Nasuverse And Then It Rained

Ray

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I PROMISED A SNIPPET TODAY! BEHOLD!

(Post-Fate scenario, so Saber is gone, gone, gone...)
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And Then It Rained

by Kamikaze Wraith


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ôBloody fuck, he ran the bastard through!ö

ôFuck this, letÆs leave!ö

ôShirou!ö

ô-the fuck, donÆt let go of her! Shit, gimme the-ô

ôItÆs over- what the fuck are you-ô

ôSHIROU!ö


It was raining.

A black-gloved hand sneaked out from under an umbrella, allowing the raindrops to wash away grime and bits of dried blood.

æIt was for the greater good, right?Æ

Seconds passed. The hand clenched into a fist, withdrawing back under the umbrella.

Emiya Shirou sighed.

æHome, sweet home,Æ he thought as he trudged through Fuyuki CityÆs darkening streets, æat least I managed to get back in one piece, butàÆ

A powerful gust of wind interrupted his thoughts, blowing through the loose ends of his tattered black coat and forcing him to move his umbrella to avoid a shower of rain.

ôLooks like even getting to the house will be tiring,ö he muttered to himself.

It wasnÆt like he was going to be getting much rest, regardless. What little sleep heÆd be able to catch when he got to the Emiya complex would be interrupted by having to head off to school early next morning. Unhealthy, perhaps, but a necessity û his excuses for his absences were running thin, and he owed Fuji-nee too much to get kicked out.

æThe so-called protector of justice canÆt even keep himself out of trouble at school. Pathetic, Shirou, really pathetic, but it looks small when compared to my other-

ôEmiya! Emiya-kun!ö

Shirou snapped out of his pondering for the second time, looking around to see the Archery Club captain, Mitsuzuri Ayako, running towards him, a purple umbrella in her left hand and a smile on her face.

ôEmiya-kun,ö she repeated when she finally reached him, ôitÆs such a surprise to see you! I mean, werenÆt you sick?ö

Shirou froze for a moment, not knowing what to say. He and Ayako were friends, but their friendship had taken a backseat during the Fifth Holy Grail War, and ShirouÆs frequent disappearances had done nothing to rekindle it. Seeing her address him so familiarly, even after he had all but completely ignored her existence for weeks on end, left him rather dumbfounded.

ôAyako! Ià erà what are you doing out in this weather?ö

Ayako quirked an eyebrow, as if Shirou had said something strange.

ôIÆm going back home from school, silly! You know, that big place you used to go to in the mornings?ö

Shirou nodded tentatively, completely missing the jibe at his frequent absences.

ôBut school ends after four oÆclock,ö he said, ôwhy would you be going back home this late?ö


ôIt was my turn to clean the Archery dojo.ö She rolled her eyes. ôSomething youÆd remember if you werenÆt gone so often. By the way, you donÆt look sick at all. What were you actually doing?ö

ShirouÆs eyes widened. Of course she had to notice.

ôNo! Ià er, I really was sick, but I made an impressive recovery!ö

ôRiiight.ö Ayako frowned. ôYou know, I never expected Emiya Shirou, the very model of the hardworking student, to just skip school like that. You always seemed so dedicated.ö

Before Shirou could respond the sound of thunder rolled above them, startling them both and causing Ayako to look up.

ôThe rainÆs getting worse,ö she said, staring at the clouds. She turned to look at Shirou again. ôWe really shouldnÆt just be standing here.ö

She smiled.

ôWalk with me, Emiya-kun. IÆll ask you what I want to know on the way.ö

She started off, and Shirou could only follow, his formerly slow pace quickening to match AyakoÆs step.

ôSoàö Ayako said as Shirou finally caught up with her, ôfirst things first. What have you been doing thatÆs so important that you had to skip school?ö

æWhat have I been doing?Æ

Memories of his recent failure flashed through ShirouÆs mind. He couldnÆt tell Ayako what heÆd been up to. However, he realized with a shock that heÆd been gone for almost three weeks now, and that wasnÆt even counting his previous absences. He had to tell her somethingà

ôIÆve been leaving the city because of personal matters. Things prompted by several objects my father left me when he died that I hadnÆt inspected until now.ö He sighed. ôItÆs rather private, which is why the excuses I sent the school arenÆt the real thing. I donÆt want people snooping around.ö

All true, in a way, and he knew Ayako wouldnÆt pry.

Sure enough, she nodded and said nothing more, seemingly thinking about another subject to talk about.

Finally, she seemed to land upon something good, and turned to speak to Shirou again.

ôSo... whatÆs with the coat and the hair? I didnÆt think youÆd be the kind of person to go for the ôdarkö look, Emiya-kun, but,ö and here her voice took on a teasing quality, ôI kinda like it on you.ö

A slight blush quickly colored ShirouÆs face at her words. HeÆd never been equipped to deal with teasing, as one Tohsaka Rin had proved before.

ôIà itÆs, uhàö

Ayako giggled.

ôYouÆre so easy to fluster, Emiya-kun. But really, at least tell me why you did that to your hair.ö

Shirou brought a gloved hand to his hair, feeling nothing different.

ôWhatÆs wrong with my hair? I havenÆt seen myself in a mirror for a while.ö

ôYou really havenÆt noticed? The roots are bone white!ö

Shirou stopped walking abruptly, the memory of someone coursing through his mind.

ôEmiya-kun? Is something wrong?ö

ôNo! I mean, thereÆs nothing wrong at all.ö He started to walk again. ôSo, what have you been up to lately?ö

ôOh, well, nothing particularly interesting. Just the usual Archery club duties.ö

ôUh...really? I thoughtàö

The pair walked on, the formerly serious conversation degenerating into small talk as Shirou changed subject after subject to prevent more questions from being asked. Things continued in this manner until they reached the threshold of AyakoÆs house, where the girl started walking towards the door, before turning around and smiling at Shirou.

ôWell, Emiya-kun, since I made you walk all the way here, how about you come inside for dinner?ö

Shirou felt rather startled for a moment, but that quickly wore off. Surely, he thought, he should have realized that Ayako wouldnÆt make him walk with her to her house just to leave him there.

æStillà I donÆt think itÆd be a good idea to stay here. ItÆs going to be pretty late by the time I leave, and after what I did yesterday, that wouldàÆ

ôEmiya-kun?ö

Shirou nearly jumped as Ayako shook him from his reverie, but managed, through a feat of amazing eloquence, to give an educated response.

ôHuh?ö

Ayako rolled her eyes.

ôIs it just me, or are you phasing out even more often than you usually do? I was asking you if youÆd like to come in for dinner.ö

æGotta find a way out of this oneàÆ

ôAh, Ayako-san,ö he said, ôI wouldnÆt want to erà intrude, or someth-ô

He was cut off as Ayako decided to take matters into her own hands, grabbing his right hand and pulling on him as she walked towards the front door.

ôYouÆre just being silly, Emiya-kun,ö she said, ôYour house is too far away for you get there in time for dinner. Come on in!ö

Shirou sighed, but let himself be dragged inside.

æGood going, Shirou. Is this how I get out of a complicated situation? Dad would be so proudàÆ

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ôWait here,ö she told him,öIÆll be back in a second.ö

Shirou nodded, and she left, leaving him to inspect the place. AyakoÆs house wasnÆt nearly as large as the Emiya complex, but it was cozy and well decorated. A delicious smell of food permeated the place, which Shirou assumed to be coming from the kitchen. All in all, the little house gave off a touch of warm humanity that much bigger and grandiose places, such as IlyaÆs castle and RinÆs manor, seemed to lack.

Smiling, Shirou unbuttoned his coat and dropped himself on the couch.

ôWarmthàö he whispered. Almost a month without it, except for one personà

æThe operation will take four weeks. The result will forever clean your fatherÆs memory and fulfillàÆ

æHeh. So, who are you? We donÆt really-æ

æYou were ultimately the winner of the Fifth Holy Grail War! Has that taught you nothing- Æ

æIÆm Shirou, and you?Æ

æYou canÆt fulfill this goal without killing, your father knew that-æ

æCall me Yumi.Æ


ôEmiya-kun?ö

Shirou started, AyakoÆs voice shattering his thoughts.

ôYu- I mean, eh, whatÆs up?ö

Ayako shook her head, smiling before unceremoniously plopping herself down beside Shirou.

ôAre you this distant because something is troubling you, Emiya-kun? Or is it somethingà different?ö

ôDifferent?ö

Ayako smirked.

ôWell, since you wonÆt tell me whatÆs wrong, IÆm being forced to draw my own conclusions.ö Her smirk widened. ôDoes it have something to do with Tohsaka?ö

ôTo-Tohsaka!?ö

AyakoÆs expression looked positively malicious now.

ôCome on now, you can tell me, weÆve got time. Dinner wonÆt be ready for a while, and mom has to stay in the kitchen to watch over the stew, soà I want the whole story. What is it? A romance? An affair? Have you two, you knowàö

Shirou, his face redder than a tomato, tried to come up with a response to end the barrage of questions.

ôIà weà itÆs not like that, weÆre just, that is to sayàö

He failed miserably, as Ayako simply moved closer to him, the look on her face almost predatory.

ôItÆs not like that? So why is she almost always waiting for you after school? Or going to your home? For that matter, why does Sakura always go there? And what about that white haired girl- oh!ö

Shirou gulped.

ôOhà?ö

Ayako edged even closer to him, so much so that he could feel her breath.

ôI think I knowàö she said, her voice sultry.

ôKnowà know what?ö

ôEmiya-kunà are you trying to makeà a harem?ö

There was silence.

ôàwha?ö

ôChildren, dinnerÆs ready!ö

Ayako immediately moved away from him as a tall, slender woman came out of the kitchen. Apparently, her mother had finished early.

Her mother, who looked like she had the body of a lingerie model and, at least from what Shirou could see, was dressed in an apron and nothing else.

ShirouÆs brain crashed.

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Shirou and Ayako walked out of the house, going down the streets in silence for a moment. The girl had decided to accompany Shirou through the first part of his trek home, and after convincing her mother theyÆd finished dinner and left, simply walking beside each other peacefully until Ayako decided to start up a conversation again.

ôSoà tell me Emiya, did you like it?ö

A slight bit of color tinged ShirouÆs cheeks as the image of Mitsuzuri KeikoÆs amazing cleavage swam in his head. Dinner had revealed that AyakoÆs kind, funny, and at the same time extremely attractive mother had not, in fact, been dressed in only an apron; it was just that she had been wearing her old clothes to do housework. Her old, really small, really tight fitting clothesà

ôEmiya?ö

Shirou almost jumped.

ôErà yes! I liked it! A lot!ö

Ayako just stared at him. Shirou gulped.

ôEhà what were we talking about?ö

Ayako shook her head in frustration.

ôDinner, Emiya, dinner. Notà other thingsà that you may have had in mind. I swear Mom just sometimesàö

She stopped short, giving a little sigh, but then looked Shirou in the eye with a small smile.

ôWell, at least youÆve stopped brooding, Emiya,ö she said, ôthatÆs a- eep!ö

She jumped backwards, almost crashing into a surprised Shirou.

ôAyakoà what happened?ö

ôThat thing almost hit me!ö she shouted, pointing to the ground.

It was a long, thin iron needle, embedded firmly into the asphalt. ShirouÆs eyes flew open in surprise, gloved hands unconsciously clenching into fists.


ôEmiya?ö

Shirou said nothing, simply staring as two more needles silently flew through the air and struck the ground near his boots. His mind, however, was in turmoil.

æNoà no, damn ità not hereà itÆs over! This shouldnÆt be happening!æ

ôAyakoà get down!ö

Acting purely on instinct, Shirou roughly shoved the girl to the ground, ignoring her protests as he whipped his black umbrella open.

æTrace, on!Æ

The attack was swift and deadly; thousands of needles falling from the air as Shirou jumped back and the Reinforced umbrella went up, spinning in his hands as it blocked the attack like an iron shield.


From behind his makeshift protection, Shirou could barely discern his shadowy attacker jumping from rooftop to rooftop towards the street, throwing needles until his landing forced him to stop. Shirou immediately took the opportunity, closing his umbrella and throwing it at his opponent with all his might. His attacker, surprised, managed to dodge, and the magically strengthened umbrella impacted against a nearby building, leaving a huge crater on one of its walls.

The attack served its purpose, however. His opponent had been forced from the shadows in order to dodge the incoming projectile, and now stood before him, his features finally visible.

He was a tall, thin man, impeccably dressed in a long blue suit coat with a matching wide-brimmed fedora hat. His bright green eyes looked upon Shirou from a pale face, their stare calculating.

ôBuona sera, Emiya Shirou. Mi piace molto vederti nuovamente.ö

There was no need to decipher his greeting. Shirou already knew him.

ôRaphael.ö

The man tipped his hat slightly in acknowledgement.

ôGlad you remember me, Emiya Shirou,ô he said, his tone polite, almost aristocratic, if someone accented, ôWearing your fatherÆs coat again, I see? He was a great magician.ö

Shirou ignored the comment, staring at him intently.

ôWhy are you here?ö

Raphael smiled, his gaze turning almost condescending.

ôI am here, Emiya Shirou, on business purposes.ö He raised a hand, holding up three long needles. ôI assume you know what that means.ö

ôI thought it was over,ö Shirou argued, ôThere should be no reason for you to be here.ö

Raphael raised an eyebrow.

ôIt does seem that way, doesnÆt it, Emiya Shirou? Indeed, you were not the only one to think that way. I believed that, and I believe that Nyvel probably still does. Howeveràö A smug look slowly spread through his features, green eyes almost glinting. ôàother parties certainly do not believe so.ö

Shirou shook his head, frowning.

ôOther parties? That canÆt be. Who is it?ö

Raphael smiled again, but the smug look did not fade.

ôIÆm afraid I cannot say, nor is this an appropriate moment. What they contracted me for is obvious, though, is it not?ö

ShirouÆs eyes narrowed.

ôYeah,ö he said, ôit is.ö

Raphael nodded.

ôThen I assume youÆll have no problem if we were to start? By the way, I do hope that girl knows what this is about. I would hate to have to do something to an innocent simply because they were at the wrong place at the wrong time.ö


æThat girlà whoà oh, noàÆ

ôAyako!ö

Shirou fought the urge to turn around, which would expose him to Raphael, but moved his head enough to be able to glimpse what was happening behind his own back. Sure enough, Ayako was there, kneeling on the ground.

æWhat is she still doing here?Æ

Ayako, for her part, seemed to notice that she had become the center of attention, and looked at Shirou, bewildered.

ôEmiya-kun, whatÆs going on?ö

ôAyakoà this doesnÆt involve you. I want you to get up and start running. Quickly!ö

The girl obeyed, rising from her knees, only to throw herself back to the ground with a scream of fright as a long iron needle flew towards her, imbedding itself into the cold asphalt only inches away from her. She stopped for a moment, looking at the thing in shocked fear, before she finally appear to gather her bearings and turned around, running away from them.

Shirou watched her silhouette recede into the dark streets for a mere second before his attention immediately returned to Raphael. That had not been a missed shot. It had been a warning.

ôWhy?"

Raphael simply stared, impassive.

ôShe has already seen me attack you and talk to you, Emiya Shirou. I will give her courtesy until after we are finished, but once that is over, wellà you know what I must do.ö

ShirouÆs gloved hands tightened into fists, anger boiling in the pit of his stomach. Threatening him was one thing. Threatening innocents was much different.

ôI canÆt allow that,ö he said, eyes narrowed and voice a cold whisper.

ôSo it would seem.ö

The needles were thrown, only to be batted aside in a flash of light as Shirou charged forward, twin falchion blades in hand. Raphael dodged the strike that followed, leaping backwards to keep his distance. More needles appeared in his left hand, while three long rapier-like blades flashed into existence in his right, each held carefully between his fingers.

ôBlack Keysàö Shirou muttered, his grip on his own swords tightening unconsciously.

ôCorrect,ö Raphael said, holding the weapons up, ôan agent of the Church contacted me not too long ago, but he became a tad tooà bothersome. I dispensed of him and kept his blades. Contrary to popular belief, they make as good melee weapons as long ranged ones.ö

He settled into a fighting stance, the loose ends of his blue coat fluttering almost theatrically in the wind.

ôThey should be able to match you effectively,ö he said, and then he struck, Black Keys swiping down on ShirouÆs form like claws. Shirou brought his swords up to block, only to almost be thrown to the ground as Raphael aimed a kick towards his knees. Shirou jumped back to avoid further attacks, but Raphael was on him before his feet even hit the ground. A flurry of needles flew towards him, forcing Shirou to concentrate on batting them aside, diverting his attention.

Raphael took this advantage to its limit, leaping forwards into the air and twisting around to land behind Shirou, and striking at him with his Black Keys. Shirou managed to turn around quickly enough to block the strike, but could not predict a high kick that flew past his defenses and slammed into his chest, sending him flying.

Shirou spun around the air and landed gracefully a few meters away, but Raphael was already onto him. Blue coat flaring, the man ran at him, sweeping down and aiming a low kick at ShirouÆs knees. When Shirou jumped to avoid it Raphael struck with his blades, forcing him to block and throwing Shirou off balance, knocking his blades out of his hands. He fell to the ground with a thud, too shocked to avoid a kick to the gut which knocked him back down when he tried to get up.

Raphael smiled.

ôCiao, Emiya,ö he said, and brought the Black Keys down.

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This is the second draft of this thing, so it's not finished (all I have written (and posted here) covers only about 30% of the story), and is rushed at several parts. The scene at Ayako's house was supposed to be much longer, and it was supposed to include dinner with her (secksay) mother and several conversations. Also, the with Ayako right before the fight was supposed to be a tad bit longer and feature a more brooding Shirou. It's no problem, though. I'll just go back and edit them once I completely finish the second draft (which is currently having a lot better fortune than the first draft, which sucked so much it did not deserve finishing).

The thing is, though, that I promised to post something today. This might not be part of The Shadow and the Flame, but it sure as hell counts.

Anyways... comments? Suggestions? Ideas? Flames?

Get on with 'em! :D
 

grant

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#2
Interesting, but what was the intro from?
 

Skelethin

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#3
The intro did seem a tad... rushed. Though I am figuring that it will be explained more later in the story, yes?

I think this is good enough to forgive you for not updating your other one. So your off the hood there.
 

trevelyan1983

Well-Known Member
#4
Awesome Factor overload.

...

... Rebooting Trev OS...

...

...Wow. That was cool. You not only managed to give us a glimpse into how Shirou is turning into EMIYA, you also managed to mix in elements of high school, old friendships and a MILF. In an apron.

Definitely awaiting moar.
 

zeebee1

Well-Known Member
#5
When you said you were writing a new snippet I assumed it would be for a story I actually cared about.
 

locke69

Well-Known Member
#6
A little harsh there, zeebee1. Could, at least, list the things that you don't like about this story so we know what you're looking at that makes you not care for this?

As for myself, the story has my attention, being that a good or bad thing I leave to you. And like trevelyan1983 and Skelethin, I'm eagerly awaiting more.
 
#7
Ack! Here I was hoping this would be "Shadow and the Flame," but I suppose this'll do.

Veeery intriguing. I'm definitely liking the signs of Shirou's conversion into EMIYA, as well as the sheer fact that Ayako's in this. Definitely looking forward to MOAR.

But only after you update "The Shadow and the Flame." :)
 

SoulGriever13

Well-Known Member
#8
Bah, update whatever, just update, or you'll end up with a block similar to mine right now.

It doesn't hurt that you provide quality either. This one's got my seal of approval, for all that's worth *clubs Ray with a Baby Seal*.

Now, would you kindly deliver unto us more of the awesome?

-Griever
 

zeebee1

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#9
My problem is that all that has been posted so far is a bunch of questions. There is no doubt in my mind that what there is is good, but I want more than questions.
 

Prince Charon

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#10
This is very interesting.

Moar soon, pleez!
 

Ray

Well-Known Member
#11
*pops head in*

Well... this is certainly a bigger response than what I expected, and most of you seemed to catch the major problem with what's been posted here: the void of information in the writing serves its purpose for drawing attention, and would be effective if one were reading the complete text. On a pre-reading, however, the text isn't complete, and thus the snippet leaves a lot of questions and zero answers.

I'll fix that soon, though. In a few minutes (I have to finish a couple of posts in the TFFA RPG thread) I'll come back here and drop as much information on the premise behind the fic as I can post without actually giving the plot away. After that, I'll sit my ass down and start writing, hopefully to post a snippet tonight (but barring that, tomorrow morning). Hopefully that will temporarily satisfy you people. :p
 

Euphemism

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#12
Meh, I don't mind questions so much. The quality of the work is evident, so I like it. The only thing that bothers me slightly is that it seems a bit too obvious that it's set up for Ayako to return, interrupt Shirou's impending execution, and do something so that the situation is resolved nicely in some way.

Of course, that doesn't mean it's going to happen that way, but still, that was the impression I had.
 

Ray

Well-Known Member
#13
Okay, so here's a snippet. Awfully behind schedule, I know, but I did the best I could to be on time... well, I kinda did the best I could... sort of... eh... >_<

Anyways, since I don't want to leave this story without anything resembling an update for a long period of time (mainly because lack of updates = lack of criticism which in turn equals to lack of motivation, which is something I really don't want to happen with this particular piece), here's a small ('bout 1200 words, methinks) segment to tide those of you people who actually like my trash over.

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ôCiao, Emi- ngh!ö

Raphael stumbled backwards, his gloating interrupted as Shirou flipped over at exactly the right minute, catching Raphael in the chest with a strong kick as he righted himself and stood up again, blades reappearing in a flash of light. Before he could recover from the surprise Shirou struck again, slicing at him with his right hand blade as he swooped his left one under his arms, trying to force his way through RaphaelÆs defenses.

The bounty hunter blocked the first blade and jumped back from the second, but Shirou charged onward, throwing his right sword straight at the man. Raphael backflipped to avoid it, then made to move again as the blade suddenly changed course and veered back at him again. Shirou saw this and pressed the attack, slamming his boot into RaphaelÆs torso and sending him flying backwards just as his blade returned to his hand. Surprised but uninjured, Raphael righted himself in mid-air, a storm of needles flying from his coat as he twisted around to land perfectly on the wall of a nearby building, heedless of gravity. Twirling his blades in a fan-like motion, Shirou batted the needles aside and charged at Raphael, swords missing the man by an inch as he leapt off the wall and into a nearby alley. Shirou brazenly followed, running in with his blades held high.

Sure enough, Raphael was there, waiting patiently as he rested his back against the end wall of the alley. He did not attack, nor did he show any signs of aggression. He simply looked at Shirou, a mysterious smile on his face.

ôYou have improved much, Emiya Shirou. You have improved very much,ö he cocked his head to the side, eyes scanning Shirou from top to bottom, ôand to think that your skills were beyond pathetic when we first fought each other.ö

ôAre youà still thinking about-ô

Shirou scowled, his grip on his blades tightening. The last person he wanted to hear praise from, however backhanded, was someone like Raphael.

ôMiss Hisau?ö

ôOh, yes. Do you remember that encounter, Emiya?ö

ôMa, che abbiamo qui?ô

ôConversation wonÆt get you anywhere, Raphael,ö Shirou said, eyes narrowing, ôYou said it yourself û we both know what youÆre here for.ö

Raphael smiled somewhat conceitedly, arching an elegant eyebrow as if he did not comprehend what Shirou had just said.

ôMy, my, Emiya,ö he spoke, his tone derisive, ôand here I thought you and I were at least on cordial terms with each other!ö

Shirou shook his head in repulsion, his glare becoming poisonous.

ôRaphaelàö he raised his blades, growing angrier by the second, ôyou attacked Nyvel, injured Maiya, and played a part in YumiÆs death. Had I had the chance, I would have killed you. Quit posturing!ö

Raphael looked somewhat surprised, and yet his expression was strangely pleased.

ôYou really have changed much, Emiya Shirou. I must admit, I was not expecting that little outburst; you always did seem so calm.ö He smirked. ôHoweverà if youÆre not in the mood to talk, then let us dispense of this little reprieve!ö

Shirou tensed as Raphael ran straight at him, swinging his Black Keys in a wide arc. He sidestepped the blow, sweeping his right-hand blade up to strike at the manÆs neck. Raphael jumped back to avoid the stroke but did not advance again, instead vaulting over a trashcan to land on a nearby wall. In less than a second he was running upwards, heedless of all laws of physics. Shirou again jumped to strike him, and again he missed, this time left to watch as Raphael ran up the alley wall and reached the roof of the building.

ôSo, Emiya!ö the man yelled as he smirked down at Shirou, ôCare to take this fight to the next level!?ö

Shirou frowned, anxiety starting to tug at his mind. He had only done this once before in combat, and now Raphael had the advantage to snipe at him while he tried to reach him.

It didnÆt matter.

Wishing fervently that he had some sort of battle cry for moral support, Shirou steeled himself and forced what prana he could to his legs, running straight at the wall and jumping up, sprinting the moment he felt his feet come in contact with the concrete.

ôHa!ö

A rain of needles fell down on him as he ran, but one swipe of his blades knocked them aside as he leapt forwards into the roof to strike at Raphael, falchion swords sweeping down over his head. The assassin ducked, swiping at Shirou with his Black Keys in retaliation. Shirou danced around the strike, almost losing his balance in the process. He recovered his footing easily, but Raphael was already out of range, having jumped to the opposite side of the roof.

ôUnimpressive, Emiya!ö he taunted, ôIs the altitude causing you problems?ö

Shirou didnÆt bother to reply, immediately launching himself across the length of the roof, breaching the distance between them in a second, and bringing his swords down in a flurry of blows. Raphael twisted and turned around every strike, until he finally jumped off the edge of the roof, landing at the top of another building in a single, fluid leap. Shirou followed, charging prana to his legs and jumping off in a flurry of his dark coat, descending on the man with a meteor like strike aimed at his chest. Raphael halted the blow with his own blades, pushing Shirou back into the air as his left hand withdrew more of his needles. Shirou whirled around in the air, balancing himself on one hand on the edge of the roof in a surprising feat of acrobatics and throwing a kick at Raphael. It caught the underside of the manÆs left wrist, knocking the needles out of his hand and forcing him to step back, grunting in pain. Shirou used the brief respite to fully climb up to the roof, bringing him and Raphael on equal ground once more.

ôImpressed now?ö he jeered as the man clutched his wrist in pain.

For nearly a minute, Raphael said nothing at all, simply staring down at his wrist without looking at Shirou. Thenà

ôYou almost broke it, Emiya,ö he whispered, ôyou almost broke itàö

ShirouÆs eyes widened.

ôBUT NOT QUITE!ö

A whirlwind of iron and blue cloth engulfed ShirouÆs vision as Raphael seemed to instantly recover, jumping up and twirling in the air as he threw what seemed like thousands of needles at him. Shirou blocked those that he could and dove around the others, but could not stop them all. At least a dozen slammed into his skin, penetrating through even the thick folds of his coat. Shirou stumbled back, gritting his teeth as sheer agony tore through his muscles. More came yet, slamming into his flesh as he cried out in pain.

ô-most are made to torture, not kill-ô

ôIÆve proven immune before-ô


A bout of mad laughter filled ShirouÆs ears as he reeled from the attack, trying to regain his footing.

ôEmiya! Emiya! I must admit, you are truly an amazing individual! Such fire, and yet such worthlessness!ö the laughter turned into a raspy cackle, ôBut you have entertained me! I intended to kill you quickly, but no! No! I will give you a beautiful death! Una morte lenta e molto espressiva!ö

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Alright, now that that's done, basic rundown of the driving idea behind this story:

(I'm rather hesitant to do this, as I don't want to give away too much of the plot, but the general consensus appears to be a desire for a summary of some sort)

(Warning: Canon may be bent or broken at places. Details about Kiritsugu's life are sketchy, as the only source I had was FuyukiWiki, and that one bit the dust)

It's a few weeks after the end of the 5th Holy Grail War. For Shirou, life seems to be going well enough, as he's managed to cope with the "loss" of Saber pretty well, and apart from that, everything in his life seems to have either normalized or gotten better than it previously was. His ideals have gotten a massive boost, as has his skill with Tracing/Reinforcement, with his daily practice actually giving fruits thanks to what he learned during the War.

Everything seems fine and dandy, until a certain night when he is visited by a blonde foreign woman who introduces herself as Ellen Nyvel.

After giving her name, Nyvel (who prefers to be called by her last name), tells Shirou that she is a mage from the Association, and proceeds to give him a formal congratulations for winning the last Grail War. Confused (as is typical), Shirou asks if that's all she's here for. She shakes her head. This is the start of a long, winding downward spiral of shit for Shirou, which, by the start of this particular story, still hasn't ended.

Nyvel tells Shirou that the Association sent her for another reason. Something to do with his father's last mission for them, a very important one in which Nyvel herself did her part. She explains, in graphic detail, what happened there, as well as the steps his father had to take to keep the mission objective away from their enemies clutches, an action Nyvel claims to have been "for the greater good."

Cue the shitfest, as of course, despite idolizing him as a hero, Shirou knows nothing about what Kiritsugu did for a living when he was alive. Indeed, he doesn't even know what he did during the Fourth War.

Nyvel is of course rather shocked that Shirou knows nothing of his father, and seems to refuse to believe her explanations. She decides to leave for the moment, but returns the next night with living proof - Maiya Hisau, her father's assistant during the 4th War and slightly later his assistant during his final mission for the Association. Here we must note that she appears to have been softened by the years, and she addresses Shirou with much more care than Nyvel did, explaining several details of his father's life and going on to tell him that the "objective" his father hid from the Association's opponents has been located again, and offers Shirou to join the effort to retrieve it.

Shirou, being Shirou, is still reluctant to believe all he is being told about his father, and is about to decline when Maiya hands him an old, worn-out diary and tells him to "think things over". She and Nyvel leave.

Shirou reads the diary. The women return two nights later, with the same offer.

Shirou accepts.

The effort goes underway, and it ends up becoming some sort of crazy adventure involving the Yakuza, several international mafias, and other organizations, along with the additional mercenary or two (including Raphael, though he isn't as terribly important as his appearance in the current story may lead you to think).

(The core details of all this will be revealed inside the story, while the rest... eh... it all depends on how this fic turns out)

In the end, things end in tragedy, with Shirou being forced to use most of the methods he originally refused to believe his father used in order to secure success. Once it's all over, Shirou returns to Fuyuki, confused, scared, and his faith in his ideals shaken.

And that's when the current plot begins, and what happens next will be revealed through the lenght of the fic.

So, that's the background. Hopefully this will satisfy the need for answers.

Edit: Btw...

The only thing that bothers me slightly is that it seems a bit too obvious that it's set up for Ayako to return, interrupt Shirou's impending execution, and do something so that the situation is resolved nicely in some way.

Of course, that doesn't mean it's going to happen that way, but still, that was the impression I had.
Won't happen. If anything, were Ayako to do that, she'd just make things worse or outright get killed herself.
 

Lord of Bones

Well-Known Member
#14
This snippet raises some questions in my mind:

1) Did Rin know of Shirou's 'excursion' and how did she react to Shirou's emotional state?

2) How badly are Shirou's ideals shaken?

All in all, a very nice snippet ^_^ ; though I just have to ask if you have plans to continue the Shadow and the Flame, as I consider that to be just as interesting as this fic.
 

grant

Well-Known Member
#15
Interesting all in all, and the summary at the end helps. But whose side is Raphael on?
 

Ray

Well-Known Member
#16
Heh. Glad you people seem to like it.

1) Did Rin know of Shirou's 'excursion' and how did she react to Shirou's emotional state?
She knows where Shirou went and what he was supposed to be doing, but as Shirou has just returned, she's neither met him nor does she have any idea of the actual details.

2) How badly are Shirou's ideals shaken?
Badly. Not to the point where he would contemplate abandoning them, but certainly enough to cause him sadness and confusion.

As for The Shadow and the Flame... eh, I really want to continue it, but the lack of any sort of coherent plot beyond what I planned for and executed in the initial chapters is killing the writing process.

Interesting all in all, and the summary at the end helps. But whose side is Raphael on?
Not Shirou's. :snigger: You'll see soon, though.
 

Lord of Bones

Well-Known Member
#17
One more thing; did all of Shirou's companions kick the bucket during their 'vacation'?

Hope you get inspiration for Shadow and the Flame soon.
 

Ray

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#18
One more thing; did all of Shirou's companions kick the bucket during their 'vacation'?
Not really, except for one very important death. Aside from that the other deaths that shook Shirou's ideals to the core were the ones that he himself had to inflict upon the enemy.

And now, for the snippet:


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Shirou could barely see anything from the pain, but he felt the kick slam into his chest, sending him skidding into the ground merely inches away from the edge of the roof, one of his legs actually dangling from it.

ô-youÆre a fool, Emiya Shirou. A fool, but a good person-ô

ô-I believe heÆll succeed, even if-ô


The sound of footsteps approaching him. ShirouÆs vision slowly blurred back into focus and he saw Raphael gazing down at him, Black Keys ready to strike.

ôWell then, Emiya,ö he said, ôwhere should I cut first?ö

ô-not you, damn it, you didnÆt have anything to do with this-ô

Shirou didnÆt answer, simply lifting his head off the ground slightly to glare at Raphael, his breathing ragged and impotent hands clenched into fists.

æI have to do something!Æ

He couldnÆt let Raphael kill him. Though at moments Shirou had regarded his life to be of little value, he knew that if it all ended here, Raphael would go after Ayako.

ôA slash to the base of the spine, perhaps? Or where the hamstrings join the calves? ThereÆs such beauty in the body, Emiya, it would be such a shame not to take advantage of itàö

Raphael would go after her. She would die, and so would her mother. Shirou couldnÆt allow that. He justà couldnÆt.

He stared up at Raphael, who was slowly pacing nearby, looking for all the world as if his only trouble were to decide what kind of cake to eat. Breathing deeply, Shirou concentrated. His healing advantage had been nullified in the past Grail War, but these injuries were minor. All he had to do was burn the poison. He still had power for that, he could feel ità

Raphael stopped pacing, looking at Shirou smugly.

ôGathering prana, Emiya?ö he asked, ôIÆm afraid I canÆt allow you to do that.ö

æToo lateà bastardàÆ

Green eyes widened as Raphael finally caught on to the severity of the situation. Running forwards, he lashed out with his blades, slashing down at Shirou while he still could.

But it was indeed too late.

There was a flash of golden light and Shirou had caught the strike with newly created blades. Another flash, and Raphael was stumbling back from a kick to the gut as Shirou stood up, grunting from the effort as the prana almost overloaded his system, burning the poison. Needles clattered to the ground, pushed out by the energy. The wounds were not healed, but something as small as that was no obstacle.

Shirou smiled as he looked at a shocked Raphael attempt to recover. Pain was worthless. He had someone to protect.

The smile turned into an uncharacteristically predatory smirk.

He also had an evil to wipe out.

Twirling his blades, Shirou ran at Raphael, slashing at his knees. The man barely managed to block, still stunned by what had happened. Pressing the attack, Shirou slammed a kick into his chest, sending him flying back to the edge of the roof. Raphael managed to stand up, only to receive another kick that forced him to leap back into the air over another building. Shirou brazenly followed, his coat making him a black shadow over Raphael as he slammed into the man the moment he landed, knocking him backwards towards the edge once more.

Sprinting towards him, Shirou slashed with his blades again and again, the attacks slamming against RaphaelÆs Black Keys and leaving cross-patterned trails of energy as the swords flew through the air. It was minutes before Raphael finally managed to halt his offense, twirling around behind Shirou and then throwing them into a deadlock as his Black Keys caught ShirouÆs response strike, his left hand aiming needles at ShirouÆs gut, but at the same time threatened by ShirouÆs own left blade, which hung barely an inch above his arm.

Barely a few steps from a six-story fall, the two seemingly could do nothing but keep their weapons where they were.

ôImpressive, Emiya,ö Raphael muttered between ragged pants for breath, ôVery impressive, just like you were in the end, when you fought CortÚz, before the girl died. I realize now that in times like these it is when you shineà but tell me, if you manage to survive this, what will you do when the time to sin truly comes and thereÆs no other way to fulfill your ideals than walking down the vilest paths?ö

ShirouÆs eyes widened at the comment, his heart starting to beat faster as RaphaelÆs face took on an insane, almost unholy look.

ôWhat will you do, Emiyaà WHEN THE LIGHTS COME DOWN AND IT ALL GOES BLACK!?ö

There was no way to stop it, because it was so suicidal that there was no way to predict it. The kick caught Shirou square in the chest, throwing him off the roof and into the air, but the momentum carried Raphael with it, and he too was falling, his body barely a meter above ShirouÆs.

ôYouÆre mine, Emiya!ö

A gloved hand reached for him, the other simply throwing the Black Keys down at Shirou. He managed to avoid the blades by twirling through the air as he fell, but RaphaelÆs hands managed to catch him by the shoulders, grappling him. Shirou fought back, and he and Raphael wrestled in mid-air, quickly approaching the ground. He had to do somethingà

A flash of light ran through his coat, blinding him and Raphael, and Shirou barely managed to register that there was someone running in their general direction when he felt his back slam against the ground, sending waves of pain through his body. But his plan had worked û his Reinforced coat had absorbed most of the damage, actually creating a crater on the asphalt street.

His eyes widened as he saw that Raphael was struggling to get up, half-stunned. Whatever the man may have done to stop his own fall looked like it had been thrown off by ShirouÆs stunt, but he was apparently still alive and mostly uninjured.

Shirou got up, muscles screaming in protest, and faced him as he stood. Raphael glared at him, muttering something to himself in Italian before locking eyes with Shirou.

ôIÆm not dead yetà Emiya Shirouàö he snarled, eyes glazed over.

Still somewhat dazed, Shirou had no time to react as Raphael seemed to instantly come out of his stupor, and could only cry in pain as he felt a trio of needles slam into his right shoulder and the weight of the man as he threw himself at him, slamming Shirou into the ground in an attempt to overpower him. He vaguely managed to register hearing a scream in the distance, the voice sounded awfully familiarà

He knew who that was.

He knew what was going to happen to her if he let himself be killed.

æI canÆt die here, damn it, I canÆt die here!Æ

RaphaelÆs hands were getting closer towards his throat; there was no time, no time at all, butà

æTraceà on!Æ

Light and warmth flew from his body, and Kansho and Bakuya were in his hands once more. There was a kick, and Raphael was thrown off him. A final slash, and the battle was decided.

Shirou stood up, seeing Raphael in front of him, barely managing to stand as he clutched his side, blood spurting out of the wound.

But Shirou wasnÆt looking at him. He was looking behind him, at the girl that was just staring and shaking her head, frozen in dumbfounded panic. An idiot. He was an idiot. Without knowing it, he had pushed Raphael in the same direction she had runà

ôAyako?ö

It took a second to utter her name and less than that for the situation to fall down. ShirouÆs voice seemed to alert Raphael, who turned around, needles in hand.

He was injured, but his needles could fly a lot faster than Ayako could run. Shirou had to act.

Gritting his teeth, he jumped.

æShirouàÆ

æYeah?Æ

æWhen you go backà can I come with you?Æ


The blade slammed into RaphaelÆs right shoulder, cutting through cloth, flesh, and bone in its deadly path. Blood spurted out on every direction, staining the blade and running down ShirouÆs right hand. Before the severed arm had hit the ground ShirouÆs leg snapped forwards, catching the man on the knees and swinging him around. Bakuya twirled in ShirouÆs hands one last time, and heedless of the screams of pain and fright from two different sides, Shirou rammed the sword into RaphaelÆs skull, between the eyes. The manÆs head snapped back as his skull was split open, blue fedora hat falling off. His blood spurted from the hideous wound in a crimson shower, bathing ShirouÆs hands a second time.

Raphael gave one last pained gurgle, letting a torrent of blood flow from his mouth, and then fell down to the ground, dead.

æFool. Your delusions of innocence are impossible, and soon your existence will end.Æ

Shirou stared at the corpse, breathing raggedly. Bakuya was still stuck inside its skull. Shirou still held Kanshou in his right hand. The blood was still dripping from it. Quietly, Shirou let the blade drop from his hand, releasing his grip on his Prana and letting both blades fade away.

Another kill to add to the list of deaths. All of them in a month.

It never got any easier.

æYou knew what it was like, didnÆt you, Father? You warned me- no. No, I must follow my ideals. Even if this must happen, I know that I am rightàÆ

A loud retching sound shook Shirou out of his stupor, and he looked up to see Ayako kneeling on the ground, wiping vomit from her mouth. The sight of her was horrible to Shirou. She was deathly pale, face and clothes covered in grime and RaphaelÆs blood. Shivers seemed to be running down her body, and soon enough she was retching again, unleashing the remains of the previous dinner on the cold asphalt.

Shirou took a step forward hesitantly, stepping over RaphaelÆs corpse. Ayako crawled backwards the moment she noticed him advancing, shaking her head wildly.

ôN-noà noà stay awayàö

Shirou grimaced. HeÆd not been expecting something like thisà

æBut then what the hell where you expecting, Emiya?Æ he thought to himself, æThat sheÆd congratulate you for dragging her into this?Æ

ôAyako, I-ô

The girl tried to get up at his words, apparently to run, but her shaking knees failed her, and she fell on her butt, shivering.

ôN-n-no! Wha- whatever it isà d-donÆt get me into it! I m-me-mean, Emiya, what the hell are you?ö

Shirou stopped in his tracks, cut to the quick by her words.


She said nothing more, simply continuing to shake her head again and again, as if trying to clear up a bad image from her mind. Shirou grimaced. Ayako wooked like she was about to go into shock from the mental trauma. He had to do something to snap her out of it.

He threw one last look at RaphaelÆs body. He didnÆt want to leave it here, but they needed to get out quickly before being found, and knowing how assassins like him operated, RapahelÆs body would be turning into dust in seconds anyway. Grimacing, Shirou made up his mind.


Sighing, he steeled himself and ran straight at Ayako, catching the scared girl in his arms and slinging her over his shoulder. Shaken out of her stupor, Ayako shrieked, arms and legs flailing out.

ôE-Emiya!ö she shouted, ôWhat- what are you doing!? Let me down!ö

Shirou simply held her tightly, saying nothing as he turned around and started running down the street with all the speed he could muster, Ayako still slung over his shoulder, beating her fists against his back in a futile attempt to resist.

ôL-let me down! Em-Emiya! Let me- EEEK!ö

Her protest turned into a scared shriek as Shirou rounded a corner and started running directly into the wall of a building, heedless of an incoming crash.

ôEMIYA, WATCH-ô

The warning was cut short as Ayako was forced to keep what little remained of her dinner inside her stomach as Shirou pushed prana up his legs and leaped up, placing his feet on the wall and running upwards, breaking all laws of gravity. She shrieked again as Shirou reached the edge of the roof and easily climbed over it, running along the length of the roof toà

ôN-no! E-Emiya- DONÆT JUMP OFF!ö

Shirou jumped, landing on another roof and continuing to run, ignoring AyakoÆs screams of fright and shrieks for help.

æDonÆt worry Ayakoà youÆll understandà hopefullyàÆ

The mad journey continued, with Shirou running across the length of the city, and then making his way downwards from the rooftops just as the skyscrapers of the city center came in sight, eventually landing in front of an abandoned warehouse less than a block away from his house and then running what little distance was left, not stopping before he found himself in front of the steel doors that marked the entrance to the terrain. Ayako was still struggling in his arms, albeit a lot more weakly than before.

ôEmiyaàö she muttered, ôplease just let me downà please.ö

Shirou, being himself, felt a pang in his heart at her pleading, and for a second was about to let her down, before stopping himself. He knew better than that.

He didnÆt want to prolong her discomfort, however, so he quickly walked through the entrance, across the surrounding lawn, and into the house, going in and locking the door immediately. He then marched into the living room, carefully depositing Ayako on a nearby couch. The moment the nearly sobbing girl noticed that she was free she made to get up and run, but froze the moment Shirou took a step forward.

ôEmiyaà l-let me g-goàö she pleaded, ôI promise... I promise that I wonÆt tell anyone whatà what you didàö

Shirou winced at the way she said it, as if he had committed some heinous crime.

æAnd in a way, I did, but it was necessary,Æ he asserted to himself, æRaphael would have brutalized heràÆ

And indeed, he would have, but Ayako didnÆt know that.

ôAyako,ö he said, ôplease, just let me explain-ô

The girl shook her head.

ôWhatà whatÆs th-there to explain, Emiya?ö she asked, ôYouà you kià you k-killed a m-man, b-but n-not just thatà y-you cut him o-open, likeà like an animalàö

She said nothing more, her face taking on a sickly, almost greenish tint. Shirou shot her a pained look as he realized how much damaged heÆd caused. However, there had been no other choice, and now all he could do was try to fix things, like he always did.

ôAyako, please, he was about to kill you. Justàö

ôY-you d-donÆt get it, Emiya,ö she said, cutting him off, ôthe way he screamedà and the bloodà there was so much b-bloodà on my face, my clothes, the groundà and on your hands, Emiya, there was so much blood on your handsà you looked like some kind of... some kind of... of monster!ö

Shirou flinched at her words, sincerely hurt. He shook his head and opened his mouth to speak, but Ayako cut him off once more.

ôAndà and the way you did it, Emiya, the way you fought,ö she said, ôthe swords, the lightà I saw you and that man onà on the roof, I saw when you fellàö

ôIà I d-donÆt know what you are, Emiyaà I donÆt think I know who you are anymoreà and I donÆt know what you did to make that man go after youà I donÆt know, and Ià I donÆt want to get involved. I justà I justàö

She looked at him with teary eyes, shaking her head ever so slightly.

ôI just want to go home, Emiyaà pleaseà please just let me go homeàö

Shirou sighed. That was what he wanted to do more than anything now, fix things perfectly, let Ayako go home, let her forget the whole ordeal, unable to be targeted by whatever new enemy had sent Raphael after him. He wanted that, but he knew it was impossible.

ôThatÆs the problem, Ayako,ö he told her, giving her a gentle, tranquilizing stare before looking away, ôI canÆt let you go home without telling you what you donÆt want to know. Now that youÆve seen it, now that IÆve dragged you intoà you must know. You have to know, or youÆll end up dying.ö

He looked at Ayako again. The girlÆs head was bowed, and she was shivering again. Slowly, she raised her head, looking at him with teary, bloodshot eyes.

ôJustà just what is it, Emiya?ö she asked, ôJust what could you possibly tell me that could change things?ö

Shirou felt a shiver run down the length of his spine, trepidation gripping his mind.

ôAyako, Iàö

He sighed again, one last time. He had to tell her. There was no other way.

ôI have a secret that I havenÆt told you.ö

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Comments, please?
 

marthf1

Well-Known Member
#19
Wow. So much emotion and action. Shiro has quite a bit of endurance, eh? Geez, first Rin got Shiro involved in the war, now I think Shiro has done the same to Ayako. Though no one was at fault, I suppose.

Hmm, I wonder what other people noticed, as I always miss things...
 

grant

Well-Known Member
#20
Good post, I especially liked the later interaction between Ayako and Shirou. If you had left out that kind of reaction this might have been a rant instead :yay: . So why will Raphael's body turn to dust? Does it have something in common with his psychotic Jeffrey Dahmerisc aspirations?
 

Skelethin

Well-Known Member
#21
Well done again.

I really do like how well you did with Ayako's reaction to Emiya killing Raphel right in front of her. The next question isn't so much what is her reaction to what Emiya is about to tell her, is what is she going to do once she has the knowledge? There is the obvious reason why 'innocents' and non-magicians are killed just for seeing one of them use their abilities even once.

Emiya is in for a tough time, working out what he has done, and what he will likely continue to need to do, to work with his ideals. It will be quite entertaining seeing him go through all this, especially now that he needs to explain it to someone who has no real idea what happened/he went through. Rin would be more likely to understand, at least some. Ayako I see still holding the world from a viewpoint very simliar to what Emiya had before the Grail war started.
 

Muramasa

Well-Known Member
#22
Very rare I get to read an FSN story this good!

It's obvious you have a lot of talent. Character interaction is solid and I don't see anything particularly wrong. Great job.

*grins*


:yay:
 

zeebee1

Well-Known Member
#23
I'm wondering how this will remain a oneshot.
 

Prince Charon

Well-Known Member
#24
Very, very interesting. I look forward to seeing how he'll explain all this to Ayako.

Thank you for updating.

More soon, please.
 
#25
:blink:

:hail: :hail: :hail: :hail: :hail:

That was incredible. VERY well done. Buckle up, Ayako, cuz you're in for one hell of a ride. ^_^

My big question would be where the hell did that last spiel our buddy Raphael spat out come from? You know, the whole:
but tell me, if you manage to survive this, what will you do when the time to sin truly comes and thereÆs no other way to fulfill your ideals than walking down the vilest paths?ö
I dunno, maybe (probably) it's just my lack of sleep, or just a lack of knowledge about what Shirou did in that mission that's throwing me off, but it feels kinda like he'd have to know a little too much about Shirou's life than even Shirou does.

I'm wondering how this will remain a oneshot.
It'll just be a very very very long one. Sweeeeeeet. :yay:

Can't wait for MOAR! :D
 
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