Alright, I've been working on an original fiction world, fantasy of course cause I love my high fantasy settings. And as such I figured I'd need someone to criticize my work.
And where better to go for criticism than here? Warning, this might be quite long.
First set.
Geography
This world is an earth like setting, as in there is only one sun, and one moon orbiting the world. Most of the land is connected, with two large islands and a mass of smaller islands not far from the coast of the mainland.
The Sentient inhabitants of this world are Humans, elves, dwarves, dragonkin, dragons (very few left), orcs, goblins, ratmen, troglodytes, and nymphs. (More of them and their history later.
As far as geography goes the known landmass leans more to the fertile portion with plains for farming and cattle being plentiful, there are rivers and lakes dotted across the continent with slightly fewer rivers and lakes in the south near the mountains.
Speaking of which, the mountains border the southern edge of the landmass and stretch for about 50 miles eastward with impassible canyons alongside them that form the barrier between the territory of the dwarves and the troglodytes who live in the desert.
The islands are different however and have little land suitable for farming crops, and even with the little land they have, the low amount of fresh water makes farming of most crops impractical. As such they rely heavily on their native fruits and fishing for meals and trade for the rest with their continental neighbors.
Natural resources are scattered, with fur traders hanging around the forested areas and the mountains being home to much of the stone and rare metals which the dwarves mine for their cities and trade with the rest of the world. The troglodytes hold possession of most of the gold, and diamons which they trade with the dwarves, who then trade to the rest of the lands.
The coastal cities export lumber to many of the island nations in exchange for pearls and fish.
World History
The oldest records of the world go back 10,000 years with evidence that there was civilization before hand but no indication of what that civilization was. Right now religious scholars under the banner of Taeyloc, God of Poetry and Knowledge are searching for clues but have had little luck.
Human civilization goes back 3,500 years when the warring Pausim tribes began to merge to form the 13 human kingdoms, twelve of which still exist to this day.
The first is Mesta in the north. They've been under the rule of King Milav for twenty-five years. Besides that Mesta is organized into dozens of family clans, big and small with various clans over the years having held the position of ruling clan. Many changed through vote, others through violence. King Milav is currently of clan Galuca, which traces it's lineage back to King Romir, 1800 years ago.
Mesta's settlement distribution is rather different from that of the other kingdoms, they have many large towns with even more numerous villages dotted not far from the town, almost like an extension of the town. Each 'Settlement group' is associated with a family clan with closely allied clans closer together and vassal clans under their ruling clans. The capital of Mesta changes with each King as the ruling power moves to a different clan The current capital is at Bellacholm with a population of 8600 including the surrounding villages, with roughly 4100 of them in the main town area.
Mesta's military is again divided between the family clans who are all obligated to raise a force of men to provide for the general army. The main army used to attack enemy states is usually composed of 6-7000 men in total with roughly three lines of heavy infantry typically numbering between 3,600-4800 men, a few hundred light infantry, and a few hundred cavalry. On the defensive for the garrisons of the towns the defenses are divided into five sections, three sections of spearmen and two sections of light infantry. Mesta has the fewest number of mages in their army, preferring to use their armies strength and coordination to defeat their foes.
There done with the first set, its late here so I'm gonna be heading off. In any case I'll give points to anyone who can tell what real world cultures I took inspiration for Mesta from.
And where better to go for criticism than here? Warning, this might be quite long.
First set.
Geography
This world is an earth like setting, as in there is only one sun, and one moon orbiting the world. Most of the land is connected, with two large islands and a mass of smaller islands not far from the coast of the mainland.
The Sentient inhabitants of this world are Humans, elves, dwarves, dragonkin, dragons (very few left), orcs, goblins, ratmen, troglodytes, and nymphs. (More of them and their history later.
As far as geography goes the known landmass leans more to the fertile portion with plains for farming and cattle being plentiful, there are rivers and lakes dotted across the continent with slightly fewer rivers and lakes in the south near the mountains.
Speaking of which, the mountains border the southern edge of the landmass and stretch for about 50 miles eastward with impassible canyons alongside them that form the barrier between the territory of the dwarves and the troglodytes who live in the desert.
The islands are different however and have little land suitable for farming crops, and even with the little land they have, the low amount of fresh water makes farming of most crops impractical. As such they rely heavily on their native fruits and fishing for meals and trade for the rest with their continental neighbors.
Natural resources are scattered, with fur traders hanging around the forested areas and the mountains being home to much of the stone and rare metals which the dwarves mine for their cities and trade with the rest of the world. The troglodytes hold possession of most of the gold, and diamons which they trade with the dwarves, who then trade to the rest of the lands.
The coastal cities export lumber to many of the island nations in exchange for pearls and fish.
World History
The oldest records of the world go back 10,000 years with evidence that there was civilization before hand but no indication of what that civilization was. Right now religious scholars under the banner of Taeyloc, God of Poetry and Knowledge are searching for clues but have had little luck.
Human civilization goes back 3,500 years when the warring Pausim tribes began to merge to form the 13 human kingdoms, twelve of which still exist to this day.
The first is Mesta in the north. They've been under the rule of King Milav for twenty-five years. Besides that Mesta is organized into dozens of family clans, big and small with various clans over the years having held the position of ruling clan. Many changed through vote, others through violence. King Milav is currently of clan Galuca, which traces it's lineage back to King Romir, 1800 years ago.
Mesta's settlement distribution is rather different from that of the other kingdoms, they have many large towns with even more numerous villages dotted not far from the town, almost like an extension of the town. Each 'Settlement group' is associated with a family clan with closely allied clans closer together and vassal clans under their ruling clans. The capital of Mesta changes with each King as the ruling power moves to a different clan The current capital is at Bellacholm with a population of 8600 including the surrounding villages, with roughly 4100 of them in the main town area.
Mesta's military is again divided between the family clans who are all obligated to raise a force of men to provide for the general army. The main army used to attack enemy states is usually composed of 6-7000 men in total with roughly three lines of heavy infantry typically numbering between 3,600-4800 men, a few hundred light infantry, and a few hundred cavalry. On the defensive for the garrisons of the towns the defenses are divided into five sections, three sections of spearmen and two sections of light infantry. Mesta has the fewest number of mages in their army, preferring to use their armies strength and coordination to defeat their foes.
There done with the first set, its late here so I'm gonna be heading off. In any case I'll give points to anyone who can tell what real world cultures I took inspiration for Mesta from.