The Legend of Zelda: TM

Thorn

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#1
Link sat down on one of the ancient stones in the Sacred Grove. He turned the Ocarina of Time over in his hand, examining it. He rubbed his thumb over the Tri-Force by the mouth piece and looked at the near unchanged historic Hyrule Royal Crest. He could almost feel the history of Hyrule flowing through the instrument, his history. He closed his eyes out of instinct and brought the powerful relic to his lips. He was barely surprised when he vision washed over with white.

FLASH

Link stood before the Terminan god of Destruction and Death, Majora. He was only a boy, but his hand drifted to a mask tied to his hip. This one mask itself held power comparable to the Tri-Force. The power of Oni, the Fierce Deity of Battle. The strength of Termina's two dead Gods lived on through these masks. Though normally Majora and Oni were of equal power, Link knew he had a massive advantage with the power of Farore's Courage.

Link triumphed easily. After all, what was a Skull Child playing God compared to the Hero of Time wielding the strength of Oni and Farore?

After the battle, Link continued his search of Navi in Termina's vast lands. During his three year journey Link and Zelda talked frequently through a link they discovered in their Tri-Force. Through these talks, the two grew close.

When he had determined that Navi could not be in Termina, he decided to return to Hyrule, to Zelda.

However, as he walked through the woods he was greeted to a wall of utter blackness, a Tri-Force emblem sealed in the middle. As he tried to pass, he was thrown back to the ground.

Link stared at the blockade in confusion. Why were the Goddesses not allowing him back to his home land?

The young teen lifted his left hand, activating his Tri-Force. The two symbols of Hyrule responded to each other, glowing brightly.

A low foreboding hum filled the air.

Link felt the block give a bit, accepting the power of Courage. Smiling, he pushed further, making more headway.

And then, suddenly, the block seemed to clamp down. To Link, it felt as if part of his very soul had been sealed away. He cringed, trying to pull back his power. Then massive pain hit him as the Tri-Force of Courage was torn from his left hand in a small shower of flesh, bone, and blood. The embodiment of Courage slowly floated into the seal, where it was absorbed.

Link bit back his tears, feeling utterly betrayed. A slow rage filled him, even as he drew his Ocarina.

He played the song of healing, and his hand mended. However, the damage to his soul had already been done.

Link went back to his apartment after that, getting out a piece of parchment.

'Beloved Princess,

The Goddesses have blocked my entry to our land. With this act they have stolen my love, home, friends, and now my Tri-Force. Thus with this act they steal one more thing. My allegiance to the holy trinity. I am issuing a declaration of war against Farore, Nayru, and Din. Insane as it may sound, I hold an artifact which I believe comparable to even their power. The Goddesses have judged me harshly for crimes only of love and loyalty. I will be home soon Princess. I do not ask you align yourself with me, only that you don't get in my way. Enclosed is your Ocarina, of which I thank you for sincerely.

With Love and Loyalty for my Princess,

Link'

Link put the letter in an envelope and packaged the Ocarina carefully. As he went outside he waited for the 30 seconds he knew it would take the Mail Man to round the corner. After nearly 4 years in Termina, he knew the mans schedule like clockwork.

"Mail Man!" He called out.

"Hey Link! Got another letter to send?" The kindly man asked.

Link only nodded, paying the man and giving him his parcel. He went back inside his apartment and strapped the gilded sword to his back as well as the mirror shield...and the Fierce Deity Mask on his hip.

He stood once more in front of the hated blockade.

"Goddesses! I grant you a final chance to allow me entry to Hyrule!"

The Tri-Force shown, as if giving a last "NO!"

Link shook his head.

"So be it."

He gave a grim smile as he placed the mask on his face, feeling meld to his visage and take root in his soul, as if it knew that he would never again take it off.

Power erupted in the vengeful hero as the Masks changes took hold of him. His feelings of rage and betrayal amplified. He stood 10 feet tall, his green heroes tunic turned white, Oni's sturdy breastplate materialized around him. The Fierce Deities tattoo's marked his face.

No, not the Fierce Dieities tattoos.

His tattoos. His breastplate, tunic, gauntlents, boots.

And finally, as the gilded sword grew in length, two intertwining blades meeting in a point. His massive sword.

There wasn't a difference between the God and the Hero any more. There was just Oni Link.

He approached the block, it snapped golden energy at him. A low chuckle filled the forest and Oni Link grinned viciously.

"Whats wrong Goddesses? Nervous?" The grin disappeared.

"You should be."

He took his sword in both hands, jumping thirty feet in the air bringing the sacred blade above his head preparing for a massive strike. Energy gathered around the hero turned God as he hovered in place. As he felt enough power to strike the barrier down he let out a roar that shook Termina to it's core and let himself fall, baring down on the Goddesses barrier.

A thunderous boom resounded across the country as the golden power dissipated.

Oni Link laughed victoriously as he walked into the far border of the Hyrule Kingdom.

Hundreds of miles away Zelda whipped her head toward the Gerudo Fortress. She felt power radiating from beyond it, and she knew.

Link was back. But what would he do against the power of Hyrules three Goddesses?

FLASH

Link sat up with a start.

"Link, are you ok? Did you have more memories?" Midna asked, hovering just inches from his face, her impish face screwed up in worry.

"I need time to think Midna..." And he did. The Goddesses had betrayed him, but why?

Link lifted up his left hand and examined it, the Tri-Force glowed back at him and he sighed in relief.

Wait a second. His hand. He had healed it with that song, with the Ocarina of Time.

"Midna..." He started slowly. "That form of yours, it was inflicted by Zant right? A magical curse?"

She nodded. "Why?"

"Just hold still ok?" He told her.

He brought the ancient relic to his lips. What followed was a solemn and soothing melody. Midna felt warmth spread through her body as she listened and the soft magical touch of the song enveloped her. Her helmet gently detached from her face and she sighed in pleasure as the healing magic took a hold of her.

Link gasped as Midna returned to her original form. She was tall, slender, and beautiful

"Midna, you, you're-"

"Beautiful? Gorgeous? Whats wrong Link, am I so stunning that I've left you speechless?" The Twilight Princess teased as she slid a finger around his face. Link was much cuter, she decided, with a blush on his face.

Link shook his head to try and clear his head.

"Midna...I think there are more artifacts I need to uncover. I think that's why I'm having these memories."

"And you think these relics will help you banish Ganondorf?"

Link grinned.

"They always worked before."

...And he might not be the one I need them for.

"I'm going to hunt some food for us. You coming?" He asked.

She nodded and slid into his shadow out of habit.

As Link hunted, all he could think of was the betrayal of his past life.
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End chapter 2.

I'm finding myself deviating a lot from my prewritten chapters. I debated not even transforming Midna back to her true form for several chapters. I may even take it back, if you guys respond negatively to it.

Please give constructive criticism, tips, whatever.
 

Ina_meishou

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#2
It's interesting, but it reads awkwardly, especialy young link vs. the goddesses.

Midna returning to her tru from is meh, but I'm biased since I actualy prefer "Midna the imp" to "Midna the Beautiful princess"
 

Thorn

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#3
Ina_meishou said:
It's interesting, but it reads awkwardly, especialy young link vs. the goddesses.

Midna returning to her tru from is meh, but I'm biased since I actualy prefer "Midna the imp" to "Midna the Beautiful princess"
Awkward like how? Like as in bad writing or what? If it is because of his age, think of it as more along the lines of God-Link vs. Goddesses.

And if nothing else I can change the amount of time Link spend in Termina to adjust his age.
 

Ina_meishou

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#4
Less the age, and more that the whole scene goes too fast.

It sounds like bad fanwanking.

I would suggest spreading the recolections out a good bit, have him remember snatches here and there, peicing the whole picture of what the mask does together over a period of days.

Alternativly, you could have the whole thing be a lnger dream, and go into more depth, get into Past Link's head a little more. Give us more meat, give us what Link's days in Termia might be.

Instead of "He spent four years in termia, then tried to go home and failed"

try "Link left the rooms he'd taken in the inn, he had much to do..." then show him going about his day preparing for a return journey, let his actions to his friends and the reactions of the townsfolk show how he developed in termia.

Instead of telling us about the Deus-ex-Triforce-conection, show Link looking over a letter from Zelda, and deciding to go home.

That kind of thing.

The concepts are interesting, but it goes far too fast, covering days in the blink of an eye.

Zelda is Epic, but a large part of why it's epic is that it tends to include the day to day stuff, shoping, herding, etc.

All that gives depth to the characters, so they don't appear to be "I am awesome man, fear me!" and are more, "I do what i have to, heroic or not."

And of course, needs more Horse.

Seriously, Link without a Horse is just...sinful. :p
 

Thorn

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#5
I figured as much. I wasn't particularly comfortable with this chapter. I just needed some advice on what to do with it.

I'll do a rewrite and post it up later.

TY Ina.
 
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