About three years ago I began work on a fanfiction with a mostly-original Star Trek ship and crew, the USS Sojourner (NCC-74654), an Intrepid-class starship. I named it (probably foolishly) Star Trek: Babylon, because "Babylon" meant "gateway of the gods" and the story involved a gateway to another universe.
Anyway, looking back at it I'm considering revamping the story, making it more original and clearing up a lot of the bad writing. Also, I'm thinking of writing a prequel to show the Sojourner and her crew as they fought the Dominion War with some... Shall we say less than conventional tactics. ^_^
So, if you have comments on the story, or suggestions for the revamp and prequel, feel free to leave them here. Here's a link to the story:
Star Trek: Babylon
Major selling points:
-Captain is creative, ruthless but stays within Starfleet bounds. He's also very personable and his own rather checkered past makes him less uptight than other captains. Originally named Adam Lee, but I've decided that due to the fact he was born and grew up on Mars, I've decided to name him Carter Jones, in reference to John Carter from Edgar Rice Burrough's Martian Chronicles, and J'onn J'onzz, the Martian Manhunter from DC Comics.
In any event, Jones takes a more Jack O'Neill approach to command, and is one of those relatively few Starfleet officers who supports a strong military ethic. To explain his animosity towards Seven of Nine, the revamp will make him a survivor of Wolf 359. During said battle, he lost his arm and now uses a prosthetic. While he has moved mostly past that incident, having a genuinely friendly nature and twisted sense of humor most of the time, it made him harden inside in regards to combat, and especially the Borg.
-Operations officer, Mitena Haro, is cute, fun-loving, and very genki, as well as a computer expert. She also sneezes a lot, and due to her Bolian physiology her body fluids are highly acidic. Which, as you can imagine, makes it a bit difficult for her to get a date, but she keeps her good cheer and has a twisted sense of humor.
Probably why she gets along so well with the captain.
-Kes is brought back due to Q's interference and becomes the ships' CMO following the loss of a great deal of the command staff due to the fact they were attacked during an officer's conference. Which makes more sense than most of the officers dying randomly.
-Overall, this crew is composed of people who are very talented and devious, but don't quite fit the mold of the standard Starfleet officer. Delinquents, weirdos, outcasts-Captain Jones takes them all in and gives them the chance to do their jobs. And more often than not, they flourish.
So, thoughts? Comments? Criticism? Feel free to express it.
Anyway, looking back at it I'm considering revamping the story, making it more original and clearing up a lot of the bad writing. Also, I'm thinking of writing a prequel to show the Sojourner and her crew as they fought the Dominion War with some... Shall we say less than conventional tactics. ^_^
So, if you have comments on the story, or suggestions for the revamp and prequel, feel free to leave them here. Here's a link to the story:
Star Trek: Babylon
Major selling points:
-Captain is creative, ruthless but stays within Starfleet bounds. He's also very personable and his own rather checkered past makes him less uptight than other captains. Originally named Adam Lee, but I've decided that due to the fact he was born and grew up on Mars, I've decided to name him Carter Jones, in reference to John Carter from Edgar Rice Burrough's Martian Chronicles, and J'onn J'onzz, the Martian Manhunter from DC Comics.
In any event, Jones takes a more Jack O'Neill approach to command, and is one of those relatively few Starfleet officers who supports a strong military ethic. To explain his animosity towards Seven of Nine, the revamp will make him a survivor of Wolf 359. During said battle, he lost his arm and now uses a prosthetic. While he has moved mostly past that incident, having a genuinely friendly nature and twisted sense of humor most of the time, it made him harden inside in regards to combat, and especially the Borg.
-Operations officer, Mitena Haro, is cute, fun-loving, and very genki, as well as a computer expert. She also sneezes a lot, and due to her Bolian physiology her body fluids are highly acidic. Which, as you can imagine, makes it a bit difficult for her to get a date, but she keeps her good cheer and has a twisted sense of humor.
Probably why she gets along so well with the captain.
-Kes is brought back due to Q's interference and becomes the ships' CMO following the loss of a great deal of the command staff due to the fact they were attacked during an officer's conference. Which makes more sense than most of the officers dying randomly.
-Overall, this crew is composed of people who are very talented and devious, but don't quite fit the mold of the standard Starfleet officer. Delinquents, weirdos, outcasts-Captain Jones takes them all in and gives them the chance to do their jobs. And more often than not, they flourish.
So, thoughts? Comments? Criticism? Feel free to express it.