Naruto A Bad Boy and His Punishment [Snippet]

biigoh

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#1
Disclaimer : I mean no harm or intention of copy-right infringment of the Manga and Anime 'Sasuke' by Kishimoto or the Anime 'Sasuke : Sharingen'. Any similarities to any real life activities is just your perverted delusions.

I don't think the fic is adult, but I could be wrong. If it's NSFW, could a mod move it to the right place? ^_^;

Also, this is the raw version and is unedited. Any errors located would be appreciated.

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Uchiha Sasuke was fairly certain that there was something wrong with the picture as he cried out once more, while Sakura gazed at him with a fascinated look on her face.

Something didn't quite add up along the span of the day that resulted in him lying over the lap of Sakura's mother with his pants around his ankles, while she blistered his rear with firm and unrelenting strikes from her palm.

His mind skittered away from how 'little Sasuke' had grown harder and rubbed against the older Haruno's leg with each spank. Much safer to try and work out just what had happened.

He had gotten an offer from Orochimaru's messengers, the Sound Four. He was to meet up with them outside of Konoha. That was simple and clear enough. Even if he had spend a good portion of the day angsting about the direction he would take.

Getting dressed for travel, as well as packing equipment as if he were about to go on a mission related journey. Understandable.

Encountering Sakura on the way out of Konoha. Not so expected, but still within expectations. Her pleas for him not to leave, was definitely expected, as was her pouring her heart out to him. Along with offering to join him and follow along.

His negative responses to her pleas were almost mandatory.

Her shout of his name and for him to 'sit' was... odd. And that was where things had gone strange.

He had intented to move behind her and knock her out. What had happened instead was that Sakura walked up to him, when he just sat down. Grabbing him by his ear, she pulled him back into Konoha.

He knew of over a dozen way to escape her hold while incapcitating her, but each of his attempts to escape was met with a smack on his head and a firm command to not do it. And... he didn't.

The young shinobi had never been to the Haruno home, which was where he was pulled to. Had never met the civilian mother of his team-mate before this night.

Which didn't explain why he cowered before her look of disappointment when she murmured his name.

When she ordered him to pull down his pants and lie across her lap, he had obeyed. The night had been surreal enough that he had given up on going against it. Especially since his sharingen couldn't detect any genjutsu occurring, and his attempts to dispel genjutsu simply didn't work.

Which led him back to the first step and wondering just where things had gone wrong and surrealistic.

***

Notes - and yeah, Sakura has a bloodlimit. It's the voice. Pity it doesn't work if there's tons of chakra flying about, like say in a ninja fight. ^_-
 

biigoh

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#3
I take it you approve? And the Voice isn't over powered? ^_-
 

atharris

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#4
It's like the Jedi Mind trick isn't it..? But instead of.. can only be used on weak minded, it can only be used .. when people aren't flinging chakra around. I assume that Sasuke could break out of "the voice's" power if he tried to break out of it like he would genjutsu?

Would be handy for infiltration :p And are you really worried about it being overpowered? When you're talking about Sasuke's Hard on rubbing against Sakura's mums leg..? :lol:
 

DhampyrX2

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#5
The sad part is this is a perfect reason why Sakura would never give Naruto the time of day. With fluffy ther in his belly there could be a permanent shitload of chakra hanging around him to dispel the voice. She can't control him so she doesn't want him because she's a dom deep down.
 

biigoh

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#6
It's like the Jedi Mind trick isn't it..? But instead of.. can only be used on weak minded, it can only be used .. when people aren't flinging chakra around. I assume that Sasuke could break out of "the voice's" power if he tried to break out of it like he would genjutsu?

Would be handy for infiltration? :p And are you really worried about it being overpowered? When you're talking about Sasuke's Hard on rubbing against Sakura's mums leg..? :lol:
Pretty much, he can Kai all he wants, it's just that she smacks him with it again when she speaks. It affects the body more than the chakra or the mind. Think Bene Gesserit Voice instead of Jedi Mind trick. ^_^

And yeah... it's why I was wondering if it was NSFW or if it's still not potent enough for the lemon section... :p

The sad part is this is a perfect reason why Sakura would never give Naruto the time of day.? With fluffy ther in his belly there could be a permanent shitload of chakra hanging around him to dispel the voice.? She can't control him so she doesn't want him because she's a dom deep down.
Yeap. ^_^

Fuu Fuu would do that to the voice effect... Well, she COULD control him, it's just that she wouldn't be able to do it with the Voice. She'd have to do it the old fashion way... and pussy whip him into shape. :lol:
 

sith2886

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#7
just out of curiosity biigoh are you perchance a member of the palcomix forum as well?
 

biigoh

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#8
Palcomix forum? I don't think so, given that this is the first I've heard of it...

:D
 
#9
They're big into drawing loli comics, mostly, and are a sister organization with WWOEC, I believe.
 

sith2886

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#10
there also big on spanking. and it doesn't matter who the spankee is
 

biigoh

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#11
Ahhh... I see... I only frequent the various chans. ^_^

I shall need to investigate this... further. :ph43r:
 

zeebee1

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#12
If Sakura knows about her bloodlimit then it is overpowered. She would have won against Ino at the very least unless it's blocked by very small amounts of chakra. If that's the case than Sasuke would be emitting too much chakra for it to work.
 

elric

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#13
Or it only works on males. :huh.:
Like the Anti-Pervert jutsu girls have.
 
#14
When I first read this topic, I thought of Kagome telling Inuyasha to "Sit!"

Which would actually work pretty well with Sasuke, now that I think about it...
 

iota0000

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Hardcore Heathen said:
When I first read this topic, I thought of Kagome telling Inuyasha to "Sit!"

Which would actually work pretty well with Sasuke, now that I think about it...
That's what I thought coming into this thread, too. But this is nicer still.

Though there's still something to be admired about Sasuke taking a faceplant on command. :D
 

biigoh

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#16
And more snippets with some explainations on the Voice.

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Sakura licked her lips as she looked at her mother murmuring to Sasuke-kun with each spank. He seemed so vulnerable and small as he lay across the Haruno's matriach's lap. His control meant that he had resisted the pain of the spanks and had avoided crying out.

And that served as a good distraction.

She had been told about how the best way to implant commands into a victim was when they were suitably distracted.

In theory, combat was one way to do so. But almost every single ninja out there tended to start throwing flashy jutsu all over the place the moment combat started.

Which played against the weaknesses of the Voice of Command.

"Sakura, before I teach you about how to use our bloodlimit. You must promise to never, ever tell anyone about it. This ability must be kept unknown or it will be neutralized far too easily." The very first thing mother had told her.

The second had been on the weaknesses. "Chakra can defend against our ability. Those who possess far greater amounts of chakra than us are harder to control, but the more control you have over yours make it somewhat easier, if not possible. Thankful, ninja who have that much chakra have good enough control to not let it spill all over the place and hinder us."

That had been the surprise, she had always known that Naruto had more chakra than her. But the control THERE. Sakura mentally tched again at her annoyance on finding out her ability just simply didn't work ten yards around that blond, and the way he kept hounding her... to the point of even ending up on her team.

Admitedly, it was a good thing that Sasuke hadn't simply used a jutsu when trying to escape earlier or it would have been... difficult to keep him here. And it likely would have resulted in some horrible future. She could see it now.

Naruto and some of the rookie nine would be sent out to chase after him. Sasuke-kun would beat them up and run off looking for power. And Naruto would come back and keep bugging people to teach him stuff.

Before he'd be sent out again with team seven to save Sasuke whose brooding would have gotten out of hand. Even if he likely would have looked even hotter like that.

No, much better to have used the Voice against Sasuke-kun.

"... and think on how bad you were to need to be spanked." The blush on the pink haired kunoichi's face didn't quite match the hue of her hair as she looked at where Sasuke had been told to stand in the corner of the room, looking for all the world like a naughty boy.

Admitedly, the fiery color of his rear looked... nice in Sakura's eyes, given that he wasn't trying to pull up his trousers or even underwear. True the size of 'little Sasuke' was smaller than she expected. But wasn't it how one used one's tool, rather than size that mattered?

"Sakura, we need to talk." The kunoichi licked her lips once more as she looked at Sasuke who stood in the corner, a slight hitch in his breath, the only sign of the effect of the spanking on him. At least beyond the stiff 'little Sasuke'.

Yeah... this was definitely much better.

***

And it continues? ^_^;;;
 

iota0000

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#17
I think you're really skirting on the edge of Lemon forum material, but keeping the balance rather well.

I'm kinda disturbed in the way that I can't look away.
 

Lord Raine

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#18
iota0000 said:
I think you're really skirting on the edge of Lemon forum material, but keeping the balance rather well.

I'm kinda disturbed in the way that I can't look away.
That's how you know it's awesome. When you just can't bring yourself to look away.

And yeah, when she went "sit", I went "damn, Sakura slipped him some sacred beads". But like a cat, this is fine too.
 

biigoh

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#19
Lord Raine said:
iota0000 said:
I think you're really skirting on the edge of Lemon forum material, but keeping the balance rather well.

I'm kinda disturbed in the way that I can't look away.
That's how you know it's awesome. When you just can't bring yourself to look away.

And yeah, when she went "sit", I went "damn, Sakura slipped him some sacred beads". But like a cat, this is fine too.
*snerks*

'sacred beads'... must clear up image from mind and not type on just why Sasuke is so stuffy like he's got stuff jammed up THERE. :snigger:

And thank you for the praise for skirting the line. :p
 

biigoh

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Sasuke's breath hitched as he tried to prevent the hiccoughs from coming out.

A ninja was strong. A ninja showed no emotions and hides signs of his pain.

He was Uchiha. Uchiha were the elite of the elite. He... he would not show how painful the spanking he had been given was.

Uchiha did not need to think on the reason of why he had been spanked. Of how bad a bad boy he had been to need such spanking.

Uchiha were NOT bad boys.

'Ahh... but good boys didn't think about or tried running away from their village to older men for power, did they?' A traitorous part of Sasuke's mind murmured to that line of thought. 'Nor did they massacre the entire Uchiha clan.'

No, Uchiha could be... bad in some cases. Very bad.

"Sasuke-kun," Sakura's voice was accompanied by her warm breath against his ear. The odd almost-metallic distortion in her voice wasn't natural, now that he thought about it.

"Sa... Sakura, you have a bloodlimit of some kin... kind, don't you?" the young ninja was proud of the way he didn't sob or hiccough as he spoke. His previous actions or lack there of was indicative of something odd.

"Mmmh mh, come along," the pink haired kunoichi's words slipped easily into the back of his mind and Sasuke found himself obeying her.

"Some... some kind of mind... mind control effect," he continued to work out what was happening here, even as his mind dimly noted that he was being guided away from the corner he had stood at for some time and more importantly, his pants and underwear.

Face pink with embaressment, Sasuke winced at the cool touch of his team-mate's hand on his rear, and the realization of the fact that 'little Sasuke' was still stiffly standing upright.

"Shhh... you don't need to worry about that," once more the odd echoing voice of his team-mate settled into the recesses of his mind, Sasuke dry-swallowed as he came to acknowledge that he didn't know much of his team-mate beyond the notion that she was a weak fangirl who played at being a kunoichi.

Looking around the room that he had been brought to, the panicked fear that he had been brought to the bedroom of one his fangirls rose in his gut.

He... he was going to be raped.

By one of his fangirls...

***

Muahahahahahaha, it lives!
 

biigoh

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#22
I was going to use the "VERY NO!" line in there, but thought that was going abit too far. :D
 

zeebee1

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#24
What I can sense is that I don't like where this is going. This is heading towards Sakura getting whatever she wants without putting any actual effort in. And rape is rape no matter how it's done.
 

Luthorne

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#25
Nah, she's only going to get what she wants for as long as she's in a low-chakra environment...first time Naruto pops up, and the whole thing falls to pieces. Only Naruto can save Sasuke.

...And anything bad is funny if it happens to Sasuke.
 
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