Mass Effect: Black Ops

Rahlian

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Mass Effect: Black Ops

Udina was playing Tali's recording to the Council as Anderson and I approached. When the recording was done, all three Councilors were looking grim. Udina was looking smug. ôYou wanted proof of Saren's treachery? There it is.ö

The Councilors were looking unsettled by what Tali's recording revealed, the turian Councilor especially so. ôIndeed it is, Ambassador. The evidence is irrefutable. Saren will be stripped of his Spectre status and all efforts will be made to bring him in to answer for his crimes.ö

ôAnd I recognize the other voice with Saren, Matriarch Benezia. A powerful and influential leader among my people. A formidable ally for Saren.ö

ôI am more interested in these Reapers. What do you know about them?ö

ôOnly what was extracted from the geth's memory core. An ancient race of machines that wiped out the Protheans. Then they vanished.ö

ôThe geth believe the Reapers to be gods,ö I continued after Anderson. ôAnd Saren is their prophet. This Conduit seems to be the key to bring them back. Saren is searching for it, and is why he attacked Eden Prime.ö

ôDo you have any idea what the Conduit is?ö

ôIts function is irrelevant. The fact that Saren wants it is enough to keep it out of his hands.ö

ôWhat nonsense,ö the turian Councilor snorted. ôJust listen to yourself. Saren Arterius, one of our most celebrated Spectres is on a quest to bring back a race of mythical machines that wiped out all life fifty thousand years ago? Impossible. Where did they go, why did they go? Why have we never found a single trace of their existence? If they were real, we would have found some evidence before now.ö

Udina was starting to look angry, and it was clear to me that Captain Anderson had been expecting this, but I was not ready to give up. ôI tried to warn you about Arterius' treachery. You ignored me and look where we are now. Don't make the same mistake twice,ö I warned them.

ôThis is a different matter, Commander. You have solid, physical proof that Arterius has betrayed us. No one disputes that he is using the geth to find the Conduit, even if we don't know why. It is clear that the Reapers are a fiction that Arterius has concocted to bend the geth to his will.ö

ôSomething happened fifty thousand years ago to wipe the Protheans out. And if Arterius finds the Conduit, it will happen again, to us,ö I protested again.

ôSaren is a rogue on the run. He no longer has the rights or resources of a Spectre. He has lost that which made him dangerous.ö Once again, as usual, the turian was the first to argue.

ôThat is not good enough,ö Udina argued. ôWe know he is hiding out somewhere in the Traverse. Send your fleets in.ö

ôA fleet cannot track down a single man,ö the salarian disagreed calmly.
Udina was getting worked up now. ôA Citadel fleet could secure the whole region, prevent any further attacks on our colonies!ö

ôOr trigger a war with the Terminus Systems. We cannot afford to be drawn into a galactic conflict over a few colonies on the edge of our authority.ö

ôEvery time humanity asks for the Council's help you turn away! You complain when we provoke conflict with other species, but we only do so because you refuse to assist us when we need it!ö It was getting hard to restrain my building anger towards the Council, and it was clear that Udina was suffering the same problem. He stepped up past me to the edge of the petitioners platform and leaned forward, thrusting a fist in their direction.

ôShepard is right,ö Udina shouted. ôIt was only on the Council's suggestion that we have colonized the Traverse in the first place. If you wish us to colonize dangerous areas, it is only right that you help when asked!ö

ôAmbassador! Please calm down. There is another solution, one that does not require the risk of open conflict.ö

ôNo! It is too soon,ö the turian Councilor immediately objected. ôHumanity is not ready for the responsibilities of Spectre membership!ö I glanced at Anderson and was surprised to see anger starting to burn through his stoic facade.

Despite the anger I could see bubbling under his expression, Anderson's voice was remarkably controlled. ôIt is a solution that solves all problems: the Ambassador gets his human Spectre and you don't have to send a fleet into the Traverse. It solves both military and political problems in one shot.ö The three councilors exchanged glances and seemed to come to a consensus.

ôCommander Shepard, you will report to Ambassador Udina's office tomorrow morning for instatement. We will have the paperwork forwarded to your office, Ambassador. This meeting of the Citadel Councils is adjourned.ö The only thing missing from the asari's imperious demeanor was a gavel to pound on her podium to emphasize the point. The turian Councilor looked to be almost physically ill, and I could not restrain a small grin, somewhat startled when Udina sported a smile as well.

OoOoO

When I arrived in the ambassador's office the next morning, the the three councilors were standing before a small wooden table, Anderson to one side and Udina to the other. On the the table was a rosette. The rosette was carved from some sort of green stone, the insignia of the Spectres in raised relief.

ôCommander Shepard, thank you for appearing this morning.ö

ôMy pleasure Councilor.ö

ôI imagine it is,ö the turian said dryly. ôNow, if everyone is here, we can begin.ö

ôWe are ready, Councilors.ö

The asari Councilor spoke first, her words clearly rehearsed, probably part of the same speech that was given to all new Spectres. ôGood. Commander Michelle Shepard, step forward please. It is the decision of this Council that you be granted all powers and privileges of the Special Tactics and Reconnaissance branch of the Citadel Armed Forces.ö

ôSpectres are not trained, they are chosen,ö the salarian continued. ôIndividuals forged in the fire of service and battle; those who actions have elevated them above the rank and file.ö

ôSpectres are an ideal, a symbol. The embodiment of courage, determination and self-reliance. The avatars of Justice, Law, and the Greater Good. They are the right hand of the Council, instruments of our will.ö

It was now the turian's turn to pick up where the asari had left off. ôSpectres bear a burden greater than anyone else. They are the ultimate protectors and enforcers of galactic peace, our first and last line of defense. The safety of the galaxy is theirs to uphold.ö

ôStep forward and take your rosette. It is your symbol of our authority, proof of your Spectre status.ö The asari paused, at the end of her speech, now speaking for herself. ôYou are the first human Spectre, Operative Shepard. This is a great accomplishment for you and your entire species.ö

ôYour first mission shall be to apprehend the former Spectre Saren Arterius. He was last reported to be somewhere in the Attican Traverse, beyond the bounds of our authority. You are authorized to use any means necessary to bring him to justice. We will forward any relevant files to Ambassador Udina's office.ö The Council adjourned then.

ôCongratulations, Commander,ö Anderson said, shaking my hand. AndersonÆs face was set in a mask of restrained pride, but I could see regret behind that as well. On the other hand, Udina was practically dancing in place. ôThis is a big step forward for you, one that I know that you will handle easily. Hell, your clearance probably outstrips either of ours now.ö

ôProbably,ö I agreed, returning his smile.

ôCome with me Anderson. Shepard is going to need a ship, crew, supplies. I will need your help to set it up.ö He clapped his hands once and began rubbing his hands together. His gaze was unfocused, doubtlessly concentrating on formulating plans on how to capitalize on my promotion and use it to improve his standing within the Alliance and humanity's within the Council.

ôThe ambassador is right. You will get access to all sorts of special equipment now. Your Spectre seal does a couple of things but the main function, other than to identify you as a Spectre, is to serve as an omni-key, enabling you to encrypt and decrypt messages at any classification under Council-level and override just about any lock. As for the rest, I am sure that someone in C-Sec requisitions could help with the rest.ö

ôYou going to be okay with him?ö I asked Anderson. ôAll that is missing to complete the 'evil genius' image is a white cat to pet.ö

Anderson chuckled. ôI will be fine. He is a politician. We have been trying to get someone into the Spectres for decades. Being the one that actually accomplished it will be a huge boost to his career.ö Nevertheless, I could see him preparing himself for the paperwork he was doubtlessly going to be subjected to as the cheer over my promotion started to fade. He had always told me that one of the best things about command was the ability to push most of his paperwork off on his XO. As his most recent direct underling, the humor had been mostly lost on me.

I watched as the Ambassador and captain departed together and I held the green stone seal up for closer examination. It was circular and slightly bigger around than my palm. It was thick, my fingertips gripping the top edge and possessing considerable mass. It wasn't heavy, maybe three or four pounds, but still more than I expected. Upon closer inspection, I realized that my initial impression that the seal was made of stone was incorrect. Pulling off a glove I felt the rosette and could not identify the material through touch. It looked like stone and felt like metal, but slicker. After a moment, the rosette began to hum slightly, the vibrations felt more than heard. A detailed green wireframe leaped up, forming an image of my head and shoulders, slowly rotating in place. An artificial voice said ôOperative Michelle Shepard, Council Spectre, Alliance service number 5923-AC-2826.ö Well, that was interesting.

The next thing I was left wondering about was what to do with it. I was in armor, and had no pockets to carry the thing in and it did not seem to have any sort of hooks or loops with which to attach it to anything. My belt did not have any loops or pouches on it in any case. I dropped my hand, looking around to try to figure out a way to jerry-rig something to carry it with when I felt it tug in my hand. Lifting it back up to examine it again, I felt it tug again as it passed over my belt. Waving the rosette over my belt a third time it jerked again. Apparently the thing was magnetic, as it stuck to my belt quite firmly. Convenient.

Problem solved, I departed the Ambassador's quarters and headed to C-Sec. It took a few minutes to reach the C-Sec requisitions office, including one seemingly endless elevator ride. One would think that with all the advanced technology, they could speed up the elevators a bit.

When I entered the requisitions office, there was a turian seated behind the desk in the requisitions office. ôName and branch of service please,ö he asked mechanically as I approached.

ôCommander Michelle Shepard, Spectre.ö

That caught his attention. ôSpectre?ö It was clear he did not believe me. ôPlace your seal in the scanner there,ö gesturing to a slight depression on my side of the desk. I detached the rosette from my belt and placed it face-down, something in the desk locking it in place. ôI am sorry, Operative Shepard. I had not heard that the Council had accepted a human member. Let me see, there. You should have access to the 'special' stocks.ö

The 'special' stocks were indeed impressive, including items that were clearly designed to be Spectre-only gear. The guy quickly explained that I would have to use personal funds to buy equipment, as Spectres don't answer to the taxpayers, Spectres don't spend tax money.

I did not have anything else to do on the Citadel, so I left the requisitions office and entered the elevator to the docks. Ambassador Udina and Captain Anderson were both waiting for me outside the Normandy when I arrived, as well as a grey-bearded man in flag officer's uniform standing a ways off. Whatever Udina had had to do to to prepare my entrance into the Spectres had not taken long.

Apparently the elation over getting me into the Spectres had not faded yet as Udina was still grinning like a loon. ôI have big news for you Shepard. Captain Anderson is stepping down as commanding officer of the Normandy. The ship is yours.ö

ôShe is fastest and stealthiest ship in the Alliance Navy and you know crew. Perfect ship for a Spectre. I know you will treat her well Commander.ö The captain's voice was carefully neutral, a small smile curving his lips.

I scowled and folded my arms over my chest. ôI don't like this, Captain. The Normandy belongs to you.ö

ôNot anymore,ö Anderson answered. ôYou need your own ship. A Spectre cannot answer to anyone but the Council. And it is time for me to step down. I don't mind as long as I know that she is in good hands.ö

ôI will do my best to take care of her.ö

ôI know.ö

ôSo what leads do we have on Saren?ö

ôSaren is gone. Don't even try to find him. But we know he is after the Conduit. Find that and you find him. He has his geth scattered across the whole of the Traverse and Terminus Systems.ö

ôWe have reports of geth in the Feros system shortly before our colony there dropped out of contact. There have also been sighting around Noveria, a planet mostly used form scientific experiments.ö

ôIf you can find out why Saren is interested in Feros and Noveria, you might be able to figure out where the Conduit is before he does.ö

ôSaren is a pawn. It's the Reapers that are the true threat, Captain.ö

ôI'm with the Council on this one Shepard. Even if what you say is true, foiling Saren will defeat whatever the Reapers have planned.ö

ôUdina is right. At this point, it does not matter whether or not Saren is working on his own or on behalf of someone else. As you said earlier, just the fact that Saren wants the Conduit is enough to want to keep it, whatever it is, out of his hands.ö

ôDon't worry, I will make sure that he doesn't get it.ö

ôOne last thing. Matriarch Benezia, the other voice on the quarian's recording? She has a daughter, a scientist specializing in the Protheans. We don't know whether she is involved or not, but she could provide valuable intelligence either way. Doctor Liara T'Soni was last reported to be exploring Prothean ruins somewhere in the Artemis Tau cluster. There are only two worlds with Prothean ruins: Therum in the Knossos system and Sharjila in the Macedon system.ö

ôSounds like the Artemis Tau cluster should be my first stop.ö

ôIt is your decision, Commander. You are a Spectre now. You don't answer to either to us anymore, or anyone else in the Alliance. Technically, you are no longer an Alliance Navy commander either.ö

ôBe that as it may, your actions still reflect on humanity as a whole. You make a mess and I get stuck cleaning it up.ö

ôI will do what it takes to take Saren down, but I will try to keep the collateral damage to a minimum.ö

ôNot exactly the answer I was hoping for, but probably the best I should expect, considering. One last thing Shepard: keep in mind that you were a human long before you were a Spectre.ö Nodding to Anderson and myself, the ambassador departed.

As Udina left, the officer I had noted from before approached. ôShepard, this is Rear Admiral Kahoku.ö I immediately saluted.

ôAt ease Commander,ö Kahoku said returning my salute. ôFirst of all, allow me to offer my congratulations on being accepted into the Spectres.ö

ôThank you, sir. It has been a long time in coming.ö

ôIndeed it has,ö he replied with a slight smile. ôBut that is not why I am here. I have been told that you are going after Saren Arterius in the Traverse. I know that you are no longer a part of the Alliance's chain-of-command, but I would like to ask a favor.ö

ôGo ahead, sir. I may answer to the Council now, but I am still an Alliance Marine first and foremost.ö

His smile widened at that. He would not have been the first to doubt my loyalty to the Alliance and it was more than clear that he had harbored suspicions of switched loyalties. Getting a human into the Spectres was all well and good up until they lost control of me. I am sure that they all worried that I would 'go native,' switch my primary loyalties from the Alliance to the Citadel. Any fear along those lines was completely unfounded, not that any assurance I could make would alleviate it. But the admiral was speaking. ôThat is good to hear. You are exactly the person we need at a time like this. A recon team has gone missing investigating reports of strange activity in the Attican Traverse. They have been dark for three days, and I cannot get clearance to investigate. The Traverse has been declared a restricted area. Of course, that doesnÆt apply to you.ö

ôAny idea what happened to them?ö

The admiral shook his head. ôNo. They were investigating reports of missing civilians in the Artemis Tau cluster, but other than that, we have no idea.ö

I looked to Anderson. ôInteresting. I happen to be heading to the Artemis Tau cluster myself, looking for someone. Not Alliance,ö I said, putting up a hand to forestall Kahoku's question. ôProbably unrelated, but given the circumstances...ö

Kahoku frowned. ôYes, I can see what you mean. It is very odd that my men and your target would end up in the same cluster. And one pretty far off the beaten path. I looked into the cluster and there are no registered colonies, by any race, Citadel or otherwise. As far as I have been able to find out, the only thing of any note about the cluster are the Prothean ruins on Sharjila and Therum.ö

I glanced at Anderson, but he seemed as puzzled as I was. I carefully smoothed my expression and turned back to Kahoku. ôDo not worry, sir, I will find out what happened to your men, one way or another.ö

ôI appreciate that, Commander. I have begun running out of options.ö

ôNo need to thank me. Alliance Marines are missing, and I am the only one who help them. Simple as that.ö

ôIf only everything was as simple. Nevertheless, thank you. I will have my team's last known coordinates uploaded to your ship. Meanwhile I will remain here and see if I can find out anything else. I will let you know if I do, but I am not holding my breath. Good luck, Commander.ö Kahoku offered his hand and I took it, receiving one last nod as he left in the elevator.

ôWell, you know what you have to do. I have been transferred to Udina's office as a Navy liaison, so you know where to find me should you need to.ö Finally he left as well and it time to board the Normandy as her commander for the first time. It felt a little surreal, hearing the VI announce ôstand by, shore party,ö as I waited to enter the ship. The crew had been briefed on the change of command before I had because a crewman shouted ôOfficer on Deck!ö as I stepped through the airlock. Virtually as one, everyone came to attention, even Joker, as best as he was able.

I paused for two or three seconds before I ordered them back to their duties. I changed out of my armor into my dress blues and headed up to Joker. ôI heard what happened to the captain. Survives a hundred battles, only to be taken down by backroom politics. Just watch your back, Commander. Things go bad on this mission, you're next on the chopping block.ö

ôI don't like it any more than you do. Captain Anderson is the one who should be in charge. Feels like I am stealing his ship.ö

ôNobody blames you, ma'am. Nothing you could have done. Everyone here is behind you. One hundred percent. The intercom is open if you want to say anything to the crew.ö

I nodded to Joker and paused to collect my thoughts. ôCrew of the Normandy, this is Commander Shepard speaking. We have our orders: find Saren before he finds the Conduit. I will not lie to you. This is going to be the most difficult mission any of us have ever had. This all began with an attack on a human settlement in the Traverse. Saren Arterius was the architect of that attack. He will not stop with a single human colony. His armies will not stay on the far fringes of Citadel space. Despite the threat he poses, the Council wants to ignore this. That is no surprise. Humanity has never received the help we needed from the Council in the past, and it is unlikely that we will in the near future. Because off that, our species has often stood apart from the others. Now it is time for us to step up and show them what it means to be a Citadel race. Now it is time for us to show them what humans are made of!

ôOur enemy knows we are coming. When we enter the Traverse, his followers will be waiting for us. But we will be ready for them as well. Saren searches for the Conduit. Wherever he goes, we will be there, waiting for him. We will hunt him down, to the very ends of the galaxy and bring him to justice. The fate of trillions of lives depend on us. The fate of the entire galaxy is at stake. We will stop Saren, no matter what. And when we do, the whole galaxy will know the value of the human race.ö I stepped back and glanced over my shoulder towards the CIC. Every crewman was on his or her feet and looking determined. I stepped back to the intercom and spoke again.

ôWe are the best the Alliance Navy has to offer. Our ship is small, but we are fast, quiet and deadly. We cannot fail. We will not fail. I know that each and every one of you will do your jobs to the best of your abilities, as will I. Shepard out.ö

ôWell said, Commander. The captain would be proud.ö

I closed my eyes and took a breath to settle my nerves. ôThe captain gave up his last command so I could get this chance. We can't afford to fail. Now let's get this bird in the air.ö

ôAye aye, ma'am.ö

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First of all, short chapter is short, but it seemed like a good place to cut it off. Anyways, I recently finished playing Mass Effect 2 and was dissatisfied with some of the choices I was forced to make, especially concerning Cerberus. So I started writing a ME2 fic, got 20k words in and realized that I needed to write a ME1 fic first so that the second would make sense.

Michelle Shepard is an Earth-born, Sole survivor Infiltrator, mostly renegade, with some background in intelligence work, hence the title. Black Ops is going to follow canon, more rather than less, but I do not want to write a rehash of the game. I hope to change enough here to provide an interesting tale.

I am hoping to get some criticism on some of the conversation here, as it feels stilted and mechanical at points. I think I may have slipped from first person somewhere, but I am not sure.

Edit: Added a bit of dialogue and some descriptions. Again, not much to really change here, but I hope that the next chapter will be more different. Will be picking Liara up next and looking into the missing marines.
 

Dementist

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Aside from the author's note at the bottom, there's nothing here to judge; just a copy/paste of the game with a few scenes slightly tweaked.

The writing itself feels mechanical and stilted over the whole thing. You're creating a story, not a script, yes? Show your characters' actions, not just their dialogue.
 
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There's too much talking, not enough thinking. Dementist is really right in that right now, this is just a rehash of the scenes in Mass Effect. Show, not tell. For example, the scene where Anderson congratulates Shepard, you could say something like 'Behind his mask of professionalism, I could make out real pride in his eyes, but surprisingly regret,' as people reading Mass Effect fanfiction have already played the game and are well aware of Anderson's backstory. The dialogue... all it is are sentences separated by only punctuation marks, no 'Andersan said,' 'The councilor sneered,' etc... and it just makes it feel very dry.
 

Rahlian

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Hm.... I was trying to avoid just that, and it seems I failed. There was not a whole lot to change in this part, mostly somewhat minor things that will have more impact later on, i.e. it being known that a human got into the Spectres, but not exactly who. Also, I did not want to be repetitive and end each line with "X said," but I apparently went too far with it.

Will go back over it and see what I can do to show more.
 

Rahlian

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Despite everything I had said to the Council, Anderson and Udina, I had my reservations about becoming the first human Spectre. The majority of my military career had been spent doing things that the Alliance needed done, but could not be seen doing, much in the way that the Spectres took care of problems that the Council could not officially take note of, but this was different. Before, I had always worked and fought beside professionals, something that could not be said here. Vakarian I trusted to know how to take orders and fight, given his heritage and training, and to a slightly lesser degree the krogan as well, but Tali'Zorah was something else entirely. According to the engineering crew, she was a brilliant engineer and mechanic, and I could tell that she had some training, but she was far from a crack shot. Her technical expertise would doubtlessly be useful, but her lack of training would make her a vulnerability.

Anderson had forwarded Vakarian's and Urdnot's dossiers via Udina's office shortly after the Normandy had departed, as well as all the information Admiral Kahoku had about his team's disappearance. Tali had never visited any human-occupied systems, nor had she ever been to the Citadel before, so she was a blank slate, as was this Doctor T'Soni we were to pick up.

Two hours after leaving dock, I called the shore team to the briefing room. I stood with the doors to my back, across from the holopodiums and waited as everyone arrived, holding a manila folder behind my back. Tali was the last, and as soon as everyone was seated, I began. ôBefore we begin the briefing, I will remind everyone here that anything said in this chamber is to treated as Eyes-Only documents would. That means that you will never discuss anything said in this room outside this room. As you should know by now, I have been recruited as the first human Spectre ever. That means that I report to, and receive my orders directly from the Council itself. Should anyone ever betray me or this unit, they are committing treason against the Council itself. Any contravention of my orders will be treated as a shooting offense. That means, should any of you ever disobey a direct order from me, I will kill you on the spot, no questions asked. Am I clear?ö Nobody said anything for a second and I shouted, ôAm I clear!ö

Alenko, Williams and Vakarian leaped to their feet as one and immediately responded, ôMa'am yes ma'am.ö I saw Tali'Zorah jump in her seat at my volume and the krogan smile slightly and give a minute nod in my direction.

ôNow, I am an Alliance Marine, after a Council Spectre, and I run a tight ship. Anyone who has a problem with anything I have said may leave now, and will be dropped off at the first spaceport, with enough money to wherever they wish to go. Get out now, or forever hold your peace.ö I waited about fifteen seconds, and when nobody rose to leave, I nodded.

ôGood. Now, you heard what I told the crew over the intercom before we left the Citadel. What I told them was the truth, but there is more than what they know. Our target is Saren Arterius,ö I said, holding up a photo of him. ôHe is a former Specter, commanding an contingent of geth of unknown strength. But he is not the true enemy. We have evidence to suspect that he is working for something else, a race of sentient machines called the Reapers, using Arterius as a probing attack before they invade.

ôNow, the Council wants Arterius taken down quick and quiet, that means that this is a white-sheet mission. You have each been assigned code names, and you will refer to myself and each other by these code names at all times while on a mission. Understood?ö Everyone nodded. ôGood. Vakarian, your callsign is Snake Eyes; Urdnot, Arbiter; Tali'Zorah, Pilgrim; Alenko, Cyborg and Williams you are Gunslinger. I am Longshot.

ôAs for the mission, we are heading to the Knossos system in the Artemis Tau cluster. We are looking for an asari archeologist named Liara T'Soni. She is investigating some Prothean ruins on the world of Therum. Her mother is Matriarch Benezia, a suspected collaborator of Arterius'. We are to retrieve her, unharmed and have her tell us what she knows about her mother's involvement with Arterius.ö

ôGet in, get the girl and get out. Sounds simple enough,ö Vakarian said. ôWhat is the catch?ö

ôNo catch. Simple retrieval.ö

ôSounds a little too good to be true. A mission just to retrieve one person, and no opposition?ö

ôWe have very few intelligence assets out this way. Until very recently, we had no interest in Doctor T'Soni.ö

ôWhat about the planet itself?ö Williams asked.

ôA human industrial world, dotted with Prothean ruins. Reports indicate that the doctor was last seen near an abandoned eezo pipeline. The nearest insertion point is ten miles from the target, so we will drop in the Mako and make our way from there. Vakarian, Williams and Urdnot will accompany me. The rest of you will remain on the ship. Fire team, suit up and meet me in the cargo hold in fifteen. Dismissed.ö I let everyone filter past me until only Williams and I remained.

ôMa'am,ö the other woman said, folding her hands behind her back.

ôWhat is it, Williams?ö

ôPermission to speak freely, Commander?ö

ôWhat is on your mind Chief?ö

ôMa'am, are you sure it is a smart decision to allow the aliens full access to the ship?ö

ôThey are not Alliance, Chief, but they are allies, at least as far as Saren is concerned.ö

ôI understand, Commander, but I think is is... unwise to let them poke around the classified systems. Engines. Sensors. Weapons. Navigation.ö

ôI understand your reticence, Chief, but I have little choice in the matter. I cannot confine them to quarters for the entirety of our mission.ö

ôWell, keep the quarian out of the engine room at least.ö

ôAccording to Engineer Adams, she practically running the engineering section.ö

ôThat just means that she is in the best position to sabotage the ship.ö

ôYou really do not trust the other species, do you?ö

ôHumanity needs to learn to rely on ourselves. If push comes to shove, the Council would sell us out if it becomes necessary.ö

ôI don't disagree with you there, Chief, but this is a multilateral mission. Saying that the fate of the entire galaxy rests on the success of our mission is not exaggerating. You will have to work with aliens, like it or not.ö

ôIt is not a problem, ma'am. Tell me to jump, I ask 'how high.' Tell me to kiss a turian, I say 'which cheek.'"

ôGood to know, Chief.ö We exchanged salutes and she left, leaving me alone in the briefing room.

The trip to the Artemis Tau Cluster took about thirty minutes, mostly waiting in line to use the mass relay, and then a little over two hours to Therum itself. The planet itself was mostly brown, with spots of green and blue oceans. I entered the hangar to find Vakarian, Urdnot and gunnery chief waiting by the Mako, locked and loaded. Williams saluted and I began speaking. ôVakarian, you are a sniper, correct?ö

ôFirst in my class,ö he confirmed.

ôGood. I want you up in the turret behind the controls to main cannon. Chief, you ever driven one of these?ö

ôSure have, ma'am.ö

ôThen you are behind the wheel. I will monitor the comms and Urdnot you will handle the sensors. Everyone clear?ö

Everyone gave an affirmative and entered the Mako. It was cramped, especially with the krogan, but the military did not design for comfort. I felt the Normandy start to shake as it entered Therum's atmosphere. I was about to order Williams to drive the Mako out into empty air as the cargo bay opened. The comm crackled, and I heard Joker's voice. ôCommander, We are picking up some strange readings here. Like really strange.ö

ôCare to qualify that, soldier?ö I snapped back.

ôUh, not really, ma'am. The sensors are going crazy. Can't make heads or tails of it.ö

ôJamming?ö I asked.

ôIf so, it has got to be the weirdest jamming I have ever seen.ö

ôAlright. Mission is still green. Let me know if anything changes.ö

ôAye aye, Commander.ö Motioning to Williams to hit the gas, the Mako roared out into empty air. Strapped in and braced, with the eezo core active, the landing was barely felt inside.

As soon as the Mako settled, Williams gunned the engine and we were bouncing along the shelf the eezo pipepline ran along. Thirty seconds later, Williams fired the landing rockets to dodge a plasma bolt from a geth armature. That began the running battle to reach the Prothean site. The opposition was fairly thin, only a handful of geth heavy weapons platforms, and a couple dozen geth infantry platforms. The armatures were easily taken out at range, with Williams juking the Mako about in such a way that the armatures had a hard time leading their shots, while making easy stationary targets for Vakarian dispatch.

It took a little over thirty minutes to reach the point where we had to disembark and continue on foot. The opposition got a little heavier here, with several geth snipers that gave good cover to the shock troops and juggernauts. I directed Wrex and Williams to focus their fire on the shock troops and juggernauts, while Vakarian and I killed the snipers. Between the four of us, the armature stationed at the dig site went down in short order, Wrex tanking a direct blast from the thing and keeping it focused on him while the rest of us chipped away at its armor. Ascending the ramp leading to the machine that had bored a tunnel down to the underground ruins, I signaled for Williams and the krogan to lead the way, while Vakarian and I covered them from a distance.

Descending two levels took another ten minutes, between sluggish elevators and more geth. The geth had not made it so far into the ruins without opposition, which seemed to led credence towards the hope that T'Soni was not working with her mother. The second elevator lowered us to the lowest level, and Doctor T'Soni.

ôDoctor T'Soni, I presume?ö

ôAh! Krogan! Get away from me! I am not going anywhere with you and your geth!ö
I looked back and Wrex shrugged. ôDon't look at me; I have no idea what she is talking about.ö

ôDon't lie, I know you are here with the krogan and the geth. There was another one of your kind leading them after me before I raised the barriers.ö

ôDoctor T'Soni, we are not here with the geth. You hear the shooting earlier? That was us killing geth on the way down here. My name is Michelle Shepard, Alliance Navy. I was sent here to retrieve you by the Council.ö

ôThe Council? What do they want with me?ö

ôHow about we concentrate on getting you out of there first?ö

ôYes, I would appreciate that. I raised the barriers against the geth that were following me, but I seem to have hit something I wasn't supposed to. The barriers came up, but they also trapped me in here. There is a control panel that should lower them in the room behind me. You will need to figure out a way to get past them, they can't be deactivated from the outside.ö

I nodded. I will see what we can do.ö

The mining laser cut through to the next floor no problem, and I had the barriers down and heading back to the surface with the doctor in tow in no time. The krogan with a team of geth was a nasty surprise though. Everyone dived for cover except Wrex, who immediately charged the larger krogan. I was plenty fine with him going after the yellow-skinned krogan, as he probably had the best chance of taking him down. I knew through experience just how damned hard they could be to kill, especially in close quarters.

The egghead asari proved to be more capable than she seemed, immobilizing one of the Destroyers and throwing another out of cover into Williams' and Vakarian's line of fire, subjecting it to a withering stream of assault rifle fire. I kept circling around, taking potshots at the krogan, relying on Vakarian and Williams to keep the geth off me. The krogan finally went down, only for its regeneration to kick in. Wrex shoved his shotgun into the downed krogan's mouth and blew its brains out.

The place started to rumble again and we all hauled ass and made it out with seconds to spare. The Normandy swooped in a minute later and I left for my quarters, telling everyone to assemble for the debriefing in forty-five minutes. I quickly stripped out of my armor and showered, then slipped into my dress blues. As Captain Anderson's XO, I had often been able to get away with wearing my Charlie Service uniform on the ship, but now that I was the commanding officer, I needed to show signs of my authority, especially with so many civilians among the crew.

I sat down behind my desk and typed a brief report to send to the Council as soon as Joker hooked us up to the comm buoy. Ten minutes after that, everyone gathered for the debriefing in the communications room.

ôThat was awfully close, Commander. Just to let you know, this ship isn't rated to go diving into lava and molten sulphur. Cold, it can deal with, heat, not so much.ö

ôYour helmsman seems to like to make bad jokes,ö said Doctor T'Soni, sitting between Vakarian and Tali'Zorah. The krogan, Lieutenant Alenko and Chief Williams sat on the other side. I stood between the two groups.

ôIgnore him. He can be an ass.ö I heard Joker huff at me over the speakers, but wisely kept his mouth shut. ôTo get to the matter at hand, I would like to discuss your status aboard this ship.ö This was less a briefing, than an interrogation of the scientist. I was of a mind to throw her in the brig and leave her there, but first I wanted to see if she could convince me that she was not aligned with Arterius and her mother.

ôI-I am not sure what you mean, Commander.ö

ôYou know Saren Arterius?ö

ôI have,ö T'Soni said slowly. ôThe Council's public face for the Spectres.ö

ôCorrect. He has betrayed the Council and allied himself with the geth and Matriarch Benezia.ö

ôBenezia... My mother?ö I didn't know whether T'Soni always spoke this slow or not, but it was slightly annoying.

ôYes, your mother. Those geth were likely sent to retrieve you to him. Do you know why?ö

ôI cannot say for certain, Commander. ôMy doctorate is in Prothean archeology, specifically the Prothean extinction. If he wants me, I would assume it has something to do with them.ö

ôAnd what of your mother?ö I asked again.

ôI have not spoken to my mother in several years. I honestly have no idea what she would be doing with a traitor.ö

I studied the doctor for a few moments and had to suppress a stab of sympathy for her. The woman looked confused, worried and more than a little scared. I could remember a time when I felt much of the same most of the time. Before Michael.

I shook my head to clear it of unwanted memories and made my decision. She simply seemed too far out of her element, too disoriented to be lying. ôForgive me if I am being rude, Commander, but could someone please tell me what is going on?ö
I nodded to Alenko and he asked the next question. ôWhat do you know of the Conduit?ö

This time she seemed well and truly surprised. ôThe Conduit? Well, not much more than anyone else knows, I suppose. I take it that it has something to do with why Saren sent geth after me?ö A pause, and then her face snapped to mine, excitement lighting up her features. ôHas it been found? Has someone found the Conduit?ö

I shook my head. ôNo, at least we hope not. Saren is searching for it, and we are trying to prevent him from finding it.ö

ôOh.ö She was clearly disappointed.

ôWe were hoping you could help us in that regard,ö Alenko said.

ôI am sorry, but I do not think that I will be much help in that regard. We have searched for the Conduit for as long as we have known about it, but no on has ever found it. We don't even know what it really is, only that it is somehow linked to the Prothean extinction.ö

ôI have my own theory about that,ö I told the scientist.

T'Soni shook her head dismissively. ôNo disrespect intended, Commander, but I doubt that you have anything new. We have been theorizing about the Prothean extinction for as long as we have known about them, but no one has ever been able to come up with proof to back up their theories.ö

ôI do. I encountered a Prothean beacon on a human colony. It warned about a race of sentient machines called the Reapers that had come to eradicate them.ö That wasn't precisely the truth, but close enough for her purposes.

ôYou found a functional Prothean beacon? That is an incredibly rare find. May I assume that you interacted with it?ö I nodded. ôThe visions you received must be confused, chaotic, unclear. The beacons were designed to work with Prothean physiology, I must say I am impressed that you were able to make sense of it. You must have a very resilient mind to be able to cope with that sort of mental trauma.ö

Williams interrupted then. ôThis is interesting, but I don't see how this helps us find Arterius or the Conduit.ö

ôAh, forgive me,ö T'Soni apologized. ôI let my scientific curiosity get the better of me.ö

ôRegardless, Arterius did want you for some reason. I think it would be a good idea to keep you close for the time being. For all we know, you may have some bit of knowledge that Arterius needs to find the Conduit that you donÆt even know you have.ö

ôYou may be right. Saren may come after me again, and I cannot think of a safer place right now other than on your ship.ö

ôPlus she is an asari. Her biotics may come in handy later,ö Urdnot growled.

T'Soni started to reply, but swooned and nearly fell. ôWhen was the last time you slept or ate,ö the lieutenant asked. ôPerhaps you should let our doctor have a look at you.ö

ôI... I am sure it is just mental fatigue. There have been a number of unexpected surprises for me today. Still, it couldn't hurt to have a doctor take a look. If there is nothing else...?ö

ôNo, nothing else. Everyone, dismissed.ö

I remained where I was as the six members of my team filed past me. ôI just finished logging your report. There is a comm buoy nearby; should I patch us in to the Council?ö

ôDo it,ö I ordered. I strode to the middle of the room and slipped into parade rest, hands folded behind me and feet spread shoulder length apart.

The three alien Councilors shimmered into view in the holopodiums in front of me. ôWe just received your report, Operative Shepard. We see that Doctor T'Soni was retrieved unharmed.ö The asari Councilor paused, waiting for me to respond.

ôShe was, Councilor.ö

ôAnd has she been able to provide any insight into Arterius' or her mother's actions?ö

ôNo she hasn't. According to her, she and Matriarch Benezia have not spoken in several years. I am inclined to believe her.ö

ôWe assume you are taking the proper security precautions nevertheless?ö

ôCouncilor...ö I said, looking to the turian.

ôValern,ö

ôCouncilor Valern, how about you do not tell me how to run my ship, and I won't tell you how to run the galaxy?ö Valern didn't like that.

ôCouncilor Valern wasn't trying to do that,ö the asari assured me. ôWe were just concerned about the potential security risk the doctor presented.ö

ôNevertheless, congratulations on successfully retrieving the doctor.ö

ôApart from the destruction of a major Prothean ruin, you seem to have performed adequately enough.ö

ôHad I been able to preserve them, I would have. However I was more concerned about the platoon of geth swarming the area, and the krogan leading them.ö

ôYou are correct, Operative. The completion of the mission had to take priority over all else. We acknowledge that.ö

ôIf there is nothing else?ö the asari asked.

ôUnless you have come across new intel about Arterius, no.ö

ôOur role is to advise and guide, Operative. You have access to every bit of data concerning Saren. If we come across new information, you will be the first to know," Valern snapped again. Without a further word, the three Councilors signed off. I shook my head and turned to leave.

The doors swished open at my approach and Navigator Pressly faced me. He looked... displeased. Crap. I had forgotten about him.

ôCommander Shepard,ö she greeted neutrally.

ôNavigator Pressly,ö I returned in kind.

ôIf you have a moment, may I speak to you in private?ö He gestured to the one of the doors leading to the crew deck and I led the way to my quarters. Pressly followed me in and I turned to face him as the door closed behind us.

ôMay I assume that you wish to discuss your concerns regarding having a Marine commanding a Navy ship?ö

ôYou may,ö Pressly said. ôFrankly, ma'am, you have neither the knowledge nor the experience necessary to competently command this vessel.ö

I narrowed my eyes. ôWatch yourself, Pressly. You are in the presence of your commanding officer.ö

ôI did not say that to offend you, Commander. I am merely stating a fact. You have no background in naval tactics or strategy, nor in any aspect of the functioning of a Navy warship. When Captain Anderson chose you as his executive officer, I accepted his decision because it was his decision. However, you were given command of this vessel as a direct result of your admission into the Spectres.ö

While the Human Systems Alliance military was in large part based off the former United States of America's command structure, one large difference was the near dissolution of the Marine Corps and folding of what remained of the branch into the Navy as any land-based military unit is pointless with out the navy to fight for orbital control and transportation. As the Navy had virtually swallowed the Marines, so had the Army with the Air Force.

However, there was still minor differences between the Marines and the Navy, ones mostly of pride and tradition. For example, enlisted Marines were privates and corporals while enlisted sailors were servicemen. Another thing was that Marines never commanded ships. Marines could become executive officers, but never skippers. Swabbies flew ships and leatherneck drove invasions. In hindsight, I should have seen this coming a mile away. As dangerously close to insubordination as he was, his words had a ring of truth. While I had attended Officer Candidate School of course, I was a Marine, and none of my instruction had been in the areas that Pressly had pointed out. I was more suite to leading ground assaults than commanding a flotilla.

Folding my arms over my chest, I leaned back and examined him. Pressly was not the type of officer to make a play for power, especially given our mission. ôI will not hand over command to you,ö I responded eventually. ôI cannot afford to.ö

ôDo you think you could prevent me if I wanted to take command? Commander, I have thirty officers and seamen aboard this vessel. How many Marines do you have? Eight, including yourself? What is that, two fireteams?ö The question was clearly rhetorical, yet he paused to let me absorb what he said. As much as I hated to say it, he did have a point. If it came down to a fight, it was unlikely that I would be able to win. But I didn't think that he would come and confront me if that was what he planned. ôBut I did not come here to demand that you hand over command. I am willing to let you stay as you are, provided we can come to an agreement.ö

I pushed myself off the edge of the desk and glared at Pressly. ôYou think you can issue orders to your commanding officer?ö

ôNo, I am not trying to issue orders, ma'am,ö he replied in an even tone. ôAll I ask for is that you allow me to run this ship Navy and give me the bridge if we enter combat, and do not interfere with the day to day operation of this ship.ö

ôYou are asking me to adopt a non-interference policy with the crew of this ship,ö I stated flatly.

ôI am asking you to allow the men and women who are trained to run this ship to do their jobs as they are meant to do them. How would you feel if I came aboard and took over your ground operations. Allow my men to do their jobs without interference, that is all I am asking.ö

I paused, letting the silence stretch between us as I evaluated my choices. I could say no, and then have to worry about Pressly attempting a mutiny later, or I could agree for the time being, and reassert my control later. Despite what he said about me and my Marines being outnumbered, he would not bring it to a fight were I to press the issue. Finally, I just nodded. Pressly nodded back, a near bow, and left without saying anything else.

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Ugh. Meant to get this out ages ago, but I got swamped by school. Edited the first part, in the likely chance that nobody noticed.

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Lord Raine

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You're still copy-pasting. That combined with the premise, and I see nothing of real worth here. First person? I've read maybe one bit of literature in my life that was written in that style and wasn't a pile of steaming rot, and it was a professional bit of work.

FP is a completely different style with different advantages and weaknesses than other types of writing. Instead of playing to those strengths, you're trying to write it like it's not first person. As it stands now, this is barely better than those fics that are actually written in script format, where there's stuff like "Tali: It's very quiet on this ship, and I'm having trouble sleeping."
 
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