Nasuverse Ride a Comet

#1
Just a little something.

Ride a Comet

ôYou really aren't what I expected,ö comments the black and purple phantom.

Facing her, at the gate of a Japanese-style temple is a short man in a jumpsuit, carrying a helmet under his arm. His hair is cropped short; he seems out of place in such a traditional setting.

ôI am Servant Rider,ö he says.

ôAs am I,ö replies the woman.

He chuckles.

ôThere can only be one, I suppose. Fake Rider is probably a better description for me.ö

Rider nods and brings out her chains.

ôI am sorry, but I cannot offer you a good fight. However, I have something much more attractive to one such as you.ö

The purple devil smirks, ôAnd what might that be?ö

ôA race. Here to Hokkaido and back.ö

ôThat's a long distance.ö

ôI didn't want some sort of ten-second race. If another Servant comes along, I'm pretty much dead meat. I'd like to do something fulfilling. You understand the need for speed, don't you?ö

Rider nods, as she can feel the excitement of having the wind flow over her skin and whip through her hair.

ôI agree. Are there any provisions for fighting during this race?ö

ôBe my guest. I love a good dogfight.ö

Rider stabs her own neck, and the blood forms into a pegasus of pure white. Fake Rider puts on his helmet and an aircraft comes through a red portal. It is a massive white plane with two engines large enough to hide a body. It's fin flashes were red stars.

ôAn interesting choice. What are you, Fake Rider?ö

ôI embody the MiG, a series of Russian fighter planes whose initials have been burned into the minds of all Western pilots. I'll go at you in my fastest incarnation, the MiG-25. You must be Medusa, Rider.ö

She nods as he climbs into the cockpit.

He holds up three fingers.

Three...

Two...

One...

GO!

And they shoot off, a pair of shooting stars. Sound is like a snail to them.

ôYou're a fast one,ö murmurs Fake Rider.

The real one hears his words crackle as if from a radio.

ôCan you go faster?ö asks Rider, leaning closer to the shining mount.

Massive shock cones erupt as the afterburners roar. This is his answer.

Rider smirks and urges her mount.

The Foxbat goes near vertical, climbing rapidly. This is the MiG-25's natural domain, flying at the edge of space. The stars are even more beautiful than before. Below is the shining star of Rider and her pegasus.

The airplane shifts in mid-flight to becomes the very similar MiG-31 Firefox.

The beautiful form of the pegasus is a mere blip on the radar.

Click.

A weight drops from the aircraft.

Whoosh!

A normal missile would not be able to harm servants, but this is no normal missile. It is a missile born of Cold War paranoia and rumors of Soviet superscience.

It streaks like a meteor.

Reins of the Heroic Cavalry bring the otherwise kind beast into a warlike mood.

The horse and Rider ram through the missile, their power overpowering it.

Beep.

Click.

Whoosh!

Another missile. Another dodge. She is coming in to ram him

With a maneuver that should rip any plane apart, he turns it around. A motor accelerates a barrel. The speed of the weapon needs no modification, but its projectiles are now able to deal harm to a Servant.

As the weapon spins up, Rider comes into his sights, intent on ramming him. Her form is so beautiful, as is the form of her mount. He opens fire.

At its maximum rate, a single shot is fired in less than 1/144 of a second. He has only a second. 166 rounds beautiful in their rotating forms spew. Glittering brass drops into the air, the cases disappearing as they return into the magic from whence they come

The rounds wound the flank of the beast. One even whips through Rider's hair. Rider's chain strikes, tearing into a wing. The plane dives with the real Rider hot on its tail.

He can't even see her from the cockpit, but he wishes so much that he could.

The white streak is catching up. The afterburners are pushed further. By now, they are over five times the speed of sound, nearing ten times.

He sees it on his radar. Fighters are scrambled to intercept both himself and Rider. These Firefoxes and Fulcrums and F-15Js are incapable of anything more than eating their exhaust. But they will have borne witness to something special that they will never see again.

Now, they have pushed past Mach 10. The plane glows red with the friction of the air. There lies Hokkaido. Time to turn back. The form of the plane shifts once more, to that of the agile MiG-17. He turns around, even faster than when in the Foxbat. But Rider has turned on a dime and is already well ahead of him. Fresco turns to Foxbat.

The Kings of Speed race to win. The afterburners roar once more. The distant points of light that are fighters chase after them, but there is nothing they can do.

Rider ducks her mount into a storm cloud. In spite of the danger, her fake counterpart follows. Lightning crackles around them. Even a single lapse in concentration will lead to a lightning strike hitting his plane. And that will end the race right there.

Foxbat becomes Fresco, as he bobs and weaves through the lightning. The crackling power is, at some points, mere centimeters from the canopy. He pushes through the clouds and Fresco returns to Foxbat. Rider is far ahead of him. He hits the afterburner. He won't let himself lose to some horseman.

The speedometer breaks and simply spins round and round as he grows faster. They are very close to Fuyuki, neck in neck. As the nose returns to Fuyuki, it disintegrates. The plane deconstructs itself, falling to pieces, which return to the mana from whence they came. Rider passes her fake counterpart, disappearing into the prana which formed him and smiling as if to say ôEven in death, I still win.ö

She returns with a slight grin of her own. He gave his all for that one race, to soar above the clouds. And so, desiring nothing more than speed itself, he won. She, on the other hand, was burdened by her feelings for her Master. Even a fake one such as him deserves some joy, and she was happy to grant such a small pleasure. And so, Rider rode back to the Matou family mansion.
 

nick012000

Well-Known Member
#2
Actually, the main threat of a thunderstorm to an airplane is not the lightning; that'll just short out a few of the electronics for a little bit, and mundane lightning shouldn't be able to hurt a Servant anyway. The real threat of a thunderstorm is wind shear. You can go from being in a patch of air going up 5000 feet per minute to one going down by about that much in the blink of an eye, and the difference in forces can shear your wings right off.
 

Cynical Kyle

Well-Known Member
#3
When I read the title I was expecting Char to be summoned. Sadly that was not the case. :blue:
 

zeebee1

Well-Known Member
#4
I was expecting a Kamen Rider. But you can't expect much considering the author's hard on for useless military trivia.
 
#5
zeebee, there's a world of difference between "I don't like it because of writing elements x,y,z" and being a confrontational asshole. One is legit criticism, the other is douchebaggery.

The more you know...
 

zeebee1

Well-Known Member
#6
The writing elements I don't like consist of your obsession with military weapons. He doesn't even fit with the rules of a fake Servant. A fake Servant is the manifestation of a legend that some people believe existed. A random pilot of a military jet does not count.
 

Elf

Well-Known Member
#7
zeebee1 said:
The writing elements I don't like consist of your obsession with military weapons. He doesn't even fit with the rules of a fake Servant. A fake Servant is the manifestation of a legend that some people believe existed. A random pilot of a military jet does not count.
Ah, but the thing of it is, the Fake Rider doesn't represent a pilot per say, he represents all the fighter jets that have been currently made. Remember in the Nasuverse that after a while people stop becoming heroic spirits because it's the weapons/technology that allows them to do the great deeds and the weapons/tech gets to go the the Throne of Heroes. So it's a little bit of a stretch, but it's plausible.

Then again my husband is a military buff/weapons nerd so I hear this on a constant basis anyway.

So, the writing was pretty solid and I was entertained for the short story. I think you did a good job man.
 

XLII Lone Wolf

Well-Known Member
#9
And you justify someones validity on their taste in characters. Your opinion is invalid.
 

trevelyan1983

Well-Known Member
#10
Bitches don't know how to think in Russian. Clint is crying in his shower now, tovarisch.

I could bitch about the fake servant, modern military weaponry, blah blah blah.

But there's no point - you've been around long enough to know that shit already, so it's clearly not relevant to the kind of story you want to tell. And that's OK.

When I read the title I was expecting Char to be summoned. Sadly that was not the case. piange.gif
Seconded. The Firefox reference was almost enough to make up for it, but not quite.
 
#12
My apologies about the lateness of this post. I decided to step out for a bit and not start a flame war. Anyway, thanks for the comments and here are some responses.

@nick012000
I was going for drama and coolness over realism.

@trevelyan1983
Yeah. I know that. I was going for the semi-plausible "He's not a fighter pilot, he's the embodiment of Cold War paranoia about the MiGs."

Amusingly enough, the Firefox is the real life reporting name of the MiG-31. I wasn't thinking about the movie. :D
 
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