a deathly chill running down his spine.

This was not good.
 

DhampyrX2

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#2
About time Sasuke had a run in with an Uzumaki other than Naruto or Karin. This should be interesting.
 

lord geryon

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#3
An entire chapter of new content! Awesome!

DhampyrX2 said:
About time Sasuke had a run in with an Uzumaki other than Naruto or Karin. This should be interesting.
I seriously doubt this old man is an Uzumaki. Likely a family retainer of some kind.
 

datakim

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#4
If there was an Uzumaki shinobi this close to Wave who is this familiar with Tazuna, why did he do nothing about Gato&co? And why did Tazuna not go to him for help once it became clear that Zabuza was still alive. Heck, why did he not go to this guy before even going to Konoha?

Despite his age, he is obviously still more than skilled enough to have helped considering how easily he found and stopped Sasuke. And if he willingly CHOSE not to help the village despite their desperate need, why would Tazuna hold him in such respect?

Basically, where the heck was this guy when he was desperately needed? And why should Kakashi trust him enough to let Naruto visit?

It also occurs to me that Kakashi should have some choice words to say about Tazuna revealing Narutos presence to some unknown shinobi without asking permission first. What was it Kakashi said? That while he was willing to forgive this time, he would not forget. And here Tazuna is betraying them once more (no matter how noble his reasons).

Beyond that, I loved the chapter. Your Kakashi is awesome. :)
 

Psyckosama

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#5
datakim said:
If there was an Uzumaki shinobi this close to Wave who is this familiar with Tazuna, why did he do nothing about Gato&co? And why did Tazuna not go to him for help once it became clear that Zabuza was still alive. Heck, why did he not go to this guy before even going to Konoha?

Despite his age, he is obviously still more than skilled enough to have helped considering how easily he found and stopped Sasuke. And if he willingly CHOSE not to help the village despite their desperate need, why would Tazuna hold him in such respect?

Basically, where the heck was this guy when he was desperately needed? And why should Kakashi trust him enough to let Naruto visit?

It also occurs to me that Kakashi should have some choice words to say about Tazuna revealing Narutos presence to some unknown shinobi without asking permission first. What was it Kakashi said? That while he was willing to forgive this time, he would not forget. And here Tazuna is betraying them once more (no matter how noble his reasons).
He's not going to be pleased with anyone, believe me...

Beyond that, I loved the chapter. Your Kakashi is awesome. :)
I listen to this to get in character B)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nCQGQ5qBQTA

And this is under the mask...

 

KurokamiDG

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#6
Tazuna walked past the tori and up to the entrance of the building proper, only for it to be opened for it.
Are you trying to say him instead of it?

And I didn't think that Naruto would be so...emotional about a dessert. The meaning is touching and all, but it just surprised me how he got about it.
 

sinewyk

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#7
A small voice in her mind wondered if he hasn’t want to go out with her to begin with.
Shouldn't it be
A small voice in her mind wondered if he didn't want to go out with her to begin with.
 

Darkskeketon

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#8
An interesting if unexpected twist.

The only thing that really bother me is the respect that Tazuna afford him. If he is a shinobi (even a pretty old one), couldn't he help them before Zabuza was hired ?
Even more so because he live here...

You will need to find a way to excuse him; make him really ill or something.

You could link it to tazuna reaction when he speak with his daughter.

Whatever she said had a great effect on the man as he recoiled almost physically when told whatever it was that she’d told him.
 

datakim

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#9
Darkskeketon said:
You will need to find a way to excuse him; make him really ill or something.

You could link it to tazuna reaction when he speak with his daughter.
Yeah. Like I said earlier, if he was capable of helping but did not, then Tazuna should neither respect him, and in all probability would not even want to visit him. He certainly should not want Naruto to become anything like him and so would not want to bring Naruto to this guy. For this scene to make any sense, this guy should be so weak from illness/age as to be no help at all.

However we run into a rather nasty problem there. He easily dealt with Sasuke, implying that while he might not be at Zabuzas level, he is still strong enough that he could have been a big help at the bridge confrontation.

Heck, I assume he is meant to be somekind of mentor/tutor for Naruto that introduces him to the Uzumaki and sealing and such. If so, even if you somehow excuse Sasukes capture, you would still run into the problem that the guy would presumably have been able to use fuuinjutsu to help make traps or cursed seals or barriers or something that would have helped.

I dunno. He was said to wear the robes of a priest. Maybe somekind of religious oath of pacifism or something could be used to excuse it? Though I do feel the whole thing should be handled carefully. Having a nearby shinobi that could have been very helpfull just appear to tell Naruto about the Uzumaki right after the battle is over has the potential to feel awfully contrived.
 

friendly sam

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#10
Maybe instead of him caught ing sasuke easily, sasuke triggered a seal and old man could be disabled like missing a leg or something( also the guy said he was dying). Maybe that what of reasons you could use why he didn't help.
 

DhampyrX2

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#11
If he is a priest he might not be allowed to leave the shrine and the only way he could meet Naruto would be to bring Naruto to him. Especially since its implied he won't even let them make renovations to make it more livable as its falling down around him.
 
#12
Also, everyone's assuming he's a shinobi. He cold be a monk or priest and we've seen in the series what the Fire Temple monks are capable of. Remember, ninja do not have exclusive use of killing intent or heightened senses. Also, there could be seals involved, since the Uzumaki were reknowned sealmasters. Just saying we shouldn't jump to conclusions til Psycho-sama gives us more info
 

nixofcyzerra

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#13
Psyckosama said:
She paused and glanced at the group, now three ninja larger. “Kakashi-sensei, who are they?”

“Not quite sure yet,” Kakashi said with a smile, before glancing back. “Who are you guys again?”

Rari frowned. “We’re Zabuza’s Genin Team. Did we already tell you that?”

Kakashi nodded to Sakura, ignoring Mou completely. “There you go.”

Sakura for her part seemingly had almost the same reaction he had. She turned an interesting shade of green and grimaced.

Haku frowned. Mou grimaced and said, “However bad you think it is, it was actually about ten times worse.”

Sakura actually winced “Ugh. My sympathies.”

“Well,” Kakashi said, “Now that we’re all friends, why don’t we get everyone together and have a nice chat...” he slowly looked at Haku, “This is everyone, correct?”
This part confuses me a little. Kakashi ignores Mou completely, when he hasn't spoken up since the beginning of the scene, and Sakura turns green and grimaces apparently upon learning that Zabuza had a genin team.

I'm guessing that the "seemingly had almost the same reaction he had" part is a reference to Naruto's wincing in chapter 5b, but is there a line missing?
 
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