Naruto Fight for the Future

Revan

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#1
I've been tinkering on this story for a while now, and now it's time to actually start writing. This is the first bit of the prologue, I have one other segment that will be focusing on Naruto after this one, and then a time-skip to when he receives his headband (which will probably be in the next chapter, haven't decided yet).

Summary: Uzumaki Naruto had a choice, to stand fast with the old order, or to join the revolution. He had to make it soon, though, as the weird-eyed member of Akatsuki didn't look like the patient sort.

Fight for the Future
Prologue


For Konoha, the winter months had a tendency to be short and dreary, but this day seemed to do its best to fight all expectations. Though late, the sun had yet to set. The few clouds that remained in the sky grew smaller as if being burned from existence. Though faint, the hustle and bustle of the market street could still be heard; merchants of exotic foods, trinkets, and many other products hawked their wares to the remaining shoppers hunting for good deals. The aromas of food being cooked could be smelled from all across the Hidden Village .

For the Third Hokage, it was the kind of day that reminded him why he had come out of retirement three years ago. Throwing the most recent memo from the Military Police onto a stack of similar documents piled high next to his desk, he stepped toward one of the many windows that lined the outer wall of his administrative office.

Sarutobi's eyes were drawn to a young girl as she jogged away from her team and jonin instructor. Long brown hair whipped in the wind around a long face with the red markings of the Inuzuka clan as she began to run, first on the street and then along a wall. His eyes crinkled in mirth as the kunoichi performed flashy but basic acrobatic feats along the walls and rooftops to an audience of awed children. Whooping and hollering, the pack of tykes followed the girl as best they could before she slide down a spiraling handrail and out of site. To be young and just learning how to climb walls and walk on water!

Chuckling, he turned his focus to the many squads of ninja traveling across Konoha's skyline. Groups of chunin and jonin moved quickly and silently along their assigned patrol routes. ANBU were on the move as well, some joining the chunin and jonin patrols, while others left the village in flickers of movement that Sarutobi kept track of easily.

Though he tried not to, his eyes were drawn to the four ANBU teams that were not moving. Standing still, the sixteen ninja were a silent, oppressive presence to the tall walls and austere buildings of the Hyuga compound. Sarutobi's mirth died a slow and painful death as he was reminded of what had happened the night before, what the village and the majority of the ninja under his command did not yet know. He let out a deep sigh, and felt all his years hit him at once. It was a tragedy, a crime and a shame, and likely all his fault.

The slight sound of displaced air was the only cue he needed. Closing the window, Sarutobi stared at the reflections of his closest confidants. ôReport.ö

Mitokado Homura stepped forward, loosening his thick, white shawl before beginning. ôThe treaty has bee signed, dated, and notarized by the Kumo delegation. Peace, of a sort, has been achieved.ö

ôOf a sort, indeed,ö Sarutobi said calmly. His eyes flickered to the reflection of his other, former teammate.

ôThe merchant guilds are clamoring for less taxes,ö said Utatane Koharu as she squinted at Sarutobi's reflection. ôOr a tariff on imported goods.ö She shrugged her shoulders. ôOne, or the other. Perhaps both.ö

The last of the three snorted in disgust. ôThey are overstepping themselves, again,ö said Shimura Danzo.

ôThey are merchants, Danzo, of course they'll stretch themselves too far.ö

ôYou know as well as I do that those guilds are controlled by the Uchiha Clan. Anything that they say is suspect.ö

ôPerhaps,ö said Sarutobi before the argument escalated. He motioned towards the stack of paper next to his desk. ôI have also received a request from Fugaku for additional funding after last night's incident.ö Silence met his statement. His eyes flickered again, this time focusing on his longtime friend and rival.

The former leader of Root reached into his robe. Removing a sealed scroll, he tossed it towards Sarutobi, who caught it without bothering to turn around. Quickly forming a chakra scalpel on the thumb of his free hand, he pricked his index finger. As the blood pooled on the top of the digit, he infused it with his chakra. Smearing the blood and chakra mixture over the seal broke it, and as the scroll unraveled he began to read; he finished quickly, the scroll was less than a half meter in length, and when done he threw it into the air. A one-handed Tora seal and a breath of fire later, and the scroll and its contents were no more than ash.

ôSo,ö said Sarutobi, ôThe Hyuga heir has been kidnapped, and her father lies on death's door. We know that it was Kumo who was responsible, but we lack the proof needed to justify burning our newest bridge to its foundation.ö He sighed, turning around and looking at his three advisers in turn. ôWhat would you suggest we do?ö

Homura pushed his glasses up his nose. ôI would first like to know what was written on that scroll.ö

ôNothing important,ö said Danzo, ôOnly what could be gleaned from the Kumo delegate.ö

The other elder's eyebrows knit together in confusion. ôWhat could be û you tortured him?ö

ôAnd how would such information be deemed unimportant,ö asked Koharu as she turned her gaze on Danzo.

The bandaged man shrugged his free shoulder. ôBecause while he was aware of such plots, he was not aware enough.ö Danzo snorted, in amusement or irritation, no one was able to tell which. ôThe man was kept perfectly in the dark about the operation. What little he knew was how much we knew prior to the kidnapping.ö

Homura and Koharu looked at each other, displeasure apparent on both their faces. ôAnd nothing could be gained from Hiashi's body?ö

Danzo shook his head. ôThe bruises match up with strikes from a taijutsu style native to the Land of Fire. The burns on his arms have been attributed to a lightning technique, while the crushed legs can be blamed on an earth one. The cuts on his body were caused by a weapon enhanced with wind chakra.ö

Homura's omnipresent frown deepened. ôNothing from Kiri or the Land of Water?ö

ôNo, though I imagine that the weapon used was made there.ö

ôThey can't expect us to believe such an obvious set-up?ö

ôOf course not,ö said Sarutobi, ôIt's the barest, thinnest of diversions, but enough of one that the Fire Lord will not allow us to risk open war.ö His eyes flickered to each person in turn. ôNor is it enough to earn his consent to a secret one.ö

ôPerhaps,ö said Danzo after a brief pause, ôYour former students could be called upon?ö

ôImpossible.ö

ôBut yet-ö

ôNo, Danzo. None of them can be called upon for this. Perhaps Jiraiya, but he will not be in contact for a fortnight.ö

ôHe is to visible, too well known,ö said Homura.

ôBut his network could provide the information we need.ö

Koharu glared at him. ôAnd who, exactly, would put that information to use? Tsunade? She has up and disappeared somewhere near the boarder with Ame, her and her apprentice!ö

Danzo's silence, however, told Sarutobi all he needed to know. ôNo. Absolutely not.ö

ôHis status as a traitor would only help us in this case, so would his,ö Danzo paused, a grimace forming on his face, ôTendencies.ö

ôNo,ö said Homura as he glanced at Sarutobi, ôOrochimaru is too unstable, too untrustworthy. How do we know he did not assist Kumo in the kidnapping in the first place?ö

ôHe is too egocentric to assist Kumo, if anything he would have taken the girl for himself.ö

Homura nodded, acquiescing to Danzo's point. He flinched back as the Hokage's flinty gaze turned on him. Swallowing, he said, ôPerhaps we should hold of on deciding this until later, the Uchiha as well?ö

Koharu raised her hand to cover her laugh at her friends discomfort. ôAgreed.ö Sarutobi's former teammates left the room with nary a sound.

Sarutobi glared at his rival, the command clear as day on his face.

Danzo coughed into his hand. ôI do have to ask, about the Jinchuriki-ö

ôNo.ö Sarutobi turned back towards the windows overlooking Konoha, closing his eyes as he did so. ôWe have already failed one young child, I refuse to condemn another to a similar fate.ö

ôOf course.ö The sound of displacing air signaled Danzo's departure, and as the smoke of the Body-Flicker dispersed, Sarutobi let out a deep sigh and opened his eyes to once again stare out across his home.
 

Meinos Kaen

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#2
Okay. So this starts just after the Hinata kidnapping crisis, with a few changes. I guess the Inuzuka girl was Hana, and I'm curious as to where this is going.
 

Revan

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#3
A few changes indeed.... :evil2:

Anyway, the Naruto scene I promised. There might be one more segment of the prologue left, I haven't decided yet.

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Uzumaki Naruto leaned forward and kicked off the ground, pushing the swing backwards. The chains clinked as they were pulled taught by the force and the weight of the young boy. In a move passed down on all playgrounds for generations, Naruto leaned backwards as the seat reached its apex, and held that position as it fell forward, only changing when it reached the apex on the other side of the wooden beam that served as the swing's pivot point. He kept up the back and forth motion, held in time to the back and forth motion of the swing itself, for a few more seconds before launching himself out of the seat and into the air. For a few precious moments, he flew, a wide grin across his face and a shriek of happiness held tight in his throat. He landed on his feet, but staggered forward as the momentum of the flight and landing bleed off. Turning around, he crooned in excitement; he'd passed his previous best distance by at least a meter.

Naruto glanced to the other side of the playground and scowled at the gaggle of other children who were screaming and yelling as they chased each other around the jungle gym. They were playing ninja. Naruto wanted to play ninja, but the other kids had not let him. They never invited him to join their games, and whenever he tried to join on his own they kicked him out. In retaliation, Naruto took the lone swing set in the playground as his. The other children whined, to their parents, to their older siblings, and to each other, but none of it kept Naruto from taking control of the swings whenever they did not let him play with them.

He did not mind, at least top much. All children everywhere knew that swings were the best toy on the playground, so being able to monopolize it whenever he wanted always made him happy. He wasn't deterred by never having a partner, he could kick off hard enough to get the seat over some of the other children's heads û he'd done it before when they had tried to grab the seat and chains to knock him off.

As he flew threw the air again, Naruto's eyes wandered over the other kids again, but this time they widened in shock. His distraction caused him to face plant his landing, but Naruto did not care. That kid, the boy with the red triangles on his face and the slitted eyes was playing ninja! Why'd they let that weirdo join when they wouldn't let him?

Growling, he forced himself up, and stalked towards the group, who noticed him coming and stopped playing. ôWhat do you want, dummy,ö said one of them, a boy with black hair and eyes who glared at Naruto, ôCan't you see were playing here!ö

Naruto pointed a finger at the weird looking boy, who blinked in response to the attention. ôWhy'd you let him join and not me!ö

ôCause he isn't you, idiot,ö drawled one of the girls in a group.

ôBut he looks funny!ö The other children shrugged. ôAnd he smells!ö

ôNo I don't,ö yelled the boy in question. Pushing the other kids out of the way, he stomped towards Naruto with a scowl on his face. Crossing his arms over his chest, he glared down at the slightly smaller boy. ôI take a bath every day!ö

ôNuhuh, you smell worse than a wet dog!ö

The other boy's scowl deepened. ôI have to help out at my clan's vet and animal shelter, of course I smell like a dog!ö

One of the girls grabbed the sleeve of his shirt, a large grin on her face. ôDoes that mean you get to play with all the puppies and kitties there, Kiba-kun?ö

The other boy, Kiba, grimaced. ôOnly when I'm done walking them, washing them, and cleaning up after them.ö His face lit up in a wide smile. ôBut after all that, I can play with them as much as I want!ö

As the other children started asking Kiba questions about the vet and shelter his clan was in charge of, Naruto glared at them all. A growl escaped his throat. It wasn't fair! They were supposed to kick Kiba out of their group, not get excited that he spent his days playing with puppies and kitties. Naruto focused his glare on Kiba, who was laughing and smiling. He was the one at fault; if he hadn't opened his mouth then the other kids would have sent him away! And then they would have accepted Naruto into their group.

Perhaps he should be hurt?

Yeah, that sounds like a good idea.

Naruto let lose a yell and lunged toward the target of his frustration and anger, and with all the strength he could muster he punched Kiba across the face, knocking the slightly larger boy to the ground. Ignoring the shrieks of the other children as they scattered from the duo, Naruto pounced onto Kiba before he could stand. The red marks on the other boy's face provided convenient targets for Naruto's punches. In his haste, however, Naruto had not thought to try and pin Kiba, who used his hips and legs to through Naruto off.

Snarling, Naruto rushed his opponent again, but was knocked back by a punch and kick combination. Disoriented, he didn't notice when his arm was grabbed and pulled into a painful lock behind his back. Before he could attempt to retaliate, Kiba kicked the back of his knees dropping him to the ground. Tears started to well up in his eyes as the pain from the arm-lock increased.

ôKIBA!ö

Both boys paused at the shout, and looked up; Kiba yelped in surprise, letting go of Naruto's arm, and started to stammer to the person in front of them.

She was tall, with long, spiky brown hair, black eyes with vertical slit-like pupils, and the same red triangle marks on her face that Kiba had on his. Her purple lips were in a frown as she glared down at both boys. The black suit and green flak jacket marked her as a ninja of Konoha, though she lacked the headband Naruto had come to expect to represent Konoha's military.

ôAnd what,ö she growled, ôExactly is going on here.ö It was not a question, but a command, and both Naruto and Kiba felt a shiver go down their spines at the cold tone of the woman before them.

Despite this, neither boy spoke. Instead, they both shuffled their feat and did their best to avoid meeting the angry woman's eyes. ôWell,ö she drawled, tapping the fingers of her right hand on her thigh, ôI'm waiting.ö

Finally, Kiba spoke up. ôWe were fighting.ö

ôReally? I had no idea.ö She pointed at Kiba's face, and then at Naruto. ôIt's not like you don't have a split lip, or weren't holding his arm in a lock I specifically told you not to use.ö

Kiba scartched the back of his neck, looking dejected. ôSorry,ö he mumbled.

One of the lady's eyebrows rose. ôI'm not the one you should be apologizing to, but first.ö She looked at Naruto. ôWho are you, runt?ö

Naruto glared up at the woman. ôI'm not a runt, you old hag!ö

The lady's eyes narrowed at him. ôMy name, runt, is Inuzuka Tsume.ö She motioned her head towards Kiba, who was trying, and failing, to stifle his laughter. ôAnd that brat you decked û which I still haven't forgive you far, by the way û happens to be my son.ö Tsume cracked the knuckles on both her hands, a terrifying sneer spreading across her face. ôNow, before I grind your bones to dust, who are you?ö

Naruto swallowed, suddenly nervous. ôUzumaki Naruto,ö he mumbled, eyes downcast as he fidgeted.

Though he did not notice, Tsume paused. Eying the young boy in front of her, she relaxed her body and stepped forward until she was right in front of him. Kneeling down, she reached out and grabbed his chin, forcing his head up. Ignoring his questioning look, she moved his head around.

ôUzumaki Naruto, eh?ö Tsume let go, and sat down on the ground. ôSo,ö she said, ôWhy exactly did you attack my Kiba?ö

He didn't respond for a few moments, but then mumbled, ôCause the other kids let him play ninja.ö

An eyebrow rose. ôSo you were jealous?ö

Naruto scowled and glared at the ground. ôThey never let me play ninja with them.ö

Tsume made a noncommittal noise in the back of her throat. Looking up, she motioned Kiba forward. When he was sitting next to Naruto, she said, ôWell, I'm sure if you apologize to my son, he'll apologize to you for putting you in that arm lock.ö She made eye-contact with both boys. ôAgreed?ö

Kiba and Naruto looked at each other and nodded. ôI'm sorry for punching you in the face,ö said Naruto.

Kiba nodded. ôAnd I'm sorry for using that move to hurt you.ö

Tsume closed her eyes and smilled. ôNow that that's settled, friends?ö When the two boys didn't make a move, she opened her eyes a bit, her smile became strained, and forcefully said, ôFriends?ö

The two looked at each other. Gulping, they reached out and shook hands. Tsume relaxed, her grin returning to a more natural state.

ôJust so you know,ö said Kiba as the two continued to shake, ôI totally would've won that fight.ö

Naruto yanked his hand out of Kiba's grasp, stood up and pointed at the other boy. ôWhat! No way! I was about tot urn everything around before your mom showed up!ö

ôNo way!ö

ôYes way! I'm stronger than you! I would've won!ö

ôJust knocked me on my butt doesn't mean you're stronger than me!ö

ôYes it does!ö

ôNo it doesn't!ö

ôyes it does, and I'll prove it!ö And with that, Naruto jumped on Kiba again, knocking him to the ground.

Tsume stared as the two boys rolled on the ground, raining punches on the other while the growled and yelled insults. She hung her head, sighing in exasperation. ôIn one ear and out the other.ö

When the two rolled by her again, Tsume lashed out with her hands, grabbing a hold of the back of both their necks and yanking the two apart. Standing up, she shook both of the boys, hard. ôNo. More. Fighting.ö

ôGot it mom.ö

ôGot it, hag.ö

Scowling, Tsume shook Naruto one more time before dropping the boys back onto the ground. As the two collected themselves, she said, ôKiba, where's your sister?ö

ôOver here, mom!ö

The trio looked over to the other side of the playground. Naruto gasped. A girl who looked like Kiba but with longer, straighter hair was standing upside down on the swing set! How was she doing that?

Tsume blinked and motioned for the girl to come join them. ôHuh, guess your sensei started you on tree climbing earlier than usual.ö

Naruto's face scrunched up in confusion. ôWhat does tree climbing have to do with standing upside down on something?ö

The young girl chuckled as she dropped to the ground, landing in a handstand. With a slight push of her arms, she did a front flip and landed on her feet perfectly before jogging over. ôI'll tell you later, kido.ö

ôReally nee-chan,ö shouted Naruto in excitement, ôWhen?ö

ôWhen you have one of these,ö she said as she pointed to the Konoha headband wrapped around her shoulder. At naruto's dejected look, she laughed again. ôAren't you the adorable one! Much more so than my brother, at any rate.ö

Kiba glared at the girl. ôWhatever, Hana.ö

Hana leaned over Kiba, nostrils flaring, and a look of disgust appeared on her face. ôHe also smells better than you do; when was the last time you took a bath, bro?ö

Kiba squawked while Naruto laughed. Tsume sighed, shaking her head in exasperation. ôCome on,ö she said, ôLet's go home. Kiba, your taking a bath before dinner, are we clear?ö

Kiba grumbled an affirmative, and started following Tsume and a giggling Hana before stopping. Looking over his shoulder at Naruto, he said, ôYou coming, or what?ö

Naruto blinked owlishly. ôReally?ö

ôSure, you're my friend, right?ö Kiba shrugged, looking at his mom. ôIs it okay if Naruto comes with us?ö Tsume lifted her arm and gave him a thumbs-up. ôSee? It's okay.ö

Naruto nodded his head dumbly. Jogging to catch up to his new friend, he couldn't help but think that today was the best day ever.
 

zeebee1

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#4
You know, as much as I'm interested in what's happening to Naruto I'm more concerned about Hinata. Assuming this is Kumo they'll probably try brainwashing and will definitely go for rape. If it wasn't Kumo her situation will be worse.
 

Revan

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#5
Hinata's gonna suffer. Not because I hate her, but because I really want to mess with Hanabi instead.
 

zeebee1

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#6
I expected as much. I also have to wonder. If some kids with Hyuuga eyes start popping up outside of Konoha the next war will start ahead of schedule. The main reason the next war hasn't started is because they don't have enough proof. But if Kumo is responsible for this then they will be showing off their proof before the summit.

Now that I think of it you basically admitted that Hinata will be brainwashed.
 

Revan

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#7
Hm, did I?

Next bit should be up relatively soon, and this one focuses on Tsunade.
 

Revan

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#8
I seem to be on something of a roll, so expect the rest of this to be up later today.

I approached this segment differently than the others, and I like the result a lot more. I'm definitely going to be rewriting the previous sections to get them more in line with this one.

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The inn had a humble beginning. Built near the boarder of the Land of Earth following the First Shinobi World War, it was meant to serve as a waypoint for travelers and the odd merchant or two. Its founder, a retired Konoha shinobi named Jiro, had desired a place that was out of the way enough to avoid the traffic of the major roads between the two nations so he could enjoy his retirement in peace. His choice of constructing the inn at the conjunction of two minor roads and an old caravan path would prove to not be the best decision.

As the years of peace moved on, an ever increasing amount of economic ties were made between the nobles Earth and Fire. The merchants under their command, looking to cut costs wherever they could, began to use older, less traveled routes to transport their goods. At first it was a trickle, but when word spread of the convenient crossroads, Jiro's inn became flooded with merchants and their entourage.

Although resentful, Jiro did not miss the opportunity this presented. Hiring many of his former comrades from the war, he expanded his inn in size and scope. It literally changed overnight from a small, somewhat ramshackle building to a pristine, four story domicile that could house hundreds per night. Stables were built, food stores were expanded, wells dug, and contracts were signed with Konoha to provide a constant security force of ninja.

Like moths to a flame, people looking for opportunity and wealth traveled to Jiro's inn, and began to settle around it. Blacksmiths and tailors, farmers and ranchers, lawyers and doctors. Very soon, the crossroads had evolved into a small but bustling town, all centered around the inn that had started it all. So when it was decided that a name had to be attached to the collective, Jirozushi was the first, last, and only choice.

As the decades marched on, the city continued to grow. The Second Shinobi World War did little to break the flow of immigrants. If anything, they accelerated it as Jirozushi was soon close to the boarders of three satellite nations and Hidden Villages formed during and after the Second War: The Land of Grass, Amegakure, and Takigakure. It's proximity to the front lines during the Third Shinobi World War turned the city into one of the primary staging points for Konoha and allied forces, necessitating even more expansion.

Through it all, the inn û now named after its founder Jiro û that had been the gene seed remained.

For Tsunade, however, very little of this history mattered to her. She knew it, had even lived it during the Second War, but it was pointless knowledge to the buxom blonde. Knocking back another mouthful of sake, reveling in the burning sensation it left behind as it ran down her throat, she let out a loud belch that shook the bottles behind the bar. The other customers ignored her; it wasn't the first time she had ignored good drinking etiquette that night, and was unlikely to be the last.

The young looking woman tilted her head back as she poured the rest of the bottle down her throat, shaking it to make sure she didn't miss any of its precious liquid. Certain it was now empty, Tsunade held it upside down in front of her face, signaling the barkeep that it was empty, and that she wanted another.

The heavyset man that slid over had a scowl on his face as he eyed the empty bottle. Reaching under the counter, he produced another and set it down in front of the blonde. When she made to reach for it, however, he did not let go. ôYou've gone through twenty of my best already,ö he said, gripping the bottle tighter as he did so, ôClear your tab, or I'm cutting you off for the night.ö

Tsunade glared at him, hand clenching tight enough to crack the empty bottle she still held. Smirking, she applied a bit more pressure and shattered it. Shards flew as her neighboring customers fled. Her eyes flicked to both sides as she felt the sudden presence of the chuunin bouncers surround her. She met the gaze of the barkeep, who hadn't flinched at all during the spectacle. Growling in frustration, she dropped hands to her waist and the purse that was attached to it. ôFine, how much do I owe?ö

Without missing a beat, the barkeep replied, ô37,000 for the bottles, this one included. Required gratuity of 5,000.ö His eyes flickered to the mess of shards along his bar. ôAnd an extra 1,000 for cleaning up your mess.ö

Her glare deepened as she added everything up. Tsunade was tempted, oh so very tempted, to wipe that calm look off the man's face. But she knew she couldn't do that with the chuunin squad around her, at least not without revealing who she was, and causing massive amounts of property damage. Neither one was something Tsunade wanted. She had finally been able to ditch the old monkey's minders a few months ago, and she was in no hurry to get back on his radar. There was also Shizune to consider, who had been so patient with her master as they had trekked through woods and backwater villages since giving their watchers the slip. The girl deserved some time to reacquaint herself with civilization after all of that.

Sighing, Tsunade pulled out a wad of bills. Counting out the exact amount she owed, she slammed the stack down on the counter before pushing towards the barkeep. Letting go of the unopened bottle, he recounted the money, holding some of the bills up to a light to check for counterfeits. Nodding in approval, he motioned for the chuunin squad to disperse as he meandered towards the other side of the bar.

The presence of ninjas had disappeared, only to be replaced by the stares of the other patrons. Glaring around her, Tsunade got up from the bar and stalked over to the many booths that littered the walls of the bar. As she entered one, she grabbed a hold of the curtains on either side and threw them shut, blocking the stares and shrouding her in darkness. She waited until the sounds of the bar picked up again before sitting down on the carpeted floor and leaning back against the wall, grabbing a few pillows to make herself comfortable. With a lazy hand seal, she shot a small jet of fire at the lone candle to light it, before opening the bottle with her thumb.

Sipping the drink, Tsunade cursed the barkeep, the chuunin squad, her old teacher, and, most importantly, herself. Her current binge had cost her too much; she barely had enough cash left to pay for the room at the inn, let alone any of the things that Shizune would want to do while in town. Her apprentice would be disappointed in her, again, and that it was the anniversary of Dan's death would be of no help; if anything, it would only make Shizune pity her master instead.

Tsunade didn't want that. She hated pity, but she hated disappointing her pseudo-daughter even more. One would think she would've gotten used to it by now, since even after years of traveling together that was always what ended up happening. Grimacing, she swallowed a few mouthfuls of sake. Maybe I can find some work in this place?

Even before leaving Konoha, rich merchants and nobles were always falling over their feet to get the legendary Tsunade to be their personal doctor, if only for a day. When she left, Tsunade had felt that it was high time to start doing things her way. And while that was true, selling her hard earned medical knowledge and skills had left a bad taste in her mouth. The whole process made her feel like a whore, albeit a very well paid one; the funds gained from curing the son of a highly regarded noble in the Fire Lord's court of his pneumonia had lasted the two kunoichi for almost half a year.

Tsunade paused in her drinking and contemplation as a shadow of something fell over her alcohol-addled mind. Frowning, she glanced around her, not noticing anything different about the booth. Leaning over, she slightly opened the curtain and peered at the bar. Again, nothing seemed out of place. Scowling now, she stepped out of the booth and left the bar, making her way towards the entrance of the inn. Tucking the bottle of sake under her arm, she flashed through a series of handseals. When finished the haze caused by her binge disappeared completely. Mind now sharp and focused, Tsunade allowed her feet to lead her around the inn and deeper into the city.

Someone had cast a genjutsu on her, and not a particularly good one at that. Either it's some idiot trying to make a name for themselves, or someone wants to talk. She hoped it was the former, but either way whomever was responsible was going to get beaten into the ground. Hard. Consequences be damned.
 

Revan

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#9
Tsunade kicking some ass, and a hopefully unexpected appearance.

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As she entered the warehouse district she felt the genjutsu lift. Eying her surroundings, she noticed a figure standing in the middle of one of the loading zones for caravans. He was tall, with medium length black hair that was kept from his eyes by a forehead protector. He wore a regulation jumpsuit and a flak jacket, though without the typical pouches used to hold scrolls or other tools of the trade. He was also lacking in any obvious weapons, not even a kunai or shurinken holster. As Tsunade walked towards the man, she was able to discern the stylized clouds on the headband, and the scratched in line that ran through them.

Missing nin, great. Scum that traitors were, rarely were they stupid enough to provoke anyone needlessly. Though she was hankering for a fight, she began to wonder why this ex-Kumo-nin had decided to bother her.

She also carefully ignored the voice in her head that told her she was technically a missing-nin as well. There would be plenty of time in the future to contemplate that particular and unfortunate fact.

Tsunade stopped roughly a dozen meters away from the stranger. ôSo,ö she said, crossng her arms under her breasts and giving the man a lazy glare, ôWhat did you call me out here for?ö

ôMy Master wished to speak with you, Tsunade-sama.ö His tone was quiet and respectful. He met her glare with his own gaze; his dark brown eyes met Tsunade's lighter ones without a hint of fear or worry, but instead a calm confidence. ôHe has a proposition for you.ö

Tsunade snorted. ôGreat, another ancient codger that wants me to cure his ails. Better hope he's willing to pay out the ass for this stunt, brat, or it'll be coming out of your ass. ö

ôMy master is very insistent on hiring you, Tsunade-sama, price is no object.ö

ôGreat. Lead me to him then and-ö

ôHowever, he wishes to see your skills tested beforehand.ö

Tsunade's eyes narrowed. Lowering her arms so they hung by her side, she began to flood her body with chakra, reinforcing muscles and joints. ôAnd which skills would those be?ö

ôAll of them.ö The man's eyes snapped open and he fell into a taijutsu stance. Not even a half-second later and he was rocketing forward, closing the distance between them at a breakneck speed.

Tsunade dropped to the ground, chakra enhanced fists hit the stone and shattered it around the Sannin. A kick sent one of the larger blocks flying at her attacker, who dodged the impromptu missile with ease. It cost him forward momentum, however, which Tsunade used to throw herself backwards to widen the gap between the two ninja. She landed in front of a weighing station in a crouch, quickly standing up and entering her own taijutsu stance.

His form favored the backleg, that means speed is the key. Probably a variant of Northern Lightning that's heavy on the kicks and jabs. His hands are in a perfect position to start making handseals too, so he likely has an affinity for air, lightning, or fire; air's out since he doesn't have a weapon and forming air around a body part is a bitch in the middle of combat, so that leaves fire or lightning. Tsunade gave a savage grin. Let's find out which.

Her thoughts ended as soon as the other ninja entered her striking distance, almost three seconds after she'd kicked the stone block at his face. Tsunade's hands flashed out, grabbing a hold of the man's foot and halting the kick aimed at her head. With a pivot, she attempted to bash him against the weighing station, but a seamless substitution ended with a stone block in her grasp instead. Lifting it like one might a sword, Tsunade finished making a complete turn. Catching the eye of her opponent, she smirked. With a heav, she sent the block hurtling towards him at speeds faster than most people, and most ninja, would not have been able to follow. Channeling more chakra to her legs, she kicked off the ground and followed her improvised weapon at a run.

Her opponent's eyes widened in shock, and his hands quickly flashed through a series of handseals. He was not quick enough, however, for Tsunade to not see which ones he made: Tiger, Monkey, Boar, Horse, and Tiger again. Tsunade's smile took a grim tone. Gotcha.

ôFire Release: Great Fireball Technique!ö

Even before he had finished releasing his ninjutsu, Tsunade had jumped onto the flying stone block. Sticking her hands and feet to the flat side, she used her body to shift the block to better protect her body as it flew threw the large fireball. Laughing, she detached herself from the block. Gathering chakra into her fist, she punched it, the force of the impact blasting the encroaching flames away from her body, and shattering the large block into much smaller pieces that were hurtled towards her opponent at an even greater speed than before.

The man somehow managed to avoid all the debris, which suited Tsunade just fine. Landing into a roll to reduce her momentum, she rose up into an uppercut that hit her opponent's chin. Her smirk of victory was snuffed out when, instead of feeling contact with human skin, she felt the release of chakra. A popping noise and the appearance of smoke clued her in to what kind of clone she had destroyed. Raking her eyes over the battlefield, she caught sight of her opponent just as he let loose a bullet made of fire.

Grimacing, Tsunade held her ground at the oncoming attack. Raising her right hand, she cut off the nerve endings on her entire arm. A few seconds later and she caught the fire bullet. Tsunade let it burn her hand and forearm for a few moments before forming a one-handed Tiger seal and spitting out a bullet of water, dousing the flames.

ôWhy did you do that?ö Tsunade looked to her left at her opponent, whose visage reminded her so much of a confused puppy that she had to stifle a giggle from escaping her throat. ôYou could have dodged it; instead, you blocked it with your hand, willingly allowing it to be burned to near uselessness. Why?ö

Tsunade raised a delicate eyebrow, a mocking smile on her face. ôDidn't your boss want to see all of my skills?ö Turning her head away from him, she focused on her damaged hand. Gathering chakra into her undamaged hand, she activated the Mystical Palm Technique and ran it over the damaged tissue.

Medical ninjutsu were something of a double-edged sword. While techniques like Mystical Palm allowed for the recipients body to hasten the healing process by allowing for new cell growth to close wounds and heal almost any injury, they did so by lowering the person's life expectancy. Cells can only be divided so many times before cell degradation lead to the inevitable death of the organism. For most ninja, this was more of a career hurdle than an actual danger to their life; monthly checkups were required by most of the hidden villages for its ninja corps, and members who were showing signs of slowing down due to general health and past injuries were assigned less physically intensive mission, or even forced into retirement. This was why the majority of combat ninja were in their teens and early twenties û they had yet to receive career debilitating treatment for their injuries. There were exceptions to the norm, but they tended to be the 'once in a generation genius', or just that damn lucky.

When Tsunade was beginning her study of medical ninjutsu she was determined that none of her patients would be forced into early retirement because she healed their injuries. She threw herself into learning not just the techniques, but also the human body. Genetics, evolution, physiology, epidemiology, and nutrition were but some of the fields that she became an unquestionable expert in on her path to master human biology and medicine.

The result of all her studying was a medic ninja who did not simply perform the techniques, but was able to heal individual cells without forcing them to divide. When Tsunade applied the Mystical Palm to an injury, she used the precise amount of chakra needed to reconstruct the damaged cells one by one. More than anything else, this was what made Tsunade a legend.

Looking at pink, healed skin with a critical eye, nodding when she didn't notice any more damaged skin. Deactivating the healing technique, she threw a cocky look at the other ninja. ôAnything else?ö

Before the man could respond, a boisterous laugh filled the square. Another person appeared next to the former Kumo shinobi without a sound. ôYou're as good as expected, Tsunade-sama,ö said an upbeat male voice.

Tsunade studied the newcomer. He was wearing a short, black robe with a green trim, dark pants, and a black and white belt. A hood was raised over his head, casting a shadow over the top half of his face that hid it from view. A wide smile could be seen on his face, and if the sun was out Tsunade had the distinct feeling that his teeth would be glinting.

ôSir-ö

The grinning man waved a hand. ôYou can go now, you've accomplished exactly what I wanted you to. I wont be long, so go on ahead to the meeting point, 'kay?ö The former Kumo-nin hesitated, before nodding a disappearing with a seamless Body Flicker. ôSorry about that, his stoicy-ness and all. I'm trying to get him to stop being such a stick in the mud, but nothing's taken yet.ö

Tsunade glanced bemusedly at him. ôHe seemed quite taken with you, called you his 'Master'.ö

He laughed again, scratching the back of his head. ôReally? Damn, gotta up the ante.ö An easy smile came across his face. ôHe is right, though I prefer being a 'leader' to a 'master'; too many bad connotations.ö

ôWell then, Leader-sama,ö Tsunade drawled, ôWhat did you want to talk to me about.ö

The man hummed under his breath, reaching into his robe and pulling out a storage scroll. He tossed it at Tsunade. ôA proposition.ö

Tsunade caught the scroll, eyebrow raised in question. ôAnd that proposition would be?öAll the other man was grin, motioning with his hands for her to continue. Rolling her eyes, she snapped open the scroll, which automatically expelled its contents into Tsunade's hands.

It was a cloak, long and black with wide sleeve and a red trim. If her fingers were anything to go by, it was also armored and contained numerous pockets and pouches of various sizes. What caught Tsunade's attention, however, were the blood red clouds that covered the cloak, front and back.

Looking back up at the man, confusion plain to see on her face. His grin grew even wider, and he threw back his hood to reveal a head of spiky orange hair. Tsunade met his gaze, bright blue eyes seemingly looking into her very soul.

ôPeace, Tsunade-sama. My proposition is peace.ö
 

Revan

Well-Known Member
#10
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Lord Kawamoto was what many would disparagingly refer to as a ôModern Nobleö. Despite his advanced age, the large and balding man was a quintessential example of what the nobility had become following the founding of the Hidden Villages barely century ago. His bulk was not the muscles that was expected of a samurai lord, but instead layers of fat that hid rolls within rolls. Although his clan's swords hung at his belt, they were less a deadly weapon in his hands, and more a glorified carving knife. He rarely concerned himself with the intricacies of running his domain. Instead, he spent his days indulging in music and poetry, of which he was admittedly a master.

His appetites were extravagant. Taking the fullest advantage of his domain's location along the eastern coast of the Land of Hot Water, Kawamoto ordered only the finest, most exotic goods to be brought to his table. Food and drink, and women, constantly filtered through the massive dinning room that served dual purpose as his throne room; the sight of the overly large man lounging on a golden and velvet couch plucking sushi off the body of a nude, young woman was not an uncommon one for the various courtiers and visitors. Many couldn't handle themselves, especially when Kawamoto began to sample the young women as well, leading to the man holding court less often, which suited him just fine.

This night was not an exception. Dinner had been an exceptionally excessive affair, but the centerpiece had been the young woman brought for Lord Kawamoto. She was a lithe girl, with a well toned, albeit exceptionally pale, body that spoke of consistent physical activity of some sort. Her hair was long and black, the forelocks partially covering her amber colored eyes and oddly shaped pupils. An enigmatic smile was on her face from the beginning, though some who spied on her throughout the evening swore they saw a cruel smirk adorn her face instead.

Kawamoto had been entranced as soon as his eyes laid upon her. He quickly feasted on the food that covered her form before ordering her to join him on his couch. All through dinner and after he plied his talents in haiku, crafting new poems that praised her raven colored hair, eyes of gold, and flawless skin û the scribe that followed Kawamoto specifically to write down any new poems that came to him filled an entire scroll, front and back, with his master's work. She swooned and giggled when appropriate, and when his large hand and sausage-like fingers came to rest along the curve of her hip, she only smiled up at him and leaned into his side.

Dinner had come and gone, desert had been eaten, and when it was obvious that Lord Kawamoto was more interested in sampling the young thing at his side than resting, guests were led away and the table cleared. Hours had passed since, the light of the stars and moon filtered through the high windows, barely illuminating the lord and his prize.

She moaned as his hands trailed down her back and cupped her buttocks. ôKawamoto-sama, please.ö

ôPlease what, my pet,ö he said, leering down at her form. Her front was pressed firmly against his body û he could feel the slight swell of her breasts through his clothes û and her head was thrown back, allowing him to see the clenched eyes and the small mouth that was barely open. He traced his right hand around her thigh, resting it in front of her womanhood. Slowly, he entered her with his middle finger.

She gasped, before letting out a guttural moan that sent shivers down his spine. ôPlease, Kawamoto-sama, don't take me here.ö He felt her tighten around his finger, gyrating her hips against his hand. ôWouldn't it better in your bed; after all, I am a virgin.ö

Kawamoto's eyes gleamed; he hadn't tasted a virgin in so long. She was right, it would be best to have her in his chambers. ôNinja,ö he snapped out, ôEscort my guest to my my private chambers.ö His eyes glanced to the right, spying the sleeping form of his scribe. ôAnd wake that lazy wretch and get him to draw me a bath.ö

ôI will see you soon, Kawamto-sama,ö said the girl, carefully pronouncing every syllable of his name.

He shivered again. ôAnd I you, my pet.ö

Escaping his grasp, the black-haired girl sent a smokey look at the lord, giggling at the wanton lust that spread across his face. Slowly, she strutted towards the door of the room where the shinobi guard waited. A wicked grin spread across her face as she felt the eyes of Kawamoto track her progress. Over indulgent fool.

She heard a derisive snort. Her eyes snapped up to look at the shinobi; he was of average height with a slandered jumpsuit and Yugakure issue flak jacket and forehead protector. ôIs there a problem, shinobi-san?ö

The guard rolled his eyes and opened the door for her to the long hallway that ran throughout this level of the castle. When they both left, he locked it behind him and started walking down it. She followed him, a fox-like grin making its way to her face as she studied the guards back.

A few moments of quiet passed before the guard broke the silence. ôYou're just another notch for him.ö

A delicate eyebrow was raised in question, and a smirk came to her face. ôOh,ö she said playfully, ôI was so hoping I'd last more than a single night for Kawamoto-sama.ö

The shinobi snorted again and looked over his shoulder at his temporary charge. ôHe's had girls like you before. He will spend the night, perhaps a week, with you before growing bored and hunting down his next meal.ö

She covered her mouth as she giggled. ôBut I have so many flavors, shinobi-san.ö

ôDoesn't matter,ö he said, turning his head forwards. ôKawamoto will have you, he will break you, and then he will discard you.ö

A wide smile appeared on her face. ôI rather enjoy it, the breaking that is.ö

ôbut didn't you tell him that you're a virgin?ö

She couldn't see his face, but she could just imagine the confusion on his face as he said that,a dn was unable to control her laughter. ôI never said it was the hymen I enjoyed breaking.ö

ôWha-ö

She did not let the Yugakure ninja finish. Stepping forward quickly, she snapped her arms upwards towards his head. Channeling chakra into them allowed the appendages to stretch to an abnormal length. Grasping a hold of his head, she violently twisted the shinobi's neck until his face was facing her own.

ôTrash,ö she whispered, dropping the dead body to the floor. Retracting her arms as she stepped towards the corpse, she rummaged through the pouches on his flak jacket until she found the rectangular block of wood that was the seal key to the office of Kawamoto's primary adviser and steward.

Not bothering to hide the body, she ran towards and up the high walls until she reached one of the open windows. Grabbing onto the edge, she flipped herself through it. Using chakra, she stuck to the outside walls of the castle, racing upwards to the highest floor where the office was located.

She stopped herself cold when she reached another window. Peeking inside, she smirked at not seeing any posted sentries. Hopping through the window, she landed with a crouch in front of the office door. Channeling chakra through the seal key, she placed it on the door. After a few moments, a click was heard as the lock disengaged. Widely grinning, she pushed open the double doors to the office, and was met with a robe thrown at her face.

ôYou look disgusting, Orochimaru, put that on before I vomit.ö

Scowling, Orochimaru glared at her former teammate. ôJiraiya.ö A sly look came across her face. Striking a pose that showed of her entire frame, she sent him a sultry look. ôThe legendary super pervert isn't interested in my body at all? I'm hurt. Almostö

Jiraiya rolled his eyes. ôAnd my brain and stomach hurt the longer I see you wearing that skin, so get that robe on before I force it on youö

Orochimaru cooed, and appeared in front of him. Grabbing one of his hands, she shoved it between her thighs. ôAre you sure? This might be the only chance you have to sleep with one of your teammates.ö

Glaring at the transformed Snake Sannin, Jiraiya yanked his hand out of her grasp and punched her in the face, knocking his former teammate to the ground. ôStop wasting my time,ö he said. Reaching into his kimono, he removed a scroll and tossed it at her. ôIt's a message from the Old Man.ö

Catching the scroll, Orochimaru sat up and unsealed it, curious as to what her former teacher wanted. She quickly read the whole thing, the inquisitive look on her face quickly transforming into one of extreme mirth. ôInteresting. Very, very, interesting.ö

ôGreat,ö said Jiraiya. ôFantastic, even. Now that my job's done, I'm getting the hell out of here.ö

ôOh? Not going to stay and comiserate for a while longer.ö

Jiraiya shook his head. ôNah, Your little snake has just about finished dealing with that idiot Kawamoto, and you still have to find what you need.ö the large man walked towards the still open doors. ôI get the feeling we'll be seeing more of each other soon enough anyway.ö

Orochimaru nodded. ôTrue enough.ö As Jiraiya was about to exit the room, she called out. ôHow exactly did you get past the seal?ö

Jiraiya paused, turning his head around he gave the Snake Sannin a cocky grin. ôCause I'm just that much more of a badass than you are, Snake-freak.ö A cloud of smoke appeared around the other Sannin, and when it dispersed he was gone.

Orochimaru rolled here eyes at the Toad Sannin's antics. Standing up, she wrapped the robe around her and tucked the Third's scroll into one of its pockets.

As she quickly moved through the room, her mind wandered to other message she had recently received. Like the one Jiraiya had given her, it too was from a Kage, albeit from Kumo instead of Konoha.

Finding what she came for, Orochimaru tucked into the robe and left the room, not bothering to close the doors. Both messages would require careful consideration, especially if she wanted to take advantage of her now fortuitous position.

A demented grin spread across her face. Laughter erupted from her throat that soon turned to mad cackles that reverberated through the masterless castle.

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I really want Orochimaru's twisted nature to be on full display with this piece, so I hope I hit it just right. I was also unsure about if I should stick to using female pronouns, or switch to male ones. Thoughts on that?
 

Knyght

The Collector
#11
I think it works fine using female pronouns given her female form and her acting in this scene.

I'm finding the story interesting so far though I think the scene with Naruto detracted from it. A friendship with Kiba isn't uncommon and he's never struck me as a particularly interesting character. Focusing on the bigger issues would make it more engaging. However, the Tsunade and Orochimaru parts were good especially the bit with Akatsuki which was one of the those moments where you go "Why didn't I think of that?" because of the potential it has.

Even so, I think it would have been better if the story had started with Naruto in the "present" and we start learning about these details as the story progressed instead of dealing with them as they happened. I think it would have had a greater impact if we didn't discover Tsunade was Akatsuki until she actually shows up in the story rather than seeing it happen, if you catch my drift. That's just my personal preference though; as a prologue, this is a good start.
 

Revan

Well-Known Member
#12
I'm going to be rewriting the Naruto scene today, it's easily the weakest of the four and I agree that it's a jarring bundle of words. Hopefully the rewrites and edits wont take too long. Tsunade's scene is also supposed to be the last one of the prologue,.

Originally, she wasn't going to show up for a long time, but I think that tipping my hand from the getgo is going to make for more interesting character interactions later on; you know, and she knows, but does anyone else? It'll hopefully get readers to questioning everything she does from this point forward; some of my favorite characters are those whose loyalties and reasons why they act are murky and ambiguous.
 

zeebee1

Well-Known Member
#13
In the last several scenes the only person that was remotely in character was Tsunade. The mysterious leader of the Akatsuki couldn't be Pein, Tobi, or Madara. Orochimaru and to a lesser extent, Jiraiya, didn't seem like themselves at all.

It doesn't help that eaxh scene is about someone else. As it is, there is no focus.
 

Revan

Well-Known Member
#14
In regards to canon? Orochiaaru always struck me as someone enjoyed two things: 1-knowing more than anyone else, and 2-fucking with people. Adopting a female skin to seduce an overindulgent lord seemed to me to be the kind of thing he'd get a kick out of doing. As for the interaction between Jiraiya and him...well, they are friends and former teammates with decades of history together. Their relationship, and the one they have with Tsunade, is so far beyond professional that it comes off as unprofessional. That's something I'm going to try and emphasize before I call this prologue finished.

Oh yeah, and there is more AU to this than what has already been shown.
 

Knyght

The Collector
#15
I could easily imagine Orochimaru playing that sort of role. It' just not something we've ever seen before since he's cast in the role of a villain and isn't shown indulging in his messed up personality too often. But was there an actual motive behind what he was doing? It doesn't seem right to me that Orochimaru's doing this purely for fun. I figured there was an actual motive behind his actions and he was simply accomplishing his goal through a deviant method, but I don't think one was mentioned.

Another thing that bothered me was Jiraiya hitting Orochimaru. I think it'd be better without that part or if Orochimaru simply dodged away, laughing. It just felt off.

And I got the impression the shinobi was offended by her somehow given the way he was trying to spite her but I didn't really why he bothered talking to her. Unless he's just exasperated at the whole situation, I suppose.
 

Revan

Well-Known Member
#16
Oh there's a reason, one that isn't obvious but hopefully the new wording in the finished chapter will help clear some of it up. I also like that idea of orochimaru dodging the punch, seems more in character than letting himself get smacked.

Anyway, my proofreader has the chapter right now. As soon as I get it back from him, and the last changes have been made, I'll be posting this to FF.net.
 

Revan

Well-Known Member
#17
Have some fresh words from chapter one. There'll probably be more later tonight after I get some food. Also, new spiffy title cause the first one was lame.

Crimson Revolution
Chapter One: The Team​

Nara Shikamaru allowed his eyelids to fall shut, blocking the golden rays of the setting sun that could be seen through the windows of the Academy classroom. Sighing contentedly at the warmth that spread across his face thanks to the beams, he allowed his mind to wander away from the concerns of the present. He felt the tension escape his body; lifting his arms onto the table, he let his body fall limp against it while his head fell onto his waiting arms. Burrowing his face into the impromptu pillows, he let out a deeper sigh, his lips quirking into a slight smile. This is the life.

A loud voice cracked out like a whip, breaking the spell. ôOi! Shika!ö

Eyebrows twitching in irritation, Shikamaru turned his head to face the speaker. Slowly opening his eyes, he lazily glared at the blonde who had interrupted his relaxation. ôWhat do you want, Naruto?ö

Naruto crossed his arms over his chest and met Shikamaru's glare with his own from beneath his blue forehead protector. ôWhat do you think about my plan?ö At Shikamaru's blank look, he continued, ô You know, the one we've been arguing about for the last half-hour?ö

What is this idiot talking about? Turning his gaze away from the blonde and his garish, orange tracksuit, Shikamnru looked at the only other occupant of the room.

ôUzumaki has been attempting to trap the door,ö said Hyuuga Hanabi. The prim and proper heir of the Hyuuga clan pushed an errant, brown forelock out of her face. The sunlight glinted off the metal plate of her forehead protector, which was tied around and hanging from her neck. ôI have been attempting to persuade him that such an action will only serve to antagonize our jounin instructor upon his arrival.ö

ôServes the bastard right!ö Naruto grunted, glaring at the still closed door to the classroom. ôThe prick was supposed to be here hours ago; it's almost dinnertime, and he hasn't shown up at all!ö

Shikamaru winced at the grating, whiny tone. Spare me from blonde morons. Shutting his eyes, he buried his head into his arms. ôHanabi's got the right of it, Naruto; antagonizing the guy is a bad idea.ö

ôBut-ö

ôNaruto.ö His face was flat, but both Naruto and Hanabi stilled at the tone. ôDrop it.ö

A wide grin spread across the blonde's face, and he walked toward Shikamaru. Putting both hands down on the table the pony-tailed Nara was lying on, he griped the edges. Leaning in close, he whispered, ôOr, what, Shika?ö

ôDesist this foolishness, Uzumaki.ö Cracking open his eyes, Shikamaru glanced upwards at the Hyuuga heiress. She was standing over him in what he recognized as the ready stance of her clan's unique taijutsu style, the Juuken. Though he could not see, he assumed her Byakugan was active. Letting out a sigh, he released his hands from the Rat seal they had made. No point in capturing the idiot if she's going to fight him instead.

Naruto, however, did not seem detered. Instead, his grin took a somewhat manic edge as he focused on Hanabi and the open palm that faced him. ôYou want some of this too, Hyuuga Midget?ö

Shikamaru frowned, focusing his barely open eyes on the blonde once more. Something felt off about him, something malevolent. Opening his eyes a bit more, he noticed a light ring of red that had surrounded the blonde's blue eyes that gave them an odd, eerie look.

Looking away, Shikamaru nervously remade the Rat seal. Something was off about the idiot, and he would not be caught flatfooted if it happened to focus back on him.

A tense silence passed between the three. Suddenly, a deep laugh filled the room. ôDamn, you brats sure are antsy. Gonna have to work on that if you want to make it as ninja.ö

The trio whirled around to face the back of the room where the voice had originated from. Standing there was a tall man with long white hair that was kept out of his face by a horned forehead protector bearing the kanji for 'Oil' on it. Red lines ran down from his eyes across a lightly wrinkled face that was split by a massive grin. Mesh armor could be seen underneath the short, green kimono top he wore, as well as under the matching pants. A red jacket that sported two yellow circles on each side, traditional wooden sandals, hand-guards, and a simple black belt completed the ensemble. A large scroll wrapped in a red cloth and a rope for carrying it was leaning against the wall next to him.

ôWho the fuck are you,ö yelled Naruto, pointing at the interloper.

Hanabi gaze narrowed at the man. ôAnd how did you escape my Byakugan?ö

The old man chuckled. ôCurious bunch, aren't you.ö He looked at Shikamaru. ôHm, but nothing from you, kido?ö

Shikamaru shrugged, hands not leaving the formation of the Rat handseal.

ôThen I suppose introductions are in order.ö Stepping forward, the old man's grin went even wider Slamming the open palm of his right hand onto the ground, he was quickly obscured by an explosion of smoke. As it dispersed, the three children gaped in shock. Riding the back of a large, orange toad, the old man struck a pose and yelled, ôI am the Holy Master Sannin of Mt. Myouboku, the Toad Sannin Jiraiya.ö Two smaller explosions of smoke appeared on each side of the large toad, revealing two smaller examples of his species that carried long poles decked out in numerous bells and streamers. ôFrom this day forward, I am the instructor of Team 7!ö More explosions of smoke, and more toads appeared whom had whistles in their mouths. A cacophony of sound filled the classroom as the bells rang, the whistles blew, and all the smaller toads danced around the larger one chanting words of congratulations and joy.

The three gennin could only stare in shock at the spectacle before them. Minutes passed in stunned silence before Jiraiya frowned. Squinting, he took a critical look at each of the three children. ôYou all are Team 7, right? Uzumaki Naruto, Hyuuga Hanabi, and Nara Shikamaru?ö He received a nod from each of them, and he smiled again. ôGood! Cause I'd hate to half to convince this lot to go through with this again!ö

The numerous smaller toads grumbled. ôHave a heart, Jiraiya-sama,ö said one of them. ôDo you know how deamening this is?ö

Jiraiya shook his head. ôNope. Now get out of here.ö

ôWhat about our payment!?ö

Jiraiya glared at the smaller toads. ôYou'll get it, don't worry.ö

ôBut we want it now!ö

One of Jiraiya's eyebrows twitched. Jumping off the larger toad, he smacked the speaker on the head. Another explosion of smoke formed as the toad disappeared. ôNow the rest of you get out of here, or you'll get the same treatment!ö

The remaining small toads grumbled insults at the older man under their breath, but did as he commanded and dispersed.

ôYou keep pissing them off, Jiraiya-sama, and they'll stop helping you do such ridiculous things,ö rumbled the large, orange toad.

ôYeah, yeah. I can still count on you, right Gama?ö

ôOf course, your theatrics are most entertaining.ö With that, the larger toad disappeared as well, leaving the four humans as the only occupants of the room once more.

ôWell then,ös aid Jiraiya as he looked at the three gennin, ôHow about you brats introduce yourselves so we can get this show on the road?ö
 

Revan

Well-Known Member
#18
The prologue has come back, and is now up on <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8846940/1/' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>FF.net</a>. Enjoy.
 

Druid

Well-Known Member
#19
My brain is filled with question marks. While this is interesting at the moment, it wouldn't take too much more to get aggravating as well. While I would not in any way expect everything to be explained all at once, by the same token too many questions will really bend the brain.
 

Knyght

The Collector
#21
An interesting mix-up. Don't think I've ever seen Hanabi pushed ahead and placed on Naruto's team before. And I was going to have Jiraiya as team leader someday. ^_^

I hope you've got something more interesting than the standard bell test planned though.
 

Knyght

The Collector
#24
I wouldn't even mind just having a different version of the bell test but it's always done the exact same way every time, excluding the characters involved.

A change of pace is nice.
 

Revan

Well-Known Member
#25
The test is similar in its goal of getting the trio to work together, but, as Jiraiya will comment latter in the chapter, Team 7 wouldn't be able to pass the bell test as they are right now even with a "second chance".
 
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