Here's what I have of chapter 2. expect more after
dinner. for those of you who might be wondering, this
is what happens when you are trying to come up with
story ideas while listening to Blue October. As always,
feedback much appreciated!
Divided Attentions
A Love Hina fanfic
By Exar
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Love Hina belongs to Ken Akamatsu, not me. I'm just
playing around with his characters a bit. I promise
I'll take care of them and put them back when I'm
done.
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Chapter Two
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Keitaro's heart shattered like glass. Tears burst
from his eyes as he stared at his teacher and his
former love.
"I don't understand," the Todai student whispered.
He fell to his knees, the broom clattering to the
ground beside him.
"Naru, why? I thought you gave up on Seta a long
time ago. I thought you liked me?"
Naru looked ready to start crying herself, and
Seta slipped an arm around her waist in silent
support.
"I thought I did, Keitaro. For a while, I might have
for real. But it was just a shadow of what I felt for
Seta. He's the measure I've been judging men by since
middle school. You..."
The brunette paused, her throat thick with emotion,
then continued. "You were just the man who came closest
to being my Seta. I'm so sorry, Keitaro."
Su and Sara stood off to the side, completely
overwhelmed by the drama playing out before them.
Uncharacteristically, they stood silent, watching.
Keitaro sniffled quietly and Naru stepped out of Seta's
embrace. She walked forward and wrapped her arms around
Keitaro's shoulders. He clutched at her like a drowning
man at a lifeline and started sobbing loudly.
The other residents came outside, drawn by the strange
noises and Sara's cry. They stood shocked at the sight
of Keitaro's breakdown and Naru comforting him physically.
Kitsune said, "What the hell is going on, Seta?"
The Todai teacher scratched the back of his head and
looked sheepish.
"We'll explain more in time, but the short version is that
Naru and I found we had more in common than we thought,
and we're kind of dating now. The part-timer, no, Keitaro
is taking about as hard as we were afraid of."
Kitsune's face fell at the word 'dating'. She'd never
even told Seta how she felt! Even though she held her
peace for Naru's sake, it was still hard to swallow. Feeling
guilty for her selfishness, Kitsune looked to Keitaro, still
sitting on the hard ground, crying. He seemed to be winding
down, having downgraded from his deep, gutteral sobs to a
more refined sniffling.
Shinobu ran up and all but shoved Naru off of Keitaro. She
threw her arms around the manager and held on for dear life,
stroking his hair and whispering soothing words. Naru stepped
back, the first beginnings of anger on her face, before she
seemed to remember herself and her features drooped with
grief. She walked back to Seta and leaned into his shoulder.
He wrapped one arm around her again.
Motoko strode towards Seta and Naru, clearly pretending not
to notice the display of weakness going on beside her. She
schooled her expression to one of neutrality and asked,
"Would you like to come in and have some tea. Perhaps we
could talk more openly in more comfortable environs. I'm
sure all of us have questions."
Seta frowned. "Actually, Motoko, I'm not so sure that's a
good idea. I think it would be better if we gave Keitaro a
little space and some time to come to grips with things. He
might have a hard time doing so with us here. We'll head to
my apartment in the city, and come back tomorrow. Sara, do
you want to stay here, or come home with Naru and I?"
Sara piped up, "I wanna go with you Poppa, I've missed you!"
Su could tell that the other girl's voice was a bit subdued.
She did like Keitaro, after all, and it was hard seeing him
hurt this bad.
Sara turned to Su. "Su, you wanna come stay at my house? I
have a lot of toys there we've never played with."
Su favored her friend with a thin smile while Kitsune
groaned and thought to herself, 'Yep, definitely Seta's kid.'
"I don't think so, Sara. I feel like staying here now.
Keitaro's my friend. I should be here." With that, she vaulted
over the other girls and joined Shinobu in holding the weeping
manager, though in her own inimitable manner.
Motoko cleared her throat and said, "You may be right, Seta.
In that case, be safe in your travels. You too, Narusegawa."
Naru's eyes narrowed. Motoko only called her that when she
was EXTREMELY displeased with her. Why did the Kendo girl care
so much about Keitaro?
Keitaro finally stopped crying and climbed to his feet,
flashing a sickly but still grateful smile at Shinobu and Su.
"Naru, I still don't understand how this happened, but I
suppose if you are certain you want this, I can try to be
happy for you."
Kitsune's eyes just about popped out of her head. The former
ronin was always incredibly forgiving, but this? And so soon?
'Naru, you idiot,' she thought. 'Keitaro is such a good guy,
how could you do this to him?
Naru was silent for a long moment, fresh tears running down
her face.
"Keitaro, I'm so very, very sorry. But yes, this is what I
want. What I have wanted for years. I didn't want to hurt
you like this, but I had to follow my heart. I had to..."
She trailed off, sobbing quietly, then tore herself free
from Seta's arm and ran down the stairs.
Seta scooped up Sara, then paused for a moment. He looked
Keitaro dead in the eye and said, "Sorry's not a big enough
word, part-timer. I just hope you can forgive me someday.
I give you my word, though. I will take care of her and
love her."
Keitaro and Kitsune both snapped at him, "You better!"
Seta rushed down the steps, carrying his daughter, their
angry remark nipping at his heels.
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dinner. for those of you who might be wondering, this
is what happens when you are trying to come up with
story ideas while listening to Blue October. As always,
feedback much appreciated!
Divided Attentions
A Love Hina fanfic
By Exar
__________________________________________
Love Hina belongs to Ken Akamatsu, not me. I'm just
playing around with his characters a bit. I promise
I'll take care of them and put them back when I'm
done.
__________________________________________
Chapter Two
__________________________________________
Keitaro's heart shattered like glass. Tears burst
from his eyes as he stared at his teacher and his
former love.
"I don't understand," the Todai student whispered.
He fell to his knees, the broom clattering to the
ground beside him.
"Naru, why? I thought you gave up on Seta a long
time ago. I thought you liked me?"
Naru looked ready to start crying herself, and
Seta slipped an arm around her waist in silent
support.
"I thought I did, Keitaro. For a while, I might have
for real. But it was just a shadow of what I felt for
Seta. He's the measure I've been judging men by since
middle school. You..."
The brunette paused, her throat thick with emotion,
then continued. "You were just the man who came closest
to being my Seta. I'm so sorry, Keitaro."
Su and Sara stood off to the side, completely
overwhelmed by the drama playing out before them.
Uncharacteristically, they stood silent, watching.
Keitaro sniffled quietly and Naru stepped out of Seta's
embrace. She walked forward and wrapped her arms around
Keitaro's shoulders. He clutched at her like a drowning
man at a lifeline and started sobbing loudly.
The other residents came outside, drawn by the strange
noises and Sara's cry. They stood shocked at the sight
of Keitaro's breakdown and Naru comforting him physically.
Kitsune said, "What the hell is going on, Seta?"
The Todai teacher scratched the back of his head and
looked sheepish.
"We'll explain more in time, but the short version is that
Naru and I found we had more in common than we thought,
and we're kind of dating now. The part-timer, no, Keitaro
is taking about as hard as we were afraid of."
Kitsune's face fell at the word 'dating'. She'd never
even told Seta how she felt! Even though she held her
peace for Naru's sake, it was still hard to swallow. Feeling
guilty for her selfishness, Kitsune looked to Keitaro, still
sitting on the hard ground, crying. He seemed to be winding
down, having downgraded from his deep, gutteral sobs to a
more refined sniffling.
Shinobu ran up and all but shoved Naru off of Keitaro. She
threw her arms around the manager and held on for dear life,
stroking his hair and whispering soothing words. Naru stepped
back, the first beginnings of anger on her face, before she
seemed to remember herself and her features drooped with
grief. She walked back to Seta and leaned into his shoulder.
He wrapped one arm around her again.
Motoko strode towards Seta and Naru, clearly pretending not
to notice the display of weakness going on beside her. She
schooled her expression to one of neutrality and asked,
"Would you like to come in and have some tea. Perhaps we
could talk more openly in more comfortable environs. I'm
sure all of us have questions."
Seta frowned. "Actually, Motoko, I'm not so sure that's a
good idea. I think it would be better if we gave Keitaro a
little space and some time to come to grips with things. He
might have a hard time doing so with us here. We'll head to
my apartment in the city, and come back tomorrow. Sara, do
you want to stay here, or come home with Naru and I?"
Sara piped up, "I wanna go with you Poppa, I've missed you!"
Su could tell that the other girl's voice was a bit subdued.
She did like Keitaro, after all, and it was hard seeing him
hurt this bad.
Sara turned to Su. "Su, you wanna come stay at my house? I
have a lot of toys there we've never played with."
Su favored her friend with a thin smile while Kitsune
groaned and thought to herself, 'Yep, definitely Seta's kid.'
"I don't think so, Sara. I feel like staying here now.
Keitaro's my friend. I should be here." With that, she vaulted
over the other girls and joined Shinobu in holding the weeping
manager, though in her own inimitable manner.
Motoko cleared her throat and said, "You may be right, Seta.
In that case, be safe in your travels. You too, Narusegawa."
Naru's eyes narrowed. Motoko only called her that when she
was EXTREMELY displeased with her. Why did the Kendo girl care
so much about Keitaro?
Keitaro finally stopped crying and climbed to his feet,
flashing a sickly but still grateful smile at Shinobu and Su.
"Naru, I still don't understand how this happened, but I
suppose if you are certain you want this, I can try to be
happy for you."
Kitsune's eyes just about popped out of her head. The former
ronin was always incredibly forgiving, but this? And so soon?
'Naru, you idiot,' she thought. 'Keitaro is such a good guy,
how could you do this to him?
Naru was silent for a long moment, fresh tears running down
her face.
"Keitaro, I'm so very, very sorry. But yes, this is what I
want. What I have wanted for years. I didn't want to hurt
you like this, but I had to follow my heart. I had to..."
She trailed off, sobbing quietly, then tore herself free
from Seta's arm and ran down the stairs.
Seta scooped up Sara, then paused for a moment. He looked
Keitaro dead in the eye and said, "Sorry's not a big enough
word, part-timer. I just hope you can forgive me someday.
I give you my word, though. I will take care of her and
love her."
Keitaro and Kitsune both snapped at him, "You better!"
Seta rushed down the steps, carrying his daughter, their
angry remark nipping at his heels.
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